• Motivirus (@motivationvirus)'s Oct 20, 18:47 comment on Life Lessons for Teachers
    Useful article, i found it so inspiring especially for students. Every student must read these kind of articles to keep motivated while studyig. I also found these quotes helpful for students, every morning i read it to stay motivated http://motivirus.com/25-encouraging-quotes-every-college-student-should-know/
  • Kelly Hickman's Oct 19, 21:22 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Tori, I'm immensely impressed with your ability to write a heartfelt piece about such a sensitive topic. I firmly believe that in order to grow and find true joy and acceptance in this world, we need to accept that vulnerability is helpful and necessary. Here, in this piece, you've allowed yourself to be vulnerable, and in doing so you've shown your identity as a person with both struggles and successes, sorrow and joy. By allowing vulnerability in, you're also opening yourself to allow other honest feelings in as you experience them. I'm inspired by you daily, and I'm so glad to know that your story is reaching beyond these walls and touching others who need to hear it in this moment.
  • Li's Oct 19, 11:16 comment on Teaching English in S. Korea! Is it possible for me?
    It is not a cracy dream. It is something possible. You can do it.
  • Winnie Custodio's Oct 18, 21:01 comment on My Philosophy of Education: Knowledge is Power
    Knowledge is power, and the truth will set you free!
  • Jose's Oct 18, 16:37 comment on Los mejores carros lowriders
    Me gusta de lo que estás hablando de los carros lowriders que se puede quedar en un solo lado cuando estas manejando.
  • Rodolfo's Oct 18, 16:26 comment on Los mejores carros lowriders
    Estimado German Estoy asombrado por su publicación , Los mejores carros lowriders , porque nunca había conocido nada acerca de los carros lowriders y además no sabía que estos podían saltar o más bien que cualquier tipo de carro saltara. Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es , los carros lowriders que se reúnen en plazas y los jueces miden los saltos y la gente se asombra por sus santos. Gracias por tu escritura , espero leer lo que escribas a continuación , por que quiero saver mas de los autos lowriders
  • German's Oct 18, 16:22 comment on Un accidente desastroso.
    Estimado Rolando Estoy asombrado por tu escritura nunca había leído algo similar a esto sobre''un accidente desastroso'' y esto me gusta, este libro se de trata de una persona que se llama Mack, esta persona tuvo un accidente el cual hizo que se golpeara en la cabeza provocando que esta sangre porque al bajar resbalando de una colina de nieve, este se golpeó contra un árbol haciendo que se le incrustaban piedras pequeñas en su nuca provocando que esta sangrara y esto pasó en el libro Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque se me ase muy interesante este tema.
  • Rolando's Oct 18, 16:05 comment on Los mejores carros lowriders
    Estimado: German Estoy asombrado por su publicación , Los mejores carros lowriders , porque nunca había conocido nada acerca de los carros lowriders y además no sabía que estos podían saltar o más bien que cualquier tipo de carro saltara. Una frase que usted escribió que se estaca para mi es , los carros lowriders se reúnen en lugares y hacen muchas cosas y llega mucha gente ver el espectáculo, creo que esto es genial porque yo no sabía que además de que salten tengan espectáculos y además va mucha gente a ellos. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque quiero saber más sobre estos vehículos y otras cosas mas sobre más de estos.
  • Eduardo's Oct 18, 15:53 comment on La fauna y la biodiversidad del mundo
    Estimado Alejandro: estoy fascinado de tu tema Porque hace mucho tiempo Yo había leído algo similar a esto y la verdad estos temas me gustan sobre"La fauna Y la Biodiversidad del mundo" Y esto me gusto" este libro se trata sobre los todo tipo de animales y sus diferentes ecosistemas ecosistemas sus diferentes formas de vivir los personajes son los animales cada uno es un personaje desde el más pequeño al más grande se que el autor quiere decir que en el mundo hay mucha fauna y diversidad en Archipelago" Gracias por tu escritura. Espero lo vuelvas a escribir
  • Emily's Oct 18, 13:47 comment on My views on American values
    I like how you used the word melting pot to describe American being diverse and accepting different cultures. I also thought it was interesting how you brought up an old history fact which is unique instead of just talking about equality!
  • Emily's Oct 18, 13:36 comment on America is Diverse, but is it Equal?
    I thought it was good how you used foods from different countries as a value for American since its not something we would normally think of as a value. But, if you think about it we value trying different foods and being unique.
  • Patricia's Oct 18, 03:39 comment on Animal Rights
    Yulisa, You presented a very informative essay on animal rights. I'm curious as to where you stand on the issue. Do you believe that animals should have the same rights as humans? In reading this, I think animals definitely should have certain rights, but ones that aren't equivalent to humans. Each animal requires a variety of rights that best fit them and their species.
  • Patricia's Oct 18, 03:24 comment on Values are Changing
    I really enjoyed reading your post. I especially liked the question at the end: "Why do we continue to take our freedom and independence for granted?" I liked it because it's true. Many young Americans today want change, but don't make the effort to make it therefore taking our freedom and independence for granted. For us to fully exercise are rights, we need to go out and vote and push for change we want to see in our country.
  • Jenifer's Oct 18, 01:44 comment on El Amor de los Padres!
    Estimada Veronica: Estoy muy asombrada por esas palabras de “El Amor de los Padres” porque no nos dices más que la verdad con esas palabras y aparte de eso nos cuentas un poco de tu vida. Una frase que escribistes que destaca para mi es:”Que los padres siempre se esfuerzan para darles a los hijos lo que piden aunque estén enfermos, cansados, o hasta en sus peores momentos siempre dan lo que piden obvio si lo mereces”. Creo que esto es muy impresionante porque nos estas dando una bonita refleccion sobre las vidas de casi todas las personas, y diga casi todas porque yo pienso que más del 70% en Estados Unidos están pasando por esos momento muy difíciles que de seguro muchos hijos aun no lo entienden. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque se me ase muy interesante este tema “El Amor de los Padres”. Jenifer
  • Sofia's Oct 17, 23:42 comment on Am I ready to graduate?
    Estimada Yadira: Estoy asombrada por tu post sobre que estas lista para graduarte, porque es importante el pensar en cómo será nuestro futuro. Yo se que es difícil, pero se puede lograr todo. Una frase que escribiste que se destaca para mi es ‘’voy a conseguir mi título para demostrarles a todos los que me dijeron que no podía, que si lo logre ‘’ porque si va haber gente que te dirá que no lo lograras, pero solo esta en nosotros en que confiemos y en las ganas que le pongamos. Gracias por tu escritura.Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación,porque quiero saber más sobre lo que piensas en tu meta y saber si lo lograste ,pues yo se que lo lograras. Sofia
  • Miguel's Oct 17, 18:40 comment on Marleni Regalado – Shadow Box
    Dear, Marleni I really like how you added lots of detail and I like everything about it. I see that you added la rosa de guadalupe and I like that. Miguel Pablo
  • Valerie's Oct 17, 18:37 comment on The Truth About Cambodia
    Dear Teresa, One sentence that stood out to me is when you shared stereotypes about your chosen and assigned identities. I liked how you go against the dominant narratives and speak your truth. Another sentence that stood out to me is when you shared a bit of Cambodia’s history. Thank you for writing and I am looking forward to seeing more.
  • Evelin's Oct 17, 18:37 comment on This is me
    Dear Kalani, I am happy about your shadow box and paragraph, “This is me” because you show your hard work on both of theses and really stand out! I really like how you put baby pictures and some family members. One part of your paragraph that stands out to me is where you talk about how hard you work to have an education. I think this is excellent to point out because a lot of people assume that people of color don’t care about their education. And I think this is good to show out to the world, it shows them that they are completely wrong. Another part that I liked too is where you added empowering female words. This stood out for me because it shows that your assigned identity is really important to you. Your paragraph and shadow box reminds me of something I once made. One time I also wrote about being female and being a different ethnicity and how the world saw me. Also I showed that society is wrong about what they think I am. Thanks for your shadow box and paragraph. I look forward to seeing what you will make next, because you are really good at showing your hard work!
  • Anahi's Oct 17, 18:37 comment on shadowbox
    Dear Calvin I like how you talked about you being your chosen identities and what they represent to you. That is important because your letting us know what is important to you. I also like how you talked about dominant narratives and that they don't define you. That nice that you want to add that. Great job like your statement and what you included in it.
  • Matthew's Oct 17, 18:35 comment on My Shadow box
    dear Kenya, i really like the way your shadow box looks and the baby pictures are very cool
  • Kelly's Oct 17, 18:35 comment on My Counter Narrative
    Dear Ivy, I love you shadow box because you have many different pictures and I like how you decorated it. I also like how you build a roof on the top of your box. One part of your shadow box that stands out to me is where you put like I said before the roof. This stood out to me because I think it was a unique idea and I don’t think anybody else did it. Another part that stood out to me was the family pictures you included. This stood out to me because my family is very important to me as well. Thanks for your shadow box. I look forward to what you create next because I love how creative you are. Sincerely, Kelly
  • Ivy's Oct 17, 18:33 comment on False Reality of Dominant Narratives
    Hey Kelly, I really like how your shadow box embraces multiple identities. One part of your art piece that stands out to me is the “girl power” logo, which shows you embracing this important piece of your identity. It is also great that you decided to include where your family is from because it shows that you are proud about your roots. I look forward to seeing the next thing you post related to breaking down stereotypes and proving society wrong. Ivy
  • Wendy's Oct 17, 17:33 comment on My Personal Shadow Box
    Dear Joseph, Your shadow box is really nice and I can clearly see what demonstrates you and who you are as a person. I really like that you added the gun, marijuana, and danger sign because you really did a good job showing your dominant narratives. After your dominant narratives I really love the way you box flips around and shows your counter narratives and who you truly are. Something that stood out to me was the pictures of family because I did that with my shadow box too. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you post next, because your post so far show a lot of effort and it’s inspiring that we have somewhat same ideas. Thanks, Wendy Perez Govea
  • Brian's Oct 17, 16:26 comment on TRUE COLORS by Latrell Thomas
    Dear Latrell, My name is Brian and I am a 9th grader at Life Academy. My favorite part of your Shadow Box project was the pictures you put in. I question I have for you is why you put color is not a crime. Keep working hard Brian
  • Lupita's Oct 17, 16:26 comment on My Shadow Box
    Dear Jessica, I am astonished by your shadow box. I love how in your artist statement you explain how many people may see you as one ethnicity but the truth is you're not. You are a proud Guatemalan and that is truly shown in your shadow box.One part of your artist statement/shadow box that I loved was that you showed how people may believe that you are always feminine but you are not always feminine and that is shown by when you dressed up as a duck for halloween instead of a princess or any feminine costume. Thank you for sharing your wonderful shadow box and showing the world that dominant narratives do not define you. Keep writing and showing the world YOUR perspective. Sincerely, Lupita Morales-Cordova=)
  • Marleni's Oct 17, 16:25 comment on My Shadow box
    Dear Kenya, Your shadow box is really beautiful. I like how you incorporated many pictures and objects to express your counter narratives. One sentence that you wrote that stood out to me was, “I choose to try my hardest and never give up.” That sentence stood out to me because it is good to have that in mind. Also, its better to have a growth mindset then a fixed one. Another sentence that stood out to me was, “When people look at me they might think that I’m dangerous or that I’m an immigrant which is my dominant narrative.” You as a young latina female it is very important to break down those sterotypes. You did really good work! -Marleni
  • Juan's Oct 17, 16:24 comment on My Shadow Box
    Dear Janie, I am excited by your shadow box because I like how everything was organized.As well, how you explain all of it and everything in you box has a meaning to it.Also, the doll I like how it has a big meaning to it and how you explain why you put it their. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is when you said “The photo with me and my younger sister just represents my bound with her and how I care about her so much. The picture with my mom , dad and me was taken in mothers day and I put it in my shadow box because I care so much and love my whole family.” I think this is good because it gives a feel of how you truly feel for your family. Another sentence that I liked was “The candy just represents how much I love Mexican candy and how good it tastes.” This stood out to me because I can agree with you on this because it really does taste good. Your Shadow box reminds me of what I made once.One time I did the exact same thing the Shadow box my was in the same sense as yours because I added my family into it.As well I added the Mexican flag to because that is where my parents are from.Also,I added religion to it like you added la Virgen I added a cross. Thank you for your shadow box.I look forward to seeing what you make next because I really liked what you did.The explanation of it all also it was detailed and it explained your shadow box well.
  • Maria's Oct 17, 15:33 comment on LA LLEGADA A UN NUEVO PAÍS
    Estima: Rodolfo Tu escritura me parece muy interesante ya que muchos emos pasado por la misma situación o estamos pasando de aprender nuevas culturas nuevos y idioma algo que relativamente no son nuestras raises ni costumbres pero es una experiencia muy interesante y bonita porque puedes aprender nuevas cosas y salir de tu zona de confort. Gracias por tu escritura espero ver lo que escribas a continuación, porque quiero saber como te va con tu aprendizaje de nuevas tradiciones.
  • Claudia's Oct 17, 15:28 comment on Maltrato al niño
    Si, esta muy interesante la historia Rolando. Cuando quieras te puedo ir contigo a la librería para buscarlo.
  • Claudia's Oct 17, 15:25 comment on Maltrato al niño
    Si Erika, la historia es muy triste pero es la verdad pasan muchas cosas terribles. Su mamá era muy mala con el. A Pesar que maltrataba a el niño demasiado el no era grosero con su mama siempre la respetaba y le hacía caso en todo.
  • Grace's Oct 16, 15:31 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    Your comment, "Instead of just using tap water, which would be roughly $0.49 a year for eight glasses of water a day, we are spending $1,400 a year." is impacting because for a society that thrives off of capitalism and the economy, why aren't we doing every little thing to reduce everyday costs? I think an answer could be found in our search for convenience. We would rather do things that help us short-term rather than long-term. The information you bring on San Francisco is interesting and will lead me to read more on the subject.
  • Sophie's Oct 16, 04:20 comment on Values are Changing
    I agree with your staement about how in this day and age we are turning from moral obigations to materialistic things. Your article really drew my attrntion to this imminent problem. Here is an article I found about business and its functions in the changing world. https://hbr.org/1974/03/business-and-the-changing-society
  • Sophie's Oct 16, 04:16 comment on Does pursuing research about a potential “gay” gene promote an inherent homophobic bias?
    This is a very intersting article! I am not very familiar with conversion therapy and this article really enlightened me on the subject. Here is a link to an article that I found that basically just talks about statistics and facts about converion therapy if you are interested. http://www.nclrights.org/bornperfect-the-facts-about-conversion-therapy/
  • Joseph's Oct 15, 18:24 comment on Will Increased Gun Control Help To Make Schools Safer?
    I think all of these points are legitimate and well spoken, but I think this sarcastic remark with no purpose but to make fun of someone commenting doesn't contribute to the discussion of the issue. Whatever side your audience stands on, all points of view should be respected and comments should contribute, not take a stance of making fun of an individual's very possible ambitions.
  • Carlos's Oct 15, 15:16 comment on Should prostitution be legal?
    This was one of the most interesting debates in modern society. Prostitution is one of the oldest professions to exist, but has always had the stigma of being an unclean and dirty profession. I wonder what caused you to look deeper into this topic. It is very interesting and how you think this topic affects society. I found a pro and con website on the topic of legalizing prostitution (https://nyln.org/6-principal-pros-and-cons-of-legalizing-prostitution) and it listed many of the reasons you mentioned. This reminded of me a documentary I saw about a large brothel in India. There, the practice is legal. However, the conditions the workers were in seemed just as dirty and unsanitary as working a street corner. I am already very interested in this topic. If you were to add more information of the pros and cons, I will definitely come back and read more.
  • Carlos's Oct 15, 15:04 comment on My future in the Army
    This was very interesting. I specifically thought it was cool when you told the difference between the different uniforms for different climates. I was wondering how this topic will directly impact your life. Do the armed forces have any plans to change the current attire? I also found this link for you (https://www.army.mil/uniforms/). It goes to the Army website and gives the history of different uniforms of the armed forces. This post also reminds me of my uncles. They served in the armed forces and are very proud of their uniforms. I would definitely come back to this article if there was a bit more explanation of how this affects us today.
  • Halley's Oct 15, 14:55 comment on Is your teenager drinking?
    Ozzie, I really enjoyed reading this. I thought it was very interesting and I like that you prevented both an arguement for and against. I think that the drinking age should be lowered, because we are telling adults (18 year olds) that they aren't able to make adult decisions until a certain age. They are able to enlist, but not able to sit down at a restaurant and order a glass of wine. I look forward to what you write next! Halley
  • Olivia's Oct 15, 14:44 comment on We No Longer Stick Up For Each Other
    I also don't think that we all need to agree on something. It's important to have different views in order to have an open mind. I would be interested to hear what you think about this article, which argues that the United States have never been divided. https://bigthink.com/scotty-hendricks/why-is-the-united-states-so-divided-simple-it-was-never-united-at-all
  • Halley's Oct 15, 14:43 comment on Values are Changing
    Kelsey, I really enjoyed your publication! I thought it was very well thought out and the topic is very interesting. It's something that is present in all of our lives, but sometimes we got too caught up in our materialistic culture to recognize the community values we have lost. I think your last paragraph is especially strong in how you point out how hard some people work to get nothing in return because of race, gender, sex ethnicity and so much more. I look forward to reading what you write next! -Halley
  • Olivia's Oct 15, 14:39 comment on The Risk of the Anti-Vaccine Movement
    I especially like how you point out the irony of parents not getting their children vaccinated. It provides a new insight on the topic that I hadn't heard before. I would be interested to hear what you think of this article, which talks about how people are losing trust in vaccines. https://www.telegraph.co.uk/news/0/trust-vaccines-plummet-following-dengue-scandal-philippines/
  • Sera's Oct 15, 14:34 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    I think plastic water bottles, and plastic in general, is very harmful to the environment. While plastic water bottles might be hard to ban, it could be easier to try and move other forms of packaged food and products from plastic packaging to things like cardboard and paper.
  • Jeheim's Oct 15, 13:07 comment on Don’t Judge Me
    I can relate with this because that is racial profiling and as a black person living in the U.S. we are profiles as a nigger or killer.
  • Shreeya's Oct 15, 03:04 comment on What Values Define the People of America?
    Hey Rhea, I agree with your statement that opportunity, equality, and freedom are the key values that make up our American creed. When you were talking about opportunity I liked how you talked about how opportunities are around us every day in life and with that I thought it was interesting how you talked about our high school has programs that offer kids many different job opportunities for the future. I wonder what America would be like today if these values weren't a part of the American creed? would America still be a developing country or not?
  • Raine's Oct 15, 00:22 comment on My Shadow Box By: Ingrid Ramirez
    Your shadow box is beautiful and I love the meaning behind it. I relate to how you mentioned you may appear shy when first meeting someone knew and then open up once they get to know you. Overall, you did an amazing job both with the box itself and the description portion.
  • Sofia's Oct 14, 03:32 comment on Soccer is Life!
    Estimada Natalia: Estoy asombrada por tu post sobre '' Mal Peet '' por que a pesar de que no le gusta el futbol parece comprender un poco sobre el. La parte que me gusto de tu post fue donde dices que''El gato pasa de ser un terrible jugador , a uno de los mejores jugadores'' por que yo creo que si nosotros tenemos algo que deseamos lo podemos lograr con mucho esfuerzo ya sea en lo deportivo , en la educacion o en algo para nuestro futuro.Vo en que algo tenemos en similar por que a mi me gusta jugar futbol , pero no me gusta hablar sobre el o mirarlo en tv por que me parece a burrido . Gracias por tu escritura.Espero ver lo que escribas a continuacion , por que quiero saber mas sobre lo que opinas sobre las lecturas que haces y por que me gusta como lo compara con su vida o con lo que pasa sobre su alrededor.
  • Jenifer's Oct 13, 22:55 comment on El Amor es diferente!
    Estimada Veronica: Estoy muy asombrada por tus palabras de " El Amor es Diferente" porque nos haces recordar aquellos tiempos en que el amor se transmitia por cartas o postales. También en cómo trataban a las mujeres. Para mi hubo dos frase que tu escribistes que se destaca para mí son:"Las parejas no se podían juntar pero ahora uno es libre y puede juntarse con la persona que quiera sin temor alguno". "Antes los hombres valoraban más a las mujeres y las cuidaban como su vida o las protegían pero ahora existen hombre que no las valoran que las usan y les hacen daño", porque la primera frase nos dices sobre lo que antes pasaba con nuestro mundo y también estas diciendo de como es ahora. Y la segunda frase fue porque no es más de que la triste realidad porque ya casi no hay hombres buenos de esos que te dan detalles, de lo que dan todo por sacarte una sonrisa. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque si es muy interesante este tema sobre el amor, sobre aquellos tiempos de cómo se comunicaban y cómo se protegían de uno al otro como dos personas que se amaban. Jenifer
  • Veronica's Oct 13, 01:58 comment on Mi familia es muy diferente
    Estimada Jenifer, Estoy sorprendida por tu publicación "Mi familia es muy diferente" por que explicas como es de diferente tu familia a comparación del cuento.Aparte das un mensaje muy importante sobre las parejas o madres que abortan a sus hijos, Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es: "Es mejor dar a un bebe en adopcion si no lo deseas, pues es una vida más en este mundo que no merece ser sometido a un aborto por un error de los padres."Creo que esto es impresionante por que das un mensaje muy importante, la vida es unica y nadie la regala y cuando alguien llega al mundo hay que aprovechar por nunca sabemos cuando llegará la hora de partir. Gracias por tu escritura.Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, por que das un mensaje importante a al mundo sobre la vida.
  • Noah's Oct 12, 17:21 comment on American Creed = Destiny?
    I agree with you Sanath on what really is an American creed it truly has many different views on what it can be because it does vary from person to person on their aspects on life. The knowledge they have or grow up with really will put a good thought to what they believe it is.
  • Tristan's Oct 12, 16:53 comment on America’s Most Important Values
    If america had a state religion, I don't think it would be as great a country as it is now. An important concept in the american government is the separation of church and state. This allows for a fairer justice system and puts everyone on an equal playing field in the courtroom, no matter what they believe in. I think this is important because it also fosters tolerance to a degree. Because all groups are treated equally in the courtroom, they are in the same boat, as equals, and the least they can do is tolerate those they can sympathize with.
  • Matthew's Oct 12, 16:48 comment on Benefit of Higher Education
    Lining, I had no idea the immense medical benefits of receiving a higher education. All of our lives, we are taught that getting a higher education leads to a more successful and happy career. I had no idea that it could also lead to a longer life.
  • Michelle's Oct 12, 16:44 comment on What is your definition of “American”?
    Hi Vibha, I like how you emphasized that hard work and dedication is part of being an American. I think it's interesting that America is like a salad bowl, because we are all different from the choices we make.
  • German's Oct 12, 16:44 comment on Contamination of the superficial terrestrial
    Estimado Alejandro Estoy impresionado por tu información sobre Contamination of the superficial terrestrial , esto ha provocado el aumento en la concentración de dichas sustancias,calidad de la superficie terrestre causas de la contaminación del suelo,contaminación en todo el planeta,vertido de los plastics, compaction terrestrial Gracias por tu escritura espero y vuelvas a compartir más información como estas me intereso y me siento satisfecho a leer esta información porque son muy interesantes.
  • Rodolfo's Oct 12, 16:41 comment on The long road home
    Estimado raul estoy sorprendido por tu escritura, "The Long Road Home" porque a mi tambien me gusta el futbol y me molesto cuando pierdo. Una frase que usted escribe que se destaca para mi es 'El libro es algo similar a mi vida porque el libro dice que el niño estaba jugando fútbol y perdió el juego.Creo que esto es algo similar a lo que pasa en la vida real porque muchos niños pierden juegos. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribas a continuación, por que me dejó con ganas de saber mas del futbol. Rodolfo
  • Samantha's Oct 12, 16:33 comment on El Amor es diferente!
    Estimada Veronica: Estoy encantada por su publicación, "El amor es diferente!," porque me gusto como te expresas y todo lo escribes con claridad. Eso me gusto y también tu escritura es muy buena y no tienes faltas de ortografía. Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es: "me recuerda a como existían las diferencias o clasificaciones de las personas y las parejas no se podían juntar pero ahora uno es libre y puede juntarse con la persona que quiera sin temor alguno." Creo que esto es muy bonito porque me gusto como pusiste que en otras épocas había diferencias para las parejas por su clase y ahora en esta época ya no. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque me gusta la forma en que te expresas y tu manera en la que escribes, que tienes muchas ideas. Tu crees que ya no exista la diferencia social? Samantha.
  • Erika's Oct 12, 16:21 comment on Maltrato al niño
    querida claudi me asombra su escritura porque yo tambien eh visto las noticias y a hablando del maltrato familia y me parece algo muy interesante pero un poco desagradable
  • Maria's Oct 12, 16:11 comment on Latina Americana
    Querida: Erika Me parece muy interesante el relato de tu vida porque Mexico se me hace un país muy bonito para poder creer ya que tiene mucha cultura, y té pues desarrollar muy bien pero también me alegro por ti porque ahora estás viviendo en California, y puedes aprender nuevo lenguaje. Gracias por escribir acerca de tu vida espero ver lo que escribes a continuación.
