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Gayle
April 5, 2024 5:21 am

I completely agree Zaveen, I also believe that it’s not just one bad cop today. If new recruits are having the same training as officer 115, it will be 100% another bad cop and another poc murdered. Do you think training in harsher conditions will help? Do you think just having a taser will stop police brutality?

Jalia
April 5, 2024 4:33 am

I love the dramatisation in the title, this interested me in reading it. I found this opening statement to be very powerful. The usage of the context of the book while also highlighting the importance of the justice system is done very well. And I also liked how well you were able to emulate how this lawyer would behave in this trial.

Keity
April 5, 2024 2:13 am

Your title is very captivating and your storytelling was very interesting as well. This is a perfect example of what an opening statement should look like and sound like. I love the seriousness of the situation and how without the details we can feel empathy towards the defendant. If I were a lawyer I would use this as a template for my opening statement. This very well puts all key points of this trial in one place

Anaiya
April 4, 2024 3:01 pm

I really loved the style of writing that you chose for your writing. It was really interesting and very intriguing which just made me really invested in your story. I believe that it would be way better if it was a bit longer than it is right now.

Rossanna
April 4, 2024 1:44 am

I like how you did not just focus on the victim but other people who this case may have affected. When you say “I urge you to keep an open mind and consider the evidence carefully.” I agree because they will ignoring all the evidence to point out the negative instead of the positive.

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