• Christina's Jan 17, 08:02 comment on The path of Immigration
    Dear Evelin, First of all I love how you talked about a strong and really important topic in our city, State, and overall country. Something else I really like is how you format your article (by topics). When you use Obama's quote, “My fellow Americans, we are and always will be a nation of immigrants. We were strangers once, too.” This quote was really relatable to me because we are all from different places world but we all live in a big country together. Something else that was really strong to me was when you talk about how people are leaving their country to have a better life and or to save their family. And when thinking about people leaving their country cause there in danger why would we deny them shelter especially if we have nothing against them they are just trying to save their family. Overall I love the topic you chose and I hope it raises awareness to others around us. I also suggest you to use grammarly because you had a few typos. -Christina
  • Janie's Jan 17, 07:23 comment on Prostitution in Oakland
    Dear Kalani, I really like how you wrote about something that is important to you. I also like how you wrote about this topic in detail and also that you had empathy for people because you didn't offend no one and you tried to inform others about why people do prostitution. I like how you connected position to slavery because many woman back then and maybe even now are used and people should know what's going on in this world. By writing this blog you gave me knowledge about more things that are happening in this world and why its happening.
  • Christina's Jan 17, 07:18 comment on A Serious Matter: Deportation in Oakland
    Dear Ivy, I’m so happy you chose to talk about a very strong problem in our community. When reading your poem I noticed that you talk about how ICE looking is looking for criminals in our area but they were actually child trafficking. This really caught my eyes because ICE is using their power for evil. Something that seemed outrageous was when you said, “this family was accused for commiting a very serious crime. Even after ICE deported a member of the family, he wasn’t charged with the crime he was accused for which means that this claim was false.” This made me go crazy because how they didn’t have real proof to accuse the family but they had the audacity to deport someone in there family. Overall of love the state that your broadcasting to everyone about what's going on in our city, I hope it raises awareness and people make a change. - Christina
  • Janie's Jan 17, 07:10 comment on Cultural Celebrations In Oakland
    Dear Imelda, I really admire how you choose a topic that interested you. While reading your paragraph I agree with many things you had to say about how Oakland has empathy for all races. I really like when you say “ When the entire community comes as one it’s so beautiful because people come in as strangers but leave with many new friends. Many families are smiling, eating, dancing, and playing” I agree with this because while I was at a parade I made new friends with the people around me because we were bonding with each other and we were at a festival we both really enjoyed being at and I still talk to her till this day. Many things can come out of a cultural festival. I also admire how you speaked in very clear detail about this topic and your article was very interesting to read.
  • Ariana's Jan 17, 05:28 comment on OUSD School Meals
    Dear Roberto, I like your blog “OUSD School Meals”, because you talk about how it is important that people eat good food in school or they won’t be focused in their classwork. One sentence that stood out to me is when you wrote “Additionally, some students receive free lunch or reduced lunch, but still they would rather not eat than eat something that tastes bad. Or they waste the little money they have on chips and things at the liquor store which is not healthy”. This stood out to me because I know that many people can relate to this and rather eat any junk food than what they serve at the schools. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next.
  • Ariana's Jan 17, 04:53 comment on Police Brutality Cause and Effect in Oakland
    Dear Kenya, I like your blog “Police Brutality Cause and Effect in Oakland”, because you talk about how police brutality impacts people and the community along with the effects police brutality has on the people and the community. One sentence that stood out to me is when you wrote “Oakland has been affected by this factor because police officers who protect the city and keep Americas laws intact end up breaking the laws and creating a serious reputation that makes police and Oakland seem as an unsafe place”. This stood out to me because I love how you talk about how and why Oakland has a bad reputation not being safe. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next. =)
  • Ariana's Jan 17, 04:51 comment on Gentrification is Hurting Us
    Dear Christina, I am amazed by your essay “Gentrification is Hurting Us” because you talk about the realities happening in our community that people might be afraid to talk about. One part in your essay that stood out to me is where you talk about how rent is increasing and the impact it has on people. I love how you included a picture of a chart in your essay it makes it stand out. Thank you for your work, I look forward to what you write next.
  • Evelin's Jan 17, 04:14 comment on Gentrification is Hurting Us
    Dear Christina, I really like what you’ve wrote in your blog “ Gentrification is Hurting Us’ about the Gentrification in Oakland and the impact is having. One sentence that stood out to me was “ I wouldn’t have known that this was going on in my community if I didn’t learn about it in class” from Jasper Wilson. This stood out because a lot of people aren’t noticing the huge impact is making towards people who hardly have money to eat. I totally agree with you that people who wants or is working at San Francisco are moving in because of the slightly “big” price difference. I’ve known a lot of people who are moving out and for me is a big thing because my mom have to pay a lot and she’s a single mom with 3 kids. I really appreciate for showing and bringing this topic out. Thanks for your writing, hope seeing more from you!
  • Evelin's Jan 17, 03:37 comment on Bias, Racism, and Death in U.S. Communities
    Dear Edwin, I enjoyed reading your Blog called “Bias, Racism, and Death in U.S. Communities” because your showing about the everyday racism. I agreed with your about discrimination on colour people since slavery. One part that stood out to me was your quote “ “A Latina woman sits with her boyfriend outside his parents’ house in San Jose, California. Two police officers approach the car and explain that there had been multiple car thefts in the neighborhood and the couple were suspects. While the boyfriend shows one officer his ID, the other comes to the woman and asks her to step out of the car. He then unlocks the door from the inside and handcuffs her. He pulls her out of the car, unzips her jacket and touches her breasts claiming he is looking for weapons. When more officers arrive on the scene, the original officer bashes her head into the hood of the car when she does not fully cooperate” from Faust And Peacore. This stood out to me because they arrested her with no proof about the cars that were stolen. One part I slightly disagree with you or quite not understand how racism or discrimination affected students in school who has security guards. I personally like that there is a security in my school and we haven't had a problem. Thanks for your writing, I look forward to seeing what you write next because I see you can write really strong arguments!
  • Christy's Jan 17, 03:23 comment on The Effect Of Violence On Youth, Oakland California
    Dear Diego, You did a great job incorporating different ethnic backgrounds for how our community is a community of color and how many people of color don't feel safe. When you gave this example, “For example, in my class there is around 30 people, and ten out of those 30 don’t feel safe in their community meaning that 1 third of the children don’t feel safe in their community.” It showed how a small amount of students in the classroom don't feel safe. That's also a big problem because students don't learn as much when they are concerned about their safety everyday when walking into class. Great job. Sincerely, Christy V
  • Christy's Jan 17, 03:12 comment on Why are people Moving in and out?
    Dear Kassandra, You did a great job explaining One sentence you wrote that stood out to me is,”This proves that people are moving out of Oakland because she’s considered moving out since she can’t afford to live there.” This sentence stood out to me because it shows the perspective on what Maria Santillan thinks and it shows a mother's struggle especially with 3 kids. “There are families that need money for personal needs, besides rent, but most landlords don’t see that, and just make the rent higher.” I also really like this quote because it shows how families struggles with not only rent but by providing what they need for their family. Sincerely, Christy V
  • Diego's Jan 17, 02:08 comment on Challenge of Youth With Single Parents
    Dear Joseph, I find this blog to be amazing and very informative. I believe that this is one of the best blogs i have ever read in my life. I like how you interviewed people with personal experience to make this blog better. I also like how you gave reasons of how it can affect positively and negatively.keep up the great work. Sincerely, your buddy diego rivera
  • Leslie's Jan 17, 01:59 comment on Prostitution in Oakland
    Dear Kalani, Your topic is something that many people don’t talk about and I’m so glad you brought this up because many people are poorly informed in why prostitution should be brought up more frequently. Some advice I would give you is to add context when providing evidence. This would be helpful because you will give us a heads up about what we are about to read. I would love to see more context the next you write. Love youuuuuuu bestie. Sincerely Leslie Diaz
  • Adrian's Jan 17, 00:19 comment on Do The Police Deserve Our Trust
    Dear Yasmin I have noticed that you put a lot of time and effort into this blog and how every piece of evidence is relevant to your topic. One part of your blog that stood out was when you interviewed a 9 year child and how they even give their opinion and that you are not just asking adults about their thoughts but a also children too. I hope see another amazing post by you. 🙂
  • Juan's Jan 16, 20:33 comment on Why Violence is a Problem
    Irvin I agree with you and the things you had to say and your giving your perspective. I like that and I think it is very important to give your own opinion.
  • Dustin's Jan 16, 20:28 comment on Can Fortnite affect a person negatively or positively?
    Dear epic games, I did not mean for my post to offend you and i tried to make it to where fortnite can benefit people also. I hope you get this and see that this blog is not what it seems Sincerely, Dustin
  • Ashley's Jan 16, 20:26 comment on Oakland
    Dear Martha, I am proud by your blog called, “Oakland” because you are covering about the topic immigration in Oakland. This is really important because Oakland has a lot of colored people living here and have cultural background in Oakland. One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is, “Oakland is a sanctuary city which means it helps protect immigrants from deportation. This is good because it helps make people feel safe”. I think this is an amazing because you are explaining how Oakland its trying to protect immigrants. I do agree with you that Oakland is a cultural place for immigrants and the Latino community. Oakland does it’s best to keep immigrants safe. Sincerely, Ashley
  • Kayla's Jan 16, 20:23 comment on Violence in oakland
    Dear Khalid, To start begin I like how you started off with a story about yourself and then bring in your claim. I like how you added your question and then there answer to show what they are answering. The only you need is a conclusion to make it all come together.
