The sky is going to kill me at 12:35 tomorrow I know because the trees have told me Great sequoia and sapling oak creaking voices heavy with prophecy "Stay inside" The flowers beg heads bent forward with tears Bleeding hearts and winding white honeysuckle, crying "Stay inside" The insects counsel me Sleepy cicada and fragile monarch "Hibernate until the wind forgets, until the sun burns out its fury, until the clouds turn their anger on another" But I know the sky will never forget even the rivers and the hills know this I cannot spend my life tucked away, hiding and afraid "Do not cry for me" I tell them Voice like earthquakes and mountains "I have stood before many storms I have braved time and tide and man So let it try Let it try to take me" And I step out into the sun And dare the sky to try and shake me
I think this is absolutely fantastic. The natural life conversing with you and the idea of them trying to protect you is amazing to think about. The feeling I get when I read your poem is courage too, especially at the end, the feeling of standing up and even if there is something bad going to happen is just amazing. Using quotes really adds more to the poem as well because it’s as if you’re really conversing with nature.
Thank you so much! I wanted to portray nature as caring, protective, seeking to preserve. I always wanted to portray the different personalities they may have…the trees vs. the rivers vs. the monarchs
This poem is very creative and powerful. I was definitely unsure at the beginning, but I like the message you portrayed through it. I really like how bold the ending. It inspires me to go out and up against life’s obstacles, letting nothing get in my way.
This is a really cool poem. I love the words you chose to describe the situation. It sounds very professional. The personification of the plants and animals were super well done.
Thank you!
This poem is very creative and powerful. I was definitely unsure at the beginning, but I like the message you portrayed through it. I really like how bold the ending. It inspires me to go out and up against life’s obstacles, letting nothing get in my way.
Thank you for sticking with it to the end! I’m glad you liked it.
I really like your poem, you got my attention instantly with the first couple of words “the sky is going to kill me”. I really like how detailed and poetic you were and I love the use of personification. Amazing poem!
Thank you!
Hey Ella,
I don’t usually like poetry but this was really cool and spoke to me. At first the title enthralled me and then I was captivated by the lines.
You have some serious talent!
In my opinion, poetry is a lot like prose in that everyone has their own tastes. It may just take some looking to find the kind you like. Some people prefer modern poetry over classical, or vice versa. I would recommend looking into modern slam poetry. Thank you for you feedback!
ELLA!! this is amazing! I saw the title and was interested immediately. You are so talented. I could go on about how much I love this. Keep it up, I look forward to seeing more poetry from you.
“Voice like earthquakes and mountains
I have stood before many storms
I have braved time and tide and man
So let it try
Let it try to take me”
And I step out into the sun
And dare the sky to try and shake me”
I LOVE THESE LINES
Thank you so much!
I enjoyed the poem, it had a great underlying message. I didn’t understand “I know because the have trees told me”. I understand what you are saying but not sure if this is proper grammar. I like how it’s a story but also has a meaning to it. It shows that you are trying to find meaning to your life instead of do nothing, and to experience things that you are afraid to do.
Yeah, it was a grammatical error. I don’t know how I didn’t catch it on my readthroughs. Thank you for your thoughts and feedback!
Hi Ella,
Your use of imagery throughout the poem gives it a very natural, wild feel. I especially like the imagery conveyed in the line “Voice like earthquakes and mountains”. I can pick out several clear themes, and overall your poem is well-formatted and well-executed.
I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!
Thank you!
The poem had me interested from the start. The title had me stop and re-read to make sure I saw that right. My favorite line was, “the flowers beg, heads bent forward with tears”. The diction used for trees, flowers, and bugs specifies the difference they’re making in their ‘warnings’.
I felt that each species would have its own way of talking. A firefly may not shout, but a river definitely would. Thank you for your feedback!
Hello!
The way you wrote this poem is so eloquent and appeals to emotions. You demonstrated a wide range of vocabulary which added to the poem’s elegance. The way you started off with the exact time of your death was a great hook to keep reader’s engaged! Can’t wait to read more of your work!
Thank you!
This poem was very beautiful Ella, the name captivated me from the start. I loved when you said “Do not cry for me”I tell them. Voice like earthquakes and mountains”I have stood before many storms I have braved time and tide and manSo let it try Let it try to take me”And I step out into the sun. And dare the sky to try and shake me” Was very powerful. I am looking forward to reading more poems by you. Here is a poet that I myself enjoy. Courage by Anne Sexton – Famous poems, famous poets. – All Poetry
I love the poem! Thank you for sharing it, and your feedback, with me.
“I know because the have trees told me” I think this line within your poem could use some revision. I’m not sure if this was a spelling error but the have within this sentence breaks the flow and rhythm that was followed in the rest of the poem. I really like your use of environment as well as your connections between the different elements. Your sentiment was heartfelt and I thoroughly enjoyed reading your style of poetry.
Yeah, it was a grammatical error. I don’t know how I didn’t catch it on read throughs. Thank you for your feedback!
This is an incredibly well-written poem. The hook is great, I saw “The sky is going to kill me” and immediately wanted to read more. I like how you personify the forest and the sky and give them emotions. I think this is a beautiful poem and cant wait to read more of your writing!
Thank you!