body of water under cloudy sky during sunset

I thought I’d awaken to a sky of silver.

Heavy clouds covering the shining snow river.

But there’s something bright and it makes me quiver.

Something magical in the sunlight, nothing that could make me shiver.

I see the wispy clouds wisp away.

Across the ether I see the darkness trying to stay.

Like a light this sight cannot be broken, but can fray.

Time and a breeze make the sight turn into a blurry display.

Skies ignite with the colors of life,  confident and free.

Just as it does, so can we.

Emotions can make us quiver,

feeling of a shiver,

our life over time starts to wisp itself away.

Into something, not anything like we saw before, all in a fray.

Our world becomes just one big blurry display.

But we can look past it, and like the world around us,

Be confident and free.

Life leads us on a one way path.

In the Style of Amanda Gorman’s “The Miracle of Morning”

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April 3, 2024 3:16 pm

Dear Srinidhi,

I like that you used a smooth transition from one topic to another it was very flowing and simple.

Abby S
January 18, 2022 3:38 pm

The ryming makes me moan

January 18, 2022 3:30 pm

I love this, I love the way your words flow and the imagery I get from the first half

January 18, 2022 3:25 pm

I like how it rhymes and that you use the last words to contradict the second part of your poem. I like how thoughtful and vivid this poem is. I could imagine parts of the poem in my mind.

January 18, 2022 3:21 pm

Sri! I love this! Your diction and syntax are impeccable. I love the beautiful image of nature you create and the message of hope and regaining confidence. Continue writing!

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