  • Bryan's Jan 16, 20:23 comment on Why Does Marijuana Get Such A Bad Rep??
    Dear, Matthew I really like how you started by asking a question and then answering it a few sentences after asking the question. Also in your analysis for your second paragraph which states, “This quote is addressing that in the 90’s, before 1996, it used to be illegal to smoke marijuana medicinally and legally meaning that people who needed medical marijuana to survive or for natural pain relief would have needed to take narcotics to ease the pain. This means that people who had cancer would need chemotherapy and would be criminalized if they smoked marijuana even if the marijuana makes them feel relaxed and make them go to sleep”. I liked how you added this because it shows how you really did your research about your topic. Also because I honestly didn’t know about this so I pretty much just learned something from reading your blog. I also noticed that you used the word stigma a decent amount in your paragraph which shows how you are using some of the vocab we learned about and you are using it correctly. Your blog was really good keep up that good work.
  • Victor's Jan 16, 20:23 comment on Can Fortnite affect a person negatively or positively?
    Dear, Dustin This article about fortnite is very interesting and it made me think about different effect it can have on people either positive or negative. A line that stood out was when you said “This could help players because they are antisocial in real life then this would be a great opportunity for them to make friends and socialize and they get to be someone they feel like who they really are.” this shows different aspects of a person and lets them be themselves. I think it was a cool topic good job.
  • Juan's Jan 16, 20:17 comment on Oakland violence
    Dear, Brian I am amazed by your blog “Oakland Violence” because it talks about real things in Oakland. You also mention real stories for example the one about Mario and that really adds to your blog because its a perspective that like they have first hand experience in the things that go on in Oakland. One sentence that you wrote that stands out for me is : “Another way to get rid of violence because of gangs is having more programs in schools. For example, it can be a job in the library, it can be swimming classes, also it can be a football team. Or, a place where the young people can be distracted and they don’t have to be in the streets involved in gangs and doing bad things.” This stood out for me because you are giving great examples and if someone who can create a change read this they can make it happen. Another sentence that I liked was “In conclusion, to decrease the violence in Oakland that are caused by gangs and fights for young people Oakland needs more programs and police in parks. Let’s make the change for a better Oakland.” This stood out for me because its at the end and it's like very inspiring and it's a great way to end it off. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next , because your writing is good and very interesting and to be honest me personally I really like it.Also for the reason that you use real examples and different perspectives.
  • Brian's Jan 16, 20:13 comment on Challenge of Youth With Single Parents
    Dear joseph I am surprise by your article because the number keeps growing and how is hard for people that are single parents. One sentences you wrote that stand out for me is that the number of single parents keeps increasing more and more and i think this a good piece of evidences bc it shows how it keeps increasing.This is shocking to me because I really don't know how it feel to have single parent. A question I have is why did you write about this do you know somebody that deals with this. Thanks for your article and explain how single parents sometimes struggle and for the graph that shows how it keeps increasing.
  • Victor's Jan 16, 20:04 comment on Oakland Let’s Talk About Health DIsparities
    Dear, Oscar I really like your topics because it really connects to Oakland and what is happening in the world. Also a line that stood out to me was when you said “An African-American born in West Oakland can expect to die almost 15 years earlier than a White person born in the Oakland Hills”(Schell). This line really stood out to me because I didn’t know that fact and it really surprises me that is happening in the world.
  • Bryan's Jan 16, 20:04 comment on Undercover Modern Day Slavery
    Dear, Christy I am happy about the topic you choose because nobody decided to write about this and literally nobody talks about undercover modern day slavery. A part that I liked was how you stated in your blog, “A lot of people don’t know what sex trafficking is and it’s important to know what it is because sex trafficking can happen by choice or not”. I agree with this because there’s some people who think is a choice. But I really like how you decided to write about this topic.
  • Dustin's Jan 16, 19:58 comment on The effects of violence
    Dear Beatriz, I was very excited to read your blog because Your poem was very interesting, and I really like your article because it talks about serious issues and it reminds me of your poem. I like how in your second paragraph you instantly talked about how violence can make people violent, because of their role models and how people be around it. I also like how you put someone's real story into your blog that connected a real life experience to an important topic that you were writing about, made this article very interesting. I also like how you you put another persons point of view into your blog to make it sound more realistic. I really liked your blog and I hope I get to read another.
  • Victor's Jan 16, 19:56 comment on Inclusion and Safety in OUSD
    Dear, Judith I was really amazed with your writing specially the topics you chose because not a lot of people write about this and people need to know about topic. One part that stand out to me was when “More inclusion in OUSD matters and leads to safety because it allows youth to explore the beauty of the diversity not only within their communities but within themselves as well. Because they feel safe to explore the complexity of their identities”. This line stand out to me because if they do that they can make everyone feel and specially the LGBTQ comminity.
  • Kassandra's Jan 16, 19:38 comment on Littering in Oakland
    Sorry, *Dear Jessica
  • Kelly's Jan 16, 19:37 comment on OUSD and Problems
    Dear Valerie, Your blog really summarized all the negative effects on students caused by OUSD. One of my favorite lines was were you stated that food cuts also affects families. It stood out to me because it shows that students aren't the only ones affected and it makes the problem bigger. You did a great job!! Sincerely, Kelly
  • Kassandra's Jan 16, 19:36 comment on Littering in Oakland
    Dear Lupita, I do agree with you that littering is a problem Oakland has. It is a problem that my street / block has, because people just dump trash anywhere, and think its ok. It was pretty interesting when you added the quote from Richard James, where he said,”The rain rinses the smog, plastic, cigarette butts, urine, oil, feces and all manner of other items off the streets of our cities into creeks, rivers, storm drains and eventually the ocean”. I thought that was really interesting, and some good research. Keep up the good work! Sincerely, Kassandra
  • Doraneli's Jan 16, 19:32 comment on Do You Care About The Homeless In Your Community
    dear adrian , you blog was really interesting to read. the picture of the dog caught my attention and made me feel so many emotions. i like how you included a chart to show the homelessness rates and all that. i just have one question for you : what made you choose this topic ? good job !
  • Wendy's Jan 16, 18:33 comment on Inclusion and Safety in OUSD
    Judith, I agree with your statement that we need “inclusion and safety in OUSD” that way everyone feels safe and comfortable with who they are. I didn’t really think about this topic but you made it relevant and that is really important because these aren’t easy topics to talk about for tennagers. A line that stood out to me from your writing was when you said “Queer youth don’t deserve to receive antipathy towards their identities because soon, that hate can become internalized.” this stood out to me because it made me think of my fellow peers who are part of the LGBTQ community and how they are treated at our school and how safe they feel. I think that OUSD needs to be inclusive for everyone. You are a great writer thanks for writing and posting I look forward to seeing what you write next because you talk about important topics going on good job:). -Wendy
  • Tania's Jan 16, 18:32 comment on The effects of violence
    Dear Beatriz, I am really convinced about your topic and why violence happens. When you say that violence happens because people who do such a thing don’t have role models in life I very much agree with you, since they grew up with a bad role model they think it’s okay to follow their lead, which really it isn’t. Also, when you explain about Travon Godfrey I think that experience also has to do with why people commit violence because they want to see people suffer, since they lost a loved one to gun violence. I think overall you chose a good topic to speak about, and maybe it might motivate others to remind themselves violence is not the answer, it never is. I think you did a great job and keep up the great work.
  • Celeste's Jan 16, 18:29 comment on Redlining is a Toxic Paint
    I really enjoyed how in the beginning you drew the reader in by starting off with “ imagine a game “ I feel like that's what really drew me in and had me thinking and actually made it kind of easier to understand your piece. Overall your topic sounds like a really interesting topic, and I'm glad you brought it forth and wrote about it because if I'm being honest I didn't really quiet pay attention to anything involving red lining, so thank you for writing about this and publishing it. I also enjoyed how you included some background information in the beginning so that also made it easier for me to understand for long this has been going for. Thank you for your writing and I hope to see what other pieces you write about.
  • Kenya's Jan 16, 18:21 comment on Does Music Truly Benefit Oakland Schools ?
    Dear Celeste, I think that you made a very convincing statement when you said that Music is a “MUST” for Oakland schools. Personally as a student who attends an Oakland public school is a struggle especially when it comes to having a lot of work or being around people you don’t necessarily want to be around with can be highly stressful. Music is a way that I know I can focus and concentrate when i'm struggling and I agree with you 100% that schools should let students listen to music! Thank you! Kenya Sanchez
  • kalani's Jan 16, 18:20 comment on Littering in Oakland
    Dear Jessica, i really enjoyed your blog and really agree and how you explained how you believe people need ti change their ways is very powerful and i liked how you clearly explained your self good job on that. By reading your blog im learning more on why littering is suck a huge problem ad have a great impact on our planet so good job also explaining that to. While reading your blog i think i need to take littering to heart because its impacting our wild life and well being. Well thank you for writing and i believe that your blog will make a change
  • Oscar's Jan 16, 17:26 comment on More Parks for Oakland!
