The open eye can see a lot
each tear that drops
of those forgot,
The memories that somehow faded away
even some that are here to stay
The open eye can hear alot
each silent cry
that speaks so loud
each person that whines ” why am i alive?”
wondering if they will survive
The open eye can say a lot
scream , shout and yell i’m here
They don’t even gotta talk just show them you care
That the world still got some things that’s fair
yea, I know its hard and yea you fighting strong just never forget i’m always near
So if you can
Open your eyes
The world kinda needs you
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Ajonea –
I love this poem. The title caught my eye and I am so glad I clicked on it. Your analogy with the “open eye” is remarkable and this poem really shows how a few words can speak a thousand truths. I especially like how you ended your poem with “The world kinda needs you”, it stands out from the rest of the poem and leaves the reader with a profound take away. I hope to hear more from your work, it is really impressive.
Ajonea, I really liked this poem. I feel that you writing about the open eye goes deeper into what the eye can really do. When you say “…The open eye can hear a lot…” This really touched me because when I see certain things happening its almost like I can hear it happening, especially if it is a common action, like a car door shutting or a cats meow. I found this article and I think you will like it because it talks about the common saying “your eyes are the window to your soul” and you went into deeper meaning about the eye in your poem. https://www.psychologytoday.com/us/blog/talking-apes/201512/your-eyes-really-are-the-window-your-soul. I would love to read more of your poems!
I liked this poem a lot. I appreciate that you sort of had the theme of “the eyes are the windows to the soul” but never blatantly said it. You also kind of reversed it where the eye is looking out and seeing things that others can’t. Similar to what Em said, I love the range of emotion you put into this.
I really like how deep this poem goes. It really spoke to me and i can really connect to it. They rhyming is great too! Its both sad and uplifting. I really enjoyed it 🙂
I love how you use the perspective of the eye.i also like that you talk about thinks people see that the other perso most likely won’t want them to see.