  • Alejandro's Oct 12, 16:07 comment on Jets jets
    Estimado german I am impresionado por tu información sobre los jets que pueden transportar mucha gente , cargar cientos de toneladas y que pueden viajar a mucha velocidad y que también los aviones comerciales que también transporta muchas toneladas su poema tiene mucha información relevante sobre el tema de los jets su ensayo contiene demasiada information sobre eso y su foto fue la indicada para el tema jets jets por qué es lo hablas del tema informativo una frase que usted escribió que destaca para mi es que los jets son muy rápidos para combate creo que esto es interesante porque... hay mas tipos de jets aparte de los que escribió gracias por tu escritura. espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque sus ensayos son muy interesantes
  • Eduardo's Oct 12, 16:02 comment on Contamination of the superficial terrestrial
    Estimado Alejandro Maciel Magaña: Estoy asombrado por tu información ¨Contamination of the superficial terrestrial¨ Por su parte, esto ha provocado el aumento en la concentración de dichas sustancias; las cuales en su mayoría se relaciona con la existence a partir del ser human que a sido el responsable de esto se debe hacer conciencia de esto se debe empesar a hacer la difference, calidad de la superficie terrestre ,causas de la contaminación del suelo,contaminación en todo el planeta,vertido de los plastics,compaction terrestrial Gracias por tu escritura espero y vuelvas a compartir mas información como estas me intereso y me siento satisfecho a leer esta informacion
  • Rolando's Oct 12, 15:43 comment on Ford Mustang
    mustang viejo ni a de correr a mas de 100
  • Rolando's Oct 12, 15:41 comment on Maltrato al niño
    que perrona la historia préstame el libro
  • Jordan's Oct 12, 13:21 comment on What Values Define the People of America?
    I agree with the things that make us Americans. Opportunity, equality, and freedom of voice are the things that help to make America what it is. If we didn't have them where would be today.
  • Iyana's Oct 12, 13:19 comment on Questions
    I feel like these questions are amazing because it not only allows someone to see what kind of things you want for yourself, but also the type of questions you wrote down a lot of people would be able to connect with. When you asked the question " Am i a good mother " i don't know you but i feel like no one should be able to have you feel like your doing a bad job as long as you keep a smile on your face your doing an amazing job. Thank you for helping the world understand like there will be a different kind of mindset in the next 10-20 years .
  • Shaiquan Matthias's Oct 12, 13:14 comment on Why are people racist?
    Dear Tania I am excited about your post. ''Why are people racist?”.because… It gives me the exact information about why are people racist and how can people be racist ,Your post gives me the mindset that people has a lot of way to be racist. [for example ] Racism can be revealed through people’s actions as well as their attitudes .Racism is more than just words, beliefs and actions. It includes all the barriers that prevent people from enjoying dignity and equality because of their race. It can also be reflected in systems and institutions.because… It gives me the exact information about why are people racist and how can people be racist ,Your post gives me the mindset that people has a lot of way to be racist. ´ One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is ´´Some people are racist because we are quick to judge, it could be by appearance,or personality.We also blame people by our problems,when we feel angry or frustrated, we often look for someone else to blame for our problems.´ I think this is excellent because…Racism has different standards and a lot of people has a lot of reasons to be racist ,racism is not always about the color of your skin ,it can be about how you dress or how you carry yourself . Another sentence that i found was: “Ergo, people are racist because they feel as if other people they consider different may harm them so that’s why they segregate people by color,nationality,etc.,” This stood out for me because ….It gives me a understanding of how and why people are racist . Your post reminds me of something that happened to me. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because...You really inspire me as a young black girl who has a long way to go and life and your post encouraged me to be strong and brave because people find a lot of ways to be racist and they have a lot of ways people can show racism.
  • Jada's Oct 12, 13:11 comment on Is God Real ?
    I agree with Nathaniel religion was created to give people hope, but without hope this world would be nothing if hope didn't exist.
  • Nathaniel's Oct 12, 12:58 comment on Is God Real ?
    was created to give people hope and for people to have faith not fate
  • Danny's Oct 12, 12:41 comment on Guns and Freedom: The American Way
    I think this was well written. I liked your points a lot and thought they were strong. However, I disagree. I think we should have stronger background checks and we should stop the gun show loophole. We also need mental heath background checks.
  • Kyle's Oct 12, 12:35 comment on Guns and Freedom: The American Way
    I believe you make fantastic points Mr. Jake! But I personally agree that guns should be regulated in a sense. There is no reason for so many people to die from such incidents like Sandy Hook and Las Vegas. We need to work together in order to curve this endless cycle of death. Being divided on an issue doesn't fix anything!
  • Megan's Oct 12, 12:34 comment on What are American Values?
    David, I totally agree with your main points that all people can relate to at least one American value, regardless if they are immigrants or people born in America.
  • Eric's Oct 12, 12:33 comment on One Promise to All
    Hey, I agree that no matter how a person talks, acts, and dresses, we should respect them as Americans (assuming they address themselves as Americans). The belief that hard work always pays off is usually true as well. I believe you can extend some of the points to substantiate them to improve your paragraph. Good work overall.
  • Michael's Oct 12, 12:30 comment on Indivisualism
    Hey Chandan, I agree with your points in this post. Individualism is a core american value. All your points were strong and you cited sources to back up your claims. Good job
  • Andre's Oct 12, 12:29 comment on Indivisualism
    As soon as I saw that you wrote this, I clicked on it because you always state some big facts. And this, this is an example of that. Best part about it was that I liked how your post was short but it contained heavy information.
  • Andre's Oct 12, 12:24 comment on America is Diverse, but is it Equal?
    I liked how your last paragraph brought things together and I agree that there are many things to work on for the US. I also found it cool that every 33 seconds, a new immigrant come through.
  • Kristen's Oct 12, 12:20 comment on My views on American values
    Hi Maxim, I like how straight to the point you were about American values. You clearly stated equality, freedom, and opportunity and had evidence to back it up. However, I would like to see you work more on your claim. I feel like your claim was a little too broad especially when you want freedom, equality and opportunity to be the main points in your writing. I suggest adding another sentence to your claim, " However, most Americans would agree on certain similar values," It would add a stronger introduction to your values. Overall, great effort!
  • Andre's Oct 12, 12:18 comment on Empty Candy Jar
    I liked how you used descriptive words to help me visualize what you were talking about. I also enjoyed the way you used dialogue.
  • Chandan's Oct 12, 12:17 comment on What it feels like to die?
    I like your picture but your post lacked citations or any author credibility. It is hard to believe what your source is saying without understanding the context in which he is writing. Maybe next you could pull in more sources and add credibility as well as input your own opinions or ideas.
  • Kristen's Oct 12, 12:16 comment on Equality The Greatest Value Of All
    Oh my gosh, I'm sorry. I mean equality, not inequality. That's not the American value you were talking about.
  • Eric's Oct 12, 12:14 comment on Indivisualism
    I enjoy how you put multiple sources and poems into your poem and summarizing them while relating them to individuality. I really enjoy the point you made, but I do believe you can continue to build off your point and extend your paragraph as well.
  • Jason's Oct 12, 12:13 comment on Discovering A New Views On American Culture
    Hi Sloane, I definitely agree that culture relates to values to great extent. There are many ideas, values, and beliefs in America. Also, I agree to your statement about the variety of religion in the U.S. This is why we have "freedom of religion" in the Bill of Rights and the Constitution. I admire how you acknowledged how everyone is different when it comes to some things. Your argument on American creed is one of the best I've seen.
  • Paulina's Oct 12, 12:12 comment on Free Thinking America
    Jack, I like how you layed out your argument on " What is American creed?". I agree that our nation is politically divided and that makes us american because he have the right to speak our mind. I like how you stay around the topic of freedom of speech. You also have a good ending that make the reader think.
  • Michael's Oct 12, 12:12 comment on America’s Most Important Values
    Triston, I agree with your points in this post. Americans mostly value the first amendment and all our other freedoms given to us by the constitution. All of your points were solid and supported by evidence. Good job
  • Dean's Oct 12, 12:11 comment on One Promise to All
    Hey Ej, first of all, I really like the picture you used. I strongly agree with what you said about meaning of being American. We are all unique and we try to make things better. I also believe that every American has some value to contribute to our society. The idea of working hard and achieving their dream is one of my key ideas too.
  • Kristen's Oct 12, 12:11 comment on Equality The Greatest Value Of All
    Hi Praneeth, I like how your evidence and citations is very strong. You were able to back up your evidence and show that the Constitution is a symbol of inequality. However, I would like to see you work on your introductory paragraph. Why is inequality the strongest American value? What other American values can you compare inequality to? Is it better than freedom or justice? I feel like it would give a stronger introduction to your evidence paragraph. Overall, great effort!
  • EJ's Oct 12, 12:09 comment on What it feels like to die?
    I thought that this article was very interesting and unique. I have never seen an article that discusses what death feels like and I was surprised to see this floating around on YouthVoices. I noticed that you said death causes suicide and murder but I'm pretty sure it's the other way around. I think that it's a deep article that needs to be discussed but also we need to make sure our facts are correct. According to Medical News Today, they claim that the Heart Disease and Cancer cause the most deaths in our generation. Make sure your information is correctly cited. I didn't see any citations but it was a great piece
  • Kristen's Oct 12, 12:04 comment on What do you value most as an American?
    Hi Michael. I like how sincere you were when writing this passage. I think it majorly showed when you used your independent reading, "Dear Miss Breed." I would never thought to use that as evidence and shows how much you learned from it. Like the first comment above, I would like to see you focus more on your statements. For example, you said that, "Many American feared..." This would be a great place for evidence or explain why more in depth! I feel like I needed to be more persuaded in why more people should believe in diversity and patriotism. Overall, great effort!
  • Dean's Oct 12, 12:03 comment on My views on American values
    I agree with your point that we value freedom, equality and opportunity. I strongly agree that opportunity is the biggest part of America. Lot of people come to the United States to achieve their American Dream. I like your article overall and there's some good ideas.
  • Sydney's Oct 12, 12:03 comment on Values are Changing
    Hi Kelsey, I agree with you that we should be focusing on bigger things like our freedom and independence more than what house we live in or what we wear. I thought your argument was well worded and I enjoyed reading your post.
  • Paulina's Oct 12, 12:02 comment on The Middle Ground of a Hot Issue
    Bailey, I love how you start this piece it is a really good "hook". I also like your word choice it strengthens your argument. I also loved how you organized your piece.
  • Zaggam's Oct 12, 12:01 comment on Equality The Greatest Value Of All
    You had good citations and I like how you closed up your argument.
  • Dean's Oct 12, 11:57 comment on Equality The Greatest Value Of All
    Hey Praneeth, I strongly agree with you that we regard United States as the greatest country in the world. I agree with you about the value you stated here. I also said equality as one of the values we need to live by. I like your argument and stuff but I think it is a little short.
  • Clara's Oct 11, 19:46 comment on How can gun violence be avoided?
    Adelphe, I clicked on this article because the topic of violence interests me. You article felt passionate and I appreciate your opinion and input on this situation. I am extremely curious about the program "Ceasefire" that you mentioned. I am also wondering if you personally live in the Bronx like you mentioned. Is gun violence a specific problem in your own life and do you think that this program will help you and the people you know? Thanks.
  • Jake's Oct 11, 14:06 comment on Why Gun Control Matters
    You wanna talk stats? Let's talk stats... First of all, I promise you that no real firearm is worth $5. Toy guns maybe, but not real ones.. Secondly, this isn't Minority Report. We can't see into the future and see a person committing a crime before it happens. How would you "strengthen" background checks? If you have no criminal record and no history of mental illness, how would you be able to tell if someone is gonna commit a crime with said gun? Also, saying that buying a gun is easier than getting an abortion is completely unsubstantiated.Abortions cost a lot, yes. But you don't need to go through criminal screening to get a abortion. You don't need a license. Thirdly, you used very nice wordplay here. You said "deaths". That involves all forms of firearm deaths. Suicides included. Roughly 33,000 people die every year from firearms in the US. Now, on the surface, that isn't a very pleasant number. However, 2/3 of that number are suicides. Around 3-5,000 deaths are from Chicago alone. So, that leaves around 6-8,000 gun homicides. Now, according to the CDC, a firearm is used to save anywhere between 500,000-3 million lives a year in the US. Now, I'm not mathematician, but those defensive numbers seem way higher. Now, banning "AR", I'm assuming you mean "Assault Rifle". That is a completely made-up term. "AR" stands for Armalite Rifle. The company that makes the rifle. Statistically speaking, you are 4 times more likely to be stabbed to death than being killed with a rifle or shotgun according to FBI crime statistics. These are facts you cannot dispute. The fact of the matter is that gun control will do no good. It'll only do harm. Australia suffered from it. The UK is suffering from it. Chicago is suffering from it. 98% of all shootings since 1950 have happened in gun-free zones according to FBI statistics. Further regulating firearms will just put law-abiding citizens in danger. Making more gun laws will not help people, arming citizens will according to all statistics. https://ucr.fbi.gov/crime-in-the-u.s/2016/crime-in-the-u.s.-2016/tables/expanded-homicide-data-table-4.xls https://www.cdc.gov/nchs/fastats/homicide.htm
  • Crismeylin's Oct 11, 13:44 comment on Immigration Unfairness
    Dear Abigail I am Satisfy with your post “Immigration Unfairness” because I am totally agree with you. In my opinion Donald Trump are being cruel to immigrant. He should know that immigrant are human too that just because they don’t have paper doesn't make them bad person.One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is “We need a president who will be a leader and stand for everyone’s rights” I think that is fair to have a president who will be a leader and stand for everyone's right, because we don’t need a president who created racist, who treat immigrant bad just because they dont have paper but at the end of the day they are human too the have the right. Another sentence that stand out for me is “ Recently in our country immigration has been cruel and unfair to everyone especially the Hispanics”. I am Agree with you because what the President is doing is just unfair, he treating immigrant to bad. He should know that some family immigrated to the United States because they looking forward to give a better education to they kid to and have more opportunity.Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because I think that you have a really good point. You are a wonderful person because you think like about other in this case you thinking about immigrant. Humans that are being treat bad and cruel.I would love to continue seen post like this from you.
  • alejandro's Oct 11, 12:15 comment on Equality: A Value of High Importance in American Lives
    I Agree with you on your argument on how equality is of high importance for Americans. With time I believe that everyone will get treated equally and there will be no more discrimination. Very well written piece with good supporting pieces.
  • Skye's Oct 11, 05:34 comment on Lipstick
    I like how you talked about the cultural diversity in your neighborhood, and how there are both differences and similarities in that. I appreciate how you are open about the experience of your immigration to the U.S., and discussed how your life changed when you moved to New York. You have big dreams for the future and have the drive to achieve them.
  • Skye's Oct 11, 05:28 comment on NO JUGAR A SER DIOS
    The idea of playing god is often present in the medical and scientific world. I like how you mentioned the the experiments done on dead bodies to try and revive them. Here is an article I read recently about science and the role of God. Though it does not deal with the idea of death, it has the same theme. https://www.kansascity.com/opinion/readers-opinion/guest-commentary/article191007909.html
  • Skye's Oct 11, 05:22 comment on The American Dream
    I agree that the American dream is often interpreted as that idea of "rags to riches." Using the current wave of rap artists as an example is a great way to show how that idea is being represented in mainstream culture. I really enjoyed your description of the appeal that still remains in the U.S. Freedom is the broad idea, and it conflicts with a desk job.
  • Vibha's Oct 10, 19:13 comment on Are people entitled to free healthcare?
    Hi Matt, I agree with you and believe that we all should have access to free health care. However, like you mentioned, as of right now it is just not possible, while it may be in the future. There have been steps that have been taken, such as free health seminars and other similar events. When you said "...health care for very serious illness or injury should be free", I tend to disagree. While it definitely should not be as expensive as it is, it would be very difficult to support our economy and other important structures if it were so. Overall you did a nice job! -Vibha
  • Maria's Oct 10, 18:37 comment on Growing Up
    Dear Leslie, I really like your shadow box I like the fact how you haz the two flags showing where you from. I got to know that you are a independent person and a person who speaks up for yourself. Also how you like the WARRIORS/ basketball.
  • Diego's Oct 10, 18:37 comment on shadow box artist statement by Daniel rodriguez
    Dearest Daniel, your color works very well with your objects. I like how you put your interests like dragon ball Z and the walking dead wan d what it means to you as an individual. Very in depth.
  • Kelly's Oct 10, 18:36 comment on Beatriz’s shadow box
    Dear Beatriz, I love your shadow box I like what you added inside it. I also love your shadow box because of the bay pictures you put in it (you were so cute!!). One part of your shadow box that stands out to me is when you said that people assume that you are not strong because of your gender. This stood out to me because that is very true in society today, they think that women are weak and can’t do the same things as men. Another part that I liked from your shadow box was were you put the jesus object because religion is also a very important part of my life. Your shadow box connects to me because people also assume I am Mexican jus because I speak spanish. Thanks for your shadow box. I look forward to seeing what you do next because I know you will add some great ideas.
  • Martha's Oct 10, 18:35 comment on My Shadow Box By Ulises Almanza
    Dear, Ulises One sentence that stood out to me in your artist statement was when you stated you wanted society to see you as a good brother that’s really adorable. To add on, another sentence that stood out to me was when you wanted to have no F’s and I see you in PLT already working on that pathway Good luck I know you can achieve your goals. Thanks for your artist statement and shadow box. I look forward to seeing what you make next, because this work was really great to look at. You rock!! Sincerely, Martha
  • Kassandra's Oct 10, 18:35 comment on Shadowbox
    Dear Jose Rivas, I am glad about your shadow box because it looks very nice. You did a great job on this. A sentence that stood out to me is ¨When people look at they would usually think I’m a Mexican but I’m a Guatemalan mixed with Salvadoran.Many people assume that I’m an immigrant,even though I’m American¨, because your saying the dominant narratives you have, but then proving them wrong like how you're ¨Guatemalan mixed with Salvadoran¨. Thank you for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because this shadow box was great, so I'm sure your next work will be good, but maybe even better.
  • Imelda's Oct 10, 18:35 comment on Valerie’s Shadow Box
    Dear Valerie, Your shadow box is amazing! I saw the effort you put in it when we worked on our shadow boxes. I like how you explained the dominant narratives. The last sentence was so powerful just like Ms.Portugal says “ Words Have Power “. The baby pictures you included are so cute! Just like you ;). Overall your shadow box is amazing! Sincerely, Imelda 🙂
  • Ingrid's Oct 10, 18:34 comment on Imelda’s Life
    Dear Imelda, Am very proud of you because you’re representing your culture and where you came from. I love how you started with your artist statement saying, ¨I have chosen to represent my culture and myself because I think it’s important that other people know that I appreciate my culture and I’m grateful for everything I have In this world¨. I love how you are appreciating all the things you have in life unlike some people that don't appreciate what they have. I agree with you that your culture is unique and its everything to u because you know i'm from todo santos too. And I believe that to, am also glad it gave me the opportunity to wear other type of clothes and speak in another different unique language. Sincerely, Ingrid
  • Judith's Oct 10, 18:34 comment on My Shadow Box
    Dear Wendy, I love how you decorated your box and I loved your reasoning behind the black rose. It was cool and I hadn’t thought about it like that before. However, I wonder how the black rose connects to your identity. I also liked reading what you wrote about your award and your hoops. Your hoops are the coolest and you look the coolest wearing them ;). I love you, your shadow box is great. Sincerely, Judith
  • Joseph's Oct 10, 18:33 comment on Box of liberation
    Hello Diego, I love how your shadow box came out. When I saw you working on it and adding pictures to your box, I knew it would come out great. Your shadow box is definitely the funniest one I've seen and that really reflects how you are as a person because you always make jokes and are funny. And that's the main aspect I like about your shadow box, that your personality reflects on your project. Keep up the good work. Sincerely, Joseph
  • Ivy Delgadillo Santos's Oct 10, 18:33 comment on Growing Up
    Hey Leslie, I really like how your shadow box embraces multiple identities. One part of your art piece that stands out to me is the WNBA logo, which shows your love and passion towards basketball, and I’m sure that you will meet this aspiration. It does defy all stereotypes set on females, but the fact that you like basket ball shows how strong you truly are. So I look forward to seeing the next thing you post related to breaking down stereotypes and proving society wrong.
  • Valerie's Oct 10, 18:32 comment on Identity Of I
    One sentence that stood up to me is when you were talking about your family’s features. This is because you said you all looked alike which is cool. I am learning more about you like your mom’s and dad’s side of the family which is interesting. I enjoyed your shadow box because it shows a clear description of who you are. I hope to see more work of your’s in the future.
  • Gregorio's Oct 10, 18:29 comment on My Shadow Box
    Dear Jessica, I like how you talked about how dominant narratives are wrong about you like for example, you are not mexican you’re Guatemalan. This is also represented on your box because you have the flag. Also, I like how you don’t always see yourself as feminine, which is showed by you wear a duck costume which was really funny. Overall, your shadow box is well done with all the symbols and images in your box and also your artist statement was well done too because you talked about your counter and dominant narratives.
  • Maria's Oct 10, 18:29 comment on Lupita´s Shadow Box
    Dear Lupita, I really like your shadow box I like the fact how you divide your shadow box into a salvadorian, mexican and american. I also really like your pictures that you share in your shadow box. I really related to some of the stereotypical ideals you pointed out that people have against women. I have feel that what you talk is really strong but is really important to people too know about it.
  • Bryan's Oct 10, 18:29 comment on My Shadow Box
    Dear Wendy, I am honestly happy about how you did this project. I really liked your artist statement I thought that it was very strong you said a lot in just one paragraph which is outrageous. Your shadow box is cool I liked how you added a lot of pictures and I also liked the black roses you added in your shadow boxes. You did very good in this project keep up the good work. Sincerely, Bryan Moreno 🙂
  • Ingrid's Oct 10, 18:27 comment on My Shadow Box
    Dear Wendy, I really liked how you explained what your shadow box is and what it represents. I agree with you when you said that people believe the black color is a depressing because it's actually not. I believe it's a beautiful color and something that just goes with everything. Am glad i read your artist statement because it helped me get to know you better. Also, am very proud of you because your happy to be mexican because usually some people are embarrassed from where they come from so am glad your not one of them. Sincerely, Ingrid
  • Martha's Oct 10, 18:27 comment on Ariana’s Shadow Box
    Dear Ariana, One sentence that stood out to me was how you added pictures of your childhood it shows your family. It also shows me how you are showing that your family is important to you. Another part that I liked was the colors of your box made it so colorful and attracting to look at. Great work on your artist statement too you rock! Sincerely, martha
  • Judith's Oct 10, 18:26 comment on Hello stranger! THIS IS ME!
    Dear Anthony, I really like your shadow box and artist statement. I like the way you wrote it and a lot of what you said was pretty relatable. I also learned a lot about you which is cool because we don’t really talk like that. I also like the reasoning on why you included those colors on your shadow box. But, I don’t understand why you chose black to represent your love for games and basketball. Overall, your shadow box + artist statement was interesting to read and look at. Sincerely, Judith
  • Kassandra's Oct 10, 18:25 comment on Ariana’s Shadow Box
    Dear, Ariana, I am happy about how your shadow box turned out. I know you didn’t have a lot of time to work on it, but you still worked hard and made your shadow box looked fantastic. I appreciate the work you put into that. One sentence you wrote that stood out to me is ¨I see myself as a young independent person who is HONORED to be a Latina feminist in the Oakland community¨. I liked that sentence because you are showing how proud you are to be who you are. Thank you for your writing! I look forward to seeing your fabulous writing in the future because your work are always amazing, like this shadow box post!
  • Kelly's Oct 10, 18:23 comment on Juan’s Shadow Box
    Dear Juan Mendoza, I really like you shadow box because it has a lot of pictures. I also really like the flags you put to represent where you where from. One part of your artwork that stands out to me is the promotion pictures you added. I think is was a great idea to add them because it shows that you were successful in your other schools and that you will continue to do good in school. Another part of your artwork that stood out to me was the color you put on the outside which was red. That stood out to me because people do think that red is related to a gang even if it can be more. Thanks for your shadow box. I look forward to what you make next because I know it will be great.
  • Ivy Delgadillo Santos's Oct 10, 18:23 comment on My Shadow Box By: Kanika Carey
    Hi Kanika, I really like your shadow box. One part of your art piece that stands out to me is the doll you decided to include. I think society is focused more on women and the stereotypes and dominant narratives they have set on us. The fact that you chose to include a doll in your shadowbox is a smart way to show your assigned sex and being a sister. I look forward to seeing your next post in the process of showing who you are.
  • Imelda's Oct 10, 18:22 comment on My Shadow Box By: Ingrid Ramirez
    Dear Ingrid, Your artist statement is so clear. Your shadow box is so colorful. You explained in detail what you included in your box. I like the quote you chose. I also like what you said about the quote that one day everything will pay off. Overall your artist statement goes well with your box! I really liked it! Sincerely, Imelda
  • Abigail's Oct 10, 18:02 comment on Anyone can have a Learning Disability around you
    Your post was very touching. I grew up with a cousin who had autism, and it was hard at times. But once I learned to accept her as she was, everything changed. Your understanding and caring for your brother and those you tutor were evident in your writing. Your strong connection will allow others to understand the importance of understanding and accepting people different from ourselves.