    Dear Victor, I surprised on how you are saying that we should have more parks in Oakland because they bring our community more together. Also I really like how you said that kids and adults can be more involved with their community if we have more parks in Oakland. The fact that you showed evidence showing that parks make Oakland a better and healthier place for the people shows that you really are an expert on your topic. One sentence that stands out to me is when you said how kids these days just want to be behind a screen really is showing me that we need to have more parks in order for kids to be more active. Additionally when you said that some kids in Oakland dont really have easy access to parks reminds me of how I don't have easy access to a park and I think what your saying about putting more parks in Oakland can help residents it can help me too. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because you are a great writer and your way of helping your community is great. Sincerely Oscar
  • Beatriz's Jan 16, 17:26 comment on       Immigration Reason and Causes
    Dear Kelly, I was very excited to read your blog about immigration because it’s a big problem we have going on right now in the United States. The interviews you did stood out to me because it gives us a perspective from someone who knows about this topic since they have lived it. Some sentences thats stood out from your blog was “Getting harassed while doing normal activities can also be an effect of the words Trump keeps reiterating. Immigrants don’t deserve to experience discrimination and harassment because they don’t come into this country to be corrupt and sinful people”. The reason why this stood out was because this happens to many immigrants since Trump portrays them as bad people who can’t be allowed to live in the United States, but he is wrong because they actually don’t come to hurt no one. Sincerely, Beatriz
  • Roberto Guardado's Jan 16, 17:25 comment on Do The Police Deserve Our Trust
    Dear yasmin i can tell you put a lot of work on your blog and that you did a very good research. I agree with you that ¨Others might say that at the end of the day that the police officer still serve the community no matter what but our community want to be served with respect and hoping we won’t be harmed. The Oakland police need to look at back into history and repair the roots for things to improve today.¨ because it's true that the police is serving the community but some police officers take advantage of the situation and that's a problem.Thanks for writing your blog and good job.
  • Leslie's Jan 16, 17:24 comment on Sex trafficking in Oakland
    Dear Jocelyn, One sentence that stood out to me was “Many girls are forced to do things they don’t want to do in order to save themselves from violence or death”. I think this is something many people don't understand and/or are poorly informed of. It was very empathetic of you to mention the fact that many females don't have an option to stop what they are doing because it can put their live
  • Juan's Jan 16, 17:22 comment on Landlords Increase Rent Prices
    Dear Ingrid, I am excited by your blog “Landlords Increase Rent Prices” because you go into detail and explain what is going on.As well, because you talk about the community and it is a lot of different perspectives that adds to your post. One sentence you wrote that stood out to me for me is : “Rent change in prices has been affecting Oakland communities a lot because many people can’t afford to pay rent. Many people either get second jobs or end up leaving their homes because they feel pressured because the landlord keeps increasing the rent prices.” I think this is really good because it's exactly what is going on and that way others reading this can see what they are going through. Another sentence that I liked was “ Landlords should understand that what they’re doing isn’t acceptable because not everyone has wealth like them and they need to acknowledge that everyone has other bills to pay and is not all about rent.” This stood out to me because this is really good and you give your own perspective.As well ,because it is something that is true and they should be able to understand that. Thanks for your writing.I look forward to seeing what you write next because I think your work is very good. Also, very interesting and I feel I can relate to it in a way.
  • Kayla's Jan 16, 17:22 comment on Prostitution in Oakland
    Dear Kalani, How I feel about your topic is it is very powerful and something that isn’t recognized as much as it should be. Some advice I would like to give you is when you but evidence don’t forget to give some context about it and where it came from. Also, don’t forget to give powerful reasoning on why that piece of evidence connects and can back up your claim. But overall your writing is very powerful and every writer has a meaning to what they write and yours sticks out.
  • Irvin's Jan 16, 17:22 comment on Immigrants Create A better Community
    Marleni I liked reading your blog because it was super interesting and it was very clear as well to what you want to change or bring awareness to. I like the quote you used in the beginning because it tells us what what it's going to be about. I really liked the strong interviews you had and the pieces of evidence that you had because it made your argument very strong. I think your work is strong and keep doing good.
  • Yasmin's Jan 16, 17:18 comment on OUSD School Meals
    Dear Robert I Agree with how you started because kids shouldn’t eat pre-packed food it should be cooked and ready for them. It’s Also an amazing way to started because you grabbed people’s attention to keep on reading. I also agree with you because people complain on how tired they are but it’s because they don’t eat breakfast but also it because the food the school offers isn't good which makes them less focused and not able to learn throughout the day. Something interesting that I learned is that elementary lunch cost less than secondary lunch. Thanks for writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because you do have a point in your writing and know how to get a reader's attention.
  • Kayla's Jan 16, 17:16 comment on How can your world improve
    Dear Jai’Kari, Thank you so much for writing this but reading through your paragraph it started to get confusing. A place I started to get confuse was when you started to introduce a quote but your quote ended up being about asking a question to your mom. Some advice for you would be to either write about an interview in one paragraph and then write about article in another. But so far you writing is good and you have a good topic.
  • Evelyn's Jan 16, 17:13 comment on The Snow
    Queida veronica: Estoy asombrado con tu publicasion “The snow” porque cuando yo voy a la nieve y siempre me la paso feliz jugando y teniendo buenos momentos con mi familia. Una frase que usted escribió que es destacta para mi es “mismo junto a mi familia jugaba en la nieve pasando un rato divertido en la vacaciones”. Creo que es para pasar un buen momento con tu familia y jugar con para pasar un momento divertido. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque es muy bonito pasar un momento con la familia.
  • Beatriz's Jan 16, 17:12 comment on Violence in oakland
    Dear Khalid, I was happy to read your blog about violence because I also wrote my blog about violence Oakland and why it happens. Something that I enjoyed from your blog was that you had some evidence that gave good explanations about your topic of violence. A question I have is why did you not include another interview in your blog for evidence? A piece of feedback I have for you is to do your citations so that people know where you got your evidence from and to be more precise in your analysis. Thank you for your writing and I look forward to seeing what you write next. Sincerely, Beatriz
  • Sofia's Jan 16, 17:07 comment on La Cultura no define a uno mismo
    Dear Veronica : I am amazed por lo que escribes sobre “ La cultura no define a uno mismo” por que es cierto lo que dices que el color de tu piel o tu cultura no define cómo en realidad somos. Una frase que me gusto que escribiste es “ todas las personas son iguales” porque todos somos iguales todos tenemos los mismo derechos, somos humanos y a veces compartimos las mismas culturas y tenemos que ser tratados todos de la misma manera. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación , porque quiero ver que es lo que opinas sobre los libros que lees. Sofia
  • Claudia's Jan 16, 17:05 comment on The Snow
    Estimada veronica: Estoy asombrada por tu texto me parecio muy lindo porque habla de cuando sales en familia y todos juegan emocionados en la nieve es una gran experiencia de la vida y un recuerdo muy bonito que nunca podras olvidar
  • Veronica's Jan 16, 17:04 comment on “Nunca Valoramos Lo Que Tenemos, Hasta Que Lo Perdemos”
    Querida Sofia: Estoy asombrada por tu publicación “Nunca valoramos lo que tenemos hasta que lo perdemos” por que es verdad lo que dice el texto nunca sabemos cuando vamos a perder algo de tanto valor. En la vida nos pasará de todo que de niños no sabemos nada, y con el paso del tiempo iremos aprendiendo cosas difíciles que tenemos que enfrentar. Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es:”tiene que enfrentar varios problemas a los que ella nunca estaba acostumbrada a tener” Creo que esto es cierto por que hay personas que no están acostumbradas a trabajar o a no hacer nada y cuando pasa lo que menos quieren tienen que hacer algo para que puedan salir adelante. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación por que es interesante lo que lees aparte das un consejo a las personas para que no pasen por lo mismo.
  • Erika's Jan 16, 17:03 comment on La noche estaba plateada
    querida Evelyn me parese muy interesante pero g terrorifico quer hablen o le llanmen o le tengan un altar al diablo que piense que es unb santo o algo asi y ,me parese lo que lo adoren y le hablen a algo tan terrorifico espero que sighas escriviendo sobre este libro .
  • Rolando's Jan 16, 17:02 comment on Aprendiz del espectro
    Estimado Alejandro: Estoy sorprendido por su publicación " Aprendiz del espectro " porque es un tema muy interesante en él existe algo o alguien llamado el séptimo hijo . Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es "el séptimo hijo es que el padre quiere que sea aprendiz de espectro que es una persona que se convierte en un tipo protector de demonios" creo que esto esta genial porque es una frase que demuestra casi de lo que va a tratar la historia en pocas palabras. Gracias por su escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque es un tema que me gustaria leer mas a fondo y que me gustaría leer el libro que estás leyendo.
