Hi. My name is Christy and I am a 9th grader at Life Academy. This poem is about what I see in my community and what a lot of people go though. This poem illustrates a life that is hard to talk about, especially in public. 



 This is What I See
By: Christy Vong


We see it all around

Near the highways

On the streets


This is what I see


It’s night time

Mama and papa got into a fight

They weren’t getting along

They didn’t have enough money to keep the house

Mama already works double shifts

Papa only works one job

That is being a drug dealer

Papa loved me and try to buy me candy with the 6 cents he had.

Papa tried stealing for me but got arrested


Mama bring up something when they got married

She says,”you told me you were always going to be by my side.”

Papa said “I’m sorry, I gotta go it’s my shift”

Papa left mom because of the stress

Papa left forever actually

He never came back

Mama became even more stressed

Mama began crying and said

“Why did it have to be like this”

Mama tried buying a lottery ticket hoping she’ll win

It’s already morning

Mama goes to work at 6:00 in the morning and comes back 9:00 at night.

I told mama I’m going to work hard in school

Mama so proud of me

She says,”that’s my son.”

These words disseminate in my mind

Mamas family don’t love her

It’s family against her

They are disappointed in her

Well I’m not

My mama strong

My mama awesome

My mama went through a whole lot

And I’m going to make it better

I’m going to work hard

Get a great paying job and get her a house

That’s my promise to mama

And I do it because I love her

My mama never missed a single expo in elementary.

Mama says “I love you”

Those words are my inspiration

I hear them exasperate in my mind

Mama carry a burden that she thinks about all the time

And I’m going to change that and give her the dream she deserves.

Mama hug me I hug her.

I make her proud

I own my own company

I help her pay of the debts

She get a better job and move out the house

She find a wonderful man who supports her

I completed so much goals in life

And it’s all thanks to my mama

I love you.


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April 25, 2019 10:57 pm

Dear Christy :

I am really impressed with your poem, “This is What I See,” because throughout the whole poem it makes the reader imagine the actions or events happening in the poem. As well as I was reading this poem, it gives you a sense of emotions that make you feel bad for children and families in your community. However, there is also a sense excitement for the risen motivation of the child when living in bad times and the resolutions that ended the poem. A sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Mama goes to work at 6:00 in the morning and comes back 9:00 at night.” I think that sentence was a part in the poem that made the readers feel the true burden of what you see, or the reasoning of the child of wanted the best for his mother. Overall, your poem reminds me of the struggle my parents go through, it also reminds me of why I worked so hard to go to college. Hence, you have good writing skills, keep up the hard work, and be like the child: defeating the struggle(s).

December 12, 2018 7:31 pm

Dear Christy, I really enjoy how you tell your poem from your perspective. One sentence that stood out to me is when you said Papa was a drug dealer because they wanted to buy you (or the main protagonist) candy and would do anything to make you happy. Something you can clarify is who is telling the story because it sounded like it was your story but it wasn’t. Thanks for writing and I am looking forward to seeing more pieces like this.

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