  • Kimberly's Oct 10, 17:34 comment on The Truth about Me
    Dear Victor, One sentence that you wrote that stands for me is “ Soccer is very important to me because All my life I been playing soccer is like a second nature for me I love playing soccer.” I think this is is awesome because I can see that you really love soccer if you capitalize All and state “All my life.” I hope you follow your dreams to be a soccer player and don't give up on it! 😀
  • Kenya's Oct 10, 17:34 comment on Marleni Regalado – Shadow Box
    Dear Marleni, I am very happy for you because your box came out very beautiful and detailed! Your box really stood out to me because its very colorful and its shows so much about you. For example the Salvadorian Flag that clearly shows a part of your culture and it extremely beautiful. Good Job on you shadow box! Thank you! Kenya Sanchez
  • Christy's Oct 10, 17:34 comment on Valerie’s Shadow Box
    Dear Valerie, Your shadow box is really beutiful and unique. One sentece you wrote that stands out for me is "I see myself as a proud Mexican female who stands up for others by using my words as my weapons." I really like this quote because it expresses how you are a proud Mexican female and that you aren't what people say you are. Another quote I really like is,"We have the same strength as any other gender and aren’t different just because we have different body parts." I really like this quote because now that we have a sexist president he says really nasty things about women. Overall, thank you for posting this Sincerely, Christy
  • Jose's Oct 10, 17:33 comment on Finding myself
    Dear, Christina I like your shadow box because it shows on your little essay that you like nature, and exploring the world. And I can see that you have a dream school and that is a goal you would like to meet some day for you can be a zoologist or vetnerania.
  • Anthony's Oct 10, 17:32 comment on False Reality of Dominant Narratives
    Dear,Kelly i really liked your shadowbox and all the characteristic about it I also liked how you represent girl power and the counter narratives to it but you show the opposite of them which is really amazing and empowering another thing that really stood out for me was the 3 flags that you show pride in all of them but i'm guessing you like mexican pride the most since its the biggest.overall youre shadow box is really good!sincerely, Anthony
  • Janie's Oct 10, 17:32 comment on Ashley’s Shadow Box
    Dear Ashley I am proud of your work because it looks like you added in a lot of detail in your box that means alot to you. One sentence you wrote that's stood out for me is “For example, outside my box there’s popsicle sticks around the box. This identifies the border that Donald Trump is building. On top of the border, there’s a gun meaning that Mexicans are drug dealers and in gangs. Just because my race is being Mexican doesn’t mean I commit crimes and disobey the law” so this stood out to me I can agree with it many people assume people of colors just commit crime and are bad. Also how you said that Trump is keeping us in border and is oppressing us shows internalized oppression or ideological oppression because there oppressing a certain group. Sincerely Janie Otero
  • Celeste's Oct 10, 17:32 comment on Shadow Box
    I’m very impressed by your post, “Shadow Box” because the way you explain your dominant and counter narratives is very vivid and it really speaks to me because I can really relate to the part that you wrote about people assuming that just because you’re latina you’re Mexican, it’s honestly super annoying and I understand how it feels. I also put some baby pictures of me when I was younger and pictures of my family and I because I wanted to show my viewers that I have a family to make proud and a family that supports me so why would I be going out and making trouble for them. One sentence that stood out to me was: “My dominant narratives I put pictures of models because society really use to tell me to have a model looking body”. I think this is very powerful because I understand how it feels to have to look like what society says is right and have to stand up to what society says is beautiful. And you putting models on your dominant narrative side of the shadow box is amazing because it shows that, that is what society thinks is beautiful but then your counter narrative comes in and shows society that you are beautiful just the way you are no matter what they have to say. Thanks for your writing, I look forward to see what you write next because I think it’s very inspiring.
  • Wendy's Oct 10, 17:31 comment on My Shadow Box By: Ingrid Ramirez
    Dear Ingrid, You shadow box is really nice and it clearly demonstrates who you are as a person because of the items you chose to include. I really like that you chose to represent yourself as a butterfly the way you said they have to open up and let their true self be shown that really gave me an idea of who you are as a person. Something that stood out to me from your box was that you added a lot of color because is something I did different with my shadow box. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because your writing is interesting and besides that you show your true self and you are a proud writer which inspires me with my own projects. Thank Wendy Perez Govea
  • Edwin's Oct 10, 17:30 comment on Diego’s True self
    Dear Diego I like how you add a model of a Nintendo Switch and a Fire powered Mario toy to show that you are a big fan of nintendo and its games and you are a very big nerd of nintendo for god's sake. But I like how you add the american flag to show your nationality but why didn't you put a mexican flag for your ethnicity and race? Also I like how put the pokemon field and logo. Thank You for your time. Edwin M
  • Tania's Oct 10, 17:30 comment on Juan’s Shadow Box
    Dear Juan, I like your artist statement a lot because you put in very detail what you have in your box. Also what you said about the color red, I agree that it’s not just a “gang color” it can be more than that. One sentence that you wrote that stood out to me was that people make assumptions just because your Mexican. That your not gonna graduate and that your just gonna drop out of school, but no we as Mexicans want a good life to pass and go to college like you explained. Your artist statement reminds me of something that happened to me. One time my dad had told me to not get red shoes because its gang color, but it’s not just that like you explain. It’s just a normal color. Thank you for writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because you have such an amazing perspective and I like the way you think.
  • Calvin's Oct 10, 17:27 comment on My shadow box
    Dear Jai'kari, your shadowbox interests me. One sentence you wrote that stands out for me was when you wrote that you're not really athletic but that doesn't make you less of a man. It stands out to me because it's true that you don't have to be athletic to be a man. I agree with it a lot.
  • Adrian's Oct 10, 17:26 comment on My shadow box
    Dear Oswaldo One part of your shadow box that really stood out to me was the picture of your father. The picture of your father really shows that you love your family. I also agree with the family love, another thing that stood out for me was your soccer field that shows that you enjoy sports and especially soccer.Nice job on your shadow box !
  • Anthony's Oct 10, 17:24 comment on Shadowbox
    Dear,Jose I really like your shadow box and how you represent your own culture and how you go against your counter narrative of people assuming every brown skin is mexican but we have are own cultures.another thing that you did that really amazed me was although you're from guatemala you still show mexican pride!Overall your shadow box really show you,sincerely, anthony
  • Leslie's Oct 10, 17:23 comment on Jocelyn’s Shadow Box
    Dear Jocelyn, I am impressed by your piece of writing “Jocelyn’s Shadow Box” because your words were powerful and you talked about a topic that is very important and sensitive sometimes. One sentence you wrote that stood out to me was “you have to be a woman of the house when in reality us women are able to many things as man.” I think this is a stereotype that many women face and stay silent about it but you were able to address this stereotype.
  • Edwin's Oct 10, 17:22 comment on My shadow box
    Dear Yasmin, I did add a picture of my cat. It just very blurry to see but its on the left with my family pictures. But thank you for you positive feedback on my shadow box and hope you have a great day. Bye! Edwin
  • Beatriz's Oct 10, 16:27 comment on Box of liberation
    Dear Diego, I am amazed by how your shadow box looks like because it really shows who you are as a person. One part of your shadow box that stands out to me is the images you have because they all have different meanings. I also like how so of them you drew so it tells me you are someone who likes to draw a lot and that it may be your hobby you do. Thank you for your shadow box/art and I look forward to seeing the new things you will create. Sincerely, Beatriz
  • James's Oct 10, 16:27 comment on How bad is teen depression?
    Jean Carlos, Thank you for taking the time to tackle such a pressing, yet seldom talked about issue. Even since when I was born I feel that I have seen an increase in depression among many people our age, and its a problem with few answers. Where I am in Utah the depression rate is far higher than the national average and this is actually attributed to the higher elevation and less oxygen in the air, which is interesting. Your ideas on cultural effects such as unrealistic expectations are interesting and something that we can change. Thanks for your input and I hope you expand on your ideas in this article.
  • yasmin's Oct 10, 16:27 comment on My shadow box
    Dear Edwin I really liked how you explained some of the main things that are important to your life. For example being a oaklander, latino, fan of sports, and the oldest son. I liked how you explained some of the stereotypes people think of you. Like how people think that you or latinos are criminals and drug dealers which is the dominant narrative. And your side was that you don’t follow these stereotypes because they aren’t true. I also have a question why didn't you add cats because don’t you love cats so much? -Yasmin
  • America's Oct 10, 16:26 comment on This is me
    Dear kalani I love how even you are a sister, a daughter and so many other stuff you really work hard for your education. I really like how you don't pay attention to dominant narrative and you keep doing you. Keep up with the hard work you have done and don't let negative things put you down.
  • Irvin's Oct 10, 16:26 comment on Imelda’s Life
    Dear Imelda, I really like your shadow box and your artist statement. Your artist statement has a lot of good details and see that you like photography I also like photography and want to study it when I got to college. I enjoyed reading your artist statement and seeing your shadow box.
  • Victor's Oct 10, 16:25 comment on My shadow box
    One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is when you said that in the future you wanted to make your music one day. This stands out because I didn't know you wanted to make your own music that is very cool. If you could make your own music what would it be?
  • Diego's Oct 10, 16:22 comment on Identity Of I
    Dear Jadyn, I am amazed with the work on your box. I think that your work really reflects on what you did. I like how there's a lot of images and color. I think that the inside of your box really shows who you are. I think that your box really represents and lets people see what you believe and who you are. Keep up the good work. Sincerely your advice Diego
  • Lupita's Oct 10, 16:20 comment on Kassandra’s Shadow Box
    Dear Kassandra. I am mesmerized by your eye catching shadow box. I love how you connected the outside quote “Eat Pretty” to your inside quote “EAT LIKE A GROWN UP”. This shows how you can find a counter narrative for every dominant narrative out in the world and prove those dominant narratives as simply a stereotype that doesn’t need to be true. Your cut out pieces of magazines are my favorite part of your shadow box because you took parts of things that look at daily at made it represent you and your beliefs. Your shadow truly represents what all women should see themselves as on a daily basis and it really warmed my heart to see those things on your shadow box. Thank you for writing about your powerful perspective on your life. Keep writing because it will bring a powerful life changing perspective to our world. Sincerely, Lupita Morales-Cordova=)
  • America's Oct 10, 16:20 comment on SHADOW BOX
    Dear jennifer I love how shadow boxes are very special to you and it help you prove proof people wrong.Also, I like how you have thing inside your box from people that empire you. I also, like shadow boxes like you do for similar reasons. - America Diaz
  • Teresa's Oct 10, 16:20 comment on My shadow box
    Dear Oswaldo, One part of your shadow box that stands out for me is the soccer field that you put in your box. I felt like how the field shows how you like to play sports and be active. This stood out to me because I also am a very active person and really like all types of sports. Also, the images of the car show that you enjoy cars and that they represent you. Thank you for your writing and creating this shadow box.
  • James's Oct 10, 16:19 comment on Soccer is Life!
    Natalia, This sounds like a gripping book and I like how you stated your point about being able to appreciate the challenge and skill in the sport without personal experience. Being able to appreciate the passions of others without having the experiences of them, is a valuable life skill and is a respectable trait. I'm glad you enjoyed the book and hopefully now have a better grasp on why to some, soccer is life!
  • yasmin's Oct 10, 16:19 comment on Maria’s Shadow box “Quien soy yo”
    Dear Maria I really like your shadow box it was very creative. It has lots of amazing objects that represent you as a person . For example that you really like hanging out with your friends which I can tell because you have pictures of them. But mainly I learn that some of the things that are important to you is your ethnicity, nationality and race. I also think its brave of you talking about your parents because not many people would and how you talked about some stereotypes. Thank you for your amazing shadow box I learned a lot of interesting things about you. -Yasmin
  • Diego's Oct 10, 16:17 comment on shadow box artist statement by Daniel rodriguez
    Dear Daniel, I am pleased to see your shadow box because it looks great. The boxe’s color looks great and what is inside is just awesome. I like how you put those characters of dragon ball in the box, i personally like dragon ball so it’s nice to see someone is putting some dragon ball on theirs. I think that this shadow box is great and that you should keep on with the good work. Sincerely a good buddy Diego
  • James's Oct 10, 16:14 comment on Free Thinking America
    Jack, This is a very well written out paragraph that addresses many interesting ideas, but I like the main theme of freedom of speech that you present. Americans can tend to be very polarized on different ideas, but in general I agree with what you're saying that the only thing we agree on is to disagree. There's no problem with this as long as we remember the one thing that we do have in common, that we are all Americans and this doesn't change when you disagree. Thanks for your input I hope to hear more from you on this and other politically oriented ideas.
  • Clara's Oct 10, 16:10 comment on Soccer is Life!
    Natalia, the book you are reading sounds compelling! I enjoyed how even though you don't personally play soccer, you found a way to relate the book to your observations. Soccer does seem boring from the outside but even in my brief experiences I realize just how challenging it is. I am excited to hear about the rest of your book and maybe the text will incorporate some more things you can relate to, even if it isn't directly about soccer.
  • James's Oct 10, 16:06 comment on My Shadow Box by Bryan Moreno
    Bryan, I really like your shadow box! I too play soccer and know how it is a big part of your life. I like the medal and other soccer related items but I also really like the quote you added in the bottom corner about persevering through difficult life situations. The attitude of instead of "Why me" but "Try me" is smart and I will remember that next time life throws me a curve ball. Thanks for your input and good luck to Barca in Champions league!
  • Clara's Oct 10, 16:04 comment on Free Thinking America
    This is a well thought out post about the values we seem to share as a nation despite our many disagreements. I agree with you that something we can all agree on is our free speech. Even if we cannot find things in everyday discussion that we agree with, we all can realize that everyone has their own opinion and that is something we value as an American. Your closing sentence, "Free speech and free thought cause new ideas and cultures to flourish and society to progress.", is powerful and I think if everyone realized this, there would turn out to be harmony, even if it agreeing to disagree.
  • Clara's Oct 10, 15:58 comment on Kassandra’s Shadow Box
    Kassandra, I relate to your stereotypes presented about being a woman. I too feel like there is unnecessary pressure to conform when I can just do what I want. It is admirable how much you shared about yourself and I applaud you for being so vulnerable! By sharing your stereotypes that you feel, I feel more comfortable with myself. It is awesome how we feel the same things sometimes yet we are different in a lot of ways too!
  • James's Oct 10, 15:57 comment on Does everything happen for a reason?
    David, These ideas are extremely thought provoking, Its one of those things you think about at night and it keeps you up. I liked your ideas and writing more than just surface level ideas. Obviously everyone is gonna have different outlooks on why they are here in this time, your ideas on predetermination were also interesting. I hope to hear more from you and hopefully you expand further on these ideas.
  • Lindsey's Oct 10, 15:32 comment on Lipstick
    I love how open your are about your story. When you say "I compare my life with the life of the immigrants in my community because we are here to work for a better future to give our kids what we did not have" it brings up an important conversation of how necessary immigrants are to America. Immigrants deserve equal opportunities as everyone else in the U.S. and shouldn't have to work extra hard fr an equal lifestyle. Unfortunately, privilege will always exist, but it is crucial that change is made and immigrants like you are starting that change.
  • Anna's Oct 10, 15:21 comment on How bad is teen depression?
    Jean Carlos, thank you for sharing your opinions on teenage depression. I found your research extremely easy to relate to because myself and many of my friends deal with depression as well. The symptoms you listed impact many lives and it is very important to know when medication is needed. Here is a source for further information https://www.webmd.com/depression/default.htm . Thank you for sharing! -Anna
  • Abigail's Oct 10, 15:20 comment on Soccer is Life!
    Natalia, I have never had any interest in soccer, so I do not appreciate it fully. The amount of skill, hard work, and effort it takes to play on a competitive team is extraordinary. It is a sport that attracts people of all ages. But I have to agree it is not for everyone.
  • Lindsey's Oct 10, 15:18 comment on Soccer is Life!
    Great job applying what you read to your life and people around you. It is interesting that you don't play soccer yourself, but notice how it positively impacts others. Is there something like this in your life (art, another sport, music, etc.) that gives you joy and challenges you in a positive way? It would interesting to hear about that! Overall great work!
  • Emma's Oct 10, 15:11 comment on Bravery
    Thank you so much for sharing your story. It seems like you have a passion for helping others and giving of yourself. You also seem to appreciate every aspect of your life, which is impressive for someone at such a young age. You are also a fantastic story teller- I was intrigued as I read about your life. You have inspired me to take a closer look at my background and appreciate what makes me who I am. Thank you again! I look forward to reading what you write next.
  • Lindsey's Oct 10, 15:11 comment on Values are Changing
    This argument is extremely well-worded. I love the many different approaches to what it means to be American that you cover in this post. Your quote "we have so much freedom in America but we don’t give everyone the same opportunities just because we don’t all look the same" is very true. People are treated unfairly based on religion, race, and gender, something that is against American ideals of equality and freedom. We often praise our country for being a hub of liberty, but discrimination is still prevalent and needs to be addressed. I love that you end your paragraph with questions to keep the reader thinking. Awesome work!
  • Abigail's Oct 10, 15:11 comment on The American Dream
    Andre, you have the choice to do and be what you want in life. America is known as the land of the free. But it is up to you to decide what that freedom means. You make a compelling argument, but maybe in the future, you might try to define what it is to be free. I have found in life freedom constitutes many things to different people. Don't let anyone else tell you how to be free. Live your dream.
  • Anna's Oct 10, 15:10 comment on Soccer is Life!
    Natalia, I strongly encourage you to play soccer! I played for 8 years and it was a blast! Though it may not come easily at first, practicing will pay off. I related to when you discussed your amazement with soccer players skills. So many players are so incredibly talented and I love to see the cool tricks they can do. If you are considering playing soccer here is a link to some rules of soccer http://www.rulesofsport.com/sports/football.html . Thanks for your input! -Anna
  • Branigan's Oct 10, 15:06 comment on Soccer is Life!
    This is a very interesting piece of writing Natalia. I don't personally play or watch soccer, but I can definitely see the appeal. I like how you connect this story to the bigger idea of perseverance. I hope to read more of your writing.
  • Emma's Oct 10, 15:05 comment on Everything in its time
    Sofia, thank you for sharing your stories and discussing this book. I thought you did a fantastic job of making connections to fully analyze your reading. Because I haven't personally read this book, it was helpful to hear a more relatable story from your life to understand it better. Thank you again!
  • Abby's Oct 10, 15:05 comment on My Hispanic Block
    Your story about your upbringing is very unique. I really like how you capitalize on your diversity and how your experiences have shaped you as a person. However, I would suggest transition between the second and the third paragraph, because I was unclear about how it connects to the rest of your story. I think you should also go into more detail regarding your hopes and dreams for the future.
  • Anthony's Oct 10, 15:05 comment on Everything in its time
    I like this post Sofia, I think we all have times when we need to choose between one thing or another. Its important that we slow down and think about each option before choosing one.
  • Anna's Oct 10, 15:04 comment on Discovering A New Views On American Culture
    Sloane, thank you for informing me more about American culture. I strongly agree that America is a "melting pot" because every culture and their unique ideals makes up a integral part of who we are and our values as a society. America is diverse, and it thrives through our differences. A source you may want to look into for more information is https://www.bloomberg.com/view/articles/2018-09-13/diversity-is-an-american-strength-not-weakness . They discuss in more detail how America thrives because of its "melting pot" ideal. What values do you think make America function through our differences? If you write anything else similar to this I would love to read it! -Anna
  • Chris's Oct 10, 15:03 comment on My Life
    I think it is cool that you are willing to tell us about yourself. I agree with you that you shouldn't have gotten kicked out of your school, and some similar things have happened at my school.
  • Abigail's Oct 10, 15:02 comment on My Shadow Box By: Ingrid Ramirez
    Ingrid, what a beautiful box! Your metaphor of the butterfly was a very creative way of representing your hidden personality. Your pride in Guatemala was also touching. It is important to be proud of where you came from because it will always be part of who you are. I too spent a significant time of my life growing up outside of the country, and it has shaped who I am today. Ending your post with a quote was a very effective conclusion. Thank you for sharing such personal information.
  • Lindsey's Oct 10, 15:02 comment on My Shadow Box By: Ingrid Ramirez
    I love the symbolism in this project. The addition of the butterflies to represent your true self opening up is beautiful. It is also refreshing to read about how much you love your culture. Finally, the stereotypes on the outside of the box are very correct and applicable to women everywhere. It makes you story relatable. Thank you for sharing your personality and traits with us. I hope the quote “difficult roads often lead to beautiful destinations” is true for you and all women who have faced unfair stereotypes.
  • Penelope's Oct 10, 15:02 comment on Bravery
    This was very interesting to read. I love how you went in depth about your life and how it affects you. I love your dreams of being a cop and helping someone. I think it's a wonderful idea. You are very brave and I love your writing. You should always be proud of who you are.
  • Matt's Oct 10, 15:01 comment on Will I Ever Open Up ?
    I can relate to what you said because I also find it hard to open up to others. But I think that once you do others will be accepting and helpful.
  • Emma's Oct 10, 15:01 comment on Discovering A New Views On American Culture
    Sloane, this was a fantastic evaluation of what makes our country so special. Especially in the heat of political dispute, it's important to remember the beauty of our nation. The United States is a beautiful place for cultures to mix and join in similar values. I liked how you used the term "melting pot" because it perfectly describes what we are. You did a great job of using examples and definitions to express your ideas. I too appreciate the diversity of the US and how it can shape us as individuals. Thank you for sharing your thoughts!
  • Abby's Oct 10, 14:59 comment on Soccer is Life!
    I don't play soccer either, but every time I watch soccer I am amazed by the amount of skill it takes to merely participate in the game. I liked how you mentioned the simplicity of soccer but also capitalized on how complex it is. Here is an article about the physical benefits of soccer. https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2010/04/100406093524.htm
  • Mack's Oct 10, 14:59 comment on The American Dream
    Andre, just keep your head straight and focus on what you want to be in life. You can be whoever you want, you just have to work for it. Keep your head high and avoid all the people that are trying to bring you down.
  • Branigan's Oct 10, 14:57 comment on Anyone can have a Learning Disability around you
    This a really interesting piece of writing. Your ideas are really interesting, and your empathy shines through your writing. I have interacted with people that have disabilities at my school, and I always try to be as kind as possible. Your writing will allow me to have greater empathy for these people.
  • Penelope's Oct 10, 14:57 comment on Everything in its time
    I love all of these connections. The stories are very interesting and left me intrigued. Everything happens in it's own time and sometimes things don't work out. You need to pace yourself out in life and know when to do certain things, and I think you described it all very well.
  • Anthony's Oct 10, 14:57 comment on Identity Of I
    I like your description of your strong connection with your family and God, Jadyn. I feel like some people seem to disconnect with there parents and God in high school and college, so its great that you're very close to them.
  • Matt's Oct 10, 14:57 comment on My shadow box
    Edwin, I appreciate how you are proud of where you are from regardless of negative stereotypes that people have about your city. I think that is great to be yourself and not worry about what people stereotype you as.
  • Chris's Oct 10, 14:55 comment on Mi familia es muy diferente
    Muy interesante. Creo que es impresionante que hayas incorporado aspectos de un libro a tu vida. Sigan con el buen trabajo.
  • Abby's Oct 10, 14:53 comment on Free Thinking America
    Thank you for providing such valuable insight on what you value in America. I agree that our free speech, press, and religion are the most valuable rights that, we as Americans, are granted. Our diverse opinions and backgrounds are a large factor as to why our country is organized in the way that it is. Here is a link that you might like, https://fee.org/articles/three-reasons-free-speech-matters/
  • Anthony's Oct 10, 14:52 comment on Free Thinking America
    I agree with your description of America's freedom. We as a culture are very rich with differing viewpoints, which allows us to get input from every side of the political spectrum. This is what makes us really free.
  • Anna's Oct 10, 14:52 comment on Lupita´s Shadow Box
    Lupita, thank you for giving me insight into your life. I found it so inspiring how you were able to recognize the difference between who you truly are and who other expect you to be (narratives and counter narratives as you called them). I really related to some of the stereotypical ideals you pointed out that people have against women. For example when you said, "... all females love the color pink, women can be persuaded by diamonds, and that all women must wear dresses to look beautiful for all the men in the world," it made me realize how important it is to define yourself. I also related to how you show pride in your heritage. I am Greek and Lebanese and I also have equal pride in both. Thanks for sharing! -Anna
  • Clara's Oct 10, 14:52 comment on Capital Punishment. Moral or Not?
    Patryk, Your opinion is presented clearly and I can see you oppose the death penalty. Your reasoning is clear and precise. The statistics mentioned give a thorough understanding in the second part. But in order to form a well rounded argument, you should elaborate more on the side supporting the death penalty. You may want to check out this article to see some of the reasons people may support the death penalty, besides a lowered crime rate. https://deathpenalty.procon.org/
  • Penelope's Oct 10, 14:52 comment on Values are Changing
    I love what you talked about in this. I definetly agree with our American ideals shifting from freedom to money and more physical things. You used very accurate sources to back yourself up and you knew exactly what you were talking about. We need to start showing our pride and independence. I love how strong this is.
  • Lindsey's Oct 10, 14:52 comment on Opioid Crisis
    I love how you address the "leaders of America" in order to imply that change must be made. You have some interesting facts, but listing statistics could make you argument more convincing. Another way to make your writing more compelling would be by including how the opioid crisis has affected you personally. If it hasn't had a direct impact on you, how might it affect you or you children in the future? Here is a link that may help with some statistics: https://www.hhs.gov/opioids/about-the-epidemic/index.html Overall, this post is very well written and has lots of persuasive points. Great work in bringing attention to this issue!