  • Fredy's Jan 16, 17:01 comment on ENEMIGOS ETERNOS
    estimado: rolando estoy sorprendido por tu publicacion explicas bien las cosas de lo que paso porque dices que Hasta ahora , los guerreros z fueron recatados por guku que ha llegado del camino de la serpiente para derrotar a los saiyayines y esto paso en Dragon Ball Z , me recuerda a algo que vi en la televisión . Bueno técnicamente la serie que vi en la televisión es basada en el libro que estoy leyendo ahora ya que en los 2 goku llega a la tierra y les da 1 semilla del ermitano a cada uno para sanarlos de las heridas provocadas por nappa y goku al enterarse de esto , goku golpea a nappa sin compasión dejándolo fuera de combate y ahora se avecina la la batalla contra vegeta para la salvación de la tierra. eso fue el mejor publicaion que eyas ouesto espero que buelvas a poner mas ... alv.
  • Samantha's Jan 16, 17:01 comment on The Snow
    Estimada Veronica: Estoy encantada por su publicación,”The snow,” porque lo que dice tu publicación se parece a las cosas que he pasado. Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es: “junto a mi familia jugaba en la nieve pasando un rato divertido en la vacaciones.” Creo que esto es muy bonito porque compartiste tiempo con tu familia y te divertiste un rato así que eso me parece muy bonito. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque se me hace muy bonito que compartas cosas que has pasado junto a tu familia. Samantha M.
  • Heriberto's Jan 16, 16:43 comment on Born A Crime Book Review ” Feminist Lens
    In the story Born A Crime written by Trevor Noah, we learn about his stepfather Abel. Abel was a drunk, abusive, and insecure man. Despite everything Trevor’s mom still laid down and had another baby with him. They still survived all his hardships and trials. However, the question is does, Born A Crime do an effective job of illustrating different gender roles and relationships in South Africa? Abel being a man, being in an intimate relationship with a woman and being the “male role model” in 2 young boys lives, yet he still wasn’t the ideal man. Abel couldn’t provide but wanted to control everything. Instead of talking out his problems he beat the mother of his son. Born A Crime does an effective job because it illustrates patriarchy. To a further extent, it shows how a woman can be with a man and still be on her own, and it also shows that traditions can be changed or altered. According to the patriarchy is a system of society or government in which men hold the power and women are largely excluded from it. So basically when Abel was beating the crap out of Patricia nothing could be done. The police brushed it off because back then a man could do whatever and it would be alright. It was okay for Abel to beat his family then drink, then beat up other people and then drink some more because he was a man. I know this because in the book it says “ When the cops arrived he said nothing but oh-oh go in and have a conversation, this is not necessary”. Patriarchy gave men leeway to do whatever.
  • alejandro's Jan 16, 16:40 comment on My Favorite Word or Activity?
    Dear:sanath I am surprised by your post My Word or favorite activity because… your informacion about that the chewing es parte de un estilo de vida saludable y conduce a la digestión y sobre todo about the everyone he does one sentence for you wrote the stands out for me is:’’ Esta palabra es confuso hace que sea más divertido en los ojos I think this is interesante because… y que no tiene sentido para mí el que una palabra acerca de la alimentación puede tener ew en ella thanks for you writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because… for me is interesting your temas que son fasinantes
  • Raul's Jan 16, 16:34 comment on Do The Police Deserve Our Trust
    What is police brutality? Police brutality is abusive power using excessive force in situations where it’s not required and where police are assuming the worse for their personal “protection.” Many Police Officers have sworn to protect and serve, but have abused their power and authority to cruelly and assault and manipulate people of color, even if they were innocent. People of color have been attacked and been left with physical and emotional scars that will follow them as the days go by. In order for the Oakland community to trust the police and have a positive relationship, the police need to understand why the community distrusts them so much. Firstly, people haven’t trusted the police in Oakland because of what has happened in history. In the article “Controversial History Sets Tone for City’s Discord” by Paul Harris from the news source The Guardian he reports “ A 17-year-old Black Panther party member was involved in a shootout with police, but surrendered and stripped down to his underwear to show he was unarmed. However, he died after being shot by police at least 12 times”(Harris). His name was Bobby Hutton. He was one of the youngest and first of the Black Panther Party and was dedicated to making a difference for his people and police relations. On April 6, 1968 Bobby Hutton was shot 12 times and died due to police “assuming” he was armed. Bobby Hutton had many years of life but was taken away so quickly. This clearly shows that police are forgetting history that has left people of color scarred and explains why the community does not trust the police.
  • Janie's Jan 16, 07:45 comment on Homelessness: Are Politicians Doing Enough?
    Dear Lupita, I really like how you explained a way that we can help solve homelessness. I also like how you explain why some people are homeless because of how house rent is rising up. I really like how your paragraph actually shows how you care about how there alot of homeless people around the bay area and you showed a lot of empathy while you were writing your paragraph. I like how your ideas show how much empathy you have and what we should do to support the homeless community and help them get a new start. It really showed your thinking when you used the graph people the graph shows me how the amount of homelessness is decreasing.
  • Wendy Perez Govea's Jan 16, 06:12 comment on More Parks for Oakland!
    Victor, I agree with your statement because after reading your blog I think parks aren’t a waste of time and they can actually help communities. One sentence you wrote that really stood out to me was “By making more parks in Oakland we can be more healthy as a community.” this had stood out to me because I never really thought about parks creating a healthy community. You choosing this topic brought a lot of relevance into parks that people treat badly or people think is only for little kids so I think it was a good topic to talk about. I think your blog was incredible try making some sentences shorter though. Thanks for writing and posting I look forward to seeing what you write next because you are an amazing writer:). -Wendy
  • Imelda's Jan 16, 04:27 comment on OUSD and Problems
    Dear Valerie, Your blog was amazing! You really brought out your own opinions on this topic. I agree with the OUSD raising awareness because some of our parents don’t know about this and if they advertised families taht school lunch is a problem it could have kids having a school day w/o being hungry. Thank you for writing this! Good job. Sincerely, Imelda
  • Imelda's Jan 16, 04:21 comment on OUSD Budget
    Dear Janie, Your topic is a relevant topic right now. Teachers aren’t getting payed the minimum, money is overused in unnecessary supplies. Money should be spent the correct way because everyone deserves opportunities and if we don’t have opportunities is it really helping us? Your analysis is really good and it really gave us another side to what your evidence was saying! Thank you for taking your time to write about this topic since many teachers are going on strikes. Good job! Sincerely, Imelda P
  • Imelda's Jan 16, 04:13 comment on A Serious Matter: Deportation in Oakland
    Dear Ivy, You covered an important topic in your blog and this clearly shows your understanding of the immigration topic. One of my favorite lines was when you said in your analysis “ICE clearly used their dominant, institutional power, to oppress a family of color”. You’re using words that really make your work clear. Thank you for covering this important topic! Good job. Sincerely, Imelda Pablo
  • Lupita's Jan 16, 04:00 comment on Littering in Oakland
    Dear Jessica, I loved your article “Littering in Oakland” because it really pointed out why people litter and why they think that it is okay to do. I also, really liked how you thought about how cleaning up litter came make us look better as a city. One sentence that you wrote that really stood out to me is, “. She thinks that the government doesn’t care about people littering so other people also don’t care. This matters because the people that have power also don’t want to do anything towards the littering problem we have in Oakland so that would make other people not care and/or think it’s acceptable to litter. This really stood out to me because it really brought to light that people in power do not care much. In fact if think about it not many people in power publicly state that that this is a big problem and that it is WRONG but since they don’t do this people will just continue to do what they have seen others do. Thanks for your writing. I really look forward to seeing what you write next, because you bring out topics that other people don’t pay much attention to.
  • Lupita's Jan 16, 03:14 comment on Soccer Is Life Right?
    Dear Bryan, I am caught by your blog ¨Soccer Is Life Right?¨ because it truly brings out the reasons why soccer is overlooked in the U.S. and brings out the true positives of soccer that would benefit us all. I also liked how you truly know your soccer knowledge and know where America’s team has fallen short. One sentence that truly caught my attention is, “Curtis raised a very important point, there’s a lot of flopping in soccer especially by the best players like Ronaldo, Suarez, Neymar etc. But there is also flopping by the best players in the NBA like Lebron James and James Harden but people only point out when soccer players flop but they don’t point out when basketball players flop in the US”. This caught my eye because it shows that other sports that get more attention than soccer do the same things that soccer is called out for yet they are watched more. With this statement you prove those who hate soccer for flopping yet like other sports wrong because you show that you are getting nearly the same quality of sports. Thank you for writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because you can change the worlds perspective by bringing other things that people might have not thought about into the light. =)
  • Maria's Jan 15, 23:17 comment on Immigration and Deportation affects Families
    Dear Anahi, I agree with your claim that immigrants come to the united states to have a better future for themselves but when there in U.S. their being stigmatized because they want a better future. They also deserve to become something and do better with themselves. Continue to work hard your blog was great.
