There was a cool calming breeze coming

off the lake, the smell of sweet funnel

cakes and the sound delightful

screaming were in the air. I was twelve.

I walked up the unfamiliar stairs and

stood in a long line on the Platform,

I looked up at the huge metal hill

with the steep sides,I was brave I

knew I could do this. I was twelve.

It was then my turn and I got to

my seat and was buckled in I was

trapped with nowhere to run. I was twelve.

It began, we went up and down then in

circles then upside down and spun in many

different directions. I was twelve.

The ride was over I had tears in my eyes the

beast had beaten me. I’m not as brave as I thought

to myself I am only twelve.


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March 15, 2017 10:57 pm

Hi Ryan,
I really liked your poem. Thanks for sharing it.

March 15, 2017 6:39 pm

Dear Ryan,
I really enjoyed your poem and thank you for sharing it. Your poem is outstanding.

March 14, 2017 2:46 pm

Ryan, I thought your poem was terrific. The way it is written makes me feel as if I was right there on the same ride. Nice job.

March 13, 2017 11:21 pm

Hi Ryan,
I really enjoyed your poem and thank you for sharing it. I think my twelve year old self can definitely relate to how you realized at the end that you were not as rave as you thought. Even now, I like to think that I am braver than I actually am. But, i think that is the only way to face your fears.

March 13, 2017 5:29 pm

Hey Ryan!

Your poem is outstanding, I loved how you encompassed the entire experience of riding the roller coaster. I could picture the roller coaster, the amusement park, and you, being twelve, and how you felt before, after, and during the experience. Great job!


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