  • Sean's Oct 10, 14:51 comment on False Reality of Dominant Narratives
    I personally really enjoyed hearing about your family being Salvadoran. I definitely know that I do not always connect Latina or Latino with being from a state other than Mexico. I often attempt to keep an open mind when I hear the term Latino or Latina because I was never really sure what it meant until recently. I would like to hear more about experiences that you have had concerning being Latina and Salvadoran. I found you story to be interesting and powerful. I now that I have heard the stereotype that the oldest often has the strictest set of rules, but you seem to be taking those rules and standards and raising the bar even higher. That is hard thing to do as a high schooler and also struggling with people thinking you are one person but really you are another.
  • Skye's Oct 10, 14:51 comment on My Shadow Box By: Ingrid Ramirez
    The shadow box itself is so beautiful and unique. I appreciate how you included stereotypes in your box, such as the expectation for girls to be traditionally pretty, but also symbols and objects that are true to who you are. The metaphor of the butterfly coming out of its chrysalis was something I really related to while reading this. Your description and love of your culture is incredible, thank you for sharing that. The theme of colors and joy permeated your whole description.
  • Emma's Oct 10, 14:51 comment on Kassandra’s Shadow Box
    Kassandra, thank you for sharing so much about yourself. The way you examined stereotypes and who you are at your core was admirable. The modern world holds us to high standards, and it's often difficult to push past them and realize our individual worth. If you continue to focus on the good in yourself rather than the unreachable standards of society, you'll find ultimate happiness. Thank you again!
  • Chris's Oct 10, 14:50 comment on Is America free?
    I agree with you that America was based of the idea of freedom, and there is no doubt that freedom plays a huge role in the foundation of America, however I think that to answer your question we have to look at how the policies in the constitution are being applied in the country today. Although the country is based on freedom, many of the policies we believe give us freedom are executed in ways that restrict our freedom, which, like you said, creates a lot of debate.
  • Branigan's Oct 10, 14:49 comment on Is America free?
    Thank you for your input Bella. I found your take on this issue to be very well-rounded and complete. I agree that the foundation of America is based on freedom. Would you say that freedom is something that is currently achievable for all?
  • Matt's Oct 10, 14:48 comment on Is America free?
    I also think that people should be free to say what they want. I think that freedom of speech is one of the most important American values. It is important for people to share their thoughts on politics and issues.
  • Abigail's Oct 10, 14:47 comment on Opioid Crisis
    Anjela, you bring up a critical issue in today's world. The opioid crisis is raging around us, yet it feels as if nothing is being done. Throughout your post, you make good points on why this crisis is hurting the nation and its people. Your solutions to such problems also exhibit a deep understanding of the issue. And though you make a compelling argument, statistics or stories on the effects of opioids might add more weight to your case. The National Institute of Drug Abuse is a reliable source for such topics.
  • Anthony's Oct 10, 14:45 comment on Lipstick
    I agree with you Jenniffer, I believe uniqueness is important for each person to have. Our differences are what make each of us ourselves. Its important that we don't try to fill anyone else's shoes and live the way we want.
  • Penelope's Oct 10, 14:44 comment on Kassandra’s Shadow Box
    I really love this project! You did very well on this. Stereotypes are pushed on us in the worst ways. As a woman, I understand the ones with the "perfect body" and a "slim waist". I've always struggled with my self image due to the way society portrays us. You were very brave to share that information with us. I love seeing that you are completely different than how people see you. Love this!
  • Sean's Oct 10, 14:43 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Your description of a general form of anxiety was well worded and obviously something you feel strongly about. When you said, "Is it really and illness to worry?" I began wondering what the difference is between anxiety as a disorder and anxiety at a normal level. What I have learned through some brief research, is that anxiety is part of the "flight or fight" response that the human body naturally has. A good example of this on an everyday basis is giving a speech in front of 100 people. In that case, people often use more of the "fight" response and give the speech the best they can. The "flight" response is often when someone believes that there is something to fear and that they need to get out of that particular situation. Those are both a "normal" sense of anxiety. Anxiety as an illness or mental disability,is similar to depression. The reason why anxiety is often diagnosed with depression is because depression is a chemical imbalance within the brain. Anxiety is experiencing extreme fear or worry. Anxiety acts in a similar way as OCD does. It is an overwhelming amount of emotion for a certain feeling, and for anxiety that often means extreme senses of fear. It is also normal for everyone to experience and anxiety attack at least once in their lives. It is a natural response the body has to situations or past situations, but to have an anxiety order, is to have a constant fear of something. You clearly mention that you often feel that way when you said, "I can not go to a grocery store without hearing everything that is said and seeing every detail. I can not be in a crowd without feeling there is about to be shootout at any second." Here is a link I found while thinking about this topic, https://adaa.org/understanding-anxiety .
  • Abby's Oct 10, 14:43 comment on Hello stranger! THIS IS ME!
    Reading this post about you was really eye opening. It allowed me to realize that people aren't what they seem on the outside. When you said, "I don’t reach for the stars i reach for the sky" did you mean that you don't feel that you have the ability to go above and beyond or did you mean something else? Overall, your piece was really enjoyable and I loved the images that accompanied it.
  • Branigan's Oct 10, 14:42 comment on Evelin’s Shadow box
    Thank you for sharing Evelin. I completely agree with the idea that there are many false stereotypes that are running rampant in today's political climate. I wonder what you have planned for your future, and how you plan to achieve your goals?
  • Matt's Oct 10, 14:42 comment on Soccer is Life!
    I don’t play or watch soccer, but I can imagine it being hard. I think that every sport has its own difficulties. Here is an article that makes a case for every sport being difficult: https://www.coloradoan.com/story/sports/high-school-sports/2013/09/23/whats-the-hardest-high-school-sport-its-complicated/28936167/
  • Chris's Oct 10, 14:40 comment on Identity Of I
    Very interesting. I think it is very interesting that you have a strong relationship with God. I think most people in highschool are disconnected from religion, so it's cool that you are involved.
  • Mack's Oct 10, 14:40 comment on My Personal Shadow Box
    Joseph, I hope all is well and hope things are getting better. All you can is push through and just succeed. You will always have people wishing for you to fail, but instead of reacting negatively, just block them out and continue to be the person that you want to be.
  • Penelope's Oct 10, 14:40 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    I'm really proud of you for sharing something so venerable with the world. Anxiety is hard to speak up about and I think you did so really well. I love how you described how you felt as "feeling a nervous ball at the pit of your stomach". It's really easy to imagine for some people who might not experience the same thing you do. Overall, this was really well written and I'm glad you shared this with us!
  • Emma's Oct 10, 14:39 comment on Where will I be in the future?
    Natalie, thank you for sharing your story and concerns. I am so impressed that you can handle a baby at such a young age. I am also seventeen and am in my senior year of high school. Having your whole future ahead of you is daunting- It's scary to not know what will come after this chapter of our lives. Your story reminded me the movie "Lady Bird," which is a coming-of-age story about a girl figuring out what will come after high school. I wish you the best of luck in your business, raising your family, and in all that you encounter in the future!
  • Anna's Oct 10, 14:39 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Tori, thank you for sharing your story. You brought up a topic that needs to be more widely discussed. I found your story incredibly easy to connect to because I have experienced similar things. A site that may help is https://www.webmd.com/anxiety-panic/features/coping-with-anxiety#1 . They help deal with anxiety. When you said, "I was told at 13 I have anxiety due to a traumatic event I went through at age 10," it made me agree with the idea that understanding where your anxiety is coming from can be extremely helpful when comes to treating anxiety. Thank you for your insight! -Anna
  • Branigan's Oct 10, 14:38 comment on Where will I be in the future?
    Thank you for sharing your story Natalie. It is really impressive how you have taken ahold of your life. I also want my own business. I wonder what kind of business you are interested in starting?
  • Abby's Oct 10, 14:36 comment on Opioid Crisis
    When you mention, "We as a nation should work to remove the stigma of addiction so people are less scared to get help" is a very powerful idea and it adds a more personal tone to your argument as a whole. How would you suggest that we, as a society work to remove this stigma and how much of an impact do you think this would have on the epidemic as a whole. Try and add some statistics or numerical data to help support your argument, here is a link that might help. https://www.drugabuse.gov/related-topics/trends-statistics/overdose-death-rates
  • Skye's Oct 10, 14:36 comment on Opioid Crisis
    I like how you called on "we as a nation" to end stigma surrounding addiction. No one talks about the risks of attending rehab, but it is true that we should have laws protecting those who reach out for help. I also appreciate how you gave an overview of some of the causes of opioid addiction, as well as sources from which be obtain these drugs.
  • Matt's Oct 10, 14:35 comment on What’s happening now
    I liked when you said “people don’t pay attention to things that are happening in society they try to be blind and pretend like nothing happens.” I feel like that was one of the main messages in the music video. I think that people need to be more aware of other’s problems instead of just their own.
  • Anthony's Oct 10, 14:33 comment on Where will I be in the future?
    Interesting story Natalie, I am seventeen as well and that's amazing that you can support a child at this age, what are you striving to do in your business?
  • Mack's Oct 10, 14:32 comment on Does everything happen for a reason?
    David I love these questions for many reasons. First I like that these questions make you think outside of the box and it made me think why we say this. When you find more evidence on why we say this in our society, I love to know.
  • Noah's Oct 10, 14:18 comment on Values are Changing
    I agree with you Kelsey, especially about the part about moving up in society some people just have it easier because of their background so really not everyone is truly getting that fair option. some people just have to work harder than others. We should feel lucky to have the freedom and independence to d what we need to do in this society.
  • Michelle's Oct 10, 14:18 comment on Is America free?
    Hi Bella, I agree that diversity is what makes America unique, and that people are free to disagree. I think it's great that people are standing up for what they believe in, but why do you think more people have been using their voices now then a few years ago? Overall, I really liked your point of how freedom is part of American belief.
  • Vibha's Oct 10, 14:17 comment on Values are Changing
    Hi Kelsey, I definitely agree with your argument, and I especially liked your first paragraph. When you said, "We tend to focus on ourselves more than on others or on society as a whole", you made an extremely valid point. Often times in America, we find that when dealing with important issues we put ourselves in the other person's shoes, but base our opinion on how it affects us, not others. Also, I liked how you asked questions instead of making statements in your third paragraph, which made your ending really strong. -Vibha
  • Husnain's Oct 10, 14:17 comment on AmeRIcaN vAluEs
    nice
  • Christian's Oct 10, 14:16 comment on Discovering A New Views On American Culture
    I definitely agree with you about the fact that there are many definitions of American values, but there still are some that are commonly held by all Americans. For example, working hard, being independent, and the founding principles are all values we hold.
  • Matthew's Oct 10, 14:16 comment on What does it mean to be an American?
    Christian, I really enjoyed reading your piece. In particular, I liked how you cite the constitution numerous times throughout your writing. In America, the constitution is a set of principles that reflects our nation’s moral and values.
  • Rhea's Oct 10, 14:13 comment on The Love Of Liberty
    Dear Shreeya, I think that your use of evidence in this piece is very valuable to your topic. It gets right to the main topic of the passage and accurately shows the reader a representation of the American Values that you mention.
  • Rachel's Oct 10, 14:13 comment on What are American Values?
    I agree with you that the United States is a melting pot of many different cultures, that are brought by the immigrants that came to this country. I was surprised to find that there was a study guide for the test to become a citizen because does possessing the traits of a loyal citizen really come from how much you know about American history and it's government?
  • David's Oct 10, 14:11 comment on What does it mean to be an American?
    Hey Christian, I like how you cut right to the chase with the sources and used an abundance of evidence. However, in the future you may want to spend a little more time explaining your sources better and how they relate to the topic. I also thought your last sentence tied the whole piece together very well by directly relating back to the topic sentence.
  • Johnna's Oct 10, 14:11 comment on The Middle Ground of a Hot Issue
    Bailey, I agree with your point that the concept of American Creed is constantly changing and is very different than what it was in the past. Your piece is very well written and I really liked how you broke everything down while also making it very well organized. Good job.
  • Emilee Nussdorfer's Oct 10, 14:10 comment on Diversity and Strength in America
    Teo, I agree that many people take our freedoms in America for granted and we don't truly know any different. Us slightly educated people do know that immigrants aren't terrorist, rapists, or aren't just here to take our jobs. So many people in America do believe that they are and fear them. There is no reason to fear them and we will keep bringing them to the country.
  • Husnain's Oct 10, 14:09 comment on American values
    nice
  • Elijah's Oct 10, 13:30 comment on Black Lives Matter
    Dear Grady, My name is Elijah.W from Nelson Mandela School of Social Justice in Brooklyn. I appreciate and applaud you using your voice on the Black Lives Matter Movement even tho it is not really mentioned as much today. I read a comment from Ahmed explaining that your not African American and that stands out to me because it shows that there are good people out here and i respect you for believing in equality and racial change.Thank you for reading my comment and god bless. Elijah
  • Jalen's Oct 10, 13:24 comment on SHADOW BOX
    Dear Jennifer This is a very good source because it shows how the shade box is very useful .
  • Mckenzie's Oct 10, 13:20 comment on Why are racists racist?
    dear seth, i am interested on your post, what stands out to me is " the most obvious cause of prejudice is that it creates advantages and material benefits for those who are prejudice. Prejudice can provide an excuse or realization for economic exploitation or political domination" its interesting because everyone is different and also i didn't know there were different types of racism.
  • Kimani's Oct 10, 13:20 comment on Why are people racist?
    Dear Tania, I love the way how you explained why people are racist & how you used evidence and stated your sources. I indeed agree with you with the fact that the reason why people are racist is because we blame other people for our problems & we take our anger out on other people. We live in a society where we have to be more superior towards one another which causes racism among with prejudice discrimination.
  • Nathaniel's Oct 10, 13:17 comment on Why are people racist?
    Dear Tania I am moved by your article, “Why are People Racist?,” You had a strong argument and you went in depth.One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “.Racism can be revealed through people’s actions as well as their attitudes.Racism is more than just words, beliefs and actions.” I think this is strongly worded and put things into perspective.Your post reminds me when I was in england and i was in the predominantly white neighborhood and I had the cops called on me because I look like i didn't "belong". Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because post because you're a good writer and you really put certain elements into perspective.
  • MD's Oct 10, 13:14 comment on Is the Death Penalty Fair?
    Racial bias does play a huge role when it comes to death penalty of a white or none white person. Because in many cases the judge is in favor of the victim whether that the judge is black or white, almost in every case almost 90% of the time, judges are always trying to protect or are in favor of the victim.
  • Jack's Oct 10, 12:11 comment on Facing Our American Identity
    Lillian, It is very clear in this paper that you know did your research into the topic and found the key points that American Creed comes down to, which I find is very informative and easier to understand from the reader's perspective. What you mentioned about diversity echoes a lot of what I also mentioned in my paper, that diversity needs to be our strength in America. I liked how there was a clear point being made in each paragraph such as independence, unity and equality. This was very well written and formatted which made it great for learning more about American Creed.
  • Shreeya's Oct 10, 12:10 comment on Why Diversity is STILL an American Strength
    Hey Jack, I like that you started off by talking about how America is a very diverse country, and that even if diversity could be a good thing it can still have a negative impact on the country. In your last paragraph the connection you make to individual’s values and to the diversity of America and meeting in the middle really makes me think can someone accept another person's values or are we all so different that maybe that's another reason why diversity is not always a good thing?
  • Sydney's Oct 10, 12:09 comment on America’s Most Treasured Values
    Hi Leo, I liked your post. I liked that you said all Americans believe in something different and that their beliefs are "not set in stone."
  • Danny's Oct 10, 12:09 comment on What are the Core Values of America
    Kyle, I liked your post a lot. It was very convincing and did a good job of getting your point across. You used lots of different sources and I thought it was good the way you broke down ideals such as the american dream and related them to your argument. I like how not only did you have a lot of sources, but they were very diverse. Overall, I would say this is a well-written piece.
  • Lillian's Oct 10, 12:08 comment on Discovering A New Views On American Culture
    Hi Sloane, I completely agree with you that the United States is a melting pot because everyday in our towns, cities, and states we are forming different cultures, languages, and more that not only shape us, but also our surrounding society. Additionally on this topic, the American culture is just the mixture of a ton of different ones that make America contain diversity, equality, and freedom throughout the country. Our culture heavily depends on other people's standards, beliefs, heritage, and religion like you have said that creates a society where it does not matter. Overall in your passage I like your usage and examples of our different values that create a perspective of what being an American truly means to us as the people of the country. What values and beliefs do you think define America the best
  • Praneeth's Oct 10, 12:08 comment on America’s Most Important Values
    Hi tristan, I agree with your writing about American values. The Paragraph where you talk about independence is highly accurate, because in India there is not that big of a strive for independence like there is in America. In America the large majority wants to be independent and also the usual upbringing of kids are fashioned that way. I think kids are taught to be independent a younger age in America than in other countries.
  • Megan's Oct 10, 12:08 comment on The Middle Ground of a Hot Issue
    Bailey, this is very well written. I agree in the fact that American values differ to everybody. I loved how you narrowed down the answers to " What are America's values?" into subcategories.
  • Kyle's Oct 10, 12:03 comment on What does being an American mean?
    Hi Danny, your post was great! I really liked your usage of the declaration of independence. It's one of most impotent documents second only to the constitution. You brought up many good points during your passage, and the only thing I would of preferred is that you used more examples of the values that we as Americans hold dear.
  • Megan's Oct 10, 12:02 comment on Values are Changing
    Kelsey, I totally agree! The American Dream is to be successful, have a big house and have a good family. But shouldn't we be proud that we are living in America? We have freedoms that others not living in America could only dream of.
  • Mia's Oct 10, 12:02 comment on Facing Our American Identity
    Lillian, I agree with you that these values are important to us as Americans. Your usage of American documents to explore your ideas was a smart move and helps us all understand things more. I also like that you used quotations. You claim that the equality promised by the Declaration and other documents is unwavering and still provided to Americans today. Do you mean this in the sense of our separation from England or actual equality? Yes, we are still separated from England, but individual equality isn't granted equally a lot of times. We as Americans have come a long way, yes, but would you agree that we have a long way to go as well?
  • Andre's Oct 10, 12:00 comment on Values are Changing
    I like how your third paragraph asked us some questions to think about, and how you gave good facts on the first and second paragraphs.
  • Paulina's Oct 10, 12:00 comment on Values are Changing
    Kelsey, The ending to your piece is very strong. I like how you ended with questions to make the reader think about their own American values. I disagree when you said "We need to show that we believe in our values as well". I think as Americans we always show our values whether we want to or not. I agree with you in the aspect that people who have privileged backgrounds have an easier time "moving up the ladder" but I also think they still worked hard to get there. I also like your hook it made me want to keep reading Thanks, Paulina
  • Chandan's Oct 10, 11:59 comment on Immigration shapes America
    Cool post Eric, I like how you brought up statistics on immigration but I wish that you would have elaborated on the negatives of immigration. It would have been much better if you had talked about drug and crime rates before and after immigration as well as how the jobs of non-immigrants are affected. Overall good post.
  • Andre's Oct 10, 11:58 comment on Is The Idea of Freedom Still An American Value?
    I like how you gave us a lot of information about your piece and used in text citation.
  • Sam's Oct 10, 11:54 comment on American values
    I enjoyed that you talked about freedom and equality as I mentioned both of those topics in my paper.
  • Sajid ali's Oct 9, 20:38 comment on Technology limits Creativity
    According to my point of view technology has created our mind like a box. we can not think out of the box. Every thing in this universe have its positive and negative impacts. But excess of everything is bad. Our present generation is using technology (Laptop and cell phones ) without any purpose. They spend 90% of theit time on social media apps like Facebook ,Youtube, instragam .Technology is not a bad thing until its use dependency .
  • Natalia's Oct 9, 14:16 comment on Everything in its time
    Dear Sofia, I was intrigued by your post, "Everything in its time" because you write about an important central idea. One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is "In this story a couple that was happy, they wanted everything and they were given the opportunity of opting it but they did not think well and they lost it again and they stayed like at the beginning" because it is so ironic that they could have had such different lives, but they ended up in the exact same situation. I agree that this speaks to the idea of not being able to have everything at once, but I also think the text speaks to the idea of selfishness. It seems that both characters were only thinking about themselves, instead of their lives together. Thanks for writing. I look forward to reading what you write next because it seems you make great connections to what you read. I like how you connected the story to the time you wanted to go to the water park and your friend's party--but then couldn't go to either! Ms. Navarro
  • Natalia's Oct 9, 13:53 comment on Mi familia es muy diferente
    Dear Jenifer, Your book sounds very interesting! I'm very curious about why the neighbors had the baby, instead of the mother. Did the mother give her up for adoption, and later change her mind? I look forward to your response! Ms. Navarro
  • Natalia's Oct 9, 13:49 comment on El Amor es diferente!
    Dear Veronica, Wow! You share strong feelings about love and how men treat women! Can you share an example from your book about a couple who was not allowed to be together? I'm curious! I look forward to reading your response :). Ms. Navarro
  • Natalia's Oct 9, 13:43 comment on Antes de ser libres
    Dear Evelyn, This sounds like an exciting book! Why does the Garcia family have problems with the police? Does this plot remind you of another text, or something you have heard or seen? I look forward to your response! Ms. Navarro
  • Carl's Oct 9, 13:22 comment on Equality: A Value of High Importance in American Lives
    Equality and Equal rights is an important value in our lives
  • Brianna's Oct 9, 13:21 comment on Racism
    I agree with you but I go through racism with my own kind of people which are blacks
  • Danny's Oct 9, 12:33 comment on What does being an American mean?
    Thank you for your feedback. I think that your points are valid and I appreciate your comment. Agree with almost all your suggestions, however, the reason I started most of the paragraphs with a quote was kind of because I wanted to build them each around a quote, so I did that for structural reasons rather than just because I didn't want to make introduction points. Other than that, I agree with all of your comments.
  • Bailey's Oct 9, 05:04 comment on What does being an American mean?
    Danny, I liked your argument because it did state very well, the reasons for your choice in source, however, I believe that by using multiple sources you could strengthen your argument by showing consistency. Two other things that I think could help your argument deals with the phrasing you use. In your discussion you use a lot of short sentences, this prevents the article from flowing and I think that the post may benefit from the combining of certain sentences. The last thing that I wanted to add was that I feel like your article was missing some introduction points, as in introducing your source before going into a direct quote and citation. I'm curious as to your thoughts on my comments, Bailey
  • Aidan's Oct 8, 17:21 comment on America’s Most Important Values
    I agree with your assessment of american values. All of these values were need for the founding. All of your sources showing how these are deeply american values were great. I love your freedom evidence because religious freedom is important to me and being an american to me means liberty and doing what you want to make you happy. What do you think america would be like if we had a state religion?
  • Abbey's Oct 8, 16:59 comment on Why We Stand
    Noah, I agree with your argument because I also think we are a diverse country. I like your use of the Declaration of Independence and the Preamble to strengthen your argument. I do have to disagree with the thought of our country being the freest. I can see where you come from but I feel as though many things limit our freedom like the government on certain things. I loved when you said "Keeping everything bright is good for both us and our next to come generation". I think people will be inspired by your piece.
  • Ari's Oct 8, 16:55 comment on Liberty and Justice, What Americans Value Most
    I concur with the fact that justice is the most fair state to be in but I think that could have been better worded. I like how well you reasoned your point but I was a little disappointed you did not directly quote you sources but rather summarized them. You also did very well on citing your sources and I would like to learn how you did that so well.
  • Jason's Oct 8, 12:43 comment on America Vs. Fear: Who Will Win?
    Hi Mia, I believe the first two sentences of your argument were very important. Some people just look at "all created equal", and not the hard truth and bigger picture. What I admire about your argument is that it is different from the other ones I looked at. I had never looked at America this way, nor did I feel like fear was an American problem. Your argument made me look at the aspects of America in a very different way. Using books as data for your argument was one of the best ways to back it up I believe. Also, I loved how you gave potential solutions to all these problems, instead of ending on a negative note. I really enjoyed reading your argument, and I can't wait to read more of your responses this year!
  • Sydney's Oct 8, 12:41 comment on What is your definition of “American”?
    Hi Vibha, I liked your post! I liked when you said that it was history that helped shaped this country into what it is today. I also liked that you said honesty is something that Americans value.
  • Michael's Oct 8, 12:33 comment on Immigration shapes America
    Nice points Eric, I agree that immigration is a core part of America. The fact that in 10 years there will be over 11 million jobs created really surprised me. Immigration definitely would help fill those jobs. It's kind of ironic that America is called a melting pot when right now immigration is being cut down on but that could change with a new president, who knows. Overall nice writing.
  • Eric's Oct 8, 12:30 comment on What do you value most as an American?
    FIrst, I would like to address that this passage had a lot of context in it, good job. I also like the fact that you incorporated a quote from a book in it, showing your appreciation to the rights and life you have now. I definitely agree how American is a mixed society effectively making it a melting pot. I do notice that there is a lot of jumping around in your passage. You have touched every aspect of being an American, but I do suggest committing to one aspect of American culture and expanding on it so this passage can acquire more fluidity. Right now, it is displayed as a compilation of not yet developed ideas. Once again, I do enjoy reading your passage though.