  • Marleni's Jan 15, 23:13 comment on Do The Police Deserve Our Trust
    Dear Valerie, Thank you so much for writing this blog for your classmates to be able to learn from you and all the research that you did!!!! A line that really stood out to me is "This clearly shows that police are forgetting history that has left people of color scarred and explains why the community does not trust the police", it stood out to me because this really shows that you have noticed the unjust situations that have been caused by police in Oakland. I look forward to reading your next post, your writing is very unique!Y our blog taught me about the importance of police brutality. Thank you!! - Marleni ( Tu Mejor Amiga duhh :)) )
  • Diego's Jan 15, 23:13 comment on Why are people Moving in and out?
    Dear kassandra, I really like your blog about why people are moving out of their home. I like how this blog is divided in 3 parts so that we have more info on this topic. I like your concluding paragraph and it makes me think more about this topic and it makes me think that there is more to be done. Great blog, keep it up. Sincerly diego rivera.
  • Maria's Jan 15, 23:10 comment on Immigrants Create A better Community
    Dear Marleni, I like the fact that you added 2 interview and your own perspective on what you think what will be better for oakland like bringing culture back. I want to say good job for completing your blog it talks about good topic and it seem that you put a lot of work on it. I agree with your main point that immigrant just come to america to have a better future.
  • Anahi's Jan 15, 23:10 comment on Immigrants Create A better Community
    Dear Marleni, First of Marleni I want to say good job on completing your Blog. Good job on your interviews you asked very good questions ad got good answers to make your blog stronger. Also I like when you said, “Many people assume the worst of immigrants just because they move from one country to another” because it's very true immigrants are stereotyped and face stigma due to the fact that they’re moving to a different country to have a better future for themselves and their family. Continue to work hard you been doing good.
  • Marleni's Jan 15, 23:08 comment on OUSD and Problems
    Dear Valerie, Thank you so much for writing this blog for your classmates to be able to learn from you and all the research that you did!!!! A line that really stood out to me is "This is clearly showing that not only is it affecting the students but it is also affecting their family" it stood out to me because this really shows that you have empathy for others and not just yourself or other students. Your blog taught me about the importance of School lunches. Thank you!! - Marleni
  • Judith's Jan 15, 23:07 comment on How Should We Help Prevent Suicide
    Dear Wendy, Your blog is super important and necessary for everyone to read. I like how you emphasized the need to end stigma around depression and suicide but also the pros and cons of counseling. Maybe you could have included some alternatives to counseling. Also, you mentioned that a student of color won’t be able to connect with a white counselor. So, what do they need to actually be able to connect? Overall, I really liked your blog and I think all the emo kids at Life should read it. Good job!
  • Tania's Jan 15, 23:05 comment on Why
    Dear Kayla, I am really empowered by your poem because you have really clear statements about how men should start realizing their actions and how females should love themselves although they were scarred and how they should open up about it because they are not alone, if anything people would support them. I think overall you chose a good topic one that is important to you, and you are completely right people don’t talk about rape nowadays like it isn’t an important topic. I’m glad you brought this specific topic up because you want to bring awareness to this issue and writing about it will get people to hear your voice and your story. Keep up the good work, you have a powerful mind.
  • U.S goverment's Jan 15, 23:04 comment on Can Fortnite affect a person negatively or positively?
    dear dustin, this article about fortnite is very interesting and it makes me think of how a game can be very violent. now that you have addressed why not to play fortnite I would switch to playing minecraft for the rest of my life in my moms basement. I will no longer think of suicide and i will live an epic life for now on. Sincerly, Epic games
  • U.S goverment's Jan 15, 23:00 comment on Can Fortnite affect a person negatively or positively?
    dear dustin, this article about fortnite is very interesting and it makes me think of how a game can be very violent. now that you have addressed why not to play fortnite I would switch to playing minecraft for the rest of my life in my moms basement. I will no longer think of suicide and i will live an epic life for now on. Sincerly, Epic games
  • Judith's Jan 15, 22:56 comment on Oakland is becoming unrecognizable
    Dear Calvin, I really enjoyed reading your blog because your argument was clear. I agree with what you said about how Oakland’s diversity represents its history. That was extremely well written and hella true. Another part I really liked was your ending where you wrote, “The gentrifiers are causing people to be evicted, rent prices to become astronomical and street names changing, disregarding our history and our past”. I think it was cool that you mentioned street names because personally, I’ve never associated street names with gentrification. Your blog was both enlightening and well written. Good job!
  • Judith's Jan 15, 22:44 comment on Is school lunch a problem?
    Dear Chris, I agree with your argument because it is well written. I especially agree with the fact that the lunch is getting better but it needs more improvements. You express this fact well by including evidence from students, the people in the cafeteria, and from articles. I also agree with your argument that if school lunches were healthier and better, students would perform better at school. This was an important idea to include because many people think having healthy food is necessary only because people get hungry. But the truth is that there’s a bigger picture which you were able to show. Good job on your blog!
  • Dashiell (Dash)'s Jan 15, 22:42 comment on Goal for Stress Management
    This post may benefit from more academic language.
  • Diego's Jan 15, 22:42 comment on The Salvation Army
    Hello comrade, I appreciate your use of links in the actual essay so the data is easily accesible and how you have very diverse sets of data so that many parts of the salvation armies' benefits. (Sal was here).
  • Kelly's Jan 15, 22:39 comment on Family Separation=Fear and dehumanization
    Dear Tania, One of my favorite lines from your blog is when you wrote, “This proves how much Trump doesn’t care about humans, but Only the “rich and wealthy” humans because he thinks that those with privilege are people who don’t do anything dangerous”. I like this part because I really agree with what you said, Trump is being racist and classist when he says immigrants are dangerous just because of their class and race. Anybody can be dangerous and commit crimes. Overall your blog is really strong and shows the negative effects of family separation. Sincerely, Kelly
  • Enzo's Jan 14, 23:29 comment on Female Harassment in the Gaming Industry
    I definitely think the best thing to avoid negativity and bullying while gaming, no matter the game, if finding a group of people to play with who fit with your personality and play style so you can enjoy both the gaming experience and the banter that accompanies it. I, being a guy, don't have to worry about harassment as much or to the same degree and still tend to group with online and irl friends.
  • Valerie's Jan 14, 23:09 comment on The path of Immigration
    I like how you started the blog with a Barack Obama quote since he was the most impactful president in my opinion. Something you should do is when you are citing in your context to not write .com since it’s misleading. Also, check your spelling since it was confusing to know what words you meant to say. I hope to see more work about immigration. -Valerie
  • Martha's Jan 14, 23:03 comment on Does Music Truly Benefit Oakland Schools ?
    Dear, cece I believe you have a strong assertion because you back it up with strong evidence like the one from Voynovskaya. I think your paragraph is very strong because you also have a interesting topic. I think the question you ask in your conclusion is a great question. Keep up the good work! Sincerely,Martha
  • Valerie's Jan 14, 22:53 comment on Does Music Truly Benefit Oakland Schools ?
    I agree with your thesis because music really does help people destress. This school is overly stressful in general so music will help us calm down. Even though we do have an after school music class, it would be nice for an ACTUAL music class that goes more in depth. I really like your article and the words you chose to put in it. I hope to see more work from you soon 🙂 -Valerie
  • Patima (Ash)'s Jan 14, 21:47 comment on A Question of Morality: The Death Penalty
    If we get rid of the death penalty, what would be put in it's place? I myself am not for the death penalty. I would rather that they rot in prison. Convicts who molest and kill children and sentenced to death are outcast per say in the prison system. If you kill a child and put in prison other prisoners will probably beat the shit out of you. Leaving on that note most people who are on the Federal Death Row list are half African American.
  • Edwin's Jan 14, 00:26 comment on The Salvation Army
    Dear Greg, I like how use evidence clearly to show how the Salvation Army help people with homelessness, drug/alcohol, and more! While you should have more analysis, you still did great in your essay by showing evidence, reasons, and having a great argument to argue. Also, you should explain more about why the Salvation Army is 100% Epic. Edwin M,
  • Edwin's Jan 13, 23:51 comment on Immigrants Create A better Community
    Dear Marleni, I like how you used 2 interviews and 2 sources to show that Immigrants create a better future with more diversity in the communities, bringing culture in Oakland, and having more ways to have a good life. BUT you should've talk more about your argument to expand your thinking and have more reasons why Immigrants show more opportunities! Edwin M.
  • Calvin's Jan 13, 20:53 comment on Solutions To Oakland Violence
    Dear Daniel, I love the topic of your blog. I think these ideas to stop and prevent violence are really smart. I totally think law enforcement should bond with the community. One question I have is that did this project actually lower gun violence percentages? And what other steps can we take to prevent gun violence inside our own community instead of just between police officers? Good job on your blog, Daniel.
