The wide sky
The blue ocean
The colorful umbrellas
The flying kite
The looming moon
It’s the place where is full of laughing and joy
I am OK that I stand outside of the beautiful scenery
Like that bird
I think myself as a free bird
People think me as a controlled slave
Whatever
I am high and human can’t fly
I am so beautiful like performing ballet in the sky
I can see the blue of ocean
I can fly in the broader area
But where is my home
I’m lonely
Do you?
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Dear, Luyao
I enjoyed the way you described the beach in your perspective and the beauty of it. I really liked how you put yourself in an object and describe how it feels. I think your words and sentences are good expression of the view. your decryption is amazing because I can imagine and feel what you are thinking about and understand. Thanks for your poem, I really look forward to your future work.
Dear Luyao,
Thanks for this poem about the beautiful beach. I really like how you describe each word about beach because it was good story.
I can’t wait to see more of your story.
Maria Malik
The nice poem
The good description
The beautiful artistic conception
The great job
The good idea
It’s the poem to describe the blue ” sky ”
I am ready that I join the world of this poem again
Like that poet
Free and Lonely
I think myself as a lonely poet
Secularism can not stop me keep walking
Whatever
I am quiet and heard sounds of world
I can see the light of my heart
I can through the darkness way
But I’m still lost
I am lonely
Do you?
hell yeahhhhhhhhhhhhh .
Dear unique Luyao
I am reading about your beautiful poems
called “Two poems for beautiful ocean,”
Because I love it deeply.
One part of your poem that stands out for me is your beautiful sentence and your expression
I think this is so wonderful because you used your words to express a such great view.
Another part that I enjoyed is where you describe yourself as one who out of the picture. This stood out for me.
Because I can feel what you are thinking about.I understand what you feel like,lonely and want to have friends.
Thanks for your wonderful poems. I look forward to seeing what
you make next, because I love you forever.
Best wishes with your art,
Cindy Orellana
Love you forever ever ever ever!
i liked how u put yourself in a object describes it how they feel over there.
Good job! I liked yours poems because you used stanzas and u describe the beach.
Dear Luyao
I am happy about how you wrote your poem, “two poems for beautiful beach,” because i like how u said like a u are the bird flying in the sky.
One part of your poem that stands out for me is where you says i feel like a free bird, but where is my home. I think this is awesome because… it show’s that birds fly where they want to and they are free but they don’t really have a home to stay like humans
Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next, because… i like the way u put yourself in place of an object and describe how that object feels in it’s place, i want u to write more poems like that.
Good job! I liked yours poem because you used stanzas and you describe the beach.
i liked because you describe, the beauty of the beach.