  • Jason's Oct 8, 12:25 comment on Being D.E.F.I.T is being American
    Hi Abbey, I admire your American value acronym, it makes the rest of your argument more organized and flow smoother. Overall, I agree with your argument about diversity greatly. America is definitely one of the most diverse countries in the world, if not the most. Using the Declaration of Independence as backup for your argument was very important. However, recent and past events in this country could counter the argument if all people are created equal -- racially and religiously. I agree that Americans are informal also. I believe that it is a very essential American trait and value. Americans are even informal in the way they dress, almost everywhere they go. I really enjoyed reading your argument, it made me look at American values and beliefs to a much broader extent!
  • Sam's Oct 8, 12:23 comment on What American Creed Means toMe
    The part about perseverance was very inspiring and I agree that it is crucial to being American.
  • Sam's Oct 8, 12:18 comment on Is The Idea of Freedom Still An American Value?
    I enjoyed that you included North Korea and how they are oppressing their people.
  • Dean's Oct 8, 12:16 comment on Diversity and Strength in America
    Hi Teo. I agree with you that people take freedom for granted and don't realize how lucky we are. I like the examples you used and the picture.
  • Elijah's Oct 8, 12:13 comment on The Current Change of the American Dream
    This article is very inspiring it makes me want to go out and do American things in America.
  • Matthew's Oct 8, 12:11 comment on A True American
    I really enjoyed your essay, it seems like you spent a lot of time on it. It is really well developed and really shows different aspects of American values. I really like how you integrate the sources you used into the essay.
  • EJ's Oct 8, 11:54 comment on Liberty and Justice, What Americans Value Most
    Hi Aidan, I thought that this was a very well thought up piece and I love your 2 paragraphs, one explaining the rights and then the strong evidence supporting your claim. I have noticed that you have a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes. I don't know if this is due to rushing the project or not noticing but next time you should run a quick spell check. This was a really well written piece and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it and I agree with your claim.
  • Sanasia's Oct 5, 13:25 comment on Why do many people look at Childish Gambino’s video, “This Is America” as a message to society?
    This video is trying to give people a message. Dancing is distracting people from the real world issues like the that be going on. A gun can get treated more carefully than a person death.
  • kimani's Oct 5, 13:25 comment on Has Gentrification Affected You?
    Hey Yojana, My name is Kimani and i attend Nelson Mandela School for Social Justice & I enjoyed reading your blog a lot only because I can agree and relate to it so well. You brought up the effects of gentrification on your community and I can relate to the effects in my community as well. I live in the projects where predominantly black and hispanics live at, and it used to be like that for years ! But as time when on especially recently, the rents raised dramatically and a lot of white people had moved and built new apartment building right up the block starting at 1,000,000 with rents up to 5,000 a month.
  • Nathaniel's Oct 5, 13:20 comment on Is God Real ?
    I feel that religion was created give people hope in their times of need and to have people hold on to fate.
  • Praneeth's Oct 5, 12:35 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    Hi Penelope, I think you have a strong point, but I think that it would be hard to ban plastic bottles many people use bottles as a way for their intake of water. Bottles are a very efficient way for people to access water when they are not at home and on the go. Places like marathons and running events need water and the best way is bottled water, you can try to use biodegradable bottles but they do just that they don't last long enough. Plastic bottles are stronger and cost less to make. We can not ban bottles but we can change how people dispose of them.
  • Jake's Oct 4, 15:03 comment on Trump: a Great Man
    I am glad you are so headstrong about this topic. However, I regret to inform you that this is not a proper way to debate a topic to this magnitude
  • Maggie's Oct 4, 14:32 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Tori, I first want to commend your bravery in writing about such a personal topic. You are helping to get rid of the stigma behind mental health illnesses. I personally related to the part where you said, " Constantly feeling like someone is watching you,sweaty hands and feeling a nervous ball at the pit of your stomach." I thought that this was a very accurate depiction of what so many people feel, but have a hard time expressing. I found these tips for managing anxiety and stress. https://adaa.org/tips-manage-anxiety-and-stress I would love for you to read them and let me know if they help you at all (and if you have other ways of managing it)---Maggie
  • Ozzie's Oct 4, 14:32 comment on I believe in equal opportunity
    I agree whole heartedly with your statements above. I really appreciate how you made a personal connection to the topic, it makes your argument more personal and easier to connect to. This statement, "As religious affiliation, ethnicity and gender shouldn’t play a part in how people are to be treated at all", is something I believe most people around our country are forgetting at this time in our history. The only question that I have for you is how do you think we can get people to be more open minded and change this society that we live in?
  • Ozzie's Oct 4, 14:25 comment on Net Neutrality
    I really like how you try to bring both sides to the conversation. The only question I ask is how will the new ruling on the new "Meme Ban" that the EU put into place have a toll on the the neutrality of the internet here in the U.S.? The fact that, "Companies such as Google and Facebook are heavily advocating to get Net Neutrality back in place, while major phone and internet companies such as Verizon or Comcast are celebrating it’s repeal.", is really troubling to me that companies that we trust dont fully care about us. I've watched many youtube videos on this topic and they all try to advocate against this decision but our voices still aren't being heard
  • Jake's Oct 4, 14:23 comment on Enough is enough!
    All of your claims are speculation and completely wrong statistically. White people have a much higher percentage chance of dying to the hands of police than black people. All the BLM movement did was further divide this nation and spark the idea that murdering innocent police officers is completely okay. Which people did right as the movement began. You say it was completely ignored which is not completely wrong. They just made up the "hands up, don't shoot" false narrative to get attention. After that, the entirety of the political left got on board because the had nothing better to do. So, this entire post is based on a straw-man argument and is completely wrong statistically.
  • Jake's Oct 4, 14:14 comment on America’s Biggest Domestic Problem
    "Assault Rifle" is a made up term, that's not what "AR" stands for. Taking away these guns will NOT solve the issue because, statistically speaking, people die from handguns and shotguns far more often than rifles. People are stabbed to death far more often than being killed with a rifle. This is from the FBI Crime database. You can't dispute these numbers. So, your whole argument is completely backwards based on what you want to accomplish.
  • Jake's Oct 4, 14:10 comment on Teens Take A Stand For Gun Control
    What happens when a criminal gets a gun illegally and everyone around you is left defenseless because of gun control? Gun control will not solve the issue of gun violence in this country, it will only make it worse. Look to Chicago, look to the UK, look to Australia. Taking away guns from law-abiding citizens is signing a death sentence for these people. If a shooter goes to a place where weapons are not allowed, what do you think they'll do? Leave? Suddenly grow a heart? No, they'll fire because no one will fire back. If they go to a place where weapons are allowed, what do you think they'd do? Go in guns blazing? No, they wouldn't because people in that place are able to fire back.
  • Jake's Oct 4, 14:00 comment on Gun Violence Across America: When will it end?
    This is an interesting post. Yes, Australia had a mandatory buy-back of all firearms in the country. Yes, their gun violence went down. However, the violent crime in the country went straight up. Taking guns away from law-abiding citizens is a death sentence for those people. The NRA is completely funded by it's members, not the government. When you say that the NRA pays off the government to stay out of this issue, that's completely false. Because, well for one: that's illegal. Two, the NRA doesn't need to do that because they know that gun control won't pass through congress. They know that guns are not the problem. The majority of congress knows that guns are not the problem. The majority of the nation knows that guns are not the problem. You take away guns, then people will use knives. You take away knives, people will use cars. You take away cars, people will use illegal guns. This is an unwinnable fight for gun control activists because guns are just the tool for killing. Why not blame the person instead of the object that that person used?
  • Andre's Oct 4, 12:19 comment on Where I’m from
    Munisa, I liked how you used descriptive words so I, the reader, could picture the scenery in my mind. The best part I liked is how you closed your poem. "... from patience and from being successful, Dreaming and enjoying. I am from these moments. I am from this home of love." I just thought it was cool because I could relate to that.
  • Rhea Shenoy's Oct 4, 03:11 comment on The Problem of Islamophobia
    Dear Devin, I completely agree with the points that you mentioned in this post. Lots of people this country believe that because a group of people did something, that other people like them will end up doing the same bad things. They see them as all having the same set of intentions. Everyone is their own person and should not be labeled because of something that someone else did. I think that the use of statistics made your argument very strong, and made it hard to refute.
  • James's Oct 4, 02:10 comment on Will Increased Gun Control Help To Make Schools Safer?
    Hailey, There are many different viewpoints on this article and it is an interesting debate. However I disagree with how you have built your argument, the first statement of school shootings "increasing in popularity" was immediately off putting for the simple reason that the word "popularity" should never be acomponied with such a tragedy. Also you offer many opinions from one side of the debate, but don't offer any information from people you don't agree with to show that you are knowledgable on the issue. Although everyone agrees that in a perfect world there would be no guns, this is not a perfect world, and the unfortunate reality is that guns will always be in circulation and if someone has drive to commit an atrocious act such as mass shootings they will do whatever it takes. In the connotations you've presented the only victims in this situation would be defenseless law abiding citizens.
  • James's Oct 4, 01:58 comment on Are Unequal Healthcare Regulations Real?
    Hi Sophie, this was a great topic to choose and is a very important issue in our country right now. Healthcare is a very difficult issue to approach without offending both sides of the isle, and I think you have some good points such as getting rid of copayments. Copayments are a start but there's much more that goes into healthcare availability while maintaining quality of care, I think you should further your section on solutions. Interesting Article and I hope to read more of your writing.
  • Ruby's Oct 4, 00:41 comment on Animal Rights
    Yulisa, I love the way that you approached this topic and showed the logistics to the argument. Your writing portrays a very neutral aspect on the topic so it makes it easier for the reader to create their own opinion with the information given to them. I liked how you said "However, controversy over this is growing due to increasing observational, neurological, and genetic evidence about animal intelligence. " It was a very intriguing sentence that made me think about the animals that aren't being tested on and how their rights would be different if they were a pet rather than a lab animal.
  • AIdan Hasuer's Oct 4, 00:19 comment on Siempre Conmigo En Todo Momento
    Hola Samantha, como estas? Soy aidan y estoy de michigan en los estados unidos. Hables ingles? He aprendido un poco espanol en mi escuela. me disfrutaba su poema, fue informativo sobre su vida. Fue una poema muy bonita. Yo tengo un perro tambien, el es blanco pequeno y muy lindo! Como es tu escuela? Que quieres llegar a ser ?
  • Vibha's Oct 3, 22:11 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    Hi Penelope, I completely agree with your argument and I believe this issue has become much larger in recent years. As of right now, it might be a little difficult to issue a nationwide or world wide ban on bottled water, but there are definitely some steps we can take before that. Touching on what you mentioned, the importance of recycling could be raise and stressed much more than how it currently is. New standards could be put in place regarding recycling bins and reducing plastic waste. Do you think it is the easy disposability of water bottles and other plastics that makes it easy to forget about the environment? How long do you think it will take before this issue finally catches up to us? Overall you did a really nice job, and I liked the sources you used to back your argument. -Vibha
  • Emma's Oct 3, 20:46 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Thank you for sharing your experience with anxiety. Your description created an image that was relatable and easy to understand. I liked how you said "I can not go to a grocery store without hearing everything that is said and seeing every detail." This statement helped me understand how it feels to have extreme anxiety, rather than just understand the concept. I read more about anxiety at https://www.nimh.nih.gov/health/topics/anxiety-disorders/index.shtml and learned even more about it. Thank you again for sharing- I enjoyed this piece a lot and look forward to what you write next.
  • Joseph's Oct 3, 19:39 comment on Shadow Box
    Hello Roberto, Im very impressed by your shadow box. I like the picture of the flag showing your nationality and how much room it takes up showing how important it is to you. I don’t know if that was intentional or not but either way I like it. Keep up the hard work.
  • Diego's Oct 3, 19:34 comment on Shadow Box
    I appreciate your artist statement and shadow box for explaining how you aren't what you seem like seed. It shows how you aren't just a generalized person but very specific in who you are. BUT, you didn't space after a period once. But everything else is sick.
  • 2019 Elena Justice's Oct 3, 19:00 comment on Dress Codes: more harm than help?
    I really liked that way you touched on a new view of uniforms. I especially liked this line "they have grown into a form of control over the students and their right to express themselves,". I liked this because I feel very strongly about this subject and the objectification of women. I enjoyed your post Anica and I liked how you stood up for women and talked on their behalf, I would love to read more about how you feel about other things women are ridiculed for.
  • Tori's Oct 3, 18:52 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Thank you,Raine!
  • Tori's Oct 3, 18:51 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    I feel like the subject should be more openly talked about so we can feel connected and supported rather than an outcast. I am glad you feel less alone! Thank you for your comment ,Isabella.
  • Tori's Oct 3, 18:30 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Thank you for your feedback,Chandan. I will for sure do more writings on this experience to give better understanding.
  • Tori's Oct 3, 18:20 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Thank you Jack and yes ,I agree about the separation. In the past when I was first diagnosed 5 years ago ,I did go through therapy for about 2 years which did help by giving me ways to lessen the symptoms. I highly recommend help to anyone struggling with this issue.
  • Tori's Oct 3, 18:15 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    I am glad this helped you understand a little better! Thank you
  • Tori's Oct 3, 18:14 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Thank you for your comment. In regards to your question,do many people you know have some form of anxiety, yes. Many of my family members also struggle with anxiety ,just like yours. The severity varies for everyone. I have had help when i was first diagnosed at 13 ,5 years ago. The therapy did help but recently I have learned other alternatives to cope and deal with the anxiety. Again thank you.
  • Tori's Oct 3, 18:05 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Thank you for your comment,Anthony. I will be looking at the link you gave to also understand more about this concept.
  • David's Oct 3, 17:41 comment on Is God Real ?
    This is a pretty important topic as it affects the lives of billions of people across the world. Even though some people have quite different opinions on the matter, everyone is entitled to their own opinion.
  • Bailey's Oct 3, 17:32 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    Penelope, I appreciate your writing of this article, this is a very important issue that not many people recognize or act on to improve. I will say though, that I did find some things that I think you could use to improve your argument. One of the main things is to do a facts check, in your post you said that only 38 out of 50 billion water bottles are recycled, but then referred to that relation as 23%, which mathematically doesn't add up. Making sure you have accurate facts adds a very important layer to have in your argument, without which many people won't take it seriously. Another thing that you could do to make your post stronger is using more formal words, trying replacing words like "a lot, and really" with more formal synonyms. One last thing that I think you could do is to expand your argument more, mention a counterargument, and add more length to your argument the intro should not be double the length of the argument. I'm interested in what you think of these suggestions, -Bailey
  • Nyjayla's Oct 3, 17:32 comment on My Shadow Box
    Hi jessica i just wonted to say i love your shadow box Its very different and i like that you put the images of you and your brother to show that your the youngest and i like that you explained you counter and dominant narritives
  • Jose's Oct 3, 17:31 comment on Nakiah’s Shadow Box
    You put a lot of detail and Its cool that you have a lot of photos of family members that means that you care.
  • Calvin Dao's Oct 3, 17:31 comment on My Shadow Box By: Kanika Carey
    Hey Kanika. I'm impressed by your shadowbox. One part that stood out to me was when you were talking about the stereotypes about yourself. I agree with you a lot because those stereotypes are not true and they put down a lot of people. One piece of feedback I have for you is to spellcheck and re - read your work, but other than that your writing is amazing. Thank you for showing everyone your shadow box !
  • Anthony's Oct 3, 17:30 comment on Beatriz’s shadow box
    dear beatriz I like your shadow box and it shows how u are really into catholicism and how your religious and have pride in yourself sincerely,anthony
  • Campbell's Oct 3, 17:29 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Tori, your description on anxiety was spot on I think, and I liked to hear about some ways in your life that anxiety affects you. When you said that u think everyone has some form of anxiety have you found this to be true? Do many people you know have some form of anxiety? Some people in my family are struggling with anxiety as well, and I hope that you are seeking some form of help. If you have sought out help, has it been working? Thank you for sharing the personal matter with us!
  • Bella's Oct 3, 17:29 comment on Gun Control
    Branigan, I agree with you on this topic. I know there are people out there getting defensive about the 2nd amendment, but what I think we need is gun control, not to get rid of the 2nd amendment completely. People have the right to use their guns, but I think it's silly that for awhile now, they've been able to hand guns out carelessly when they don't know what the purpose for the gun is. For example, Nikolas Cruz was given an AR and shot up Marjory Stoneman Douglass. There was no background check done, but if there had been, the shooting could have been prevented. According to an article on The Washington post, Cruz was developmentally delayed, had ADHD, and anger issues. He had emotional and behavioral problems and even commented on a post saying he would be a professional shooter. If there had been a background check, I believe the shooting could have been prevented. In conclusion, I think gun control is what we need, I don't think we need to get rid of guns completely (due to the second amendment), but the gun violence has been taken too far. How do you feel about the topic? Do you think we need the control and background checks?
  • Ari's Oct 3, 17:28 comment on Does everything happen for a reason?
    I love this question for a few reasons. The first reason is it's a philosophical question which means the debate could go on forever because there is no actual answer. Another reason is there are many ways to interpret the quote everything happens for a reason. One way which you analyzed was that everything is predetermined. Another way to analyze the quote is that for every bad thing that happens there is also something good coming your way - sorta like karma. This quote can even be as simple as someone needing a way to cheer up. One idea you brought up and I liked was the idea of predetermination. This debate of whether things are predetermined or not is a lot of fun. While I personally agree with you that nothing is predetermined I can see the argument for the other side. If you look at the future from the present nothing is known yet but looking at the past from the present everything already happened therefore it happened every time, 1/1. This is a strong argument for predetermination because it shows while you may not have known what was going to happen at the time it was already guaranteed to happen.
  • Emilee's Oct 3, 17:28 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    Hallo Penelope, I understand your argument about how large amount of plastics not being recycled ca hurt the earth and animals/wildlife. over all it is a unrealistic goal to get rid of the use of bottles all together
  • Michelle's Oct 3, 17:27 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    Hi Penelope, It's crazy to think that water bottles can cause so much harm to the environment. I never thought about how just one person could help the environment. I liked your point, but maybe you could provide a little more information on the options if we ban plastic bottles?
  • Abbey's Oct 3, 17:27 comment on Standardized Mess
    William, This topic seems to be coming up a lot lately. I agree with you on the fact that standardized testing is unfair to students. Many people get test anxiety and the thought of being timed to finish a test makes matters worse. Also, many students do not do well under pressure and don't like the generic, one sided questions and answers of the SAT and ACT. Along with the thought of essays being biased while graded, I completely agree. The person grading essays may have certain opinions or may not like the style of writing the student used. Have you heard that some colleges don't look at SAT scores and essays? I find that interesting and think it is a good idea. Since standardized tests are asking students to answer meaningless questions and not think creatively I believe colleges should avoid looking at scores to accept students into their school. I think your argument is thorough and thought out very well!
  • noah's Oct 3, 17:26 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Tori, your word choice was really good. your description helped me understand how you feel during these anxiety attacks.
  • Matthew's Oct 3, 17:26 comment on The Death Penalty Debate
    Paul, I really enjoyed reading your article. I liked how you presented both sides of the argument and provided articles that included additional arguments and details. This made me more aware of what people think regarding this topic.
  • Christian's Oct 3, 17:25 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    Your argument comes mostly from a compassionate state of mind, its good to help animals and not to pollute. However, bottled water is a much more valuable commodity then you are making it out to be. In poorer countries like Africa or Asia bottled water plays a pivotal role in helping people gain the water they need to survive. Plastic also is a somewhat strong material, which is bad when trying to biodegrade but good when moving across distances. I think that the littering of plastic bottles, of course, is bad and needs to stop, however, there are other ways of going about that. For example, here in Michigan, we have a very low litter rate for soda cans because we back each can with a 10 cent return. It would be better to do this and recycle the bottles returned rather than ban them outright. This could also provide help for those suffering from poverty, which would give them a reason to pick them up as well.
  • Sanath's Oct 3, 17:25 comment on Should the Death Penalty be Legal?
    I like the way you introduced the meaning of the death penalty and why it is a concern in todays day and age. I am one of the people that believe that the death penalty should be illegal because it is expensive and no person deserves death. As prison break has shown conviction is not solid. Proof will always be around and there is no 100% guilty person. Death may be better than living in captivity for your whole life, but in my opinion the death penalty should be the prisoners choice if they are serving a long sentence.
  • Jack's Oct 3, 17:17 comment on Should Prostitution Be Legal?
    I agree that people should not be forced into sex work. Sex trafficking is wrong and should not exist in our country. However, many of the unpleasant sides of prostitution come from the fact that it is illegal and unregulated. If prostitution were legal, it would be heavily regulated by the government. Criminals would no longer be in charge of prostitution business and it would be much safer. The fact that it is illegal does not stop people from trafficking sex workers, and if it were legalized the government could do more to prevent violence and non-consenting sex workers.
  • William's Oct 3, 15:08 comment on The Death Penalty Debate
    Good job on discussing the possible pros and cons of a difficult ethical topic. I like how you summarized the main argument of each side in a concise sentence. One thing that I feel could have been added is possible other solutions to horrendous crime to replace the death penalty. While you give good reasons to keep or abolish it, you did not give a possible replacement. Despite this, you did a good job at citing your sources and bringing in unbiased sides of the argument.
  • Jake's Oct 3, 14:44 comment on Trump: a Great Man
    Don't worry about all the hate, Trump is saving our country and will continue to do so for the next 6 years. People can hate him, but that makes his supporters love him even more. Keep America Great in 2020
  • Jake's Oct 3, 14:30 comment on LESS GUNS = LESS VIOLENCE
    So, your entire argument is completely feelings-based. Which is fine, I'm glad you're passionate about this. However, allow me to contradict you. Yes, the 11,000 number is about right for firearm homicides, but the number for a firearm saving a life is anywhere between 500,000-3 million each year according to the CDC. So, just saying that "less guns=less violence" is completely unsubstantiated. Look at Australia, they had a mandatory buy-back for all firearms and their violent crime skyrocketed. The UK, very very strict gun laws there so people started using machetes and acid. Look here in the US at Chicago, strictest gun laws in the whole country and is the murder capital of the United States. I understand where you're coming from, but taking guns away from law-abiding citizens (which is almost all gun owners) is a horrible idea. Criminals will just find other ways to harm and kill people. We won't ban knives, even though you're statistically more likely to die by a knife than you are by a rifle according to FBI Crime Statistics. We won't ban cars, even though car accidents and drunk driving are both huge causes of death in this country.
  • Emma's Oct 3, 13:43 comment on I believe in equal opportunity
    This is a lovely piece. You did a wonderful job at diving into a heavy topic and making it personal at the same time. I liked the moments of reflection on your own life, and how you discussed your mother's influence on you. The points made on equal opportunity were presented very well, and your use of examples perfectly accompanied them. I liked how you said "morals are the only thing that matter as do their actions." This idea is overlooked by a lot of people, creating a foundation for inequality in the world. This piece reminded me of "Animal Farm" by George Orwell, which illustrates a world of obvious inequality. I truly enjoyed this piece and am excited to see what you write next.
  • Kristen's Oct 3, 12:43 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    Dear Penelope, Plastic bottles have been a debatable issue, and I agree that people, by using plastic bottles, aren't helping save the environment. I see why you are against it, but do you think that it's something in America that can change over time or something will remain an issue? San Francisco is a great example of change, but changes for plastic bottles is going on all across America. Have you heard of Starbucks new plan in 2020? Starbucks is one of the leading cafes in America and is pretty close to plastic water bottle issue. However according to news.starbucks.com, “'Starbucks goal to eliminate plastic straws by 2020 from their stores globally represents the company’s forward thinking in tackling the material waste challenge in totality.”' Yes, it might not be much to change our environment, but it's taking baby steps to reduce this issue. It's something to think about. But ultimately, your article is a great way to talk about an issue you care about! Sincerely, Kristen
  • Jake's Oct 3, 12:42 comment on I Want a Woman for President
    Now, I'm glad you enjoy poetry. However, I'm not sure how any of the points you made will change this country for the better. Gender equality is a very minuscule issue in this country, especially the way the feminists make it out to be. Illegal immigration is a crime and it screws over people who are trying to immigrate here legally. Gun control is an idea that has no basis in the United States. Criminals will just find other ways to kill people and law-abiding citizens will be defenseless. Lastly, where are your sources as to how these ideas will change this country for the better?
  • EJ's Oct 3, 12:41 comment on Female Harassment in the Gaming Industry
    I think that sexism is still very present in our society and its a terrible thing for people to be treated less based on gender. People are going to bully but you have the ability to mute mics and if it gets worst you can leave the lobby. This isn't your fault but you do have power to limit your exposure, you can squad up on Fortnite with your friends instead of playing with random people. I also think there are better things in life then video games and I hope you aren't playing games 24/7. This Gamergate movement sounds very strong but Xbox lobbies are extremely toxic and you need to be careful.
  • Konrad's Oct 3, 12:40 comment on Dress Codes: more harm than help?
    I think your article is very interesting. Would just having school uniforms be better? Or do you think there should be no restrictions on dress? I think that it is ridiculous that these people were "distracted". They should work on their own self control instead of trying to fix their problem by changing others.
  • Mia's Oct 3, 12:40 comment on The Risk of the Anti-Vaccine Movement
    Sante, I really liked how you discussed the irony of the anti-vax movement. A lot of parents who don't want to vaccinate their children are exposing their kids and others to harmful illnesses. You could include a link to a piece by someone who is anti-vax, just so we can see their thought process. The myths about vaccinations are what drive parents away. You could help debunk certain myths using medical information. Other than that, I agree with you and like how you discussed the topic.