  • Calvin's Jan 13, 20:42 comment on Gentrification is a “Slap In The Face”
    Hey Kanika, I really like the topic you chose to talk about. I agree with a lot of the points you made, especially the one that mentions that a lot of single parent households can't really afford to take care of their kids and pay off rent at the same time. One question that I have is what do you mean by "New community members are increasing the stereotypes on the original Oakland residents? Anyhow, good job on your blog! 🙂
  • Adrian's Jan 12, 02:15 comment on Landlords Increase Rent Prices
    Dear Ingrid I like how you show that landlords are increasing rents and which is terrible for low wage families and show that they are having a horrible impact to families and showing the reasoning behind why people leave Oakland to look for a better home. Something that stood out from your work is when you show that you interview families and asked them about their thoughts on Oakland rent. Something that can help you with your work is using the website www.grammarly.com this is a very helpful website
  • America Diaz's Jan 12, 00:11 comment on Littering in Oakland
    I really like what you wrote about because people think that is ok to throw trash in the streets but it's not they don't realize how they are damaging the community
  • America Diaz's Jan 11, 23:40 comment on OUSD School Meals
    I really like what you wrote about because lot of kids don't eat at school because of the school food and it really affects students because students need food to be able to focus at school but food they like because if there is no food that they like they won't eat.
  • Sebastian's Jan 11, 22:01 comment on Soccer Is Life Right?
    Me personally don't think soccer is life because I really do not like soccer at all because I didn't grow playing soccer like most people so I really don't like it
  • Ingrid's Jan 11, 03:51 comment on A Serious Matter: Deportation in Oakland
    Dear Ivy, Your blog is really good and I really like your topic. I also believe that is an serious issue that needs to be solved because also a lot of families stay here if the father gets deported. This is very sad bc is not fair for me and I agree with you that it has affected a lot of families and everyone should be welcome in this state. I also really liked the sources you used. Very good sources to support your claim and I like how you used that one article by a councilwoman Rebecca Kaplan. I felt that was really strong. Good Job Ivy! Sincerely, Ingrid
  • Gregorio's Jan 10, 23:07 comment on Redlining is a Toxic Paint
    sup gamer, your epic work is epic indeed. i greatly enjoyed the example giving at the beginning of your work. you allows a reader to understand more of thy problem making it easier to explain. i also liked that you put in the opinions of the community so more people can share their opinion. this essay was very epic.
  • Gregorio's Jan 10, 23:01 comment on OUSD Budget
    Dear Janie, Your essay about ousd using their money effectively is very convincing and worded very well to understand the problem clearly and why it’s true. Your evidence was very convincing and had clear connections to your claim. Your essay stayed relevant to the problem and you also had good sources to your claim such as the principle. There was a few times a sentence was repeated but overall the essay was great.
  • Kimberly's Jan 10, 10:38 comment on Undercover Modern Day Slavery
    Dear Christy, I am proud about your topic that you have chosen for your blog. I also liked how you named it Undercover Modern Day Sex Slavery because people who see this and reads it would think multiple things about it, and would want to click on it. I agree with you when you stated in your analysis that “A lot of people don’t know what sex trafficking is and it’s important to know what it is because sex trafficking can happen by choice or not. Sex trafficking is very dangerous to the body mentally and physically, so to prevent it we need to know about it and realize how serious sex trafficking is so we can make a change” I agree on this because I didn’t know what sex trafficking was until you told me about it and how serious it was. This shows that no one really talks about this serious issue or really knows about it so I like how your bring people's attention by doing a blog about it.
  • Kimberly's Jan 10, 09:45 comment on More Parks for Oakland!
    Dear Victor, One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is “It’s also saying that the parks are very important for everyone so that kids have where to have fun and for the community to have a place to go so that they can have fun as a community and it would also help the obesity rates go down.” I think that this quote’s meaning is strong because I see that you clearly explained that parks are really important to the community itself. An example of this is when you talked about connecting Parks and physical health and somewhat parks and moods. One thing that you can work on is fixing the order of your words, so it could be understandable and readable to the reader and I also recommend to make your sentences shorter.
  • Ashley's Jan 10, 05:41 comment on Why
    Dear Kayla, I am surprise and sad about your blog "Why", because this blog can be touching for women that got raped and they maintain their silents. One sentence that stood out for me was, "Secondly, women need to remember to speak out about their stories because so many are not addressed. When they speak out about their stories it would help others speak out about theirs and feel empowered". This sentence stood out to me because women that got raped don't need to hide their stories. They need to share out with other people so they can feel empowered and motivated. I do agree with you because there is rape in Oakland happening and you addressing this problem is really helpful for other people. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because it's really helpful and interesting topic to write about. Sincerely, Ashley
  • Ashley's Jan 10, 05:09 comment on Cultural Celebrations In Oakland
    Dear Imelda, I am proud of your work about “Cultural Celebrations in Oakland”, because you explain how these celebrations help out the community be together as one. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is , “Oakland Celebrations are so special because everyone is welcomed and they can learn about each other”. I agree with you when you pointed out that Oakland Cultural Festival help out bring community together as one. Thanks, for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because talking about the topic of Oakland is really important for our community. We need to stand out for each other and create a supportive community Sincerely, Ashley
  • Yasmin's Jan 9, 20:41 comment on Immigrants Create A better Community
    Dear Marleni I agree with the first quote started “I think they’re great, they are what keep Oakland from turning into a “white- washed” community. Immigrants bring the culture to Oakland”. I agree with this because without immigrants it wouldn’t be the same. One sentence that stands out to me is how you said “Immigration allows there to be more opportunities for Americans, they get a chance to interact with more people who come from different countries and who speak different languages.” because its VERY TRUE people can meet new people and not be use to the same people. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because your work is very amazing.
  • Roberto Guardado's Jan 9, 20:22 comment on Immigration and Deportation affects Families
    Dear Anahi my name is Roberto and to start i really like your post, i can tell you put a lot of effort on it.Your article makes me feel sad because immigration is a very sensitive theme. One sentence you wrote that stands for me is. “And their children would probably be affected as well because they’ll see everything that’s going on with their parent and would see changes in their household due to the stress. If the bills double it makes it very frustrating for the parent dealing with it because they’ll work extra hours and still have to take care of the kids while trying to pay all the bill it’ll make it very hard”. Because i think every kid would notice the change and be stress like their parents and think about what would happen if their parents get deported, and what will happen to them, that their life are not gonna be the same as it was
  • Ivy Delgadillo Santos's Jan 9, 19:55 comment on Prostitution in Oakland
    Hey Kalani, I wanted to comment that your blog is amazing because it talks about a topic many don't really think about. This blog uncovers the truth of “modern day slavery”, prostitution. Have you seen this website? It is made by a charity, and its purpose is to spread knowledge on certain issues. The website linked it compares slaves from the 1800’s AND 1700’s to today's prostitutes. You should take a look because I read this article and it seemed very interesting. Overall, good job your blog was nice, looking forward to the next one. https://aeon.co/essays/what-the-sex-trade-has-in-common-with-the-slave-trade (search it up, somehow the link wont appear)
  • Maria's Jan 9, 19:42 comment on The Deportation Issue
    Dear Jennifer, I totally agree with your idea when or yuor text it says “With immigration they dead ass only go for Hispanic people you rarely see another race being pulled over by immigration”(Bedoya). How the fact that they come to the united states to have a future and just that they die or make then not feel safe that us latinos or just people who come to the united states without documents here just to have a better future with our families.
  • Anahi's Jan 9, 19:40 comment on Immigration Separation
    Dear Maria, To start off good job on completing your blog i know you've worked very hard on it. What i like about your blog is how you included about some of the harmful things immigration has done to children and how it can be changed. I also like how in one of you lines you included immigrants are being dehumanized by the border patrol. I think you did great on showing how they are not being taken cared of and how they are being treated. Good job keep working hard to get better at writing.
  • Diego's Jan 9, 19:39 comment on Gun Violence Prevention
    Zooie-mama, what an epic blog post. Firstly, nice evidence use with having 3 interviews so you can get 1 more actual oakland person instead of the 2 minimum. Also, you cited your work well so you won't be sued. Only I think typos hold it back maybe but maybe i'm illiterate who knows.
  • Kassandra's Jan 9, 19:38 comment on Can Fortnite affect a person negatively or positively?
    Dear Dustin, I really enjoyed reading your blog because it was really interesting. I agree with you when you said,¨while a person plays fortnite players can play with multiple people such as, friends, family or a stranger they have never met before¨. I agree with you on this because my brother was talking to a stranger and my dad got worried, so he took away his game for a bit. I also do have to agree with you when you also said,¨Some problems that Fortnite caused were people were losing their sleep to stay up to play Fortnite¨, because I do stay up late sometimes playing Fortnite. Thank you for the hard work you put into this, and for posting it to allow many to read.
  • Jennifer's Jan 9, 19:38 comment on Immigration Separation
    Dear Maria, I thought that your blog was very inspirational and that it was very meaningful as well. I can tell how much this topic meant to you tis' very good 🙂 from, jennifer
  • Kelly's Jan 9, 19:37 comment on How Should We Help Prevent Suicide
    Dear Wendy, I agree with you on that people who deal with suicidal thoughts should have a counselor or someone someone to talk to that they can relate to. I agree because like you said if they can’t relate then the person won’t feel safe or comfortable. Also, the person they are talking to should not judge because then that will make the person having suicidal thoughts be embarrassed or feel that what they are going through is a joke. I also want to add that you should have added how the person with suicidal thoughts feels when they are understood versus when they are being laughed at or misunderstood. Sincerely, Kelly
  • Martha's Jan 9, 19:37 comment on The path of Immigration
    Dear, Evelin You did an unbelievable job at writing this. I love how you introduced the interviewee because you added good important information, this helps me add more information over my interviewees next time. I think you could’ve added more analysis about the quotes you chose. But I do believe your quotes were great and brought the reader's attention. Another thing you did great was your conclusion it really told the reader the message of your article. Overall, I love your article and the way you formatted it but I think you could’ve added more analysis which would make it a lot stronger. Great Job! Sincerely, martha.
  • Ingrid's Jan 9, 19:35 comment on Solutions To Oakland Violence
    Dear Daniel, I like your blog because it has some good information and agree with you that violence in Oakland needs to stop. I agree with you that gun violence is also one big problem in Oakland and that it needs to stop. One thing you could of done better is maybe add more sources so you have more evidence to support your claim. Sincerely, Ingrid
  • Anahi's Jan 9, 19:35 comment on Violence in Oakland
    Dear Leslie, First off all good job on completing your blog you've done a great job. What I like about your blog is that you talk about how violence in Oakland can be reduced and improved. I like how you quoted, ¨we all as a community need to find a way to come together and help our people¨ this is showing that you believe the whole community should be brought together to help improve and give better opportunities to others as well. You did good on showing why you think they should also have opportunities and be helped by the community when theyŕe struggling. If really interested go to website that talk about how you can help improve the community and talk to people about how it can be changed.
  • Matthew's Jan 9, 19:29 comment on Oakland
    I really like your blog and how you express your feelings about immigrants and how oakland protects them most of the time. I also think that your evidence is really good too and the examples you give are really clear.
  • Matthew's Jan 9, 19:26 comment on Oakland
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  • Wendy's Jan 9, 18:33 comment on OUSD District Blog – Ashley Mujica
    Ashley, I was really amazed with your writing specially the topics you chose to talk about because a change should be made and you are taking a step towards making people talk about it. One sentence you write that really stood out to me was probably when you said “Students will have more potential to be more focus and not feeling confused during class.” or also when you explained that a lot of money was being wasted either way because kids don't eat the food. I think your blog was incredible good job:). Thanks for writing I look forward to seeing what you write next because you are an amazing writer and your poem last time was really good. -Wendy
  • Veronica's Jan 9, 17:28 comment on Ocean pollution
    Estimado Andrew Estoy asombrada por su publicación "La contaminación del Océano" por que es verdad lo que dices cada vez que nosotros los humanos tiramos basura un océano, rio o algo que tenga que ver con los animales del océano, existen más posibilidades de que mueran.Cada botella o empaque de algún producto es capaz de matar q un animal del mar. Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es "Cientos de miles de tortugas marinas, ballenas y otros animales marinos mueren cada año debido a la ingestión de la contaminación del océano y el enredo". Creo que esto es verdadero por que los animales no tiene la culpa de nuestras acciones malas que tomamos de tirar la basura. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación por que es muy interesante del tema que hablas es interesante. También te llama mucho la atención tus palabras sobre el tema que tomaste.
  • miguel's Jan 9, 17:28 comment on drones
    estimado raul: Estoy asombrado por tu articulo "drones" si es cierto que usan drones para buscar el enemigo y que los drones son rapidos y vuelan por radar y que algunos cargan bombas, lo que creo es que los drones son una buena tegnologia para las guerras. Gracias por tu escritura espero ver que escribas a continuación.
  • German's Jan 9, 17:27 comment on Is the world always at war?
    Estimado madison Estoy asombrado por tu publicación porque quería saber un poco mas de el mundo sobre las guerras lo que mas me gusto es que La predicción que hizo Orwell hace aproximadamente un siglo sobre la guerra sigue siendo una preocupación hoy en día gracias por tu publicación espero que sigas escribiendo más
  • Samantha's Jan 9, 17:27 comment on Prostitution in Oakland
    Estimada Kalani: Estoy muy asombrada por su publicación, "La prostitución en Oakland," porque me gusta que hables acerca de cosas muy importantes. Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es: "La prostitución es como la esclavitud moderna" Creo que esto es muy cierto porque la prostitución si es como una esclavitud moderna ya que te fuerzan contra tu voluntad a ser algo que no quieres. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque me gusta la manera en como te expresas y en cómo es la manera en la que piensas.
  • Eduardo's Jan 9, 17:26 comment on Aprendiz del espectro
    Estimado Alejandro Estoy asombrado sobre tu tema sobre el "aprendiz del espectro el séptimo hijo de unos granjeros y su padre a todos los hijos les consigue trabajos comunes como el heredero de la granja herrero , enterrador" wow estoy muy interesado en este tema "el padre del séptimo hijo quiere que sea el aprendiz del espectro" cuando escribes la segunda parte?
  • Heriberto's Jan 9, 17:26 comment on drones
    Estimado Raul: gracias por tu escritura estoy asombrado "Drones" por la tecnologías de estos drones para ayudarnos a compartir enemigos con una alta rama de alcance.
  • Kanika's Jan 9, 17:26 comment on The Deportation Issue
    Dear jennifer This is Kanika one sentence that you wrote that stood out with me was when you stated “This proves that people who work for deportation are racially making assumptions about people of color and making them feel like criminals for trying to have a better life.” I totally agree because a high population of people in the U.S say that America is a place to make your dreams come ture and that only thing immigrants want to do is live comfortable, safe, and have their kids grow up and become something in life. So for the government to try to the immigrants deported I feel that it unfair and it's only because there people of color, also because they think that immigrants are not on their level like there better than immigrants. I really appreciate that you took your time out to express yourself to the world because a lot of people can't share how they feel because they’re scared of what the world would say but not you.
  • Rolando's Jan 9, 17:25 comment on Prostitution in Oakland
    Estimado Kalani : Estoy impresionado sobre su publicación " La prostitución en Oakland " porque el tema que escogió es un tema del que debemos estar al tanto porque esta información nos podría ayudar a entender mas por la situación por la cual están pasando estas mujeres. Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es : " Muchas personas podrían decir prostitución es como la esclavitud moderna " creo que esta frase es muy representativa de lo que quiere dar a conocer con su trabajo porque esto le ayudaría a cualquier persona para saber lo que pasa en otras partes del mundo. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque tus ideas de lo que escribes son muy interesantes para pasar un reto leyendo.
  • kanika/Peaches's Jan 9, 17:24 comment on The Deportation Issue
    Dear jennifer This is Kanika one sentence that you wrote that stood out with me was when you stated “This proves that people who work for deportation are racially making assumptions about people of color and making them feel like criminals for trying to have a better life.” I totally agree because a high population of people in the U.S say that America is a place to make your dreams come ture and that only thing immigrants want to do is live comfortable, safe, and have their kids grow up and become something in life. So for the government to try to the immigrants deported I feel that it unfair and it's only because there people of color, also because they think that immigrants are not on their level like there better than immigrants. I really appreciate that you took your time out to express yourself to the world because a lot of people can't share how they feel because they’re scared of what the world would say but not you.
  • Sofia's Jan 9, 17:24 comment on ” Ocasiones en las que me hago el tonto “
    Dear Natalia: Thanks for your comment on my post, I'm glad you liked it. The phrase that I liked that you said was that "normally I do not defend the lie" because I do not like to lie but sometimes we need them to save us from something. Thanks for your writing. I hope to continue seeing what you think about my post. Sofia.
  • Yasmin's Jan 9, 17:23 comment on Why Does Marijuana Get Such A Bad Rep??
    Dear Matthew I am agreeing with your article "Why does marijuana get such bad rep" because you are right that it is harmless. Also that people think bad of it because since the government said this one thing then everyone start believing the government because he is like “right”. One sentence that stands out for me is “the government so they did not want marijuana to be seen as medical” because marijuana could be really helpful but since it's not seen as a medical help for the government then people believe its harmful. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because your articles are very interesting.
  • alejandro's Jan 9, 17:23 comment on Immigration Separation
    Dear:Maria I am moved by your post La separación de inmigración,'' because... The information about separation from families for the migration look terrible in average the separation de families is 2,700 children have been split from their parents one sentence you wrote that stands out for me is:'' unfortunately this not for I think this is very bad because... with the new reforms of migration this no stop thanks for you writing. i look forward to seeing what you write next, because... do you have very reason about this topic about the migration and the reforms the migration.
  • Maria's Jan 9, 17:21 comment on Immigration and Deportation affects Families
    Dear Anahi: I like your post "Immigration and Deportation affects Families" because I learn of new culture.I am from El salvador and live in California. Una frase que me gusto fue "Ten Ways Immigrants Help Build and Strengthen Our Economy" porque muchas personas necesitan ayuda cuando viajan a otro país y no saben cómo desarrollarse y cosas cotidianas. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero seguir mirando lo que escribes a continuación.