  • Leo's Oct 3, 12:40 comment on Healthcare
    Hi Jillian, I like how passionate you are about this topic, and how well you cited your sources and used that evidence to back up your claim. I have to disagree with your position though. In Canada, it may seem like they thrive on the concept of free healthcare, but in reality, they pay much higher taxes due to the fact that they don't have to pay for the healthcare, and since everyone has access to this healthcare, there is an insanely long wait list for those who seek medical attention. If there's a long wait list for some procedures in America, where only paying people receive healthcare, imagine that same circumstance, but everyone gets that care. So yes, economically, it'd be great for the people (besides the high taxes), but in the long run, it would be terrible for those in dire need of a doctor. Thank you for your time, Jillian.
  • Michael's Oct 3, 12:39 comment on Water Bottle Ban
    James you brought up some great points, water bottle consumption will probably not go down unless some legislation is passed. I kinda already knew plastic bottles didn’t biodegrade but I didn’t know they photodegrade (or what photodegradation was) before reading this post. If legislation is passed to cut down on plastic usage through a water bottle ban pollution should greatly go down (and people would have more money in their wallets) so the pros seem to greatly outway the cons.
  • Danny's Oct 3, 12:39 comment on Does everything happen for a reason?
    David, the question you ask is very deep and difficult to answer, however it is an important question. This post stood out to me because it doesn't have an easy answer. The answers differ from person to person and i think this is something everyone should figure out. Good job on asking the tough questions in life.
  • Lillian's Oct 3, 12:37 comment on Gun Control
    Hi Branigan, I agree with the topic at hand with gun control and the consequences with what could happen if we did not have it. Because of the increased gun violence happening in the United States, we need to take into account of what to do with the guns now that they have become so dangerous to the people in schools or other highly populated places. Additionally, if we had background checks that denied people of a gun, then I believe we would have a more controlled and better system of putting guns in the right hands of people who do not promote danger. Although the 2nd Amendment does provide us with the right to guns, we still have to make sure to have a way to have a safe environment across the US. What would you do for gun control if you had the choice?
  • Jason W's Oct 3, 12:36 comment on Competition
    Hi Allison, I definitely agree that competition allows us to grow as people. I myself have been in very competitive environments and situations, and it has made me better at that task and want more for myself. Also, I feel like it doesn't matter where you go, competition will always exist. However, I feel like competition can lead to unnecessary fighting and altercations. Competition can also cause people to care more about winning and less on self growth, and that is very popular nowadays. Overall, I think your stance on competition was great. I liked how you stated the opposition also. You made me think of the idea of competition in a whole new way!
  • Maxim's Oct 3, 12:35 comment on Does everything happen for a reason?
    David, this is a very thought-provoking question. If everything did happen for a reason, then the universe would be predetermined from the start. This would raise other questions, like if we have free will or not. With philosophical questions like this one, there likely will never be a definitive answer, but it is definitely interesting to see people's viewpoints. I would love to see more about this topic!
  • Jack's Oct 3, 12:35 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Hey Tori, your description of your anxiety was very striking and is very helpful for those who don't feel anxiety at this degree. When it comes to whether or not it is a mental illness, what I feel separates anxiety from anxiety disorder is feelings, as you described, in situations where the feeling is not provoked by surroundings. Have you gone/ are you going to therapy for anxiety? If so, have you found that to be a helpful for you?
  • Sydney's Oct 3, 12:35 comment on 10 Q’s
    I really like your post. I thought that the questions you were asking were interesting and thought provoking. Most of the questions you brought up I was able to ask myself. My favorite question that you asked was “Will I learn to be patient/ not give up?” I liked that question because for me it’s hard to stay calm and not give up. I liked how you also expanded outside “Questions for Myself” and asked questions about the world such as “Why are things over priced?” and “Will a woman ever be president?” Overall, I really liked reading your post I think you did a really good job creating these questions.
  • Audra's Oct 3, 12:34 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    I agree with you on the fact that we need to take better care of our Earth. Reducing/eliminating the use of plastic water bottles and straws is a great idea and hopefully the idea spreads to other cities beyond San Francisco. The only thing I think about being are the people who are going to oppose this change, how can we get them to see that this would be a step in the right direction for the environment?
  • alejandro's Oct 3, 12:33 comment on The Death Penalty Debate
    This topic is difficult. I cannot say I agree or disagree with the death penalty. Both sides of the topic have good claims as you have provided. If I were to make a decision I would have to go more in depth in the topic.
  • Shreeya's Oct 3, 12:32 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    Hey Penelope, I agree with you that plastic bottles should be banned. I think you should add a little more about how it is harmful to our environment and how we should ban plastic water bottles. Also replacements we can use instead of plastic. What replacements of plastic water bottle do you think would be save our environment?
  • Elijah's Oct 3, 12:31 comment on Will Increased Gun Control Help To Make Schools Safer?
    "you are dis disrespecting a future marine sergeant."
  • EJ's Oct 3, 12:31 comment on Healthcare
    Hi Jillian, I thought that this was a very well written argument with good supporting details and a strong claim. I don't agree with your point of view and I believe that it would be more detrimental to our country to make healthcare universal. Although Canada's system works for them, they pay significantly higher taxes and I'm sure your friends that you have met wouldn't be interested in paying higher taxes to give others free healthcare. If we were to make our healthcare universal, than the wait lists for our doctors and hospitals would be extremely long and people that need medical attention wouldn't be able to get help. This article by Michael D. Tanner shows that your point of view wouldn't make sense for our country. https://www.cato.org/publications/commentary/universal-health-care-not-best-option Thank you for your time and consideration Jillian
  • Eric's Oct 3, 12:30 comment on Should the Death Penalty be Legal?
    Hey Clara, I enjoy the way you started with a strong opening statement by offering the proper definition of the "death penalty", and thus, starting the discussion. Although I do appreciate the showcasing of both perspectives of the story, I do believe you should dive deeper into one side of the story, or if you are commiting to touch both sides, at least provide more evidence for the pro death penalty side like you did for the ones opposing the death penalty. Overall, this passage was well-written.
  • Paulina's Oct 3, 12:30 comment on Animal Rights
    Yulisa, I appreciate that you bring up both sides to the argument and give examples to their views. Do you believe that animals should have all of the same rights as humans? Why do you think others believe animals don’t know about mortality or don’t have feelings? Do you have any animals? In my view all animals have rights especially dogs. I have three dogs and nine puppies living with me and they all have different unique personalities. Thank you for your time, Paulina
  • Kyle's Oct 3, 12:29 comment on Are people entitled to free healthcare?
    I like the attention to detail Matt! But despite the US being one of the wealthiest nations on the planet there are still many issues preventing us from having universal healthcare. We provide healthcare programs for the poor and elderly, but opening it up to the entire population would be a major tax burden on the typical tax payer. It would also be directly against our capitalist economy. Healthcare providers have to compete for costumers, but with universal healthcare the government provides it with no competition. I do believe however healthcare should be a right, but there is simply too many obstacles in the way.
  • Chandan's Oct 3, 12:26 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    I really like your perspective on anxiety but it would be cool if you had expanded on your traumatic experience. I feel like elaborating this would make your post even better.
  • Zaggam's Oct 3, 12:25 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    I agree with your point. I never really thought about plastic bottle use that much until I read this. Now I realize how much it really is affecting our environment and the world in general. I know that this will be on my mind now and I will probably research some more about it because of this post. We have to take a stand now and save our world while we still can.
  • Dean's Oct 3, 12:23 comment on The Risk of the Anti-Vaccine Movement
    I also heard about these parents having wrong information and treating kids in their own way. I agree with you that they are trying to protect their children's health but instead they are exposing them to diseases that could be easily avoided. I also hope people get the right information so they no longer goes against vaccines.
  • Sam's Oct 3, 12:22 comment on Should the Death Penalty be Legal?
    I enjoyed how you incorporated the opposing views of the death penalty. I appreciate that you brought up this topic but I would disagree and say that some criminals would commit a crime due to the death penalty. The death penalty would mean minimal jail time and you could also argue that its better then rotting away in a jail cell for the rest of your life.
  • Chandan's Oct 3, 12:22 comment on Does everything happen for a reason?
    I like how you are questioning the existence of humanity but you provide little to no evidence to back up your claim. I would like to see you bring up different perspectives such as a religious view or even a scientific view.
  • Jake's Oct 3, 12:18 comment on Will Increased Gun Control Help To Make Schools Safer?
    I'm glad you're passionate about this topic. However, "multifire machine guns" is a made up term. If you're talking about fully-automatic weapons, those are already banned to the public in the 1993 Assault Weapons ban. As for banning all guns: guns are not the problem. You take away guns, then psychopaths will find other ways to harm and kill people. While the law-abiding citizen is left defenseless. I do agree however that we have a mental health issue in this country, but that does not involve firearms and restricting them even further to the law-abiding citizens.
  • Jake's Oct 3, 12:06 comment on Gun Control
    While I disagree with literally everything you just said and most of it can be easily disputed, this post was at least well-written...
  • Lindsey's Oct 3, 04:03 comment on Will I Ever Open Up ?
    Deja, your perspective and experience on this subject is very intriguing. I am also someone with trust issues and know how you feel when you say, "when I have opened up, people showed me why I shouldn’t have." Communication is difficult but also very rewarding at times. Here is a link to a source that has some tips for opening up and touches more on the subject. I found it quite helpful! https://www.healthyplace.com/relationships/healthy-relationships/how-to-open-up-and-reveal-yourself-to-others Have you ever thought about the effects of being a good listener on being able to open up? It may help to start by listening to others problems before opening up about your own. Journaling is another interesting technique that could help you express how you feel without the stress of other's judgement. Just a couple thoughts!
  • Anna's Oct 3, 03:48 comment on How can gun violence be avoided?
    Adelphe, your article truly interested me. Within my lifetime the number of school shootings has increased tremendously and we as a society have become desensitized to these traumatic and barbaric events. As a teenager as well it is also mind boggling how people our age can gain access to guns so easily without any background checks. Have you participated in March For Our Lives? It is truly an amazing movement that allows people like us to have a voice and make a difference. Here is the link https://marchforourlives.com/ . Is there an increased amount of violence in the Bronx? If you find more on this topic I would love to read it! Thank you for the information?
  • Hailey Grandy's Oct 3, 03:48 comment on Animal Research
    HI Guadalupe, this was a very interesting take on animal testing. I found it interesting when you said "potential animal rights violations are outweighed by human benefit". Animal testing is often looked at as a bad thing, so it was in was different to hear a positive side of it. Thank you for writing this piece. I hope to see more research works from you in the future because your truly had an interesting perspective.
  • Anna's Oct 3, 03:36 comment on Benefit of Higher Education
    Also I was wondering what level of higher education you believe could extend lifespan?
  • Anna's Oct 3, 03:32 comment on Benefit of Higher Education
    Lining, your article truly fascinated me. I have never thought there could be a correlation between higher education and lifespan, though I can see how they could connect. I found it especially interesting because I am applying for college at the moment in order to further my education and therefore your findings directly affect me. I found a source you may be interested in that dives even deeper into the content of the subject, http://www.ibtimes.com.au/does-education-affect-life-expectancy-1291160 . Thanks for informing me about this topic!
  • Lindsey's Oct 3, 03:24 comment on Stress throughout the week…. yay!
    Bladimiro, this article gave me so much joy. Not only was I able to relate to your problems, but I was forced to sit and think about how I handle my own stress. I don't personally release stress through anger, but instead intense emotional breakdowns. I too am a bit of a procrastinator, which only causes further stress, but maybe trying something like journaling will help me keep it in check. Thanks for this thought-provoking submission.
  • Skye's Oct 3, 02:49 comment on Dress Codes: more harm than help?
    The description of "enforcing the idea that the workers “were unable to control themselves” because they saw another human body" perfectly exemplifies the cause for dress codes in our schools. Pointing out how the clothing market makes it difficult for young women to abide by dress codes is something I had never considered.
  • Skye Fredericks's Oct 3, 02:45 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Your description of anxiety is very vivid, and so accurate. I really like how thoughtfully you connected it to people who may not suffer from it on a day-to-day basis.
  • Griffin's Oct 3, 02:01 comment on Is minimum wage too minimum?
    I agree with the statement: "Raising wages will reduce income inequality because the people making minimum wage will earn more per year reducing the gap in pay." Although this may seem like a self-explanatory statement, there are actually many nuances that go along with this assumption. The basis for comparison is the current economic salary of minimum wage workers, and assuming all else remains equal, this assumption will hold true. The problem comes with the company's decisions to hire less workers because of higher wages for the lowest paid workers. The entire salary system is based of off productivity and fundamental principles of "work harder, get paid more". When a job requires the same qualifications but has an increase in salary, companies will simply hire less people to do the job so they can save money. The result is an increase in inequality, and the money ends up being less distributed then before. The class of society that lives on minimum wage salary is not the class that puts the most back into the economy, or "the working class". The economy thrives on the middle class, not those who barely pass the economic threshold for being above the poverty line. I would love to hear more about the concerns surrounding increases or decreases in minimum wage.
  • Branigan's Oct 3, 01:52 comment on I believe in equal opportunity
    This is a very well written and meaningful peace of work. My parents also tell me to be thankful for what I have, as they grew up with very little, and they understand there are people who had even less than they did. The idea of equity in opportunity is an important idea as well, and the examples you used highlighted that. The autobiography "I am Malala" is a similar, first-hand look at this inequality in certain places in the world. I look forward to reading what you write next.
  • Griffin's Oct 3, 01:46 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Your description of anxiety is very accurate. "We all have some form of fear. In my case the anxiety I have is considered a mental illness." I really like this quote because you make an acknowledgment that everyone has some sort of fear/generalized anxiety, but most people do not have the serious anxiety that you experience. What is something that you have done to alleviate some of your anxiety? I would love to hear more about how anxiety has changed your daily habits and how this adaptation has made you a stronger person.
  • Branigan's Oct 3, 01:42 comment on The Death Penalty Debate
    I found it to be very good that you included both sides of this argument, which allows for the reader to learn your thoughts, but also obtain some of their own. It is such a tough argument to make, as it mainly comes down to personal opinion, but you did a good job to make it factual. I would just wonder slightly what your own view on this topic is? This is just such as heated topic, and news stations are constantly reporting on this issue, so that might be good resource to get an even wider range of opinions. I will definitely be back to read more.
  • Abigail's Oct 2, 21:31 comment on Should immigrants in the United States be given citizenship?
    Patricia, you bring up a very controversial subject in today's politics. I agree with you though. Our current challenges with immigration are tearing the country apart. We are a land built of immigrants, and I do not think we should start closing our borders now. Maybe, in order lessen the problems of illegal immigration, we should make legal immigration more obtainable. Therefore, those who would have snuck in illegally would be given another option. I found looking at the US Citizenship and Immigration Services website to be very informative on this subject. I can't wait to read your writing in the future
  • Abigail's Oct 2, 21:15 comment on Does everything happen for a reason?
    David, you ask a very profound question. You can see beyond the obvious and think deeper. I too at times wonder if there is any reason or rhyme to existence. The universe is so complex that at times it feels as if it is impossible. At other times it seems to be the opposite. I would love to know more about what you think about this topic. A book I recently read, Sapiens, provided a fascinating foundation to this question. I hope to see you explore this subject further in the future.
  • Isabella's Oct 2, 18:32 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    I think you provide a really important argument. We as humans tend to ignore issues like these and I can ultimately lead to even bigger problems in the future.
  • Jillian's Oct 2, 18:19 comment on The Death Penalty Debate
    Paul, I can see both sides. I feel for the families of those the criminal did his/her injustice against, however I also do believe that their are other ways to deal with criminals that do not take up all those resources you stated. What is your opinion in the matter? Thank you for sharing, I hope to see more of your writing in the future.
  • Jillian's Oct 2, 18:12 comment on The Importance of Creativity
    Chelsea, I 100% agree with your writing. As I get older I find myself getting more and more stressed about my future. Instead of using a creative outlet though, I use an athletic outlet. Finding these outlets I think is an essential part of not feeling overwhelmed, which is so important as we are entering adulthood. Thank you for sharing, hope to see some more of your thoughts soon!
  • Clara's Oct 2, 15:47 comment on Uniforms- Pros/Cons
    I can see both sides of this argument. I think both of these arguments have good reasoning, uniform is expensive but in some cases it may reduce bullying because it is one less thing people can be bullied for. I can see why you had problems with these articles too because there are many holes in the argument. What is your opinion?
  • Chanakya's Oct 2, 15:17 comment on Should Bottled Water Be Banned?
    I think you have a really good valid point that plastic bottles are an issue around the world; not only is it harmful to animals and the environment. But we also have to think about how the production of these bottles are also harmful to the environment. The only solution is either to use reusable bottles, or find a new alternative to plastic. But San Francisco is thinking right. The first step is to ban the bottles as a whole and recycle all the bottles in a way where it doesn't damage an ecosystem.
  • Tarek's Oct 2, 14:58 comment on Will Increased Gun Control Help To Make Schools Safer?
    Hello Hailey, I really enjoyed reading your post. I think the part about the 120.5:100 ratio was very good and an interesting statistic. I found an article that explains how it's difficult to talk about this topic, and I think you might like it. ( https://www.nytimes.com/2018/09/09/insider/ian-urbina-father-gun-control.html?rref=collection%2Ftimestopic%2FGun%20Control&action=click&contentCollection=timestopics&region=stream&module=stream_unit&version=latest&contentPlacement=4&pgtype=collection ) I hope to hear more from you, -Tarek
  • Matthew's Oct 2, 14:57 comment on Stop Bullying Now
    I liked what your article did, and I really liked that you called out that school for not updating its information on bullying, however, I don't feel as though this article is looking at the issue in the right way. It is extremely easy to say that bullying is bad, and I think that it is similar to having the bravery to say that murder isn't good. I think that you should focus on bystanders who don't do anything. I was the focus of bullying for years, and what hurt the most was when my friends would watch the show when I would get beaten, just because they didn't know what to do. This is essay lacks in this department, and I think that you bring up the same points too many times in a row. I get that bullying can get to suicide, you don't have to say it that many times if you don't add a statistic or some additional information that reinforcing the point. I am all for the structure of reinforcing a point repetitively, but suicide is a hot-button issue and will naturally stick out, leading to repeating it only weakening the argument. Also, I think using a week of school to stop bullying is a little funny. Most people who bully others nowadays do it inadvertently, which would then be not defined as bullying. I know that this has been long and I thank you for reading to this point, if you have.
  • Emmanuela's Oct 2, 14:30 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    I really like how you told your personal relationship to anxiety. It truly helped further understand how anxiety feels, and made me more engaged and connected with you. Thank you for sharing your personal story 🙂
  • Emmanuela's Oct 2, 14:23 comment on Testing on Animals
    I like how you have both sides of the argument as well as providing links to your direct sources. Though you explained some of its effects on the animals maybe add specific examples of what products test on which animals.
  • Olivia's Oct 2, 03:03 comment on Dress Codes: more harm than help?
    Hey, Anika. This is a really interesting topic. I didn't know that parents were complaining of student's attire being distracting or that companies had a dress code to avoid distracting coworkers. I always just thought it was a part of looking professional in front of clients. Do you think that uniforms in the work place and and at school are a solution to dress code violations or a stricter version? I would love to hear more from you on this topic. Maybe you could discuss dress code variation based on location or age group.
  • Christopher's Oct 2, 02:22 comment on Does everything happen for a reason?
    David, you are a deep thinker. I like that you are asking the tough questions. I too grapple with my existence on a daily basis, and a lot of the every-day evidence points to a chaotic universe devoid of a purpose. I'm reading Stephen Hawking's A Brief History of Time right now, and I think the argument for a unified theory that gives order to everything may be impossible to come by. I'd definitely read the book if I were you, and perhaps consider the cause and effect relationships inherent in our lives. Your last line is a great way of leaving things: always open to new information that comes down the pipeline.
  • Christopher's Oct 2, 02:13 comment on Are people entitled to free healthcare?
    I like how you approach this issue, Matt. I am a pretty practical person, and I like to think that many of the problems arising in the world, especially health care, are driven by numbers and hard data. You draw attention to the simple cause and effect of lack of money and exacerbated medical problems. I think you ought to look into how free health care has worked in some the "25 wealthiest countries" you mention. Indeed, people do need regular, fair treatment in a modern world that can afford it to them.
  • Olivia's Oct 2, 02:12 comment on Is it ethical to use data from Nazi medical experiments?
    Hey, Mario. I am very interested in this topic and just wanted to ask a question about a statement you made. If the person was stressed when they died would it be detrimental to the data? Would someone who is accidentally submerged into freezing water going to panic as well? I would be very interested in seeing more information from you on this subject. The article you have a link to seems credible and I learned things I had not known like the work the Nazis did on hypothermia. Another article on what the Nazis researched and why it should not be used would be helpful, especially if it had specific examples of studies or families being upset about data being used.
  • Yulisa's Oct 2, 01:57 comment on Does everything happen for a reason?
    David, I really like the way you contrasted both separate questions. When you talked about how not one single person can program anything and everything, it really made me wonder why people always say "everything happens for a reason", even though it technically can't. There are many interesting documentaries you could find that support this idea even more. I really enjoy watching anything about this topic, and they all say the same thing that you are saying. I would love to hear what you have to say about this after exploring more sources on this topic.
  • Johnny's Oct 2, 00:16 comment on Does everything happen for a reason?
    Very interesting and broad question, David. Definitely looking at the bigger picture. I think this is a common question that everyone would like to know, but there't no real evidence, just plenty of theories. I would definitely like to know my purpose in this world, however that's something that we discover later in life, and not always at the moment this question is posed to us. Props to you for looking at the bigger picture though. If i had to come to an answer, I would say everything does happen for a reason and its just God's plan. Keep looking further into this!
  • 2019 Elena Justice's Oct 2, 00:01 comment on I believe in equal opportunity
    I agree with your points about equal opportunity and i really liked when you talked about your mother influencing you. I especially liked this quote "My mother made me realize that not everyone on earth had the opportunity to an education like mine" I liked this quote because you called attention to ignorance and how to avoid it.Your post reminds me of i book i read called "children of the river" in the terms of opportunities being given to certain people but not others.I enjoyed this post and i would enjoy reading more about your opinion on equal opportunities.
  • Chris's Oct 1, 23:56 comment on Standardized Mess
    I think your topic was very interesting because as seniors in high school we have all experienced and had to study for standardized testing. You made some very interesting points that I have personally experienced, and I think that bringing awareness to this issue is very important. Do you have any ideas on how to possibly fix this?
  • Katherine's Oct 1, 23:52 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Tori, I really liked this piece! I liked your point that everyone has anxiety in some shape or form and can relate this to my anxious moments. I thought that your depictions of anxiety in sentences such as, “I will examine every person in a store and watch every move around me thinking what if this happens what if that happens” were really great and you did a great job letting the audience know what your experience with anxiety is really like. Thank you for being so vulnerable and sharing your experience! I look forward to seeing what you write in the future.
  • Katherine's Oct 1, 23:43 comment on Punishing the Punisher
    Halley, this is a great point! I really liked how you added other solutions to the issue of capital punishment at the end. This reminded me a lot of the debates my theology class had last year about the morality of capital punishment. Although we only answered if it was or was not ethical, it surely would have been interesting to discuss other options besides life in prison and the death penalty. Your connection to gun control (“There are also methods that involve increasing gun control and focusing on early intervention in the lives of at risk people”) was very interesting! I look forward to seeing what you write next! Nice job!
  • Gwendolyn's Oct 1, 22:54 comment on What’s the Deal with Performance-Enhancing Drugs?
    Lindsey, I found your article very interesting. I particularly enjoyed your example about asthma. I had never thought of that as an enhancement, but you are right that people who need inhalers are enhancing their performance. I also thought that your inclusion of the history behind doping added to my understanding of the current issue. Your question that "If that player has a natural disadvantage, why do they get to absolve that?" really made me think about all the things that could be considered enhancement if enhancements were defined as anything that improved any players' performance. Things like migraine medication or painkillers could be considered enhancements because they would help the player to play better. My sister needed a lot of medication when she was playing basketball because of her Crohns disease. This experience makes me inclined to think that enhancements should only be illegal if they do not serve to level the playing field and instead serve only to give some player a competitive advantage. One thing I think you could add would be a specific example of an athlete that lost his/her awards due to doping. This article talks about Lance Armstrong's doping (https://www.cnn.com/2013/01/15/health/armstrong-ped-explainer/index.html) and I think it could add a commonplace to your essay. I really look forward to reading your future posts. I hope that you will continue to use sports topics and possibly incorporate your unique perspective as a former competitive gymnast. I would love to know what your opinion is on what should be considered illegal enhancements. Thank you for the great read Lindsey!
  • Gwendolyn's Oct 1, 21:51 comment on This I Believe : Haiti
    I absolutely love your essay Grace! I really enjoyed your descriptions of what you did with the kids. I also really appreciated that you commented on how the experience made you more grateful for everything that you have. The line "It showed me how much impact you can make by doing the smallest of things" really resonated with me. You went on an amazing adventure and you did so many great things to help out the community. But you also realized how much of an impact one can make by just doing something small. One reason that I really liked your essay was that it reminded me of my service trip to Thailand. I remember feeling so lucky for everything that I had once I saw kids with almost nothing. I also remember feeling guilty for all the times I had complained about first world problems like how my steak was under cooked. Did you feel any of that? I am would love to learn more about the overall situation that was going on in Haiti when you went. This link could help you explain the dire poverty these people you helped were in (http://web.worldbank.org/WBSITE/EXTERNAL/TOPICS/EXTPOVERTY/EXTPA/0,,contentMDK:20207590~menuPK:435735~pagePK:148956~piPK:216618~theSitePK:430367,00.html). I think those details could make your essay even better. I hope that you continue to write about this topic because I think a lot of people, even if they have been on a service trip, need to be reminded of how lucky we are. I also think your message that it is important to help others regardless of their nationality or beliefs is a message that the world could really use right now. Thank you for writing this Grace! 👍
  • Clara's Oct 1, 20:43 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    Your personal experience is something I can relate to. I agree, anxiety is something everyone deals with. The variance in which we experience anxiety is what makes us all different, which we need to embrace, but if everyone can understand that we are all the same in some ways, I think there would be less stigma around mental illness.
  • Anthony's Oct 1, 20:43 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    I think this post is very interesting. You describe anxiety so well, I feel like it helps people connect with what your saying. "You know that feeling you get standing on stage about to read your speech in front of 100 people? The sweaty hands you get. That is anxiety!" This helped me connect to the anxiety you were talking about throughout the post. I read more about anxiety at https://adaa.org/understanding-anxiety, this source taught me more about the condition. This connection you give your audience will bring me back to read more from you.
  • Hailey's Oct 1, 20:42 comment on Dress Codes: more harm than help?
    Hi Annika, I really liked your post about dress codes. I especially lied when you said "now they have grown into a form of control over students". I can relate to this because I have been told that I am dressed inappropriately several times, and it feels like the adult is just trying to show that they can do that because they are an administrator and they have power over me. Thank you so much for sharing this. I feel like it will be very impact in the future and help stand up to sexism and power trips.
  • Raine's Oct 1, 20:42 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    I loved how you expressed your story and shared your point of view. This is challenging topic to speak about, and you presented it in a really well done way.
  • Raine's Oct 1, 20:40 comment on Research Done by a High School Senior on Marijuana (specifically Medical)
    I like how you had a formal tone throughout the paper and stated your opinion very nicely and did a good job overall!
  • Matt's Oct 1, 20:39 comment on I Believe in Self Confidence
    I agree with your post Conor. Having confidence is very important. This reminds me of "fake it till you make it." I think that works.
  • Chris's Oct 1, 20:39 comment on Where will I be in the future?
    Hi Natalie, I am also 17 and wondering what I am going to do with my life. I have some ideas, but at this point nothing is final. I would love to travel with my family as well. What type of business are you going to run?
  • Johnny's Oct 1, 20:04 comment on Standardized Mess
    Interesting topic, William. This topic stood out to me because I think the ACT standardized test is a very unfair way to learn about how intelligent someone is. For example I have a higher than average GPA and I take rigorous courses; I would consider myself an outgoing student. However, my ACT score is much lower than a lot of other people's which might be misleading to colleges if they rely solely on my test scores for admission. They do have other portions for admission which includes an essay, letters of recommendation from teachers, your grades from high school, along with everything else included in your application. This is a very interesting topic to be further discussed!
  • Julissa's Oct 1, 18:49 comment on Abortion: Who’s choice is it?
    Good point Madison. Seeing the points you brought are valid and make a point. I like what you said here," the individual human life begins at the fetus or when the sperm meets the egg, and that makes abortion killing innocent human beings." I know from my beliefs and views that life truly does begin at the fetus or when the sperm meets the egg. Although many do not believe that this is not true, but we have to look and see that everyone, whether they are out of the womb or not have a right to live, whether the mother wants them or not. I found this article that explains and looks into the history of abortion and how it has come a long way(https://www.theatlantic.com/magazine/archive/1997/05/abortion-in-american-history/376851/) I enjoyed reading this and replying. I hope we can talk about this some more.
  • Maggie's Oct 1, 18:30 comment on Are elections in the United States fair?
    Olivia, your argument is articulate and well-researched. I agree with the fact that gerrymandering is a big problem is the US. Until gerrymandering ends, elections in America won't be fair. I particularly enjoyed when you said, "In other words, our elections are being corroded by the people on the inside taking shortcuts or twisting the rules to help them win." I think that it really well summarized your ideas in a short sentence. This article (https://www.fairvote.org/this_is_how_we_end_gerrymandering) explains possible solutions to ending gerrymandering. I'd love for you to read the article and tell me if you think that ending gerrymandering is a realistic goal.
  • Audrey's Oct 1, 18:27 comment on Is minimum wage too minimum?
    I agree with your argument that minimum wage should be increased. I liked how you explained the argument for both sides. One quote that stood out to me was when you said "The money given to the employees will go right back into the economy because the working class is the main consumers" I think this quote summarizes my beliefs on why minimum wage should be raised. Here is a link to an article that I think relates to your argument well(https://www.epi.org/publication/why-america-needs-a-15-minimum-wage/). Overall it was a good argument.
  • Ruby's Oct 1, 18:26 comment on Health benefits
    Great job in this post Madeline. I really liked how you gave background of the topic as well as providing information into what euthanasia and medical marijuana are. I think that if you tried to mix the two topics together it would give the writing a little bit more cohesion for a more even flow. I liked when you said "the right to death is as important as the right to live, a natural right, and should be granted to each individual no matter what their circumstance. " This was a very strong statement that gave your writing a kind of sturdiness that makes you trust the topic.
  • Ari's Oct 1, 18:26 comment on Healthcare
    I really enjoy your take on this issue. I agree that America could exponentially and universally benefit from having free healthcare available to all people. Canada's system is a great example of the inalienable human right to health being acknowledged and respected. What would the effects be for the economy if free healthcare was provided?
  • Isabella's Oct 1, 18:26 comment on My Worry Is A Mental Illness?
    I like how you illustrated the feeling of anxiety. We all experience it, some more than others. Personally, I anxiety and I can relate to you in the sense that I always feel like I am in a room full of eyes. Anxiety is a hard thing to go through, but to know that others go through the same thing, you feel not so alone. Thank you for sharing such a vulnerable statement.
  • Yulisa's Oct 1, 18:26 comment on Should the Death Penalty be Legal?
    Clara, I think you provide really valid reasons as to why people think the death penalty should be either legal, or illegal. The quote from Pope Francis was very interesting to read and taught me how the Catholic Church views this issue, which I didn't know before. However, I have read other sources that talk about how much more money is spent by housing criminals than by sentencing them to the death penalty, so I would like to know which is more accurate. If you find out more about the money spent, I would love to hear more about it.
  • William's Oct 1, 18:25 comment on Water Bottle Ban
    Great job on the post James. You did a good job at providing factual evidence for the issue and using scientific understanding to further add to your point. You bring up reasons that I did not previously know like the plastics in the bottles being endocrine system disrupters. I have to agree that legislation is probably required because as much as people want to support this issue, mass amounts of people are still numb to the problem of plastic bottles. Overall, good use of fact based evidence and incorporation of the scientific reasoning behind the issue of plastic water bottles.
  • Anika's Oct 1, 18:25 comment on Banning Books
    I really like what you're trying to say here, Katherine. Books have always been a big part of the human experience and by banning certain topics, awareness about the world is being taken away from children. This reminds me of how Nazis attempted to burn all the books relating to subjects that they did not agree with. People have the right to read what they want. You said, "Banning books also interferes with The First Amendment. In addition to protecting one’s freedom of speech, The First Amendment also protects freedom of religion, which books are often banned for." I'm really interested to see what else you have to say on this subject. Well done!
  • Katelynn's Oct 1, 18:22 comment on Should the Death Penalty be Legal?
    This is a really interesting piece, Clara. I enjoyed how you presented both sides of the argument and gave them equal weight. I especially liked when you said "... it is only an industry that benefits attorneys and criminals meanwhile taking taxpayers dollars." The thought of the death penalty benefiting lawyers and taking taxpayers' money is something I had never thought about. I only wish the piece was a little longer and had more detail. I look forward to seeing more of your writing because it's very concise and straightforward.
  • Ari's Oct 1, 18:19 comment on Should the Death Penalty be Legal?
    I like how you illustrate two different sides of the issue in detail. It's reflective of how to issue is currently being debated and the common opinions on it.
  • Chanakya's Oct 1, 14:56 comment on I believe in equal opportunity
    I completely agree, you have a very good valid point that all people should be treated equal not matter their race, religon, ethnicity, or even physical shape. It is inhumane.
  • Zane Liebert's Sep 28, 16:41 comment on Will Increased Gun Control Help To Make Schools Safer?
    I agree that there should be more gun control especially for schools.
  • Maggie's Sep 28, 03:09 comment on Does pursuing research about a potential “gay” gene promote an inherent homophobic bias?
    Mariah, I think your article was articulate and very well supported. Your use of statistics made this article comprehensive and easy to understand. Your article was very interesting and I think you did a great job!
  • Jenifer's Sep 27, 22:04 comment on Testing on Animals
    Estimado Raine: Estoy muy asombrada por tu poema, "Pruebas en animales" porque que un animal no es para hacer una prueba si no al contrario es para darle cariño y amor. Una frase que se destaca para mi es "Que las pruebas para animales son innecesarias". Creo que esto es algo que enverdad se aprecia, porque un animal no tiene que ser sometido a una prueba para los productos del ser humano. Un animal tambien sufre físicamente y emocionalmente, pues es un ser vivo. por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes continuación, porque en realidad es muy interesante este tema, me gustaría saber más . Jenifer
  • Abel's Sep 27, 13:20 comment on Will Increased Gun Control Help To Make Schools Safer?
    i agree that guns are dangerous and that they r used to kill people but ,in my opinion us human is the biggest issue because we are the ones that kill people we Gotta find those who are capable of doing crazy things with guns .i agree that gun is a big issue but people are the biggest issues cause guns don't 'just come up to u and kill u ,is us humans who do it .So what i,m trying to say is that we shouldn't focus a 100%of the the gun issue ,we should focus more on the ones who do it or capable of doing it .
  • Elijah Ragoonan's Sep 27, 12:18 comment on Should Prostitution Be Legal?
    This is a valid argument but I have questions could you add me on snapchat so we could discuss more about this topic?
  • Chandan's Sep 27, 12:08 comment on Is drinking milk beneficial to humans?
    Unsaturated fats are easier for the body to break down.
  • EJ's Sep 27, 12:01 comment on James Gatz’s Quest for Love
    This really does a great job exploring James and how he is looking for love, not lust
  • Abigail's Sep 27, 03:01 comment on Testing on Animals
    You did a very good job at describing the negative effects of animal testing but I was curious as to which animals this applies to. Are ants ok to test on?
  • Chanakya's Sep 27, 00:30 comment on Dress Codes: more harm than help?
    I agree that dress codes are good. They help people not stand out, and and less stressful to think about what you'll wear for school in the morning. But the way people get treated for it is unreasonable. Especially at Judge when the faculty and staff prioritize something like "an untucked shirt" to stop class to tuck in their shirt.
  • Evelyn's Sep 26, 16:17 comment on Mother’s love
    Dear Jocelin I am amazed with your poem, because your poem shows that mothers are very important and work to get ahead and for household expenses. A phrase that you wrote that is outstanding for min is very important the subject of my mom and we are very willing to have our mom. Thanks for your writing. I hope to see what you write, because your poem is very important to me, what is your favorite food that your mother does to you? Evelyn
  • Jose's Sep 26, 16:13 comment on Are the Current Gun Laws Sufficient?
    estimado Tarek estoy asombrado por tu publicación. Las personas deberían investigar y formar sus propias opiniones sobre cualquier tema en particular. Una de las frases que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es Uno de los problemas principales es que muchos ciudadanos de Estados Unidos basan sus opiniones en una cosa que escucharon en una fuente de noticias, Gracias por tu publicación . Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación porque me dejastes motivad Jose Alvarez
  • Veronica's Sep 26, 16:12 comment on Unconditional love
    Dear Jessica:  I am amazed about your publication "Unconditional love" because it makes me think about the love of what it means and what it means for this world without feeling that it is love and how people are at the moment of demonstrating it. One phrase that you wrote that is highlighted for me is "What is love? Is it what we have when we look at each other?" I think this is beautiful because we do not know if it is a feeling because we are all different at the moment to talk about love. Thank you for your writing I hope to see what you wrote next because your publications about love are nice Veronica.
  • heriberto's Sep 26, 16:10 comment on Do violent video games increase youth violence?
    Estimado Amani: Estoy asombrado por tu tema”Do violent video games increase youth violence?porque aprendi sobre las actitudes de estos juegos. y son muy malos los más violentos. change a child’s or adolescent’s personality y de resolver los problemas a golpes cuando se puede solucionar con un perdón gracias por tu escritura espero que escribas a continuación y aprender sobre tus temas.
  • Samantha's Sep 26, 16:09 comment on The Fine Art Photographer
    Dear Grace: I am surprised and delighted by your post "The Fine Art Photographer," because you know what you like and take time to do what you like and also surprise and I love how you express yourself. One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is "What I know is that I enjoy taking photos and thinking creatively about the photos I take." I think this is very nice that you know what you like and what you want to do because is what you like to do and why you take the time to dedicate it to what you like. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because I liked the way you express yourself and the way you spend time doing what you like the most and also the way you want to improve the way you take the pictures and learn new things. Samantha
  • Sofia's Sep 26, 16:08 comment on Testing on Animals
    Estimado Raine Estoy asombrada por su artículo ''las pruebas en animales ''porque yo también estoy de acuerdo en que las pruebas en los animales también sufren al igual que nosotros y pueden hacer estas pruebas con otras alternativas. Una frase que usted escribió la cual me gusto es '' no creo que los animales deben tener que someterse al sufrimiento para que la gente tenga un producto'' porque usted tiene la razón. Gracias por tu escritura .Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación , por que quiero aprender más sobre las pruebas en los animales.
  • Alejandro's Sep 26, 16:06 comment on Water Bottle Ban
    Estimado james Creo que estoy de acuerdo con el tema que mostraste su poema es sobre un tema de la que si me interesa sobre la contaminacion del plastico y la sobre utilización de botellas de plástico que se usan mas de 1500 botellas de plástico por segundo que daña al mundo por no ser biodegradable y alos animales la imagen sobre su tema es exactamente la adecuada y el título ban botella de agua está completamente relacionado con el tema porque el demasiado uso de botellas para cualquier tipo de bebida es dañino para todos una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es (Hay cerca de 50 mil millones de botellas de plástico que se consumen cada año) nosotros mismos debemos hacer el cambio para reducir el uso de botellas de plástico porque hace daño a los animales gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque tú escribes sobre la realidad la realidad que estamos viviendo hoy en dia espero volver aver algún otro de tus poemas y tus pensamientos sigue asi. Alejandro Maciel Magana
  • Rodolfo's Sep 26, 16:06 comment on Are the Current Gun Laws Sufficient?
    Estimado Tarek: Estoy asombrado sobre su publicación porque. Uno de los problemas principales es que muchos ciudadanos de Estados Unidos basan sus opiniones en una cosa que escucharon en una fuente de noticia. Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es que las personas tienen derecho a sus propias opiniones, ya sea a favor o en contra del control de armas. y creo que tienes mucha razón sobre esto. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribas a continuación porque me dejastes motivado Rodolfo
  • Claudia Figueroa's Sep 26, 15:55 comment on Child Vaccination
    Estimada Abigail: Estoy muy asombrada con tu poema, " Child vaccination " porque me parece muy interesante ya que de alguna manera compartimos el mismo interés hacia las vacunas. Una frase que destaca para mi es " La vacunación infantil es un paso esencial para crear inmunidad a enfermedades prevenibles a una edad temprana " porque muchos de los papas de mi comunidad no estan tomado en cuenta lo importante que es la vacunación para sus hijos. Gracias por tu escritura espero ver lo que escribes a continuation porque quiero aprender mas sobre lo importante que son las vacunas para los children.
  • Eduardo's Sep 26, 15:51 comment on Do violent video games increase youth violence?
    Estimado Amani: Estoy asombrado port tu tema"Do violent video games increase youth violence?porque aprendi sobre las actitudes de estos juegos change a child’s or adolescent’s personality y de resolver los problemas a golpes cuando se puede solucionar con un perdon gracias por tu escritura espero que escribas a continuación y aprender sobre tus temas
  • Maria's Sep 26, 15:42 comment on Testing on Animals
    Estimado Raine: Estoy asombrada por tu poema ¨"Las pruebas con animales,¨ por que me parece muy interesante, ya que de alguna maneras compartimos el mismo interés así los animales. Una frase que destaca para mi es, ¨La experimentación con animales hace que los animales sometidos a estas pruebas para sentir el dolor físico, así como la angustia emocional,¨ porque esta es una realidad de lo que está pasando con los animales. Y leyendo este tipo de escritura podemos tomar un poco mas de conciencia sobre este tema. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribas a continuación, porque quiero aprender mas sobre animales. Maria
  • Sean's Sep 26, 15:16 comment on Gun Control
    This is a well written discussion on both sides concerning gun control and how guns are distributed in the United States. I do wonder however, what is your opinion on gun control and how should the states separately control guns?
  • James's Sep 26, 15:16 comment on Should the Death Penalty be Legal?
    You addressed the issue in a quick and concise manner that shows a plethora of valid points. However the opposing ideals of the death penalty are not presented.
  • Abby's Sep 26, 15:15 comment on Should the Death Penalty be Legal?
    I really like how you presented your idea but perhaps add more detail.
  • Mack's Sep 26, 15:15 comment on Sports and Brain Injuries
    I like the argument a lot and this is big in a lot of kids lives today. This post was well written, but I would maybe mention the sport that causes these injuries such as Football, Lacrosse, and etc.
  • Raine's Sep 26, 15:15 comment on Healthcare
    I really enjoyed your discussion of this topic. You made many convincing points. You also present many sides of the situation
  • Anna's Sep 26, 15:15 comment on What’s the Deal with Performance-Enhancing Drugs?
    You did a fantastic job of recognizing both sides of the argument. Perhaps you could end it with more of a question that keeps people thinking rather than stating what you learned. Great job though!
  • Clara's Sep 26, 15:15 comment on Healthcare
    Based on the article you referenced, I would agree that Canada's healthcare seems only logical for us too. However, I am wondering what it would cost America to get to the same point of free healthcare as Canada?
  • Lindsey's Sep 26, 15:14 comment on Testing on Animals
    What are your thoughts on animal testing when it comes to finding cures for life-threatening diseases? Is this just as unnecessary, or is it justifiable?
  • Branigan's Sep 26, 15:14 comment on Water Bottle Ban
    I enjoyed your essay, and felt you used good resources
  • Skye's Sep 26, 15:14 comment on Should the Death Penalty be Legal?
    Your introduction to an opposing opinion is really good. I like the contrast of ideas.
  • Hailey's Sep 26, 15:14 comment on Testing on Animals
    I agree with your point that animal testing is wrong. Brands do not have to test on animals to see if their product is effective or not.
  • Sera's Sep 26, 15:14 comment on Testing on Animals
    Paragraph 2 sentence 2, "sense" should be "since" 🙂
  • Chris's Sep 26, 15:14 comment on Gun Control
    Your post is very well written. You addressed the issue very well and wrote a very informative essay around the issue of gun control. #gunsafety
  • Amani's Sep 26, 03:56 comment on
    Li, this is a very interesting and thought provoking essay. I enjoyed reading it and I loved how you used different points of argument to strength your writing. For example, you talked about how app designers try to make their games as addictive as possible, and not only do they take away your money, but "they are stealing your time" as well. I also liked that you talked about how people, especially girls these days, are dependent on their likes on social media and they are obsessed with getting a "perfect selfie look". You did a good job of planting seeds of thought into your audience's mind and forcing them to think about how smartphones are affect them and their lives. Everything you said really resonates with me as well as probably any other teenager, or adult even. An article that I think you would find interesting is about how "Smartphone technology is slowly taking over our lives" (http://www.laloyolan.com/opinion/smartphone-technology-is-slowly-taking-over-our-lives/article_610f2815-992b-5dd8-b6b3-6180575495e5.html). In your conclusion you stated the positive and negative of smartphones, but in the main body of your essay you mainly discussed the negatives. Does that mean you believe smartphones are doing more harm than good? Or are you at a neutral position? I would love to read more of your argumentative work, it is very interesting.
  • Amy's Sep 26, 03:32 comment on Taxes between rich and poor
    This is a very compelling argument that you make, Fredrick. The fact you inserted at the end of your post, about how the "U.S. Treasury is expected to run a 2017 deficit of $693 billion," was a strong statistic to convince people about the importance of this issue. In general, I agree that the wealthy should need to contribute more in taxes than the lower and middle classes because they are able to do so while still maintaining a good standard of living. This post reminded me of the book "Aftershock" by Robert Reich, and the movie "Inequality for All" which is based off of Reich's book. I look forward to hearing more about your ideas on taxes, and good luck with your research.
  • Yulisa's Sep 26, 01:40 comment on Is drinking milk beneficial to humans?
    Olivia, I like how you used both sides of the argument to address the controversy over milk. However, the cons of drinking milk stood out more to me, because it surprised me how many risks there are when it comes to the production of milk which people tend to usually avoid talking about. I will definitely think more consciously next time I drink milk, and decide whether the benefits are greater than the costs or vice versa.
  • Mariah's Sep 25, 21:27 comment on Is Technology limiting Creativity Pt.1
    Christopher, I agree that technology has an impact on the ability of kids to find a creative outlet. However, I don't think that it is necessarily leading to a less creative society. Technology allows many people to find access to more resources that allow them to grow in creativity. I think that we as a society need to prioritize how much time we spend on electronics. When used too much, it hinders our ability to experience boredom and therefore have our own creative enlightenment. Here is an article that I think best describes an alternative viewpoint (https://www.forbes.com/sites/gregsatell/2014/01/27/how-technology-enhances-creativity/#5f7ce42c3f50).
  • Audrey's Sep 25, 20:44 comment on Do violent video games increase youth violence?
    Amani, I really like the way you structured your argument. I think your transitions flowed well together. I didn't realize the impact violent video games have on a youth population although it makes sense how you explains that it is violent video games in combination with other factors, such as an unstable family life. I think this insight will encourage me to research this topic further.
  • Ozzie's Sep 25, 20:44 comment on Dress Codes: more harm than help?
    I really liked what you wrote Anika, it really highlighted the inequality that plagues young females all over the country. It also really made me more aware of what is happening around me with this topic, I had no idea about the court case wanting to put a dress code on interns. It was enlightening and informative, yet well written and had a clear point of view.
  • Ruby's Sep 25, 20:43 comment on Should the Death Penalty be Allowed?
    This is a good introduction of the death penalty that I don't think most people know. I like how you brought up the significance it has on one particular state. I would like to know what are the other states that have the highest rate of people killed on death row.
  • Katelynn's Sep 25, 20:43 comment on Net Neutrality
    I really liked your take on both sides of the issue but I think you should put a little more information on what net neutrality is and why people should care about it. What you have is really well written but I think a few more sentences about net neutrality would really strengthen this piece.
  • William's Sep 25, 20:43 comment on Milk: A Dying Trend or a Lost Wonder?
    I like the way you gave two different reasons for decline of milks popularity. I did not think about the advent of different drink alternatives as one of the causes of milks decline. I have noticed the general decline of milk drinking, especially in a family that does not drink milk due to the calcium. Overall, great job on the milk education.
  • Grace's Sep 25, 20:42 comment on Should Prostitution Be Legal?
    It’s interesting to see this take on prostitution. In today’s world, we have begun to romanticize sex work, as previously said, and it’s difficult to see how it’s negatively affecting the ones who are doing it. Another arguement to bring into this is why not decriminalize it while offering resources and support to the women who are negatively affected by it? Changing the laws and the way we handle things in terms of prostitution for the common good. Is there even a way to do that?
  • Katherine's Sep 25, 20:41 comment on Creating a Cult of Perfectionism
    These are all great points and they are all very compelling! I loved how you commented on the decline in acceptance rates at top colleges because that is very applicable and often understated. The Cheney High School teacher has an interesting approach and I'm glad you included that in your response. I was able to relate to quite a lot of this! Nice job, Maggie!
  • Julissa's Sep 25, 20:41 comment on Should the Drinking Age Be Lowered in the US?
    This is a really interesting argument. But I think the argument for lowering the drinking age is not to strong. Although it can probably show youth to be more responsible, it can still be damaging and hurting them. Here, we have it at 21 specifically because of the brain development. Perhaps there is more research needed to be done to define and solidify the argument of lowering the drinking age.
  • Katie's Sep 25, 20:40 comment on Dress Codes: more harm than help?
    I agree that dress codes are too confining and frankly ridiculous. One point that I've also heard made is that dress codes are insulting to both girls and boys. Assuming that a girl showing off her shoulders would be too distracting for boys to handle implies that boys have no self-control. It's demeaning for all the students involved, and there's really no reason for it.
  • Johnny's Sep 25, 20:40 comment on Dress Codes: more harm than help?
    This is an aspect of uniforms that I never considered. It seems like more of a convoluted subject. I really never thought more of uniforms than being a standard thing for all students to wear to make the school appear more professional. Reading this post gave me a little enlightenment about different perspectives about the pros and cons of wearing uniforms. Fascinating Post!
  • Elena's Sep 25, 20:40 comment on Standardized Mess
    I liked your title it was very clever. I also liked how you brought to my attention that standardized tests sometimes don't do what they were created to do, in the terms of testing students evenly.
  • Anika's Sep 25, 20:39 comment on Should Prostitution Be Legal?
    I really like the argument that you're building against the legalization of prostitution. Maybe to help support your argument you should look into countries who have legalized it and the issues that their workers are facing. Overall it's very well written!
  • Christopher's Sep 25, 20:39 comment on The repeal of Net Neutrality
    Good fair and balanced argument. Time will indeed tell the full effects of this new legislation.
  • Gwendolyn's Sep 25, 20:38 comment on Does pursuing research about a potential “gay” gene promote an inherent homophobic bias?
    Mariah, I found your article very interesting. I found this article (http://www.abc.net.au/news/2018-04-21/gay-conversion-therapy-survivors-on-greg-hunt-comments/9679416) which talks about survivors of gay conversion therapy. It could bring in some more emotion to a very scientific topic. I thought your analysis was very through and made logical sense. I think you did a great job!
  • Emmanuela's Sep 25, 20:38 comment on Social Media, Good or Bad?
    maybe leave direct and specific examples of how each effect it has, or how it personally has affected you to give further insight to the reader
  • Isabella's Sep 25, 20:38 comment on Should Prostitution Be Legal?
    I agree with your ideas in the sense that you support the argument based off of sex trafficking. Many of the people in the sex work business are often forced into it with no choice but to make it their job. You stated a well thought out observation of the two main perspectives.
  • Olivia's Sep 25, 20:37 comment on Will lowering the legal drinking age lessen binge drinking?
    Did these sources have any data or were they all just arguments based on experience?
  • Miriam's Sep 25, 19:07 comment on Opioid Crisis
    The way you mention "this addiction is a national epidemic" really gives your argument depth. Why do you think that it is a big problem, like what from your life has made it a big issue for you? I think if you added specific information about opioid addiction, like statistics on how many people it affects, you could add a lot of validity to your discussion. Here is an article to help you out. https://www.painnewsnetwork.org/stories/2017/10/18/what-is-opioid-use-disorder I understand the affects and damage they cause because my parents are doctors and often have to talk about making the choice to prescribe opioids to their patients. But, since they are very addictive, they try to avoid needing them.
  • Joseph's Sep 25, 15:58 comment on
    Li, this post is very interesting. Everyone these days are obsessed about their iPhone and the next one coming out. Another negative about smartphones is that it decreases the need for in person interactions. There has been an obvious drop in people physically going out and interacting face to face with friends; instead they text them or speak to them over video game chat. I really liked this post of yours and I would definitely come back to learn more about restrictions or increases/decreases in smart phone use. Here is an interesting article on the use of social media and a decreases in physical interactions. https://rampages.us/peasedn200/2015/12/01/final-inquiry-project/
  • Mary's Sep 25, 15:43 comment on Do violent video games increase youth violence?
    Amani, I really liked this article and thought it was supper interesting. I agree with you that violent video games contribute will contribute to angry or violent feelings. I think that these feeling can contribute violent acts but are not the sole cause of these violent acts. It made me think about suicidal rates and how some people think that one factor drove someone to kill them self when really there were many other factors that people overlooked. Here's a link to another article that talks about video games and their affect on the brain. Hope to read more articles from you soon. (https://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/318345.php)
  • Amy's Sep 25, 15:38 comment on Are elections in the United States fair?
    I greatly enjoyed this information, Olivia. In particular, your final sentence that explained how "the system of our elections has had the ability to be fair in the past, but the spike in corruption and foul play has proved our elections have many shortcomings in terms of speaking for the people," was very effective in conveying your message. In a New York Times article, (https://www.nytimes.com/2018/01/04/opinion/gerrymandering-supreme-court.htm), the author explains two different ways to look at gerrymandering. I would love to hear more from you about the nature of our democracy and how that relates to voting.
  • Andrew's Sep 25, 15:31 comment on Where I’m From
    Nice poem, Maria.Your writing has great flow
  • Madison's Sep 25, 15:17 comment on My Stress Plan
    I can totally relate to this post because school is so stressful! And sometimes I just want to "punch my pillow or scream into for a short amount of time." But I found this really interesting article that I think you might enjoy. This article argues that we shouldn't punch our pillow and get mad instead we should focus on calming down and try to solve the problems in front of us. https://www.washingtonpost.com/archive/lifestyle/1999/03/29/angry-dont-punch-that-pillow-calm-down-instead/5fcea917-965e-41c5-a0ef-738a1f56a823/?utm_term=.4116e062c692
  • Isabell's Sep 25, 15:17 comment on Does poverty cause crime?
    Javier, This is a strong start to your project, and I agree that it is an important issue to address. I agree that there is a poverty cycle in disenfranchised communities, and it is unfair that government policies are not doing enough to support these communities. I think it would be important for you to propose solutions to this issue. An article from World Visions defines the poverty cycle, its effects, and potential ways to break the cycle. These ideas could be used as a platform to base proposals for the Oakland community. https://www.worldvision.ca/stories/child-sponsorship/what-is-the-cycle-of-poverty I look forward to your next post! Isabell
  • Mary's Sep 25, 15:17 comment on What’s happening now
    Hi Ronaysi, I like that you talked about Childish Gambino's music video and how it connects to violence in America. I have also watched the music video and really like how he showed how all these horrible things are happening in our world yet the media tries to make everyone ignore it and not see it. Here's a link to an article by rolling stone talking about how Donald Glover is bringing light to a conversation people want to ignore. (https://www.rollingstone.com/music/music-news/donald-glovers-this-is-america-is-a-nightmare-we-cant-afford-to-look-away-from-630177/). I really liked this article and i hope to read more articles by you.
  • Amani's Sep 25, 15:16 comment on Policing Immigration
    This is a very interesting outlook and argument regarding policing immigration, Gwen. I find your arguments about how immigrants' fear of deportation can affect the rest of the community, not only the immigrants directly. It is also interesting that you wrote about how what the police officers are doing is unconstitutional and not a part of their job, as they are supposed to be serving their community, their states and their country, not trying to deport undocumented immigrants. I definitely agree with you when you say "The police are there to protect the people in their jurisdiction and they cannot do that if there are people who are afraid to call and report crimes". I have been interesting in learning more about the actions some officials are taking in regards to immigration, and I have never come across this argument before. It is very thought provoking. I think another article that would be interesting to read is "Is it constitutional to lock up immigrants indefinitely?" (https://www.aclu.org/blog/immigrants-rights/immigrants-rights-and-detention/it-constitutional-lock-immigrants). It is not directly related police officers, however it does question the actions and decisions of the Supreme Court regarding locking up immigrants. Do you have any insight on this perspective? I am looking forward to reading more about your outlook and research on other controversial issues.
  • Alexandra's Sep 25, 15:16 comment on Separation of Church and State
    Amy, I really enjoyed your thoughts and argument on the separation of church and state in the United States. You integrated the NYT article very well into your second paragraph. You were able to seamlessly paraphrase it, but also keep the amount of information and credibility from the author. This reminds me of a video we are watching in my government class right now. It is call "It's a free country" and looks at the constitution in modern United States. https://youtu.be/Y4yYBpUot8o
  • Angelica's Sep 25, 15:15 comment on To Procrastinate, or Not to Procrastinate? That is the Question
    Veronica I found this story to be very interesting and to be quite accurate especially in my own life as a high school student. I tend to procrastinate a lot and it usually doesn't help me when trying to control my stress levels. When I finished reading your story it reminded me of a time I came across an article that spoke about the pros and cons of procrastination and how it's much better for our own personal health if we just do things when they need to be done. I thank you for writing about a topic that is so common ans used. http://journals.sagepub.com/doi/abs/10.1111/j.1467-9280.1997.tb00460.x
  • Matthew's Sep 25, 15:14 comment on GMO in foods … Dangerous
    I think that this essay is focusing too much upon what may be bad. As far as I see, there is no quantifiable evidence that says that GMOs are specifically bad. They aren't necessarily less nutritious, as Golden Rice has allowed many people to have a healthier alternative to what they could eat. (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Golden_rice) Another interesting part of the argument, which I feel is though you addressed, is the speculative nature of science related to GMOs. Humans have effected wildlife around us ever since we started to select what plants we want to eat and spread the seeds of. GMOs are just a furthering of this idea in a new, more specific direction. You have proper warrant to be scared of GMOs, but I think that benefits, in some cases, outweigh potential harms.
  • Kasandra's Sep 25, 15:14 comment on
    Interesting article, Li! The topics of cell phones is certainly a relevant one in today's society. I liked how you included that cell phones make our lives "more convenient" yet dominate our lives at the same time. Based on your post I think you would enjoy reading this article (http://www.cnn.com/2010/TECH/mobile/10/22/gahran.mobile.phone.lives/index.html) that I recently read. I look forward to seeing what you post next because this was definitely an interesting topic.
  • Mariah's Sep 25, 15:14 comment on Are elections in the United States fair?
    This is a very intriguing argument, Olivia. Gerrymandering is a very large issue in our current political state. It is a very big problem in Utah. Here is an example of an article that I found about how the unfair and inaccurate redistricting here is interfering with our ability to participate in democracy (https://www.sltrib.com/opinion/commentary/2018/08/26/commentary-utah-is/). I look forward to reading more from you! I enjoyed how you analyzed the situation and defined some terms that the audience might not be familiar with. Great job!
  • Sante's Sep 25, 15:12 comment on Do violent video games increase youth violence?
    Amani, I really enjoyed your post and specifically how you used your sources to help back your point, without them overwhelming your post. I’ve enjoyed playing video games pretty much my entire life, and the stigma that video games produce violent children is something I’ve heard on so many occasions. I thought how you identified and explained the misconception that while video games are linked to aggressive behavior, “aggression is not the same as violence.” I think looking at the article the National Center for Health Research wrote on Violent Video Games and Aggression. It touches on a lot of your points and is a federal institution which as a source has a lot of weight. Your writing style is both informative and engaging, which really helped me enjoy what i was reading while understanding the information. Does this apply to all video games, or just the ones that are qualified as violent? Is certain age more susceptible to the effects of violent video games than others? I’m excited to see what other topics you post about! http://www.center4research.org/violent-video-games-can-increase-aggression/
  • Joseph's Sep 25, 15:12 comment on Medical Marijuana
    Miriam, this post is very interesting and informative. When we think about the legalization and use of marijuana, we rarely think about the role insurance companies have in the process. If it is used for medical purposes, then why isn't insurance covering it? I think you would really enjoy an article I read about insurance companies and the growth of cannabis (link posted below). I would definitely come back to your posts to hear more about this rapid growth and to what sides states are taking in regards to the legality of the selective usage of cannabis. https://www.naic.org/cipr_topics/topic_cannabis_and_insurance.htm
  • Jacob's Sep 25, 15:10 comment on Should the Drinking Age Be Lowered in the US?
    Interesting theory Kasandra, but I think the argument that it should be lowered because people will do it illegally is a bit weak. The reason that the drinking age is higher in the USA is because it affects the development of brains. I also don't necessarily buy the argument people will drink more responsibly if it's legal. In my eyes, people will still party and therefore people will still drink. https://www.cnn.com/2014/07/15/health/science-drinking-age/index.html
  • Jacob's Sep 25, 15:09 comment on Stress throughout the week…. yay!
    I wasn't too sure about how to think about this article when I first clicked on it, but I'm glad I did. Bladimiro, you've really enlightened me here. I think that the whole idea of tracking your own personal thoughts was something that really resonated with me. Plus, the strategies you used to try and cope with the stress in your life. Try this resource for more ideas to help: http://www.apa.org/helpcenter/manage-stress.aspx
  • Kasandra's Sep 25, 15:08 comment on Medical Marijuana
    https://www.deseretnews.com/article/900033184/13-things-voters-should-know-about-utahs-medical-marijuana-initiative.html
  • Madison's Sep 25, 15:07 comment on Do violent video games increase youth violence?
    I loved this essay so much because of the detail and helpful evidence to back up your ideas. For example, you mentioned Mr. Anderson who is the director of the Center for the Study of Violence at Iowa State University. So you found someone who is an expert on your topic and found hard facts to support the idea if violent video games are having an aggressive reaction to the people who are playing the game. The essay was organized very neatly with the introduction to the facts or body and then ending with a strong conclusion that left the reader thinking. I thought it was very interesting how "studies that show that video games can increase the possibility of someone engaging in aggressive behaviors. However, they do not link video games with violence. " I always thought video games would result in aggression and violence. I found this really cool article that I think you would enjoy. https://videogames.procon.org
  • Andrew's Sep 25, 15:06 comment on Do violent video games increase youth violence?
    Great work Amani, I didn't know video games had such magnitude
  • Isabell's Sep 25, 15:03 comment on Separation of Church and State
    Amy, you provided effective examples for your argument. I found the comments of Trump administration most compelling because they are currently in positions of power. It is important to highlight any biases or views that influence their policy decisions. This reminded me of the influence of the LDS church in Utah’s government. I found a Huffington Post Article, similar to the one you linked, that calls attention to the lack of separation between church and state in Utah. What do you see or experience as an effect of the influence of religion in government? I look forward to reading your response because this could lead to the majority religion ruling and oppressing minority religions, which is evident in Utah. https://www.huffingtonpost.com/peter-harrison/the-lds-church-and-utah-p_b_9278128.html
  • Matthew's Sep 25, 14:58 comment on The Consequences of Legalizing Marijuana
    I thought by the title that you were going to just say that Marijuana is bad and not really add anything to the conversation. However, I really liked what you did. Try this website https://www.vox.com/cards/marijuana-legalization/what-is-medical-marijuana as I found it very interesting.
  • Miriam's Sep 25, 14:56 comment on Should the Drinking Age Be Lowered in the US?
    The way you mentioned "looking back in time" made me think of England and other European countries which have kept their drinking age lower than the United States'. When you said "look back in time", did you allude to the USA's old drinking age or Europe's? I found this article about drinking in Europe VS the USA because I think showing the difference could help support your opinion. http://sbpress.com/2018/05/drinking-in-europe-vs-america/ The reason why I found your post intriguing is because I've been to Europe and I've noticed how different the drinking culture is. I think that the USA should lower the drinking age because it would allow youth to be more responsible. I'd like to continue reading if you added specific examples about underage drinking consequences that would change if the legal age changed.
  • Kasandra's Sep 25, 14:56 comment on Medical Marijuana
    Great post, Miriam! When thinking about medical marijuana before, I had never considered "how it will be paid for" in regards to insurance companies. I think that you would be interested in this article that I recently read about this topic. I'm looking forward to reading your next posts because I really enjoy your style of writing.
  • Angelica's Sep 25, 14:55 comment on Separation of Families
    Julissa I have to generally agree with everything that your sources talked about especially because there have been times with my family where they have been separated because they where undocumented. Especially the point made where this will further cause trauma in the future like for example depression and anxiety. While I read this it reminded me of when I came across a article in the New York times about a specific case of a child being separated right from his family at the border and how that experience all together was very traumatizing for him. I really appreciate that you spoke up about a topic that is causing so much damage to our world today. https://www.nytimes.com/2018/09/01/world/americas/immigrant-families-separation-border.html
  • Jacob's Sep 25, 14:54 comment on Creating a Cult of Perfectionism
    Very excellent points, Maggie! I think that you definitely nailed down the idea of how students are striving to become "straight A" students. The direct link to anxiety was a very convincing one, and it's something that's tangibly and visibly present in my own day-to-day life. It's something that I struggle with, and many others do. That was beautifully conveyed here! Well done!
  • Jacob's Sep 25, 14:53 comment on Who was the first to discriminate against women?
    Interesting idea Marjorie! I want to dress your use of the story of the Fall of Man from the Bible. I fundamentally disagree with your interpretation of Genesis Chapter 3. You state that you’re not sure that Eve even knew about the rule of eating from the tree until she mentions in the conversation with the serpent, but do you believe that that truly excuses her mistake. She still states that God had said not to even touch the fruit from the tree in the middle of the Garden, but yet she is tempted by the serpent. The story of the Fall of Man is a faith story, and is simply used to explain natural phenomenon so the argument that God’s punishment of painful childbirth is far more inhumane isn’t very sturdy either. This was an observable thing to the authors of the book of Genesis and therefore you cannot argue that God’s “punishment” is an act of discrimination against women. I’m not saying there is no discrimination in this Genesis, as God also says that the husband will have dominion over the wife but it’s not like one day a bunch of guys decided “We’re going to make the Women listen to us and say God made them do it.” This sentiment was most likely cultivated over hundreds of years, and probably came from the fact that Women are the natural caregivers to children, seeing how they birth them and nurse them and all that. While that doesn’t mean that Men should have dominion over Women, and as time went on I’m sure the role of Men grew and the role of Women shrank due to this. I don’t believe that it was because men could lift more or run faster, but was instead due to the fact that during the growth of the child, especially at a young age, Women had to be around the child more in case it needed anything and so it would be harder for them to travel long distances, chasing a deer. I’m not at all saying this justifies discrimination but it is most likely the original cause of discrimination.
  • Olivia's Sep 25, 14:44 comment on We No Longer Stick Up For Each Other
    Brooklyn, You make some very important claims in this post, but without many facts to back it up. Next time, I suggest sprinkling in some evidence to support this idea. In addition, it might be beneficial to add something more than just an opinion, like give suggestions for remedies of this issue or identify other causes. It's a good start though.
  • Olivia's Sep 25, 14:34 comment on The Risk of the Anti-Vaccine Movement
    This is a very well put together assertion, Sante. You have plenty of information to back up your point that makes you a reliable author. However, I think that you need to cite more of your sources and the ones you do cite need to be claimed by a website or author. Other than that, this is really good.
  • Latrell Thomas's Sep 21, 20:58 comment on My Shadow Box
    I like how you did the background color and how it represents you and where your from.
  • Beatriz BautistaPablo's Sep 20, 21:45 comment on Shadow Box Counter Narrative
    Dear Kayla, I am amazed by your shadow box because you were very creative in drawing a galaxy that holds an important meaning to you. Your galaxy painting looked really pleasant to see because it was neatly done.I loved the part in your statement where you said, ¨I feel like our galaxy has endless possibilities and there are new discoveries each day. My mind is like a galaxy, endless thoughts but new found possibilities haunting me till this unpredictable day¨. This sentence stood out to me because you used a simile to compare yourself to a galaxy and how its true that there are many possibilities to your life. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because you seem like a person who puts a lot of effort in their own work. Sincerely, Beatriz
  • Jocelyn's Sep 18, 03:03 comment on Yojana’s Dominant and Counter narrative shadow box
    Dear yojana, I really like your Shadow box because like u said in your paper that u love collecting them becuawcit reminds u of your family I think that’s nice. Another thing I liked about your Shadow box is that you put a flower and at the end of your paper you said you love flowers that’s amazing because I love flowers too. Sincerely, Jocelyn
  • Evelin's Sep 17, 05:00 comment on Jennifer’s shadow box
    Dear Jennifer, I am feeling really connected with your writing, “Jennifer shadow box” because even if I’m not Salvadorian, I get affected too just by being Hispanic. Now that I see that I’m not the only one makes me feel connected towards others. One part of your writing that stands out for me is where you talked about being born here but people assume that you aren’t. I think this is a very good point to put because a lot of people assume different things, just because the way you look, where your roots come from, how you talk etc. Another part that I liked is where you talk about having a really hard time and that your two friends and sister helped you. This stood out for me because all the people I know go through that too, and get help from the people who knows them the most. Your writing reminds me of something that I made once. One time I got to say that I’m dangerous because I am Mexican and people from Mexico kills people. Also been told that all Mexicans bring drugs, it was said of President Donald Trump. I know that being other than whites with privilege we as a community have to stand up together and help each other and make these stereotypes go away. I just want to say thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you do next, because I feel that you'll make a change and help others who are going through the same thing as you get to have a better life.
  • Judith Hernandez's Sep 17, 02:21 comment on Alison ‘s Shadow box – Artist statement
    Dear Alison, I learned a lot through looking at your shadow box and reading your artist statement. Something that stood out to me was the writing you included on the outside. I noticed that you included one of Rupi Kaur's poem which was really cool because I love her poetry as well. Something I learned about you after reading your statement was how important being Guatemalan is to you. I can relate because the place I'm from is really important to me too. I hope to see more of your art because based on what you showed here, I believe you have a lot to say.
  • Judith HernandezHernandez's Sep 17, 02:11 comment on My Identities in my Shadow Box!
    Dear Kamyiah, I am enlightened about your shadow box because I learned new information about you that I didn’t know before. You also have a lot of objects that have multiple representations and meanings. One part that stands out to me is the flags you included. This stood out to me because I didn’t know you are Native American but it’s very cool that you’re aware of your roots. Another part that I enjoyed seeing and reading about in your shadow box is where you explained your #feedthehood bracelet. This stood out to me because it says a lot about you and what you care about. I liked your shadow box and I look forward to seeing what you make next because your shadow box shows small parts of what you have to say.
  • Li's Sep 15, 11:32 comment on Breaking The Silence: Child Sexual Abuse
    When I saw the percentage of kids who have suffered sextual abuse, I was shocked too. Hope this problem can be solved in the future.
  • Maria's Sep 14, 21:50 comment on Me, Myself and I
    Dear, Melody I'm a student from Life academy I really like how you explain your shadow box because it has a lot of details about you and your family and I feel that really important in everyones life.
  • Maria's Sep 14, 21:40 comment on Me In A Box
    Dear , Elizabeth My name is Maria, I am a student from life academy. Your shadow box is really pretty and like the fact that when you look at it you could tell your culture and that you want to go to college and have a good life because i could connect to you. Something I feel you should add will be is the background of your shadow box like the stereotypes. But after all i like hoe you but alot of explanation on your hand writing.
  • Khalid's Sep 14, 18:29 comment on Nakiah’s Shadow Box
    you did a good dacration and how you let it stick out
  • Martha's Sep 14, 18:29 comment on My True Identity: Adrian Kelly
    Dear Adrian, I am admirable by your shadow box, “My True Identity” because you show your true identity through your shadow box. I like how you put your identity out there and your not afraid of being judged because of it, you show this through your shadow box. Another part that I loved is where you added objects that showed your identity through objects that I would say represent your. Sincerely, Martha
  • Joseph's Sep 14, 18:28 comment on Anthony‘s Shadow Box
    Hello Anthony, I’m very impressed by your shadow box. While scrolling through all the shadow boxes yours really stood. I liked that your shadow box had a very clear focus on one of your main identities which is being interested in cars. I especially like your inclusion of the red model car in your shadow box because it really emphasizes your interest in cars and how strong that identity is. Thank you for making such a great shadow box for me to look at. Hail Hydra, Joseph
  • Ingrid's Sep 14, 18:27 comment on Yojana’s Dominant and Counter narrative shadow box
    Dear Yojana, My name is Ingrid Ramirez, I really like your shadow box because you have specifically the things that represent you and your family who seem very important for you. I have so many connections with you because people think that of me to. Am very glad to hear you speak 3 languages and am guessing one of them is mam. I feel so proud of you for knowing our native language because I speak it to. Anyways, thank you for sharing your story and it gave me some ideas of my shadow box! Sincerely, Ingrid
  • Kassandra's Sep 14, 18:27 comment on My True Identity: Adrian Kelly
    Dear, Adrian Kelly: I am happy about your paragraph, My True Identity: Adrian Kelly / shadow box, because It looks very pretty. I like the drawings you have there; You’re a good artist. It’s also pretty cool how you made your flags. You’re paragraph, also holds a lot of information about yourself, but it’s not too much. It’s simple so it’ll make people have a better understanding of who you are, and how you identify as. One sentence you wrote that stood out to me was “I didn’t really know what to put in my Shadow Box since I was pretty short on ideas. Now that I see my shadow box I can see that it represents my identity as a whole”(Adrian Kelly). This stood out to me because I too had difficulties on thinking of what to put in my shadow box. In the end, your shadow box looks fantastic! Thanks for sharing your amazing work with everyone. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because I just loved your shadow box because it was simple, and pretty and it looked nice. I also enjoyed reading your paragraph, so I hope to read more of it!
  • Anahi's Sep 14, 18:27 comment on shadow box by julian
    Dear Julian, I really like how you gave a good description about what you had on your box even if i was not fully complete here. I like how you went into detail about why you had add the color. Also i like how you talk about your color being gender neutral and how it does it's not a color for a certain gender. Thanks for going into detail about yourself even if it was not finished.
  • Kelly's Sep 14, 18:27 comment on Yureida Gastelum Culture Shadowbox
    Dear Yureida Gastelum, I am amazed by your shadow box because it has many objects and I love the flowers you added. I love how you added the Mexican flag on the sides because that is a really cool idea. One part of your artwork that stands out for me is is where you added cups of rice and beans on the sides. I think this is unique because I did not think about putting that in a shadow box. I think that is is cool because it really does represent latinos since we eat that a lot. Another part of your artwork that stood out to me was that you put the christmas flowers. This stood out to me because in my house we also use those flowers to decorate in christmas time. Thanks for your artwork. I look forward to seeing what you make next, because you have amazing ideas for decorating projects. You did great good job.

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