  • Fredy's Jan 9, 17:20 comment on I hope this never happens to me
    Estimado: enrique Estoy asombrado por tu post que hiciste de Earthquakes tu publicacion fue una expriencia que personas pasan porque dices que In 17, 1989 an Earthquake come to San Francisco and in 15 seconds cause more than six billion dollars of damage. By that time people don’t know why Earthquakes happened. The other text I read about The Tsunami was about in Japan. I Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because this is asombroso y harrible por las personas que pasan eso.
  • Irvin's Jan 9, 17:20 comment on Change your opinion of immigrants
    Miguel I liked reading your blog because it was super interesting and it was very clear that you wanted to make a change. I really liked your first quote a lot because it had statistics and you analized it pretty good as well and I liked the questions you wrote in your second paragraph a great start to a paragraph I think your work is very strong and hope to see more of your work.
  • Rodolfo's Jan 9, 17:20 comment on Immigration Separation
    Estimada maria me gusta tu escritura que se llama Immigration Separation me gusto porque habla de que estados unidos debe de dejar de separar niños y niñas de sus familias. Mu gusto esa parte de tu escritura porque yo tambien soy emigrante. una parte que me gusto fue Los Estados Unidos deben dejar de separar a las familias en la frontera y detener a los latinos deshumanizados porque son personas como todos los demás.Para empezar, la separación familiar debe terminar.
  • Erika's Jan 9, 17:19 comment on Esquisitas pupusas
    Estimado Rodolfo me pare muy interesante que hable de la cultura salvadoreña porque las personas que viven ahí hacen comidas muy ricas eh probado las pusos que me trajo una amiga salvadoreña y estaban exquisitas yo creo que para que tu hables de las exquisitas comidas salvadoreñas tu tienes que ser de salvador no
  • German's Jan 9, 17:17 comment on George Orwell’s Prediction about Privacy
    Estimada Alexandra Estoy impresionado por tu publicasion sobre los drones por que a mi me interesaba saber mas sobre los drones lo que mas me gusto i que yo no lo sabía es que los drones todavía no se usan en la guerra, vuelan a zonas de guerra donde encuentran al enemigo. Los drones son silenciosos, son rápidos, vuelan bajo el radar, algunas tienen bombas. y que los drones ayudan a ganar advierte La idea de que más y más gobiernos censuren y examinen las plataformas de redes sociales. gracias por tu publicación espero que sigas escribiendo mas sobre los drones porque me parece muy enteresante
  • Veronica's Jan 9, 17:16 comment on Why Not Mexican music?
    Estimado Davis Estoy asombrada por su publicación "¿Por qué no la música Mexicana? por que es verdad lo que dices en esta publicación, la música mexicana tiene un sentimiento único. No todas las personas lo sienten solo los mexicanos de corazón que conocen su música original. Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es "Lo mejor de la música mexicana es que hay una variedad para adaptarse a cualquier estado de ánimo". Creo que esto es cierto por que la música mexicana tiene diferentes ritmos que se adaptan a los estados de ánimo. Siempre encontrarás una cancion que tenga que ver con amor, tristeza, etc. Gracias por tu escritura.Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación por que se me hizo interesante tus palabras en esta publicación.Se me hizo interesante tambien porque es apasionante lo que dices de la música mexicana y le recomiendas buena música a la gente de otros países o continentes.
  • Eduardo's Jan 9, 17:16 comment on la historia de messi
    Estimado German Estoy asombrado por tu informacion de Leonel Messi. lo que mas me gusto "fue que el encontró su pasión alos 5 años de edad y esa pasión era el fútbol" "Yo quisiera ser como Messi uno de las mejores figuras del mundo a nivel futbolístico quiero ver la continuacion de este párrafo podrias escribir mas informacion?
  • Sofia's Jan 9, 17:16 comment on Sobrevivir
    Dear Samantha: I am amazed by your writing of " Correr o Morir" because me pareció muy interesante yo no lo he leído pero por lo que me cuentas me parece que es interesante . Algo que escribiste que me gusto es que haces la comparacion sobre la pelicula de ''Los juegos del Hambre" y esta pelicula me encanto cuando la vi por primera vez. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación porque quiero saber mas sobre que opinas sobre los libros que lees. Sofia
  • Samantha's Jan 9, 17:15 comment on Do You Care About The Homeless In Your Community
    Estimado Adrian: Estoy muy encantada por su publicación, "Le gustan los sin techo de su comunidad," porque me gusta como hablas de ayudar a las personas que no tienen un hogar por que son desalojados ya que la la renta de las casas son elevadas. Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es: "Todo el mundo debe ayudar a las personas sin hogar aunque sólo sea un poco, porque un poco puede ayudar y algo poco puede ser grande." Creo que esto es muy cierto, porque si apoyas a alguien con poquito esas personas pueden usar esa poquita ayuda para encontrar algo con lo que puedan sobrevivir y al menos pueden conseguir algo de comer. Gracias por su escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación, porque me gusta mucho la forma que escribes y en la forma que te expresas, aparte me haces razonar con estas situaciones.
  • Fredy's Jan 9, 17:12 comment on Soccer star lionel messi
    Dear: Alberto I am proud of your post soccer star lionel messi because explica como Lionel era un joven que estuvo en el segundo equipo del Barcelona. En abril 18, 2007 un jugador llamado Lionel Messi debutará con el primer equipo. Nomas le bastó un partido para demostrar de qué estaba hecho. Thanks for you writting. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because era muy interesante saber de la vida de lionel messi.
  • Maria's Jan 9, 17:07 comment on La noche estaba plateada
    Estoy Evelyn: Estoy asombrada por tu historia "Y no se lo tragó la tierra" porque aprendí de los mitos acerca de las cosas diabólicas y esto me llamó mucho la atención. Una frase que escribiste que me gusto fue "Personas adoran al diablo en el mundo". porque muchas personas tienen la creencia de adorar el diablo para que les cumpla todo lo que ellos quieren por ejemplo es ser millonarios pero el diablo a cambio de cumplirles eso pide su alma a cambio. Gracias por tu escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación.
  • Bailey's Jan 9, 15:42 comment on America is Diverse, but is it Equal?
    Michelle, I really enjoyed reading your article, I feel like you took a new path with this assignment. Your usage of sources really helped build your argument, especially being that they represented a view that differs from most I have seen on the subject. You also established the United States as a complicated place which as all things do has flaws that go hand in hand with their strengths, this helped your argument by reducing the readers thoughts on your biases.
  • Bailey's Jan 9, 15:19 comment on Comfort Zones
    Emma, I really enjoyed your article and I completely agree with your stance. I would say the highlight of your piece was you making a connection of self growth and wisdom. Another strong area of your article is how you included simple and complex examples, this helped widen your audience. Your discussion of self-destructive behavior was very interesting and I feel as though many people can not only observe in society but relate to personally. Normally I would critique your usage of informal diction, however, given your topic and your audience I feel like it actually works better.
  • Dean's Jan 9, 14:32 comment on Why Mental Health Matters
    Dear Li, I really like the fact that you chose the topic of depression. I heard a lot about chronic depression recently. I think it is becoming a big issue in our country and our world. I kind of agree with your argument that young people are not mature enough to make good choices. I totally agree that people take drugs which is a bad choice. I agree that it is important to avoid drug users and people need to find a way to treat depression better. People take drugs to find relief but that is just for a short time period. They need to be treated differently. I hope less people suffer from depression.
  • Paulina's Jan 9, 05:09 comment on The Injustice of Puppy Mills
    I agree with you that puppy mills are bad but, there is a difference between puppy mills and breeders. Puppy mills produce litter after litter of dogs and they don’t care about the wellbeing of the puppies or the mother. They keep them in tight and disturbing spaces. All they care about is the money. Leginament breeders produce litters that will better the breed. All leginament breeder get multiple health test performed on both the mother and the father. After the puppies are born they spend at least 7 weeks loving, nurturing, and caring for the puppies. They spend days trying to find the perfect match between for puppy and the owners. I also agree with you that animals need to get adopted from the shelters. Every animal that is born deserves a chance to have a loving family. Sincerely, Paulina
  • Paulina's Jan 9, 04:32 comment on Body image and Expectation
    Elizabeth, Melany, and Ying, I totally agree with your thesis statement. Middle school plays a huge part of a person's life. A kid becomes a teenager. They hit a time in their life where everything is changing. Some examples are; appearance, voice, and even friends. Most kids go through a phase of not knowing who they are. When these kids go to any social media platform they see influencers that look like they have the perfect life and try to copy them. They stop trying to be different and unique and try to change their life and appearance to look perfect. Which does not help self love they don’t like who they are and they think they can become a whole new different “perfect” person. I think it’s part of a teachers job is to help their students not only grow intelligence but to help them grow as people. Thanks, Paulina
  • Sanath's Jan 9, 04:21 comment on Explore, My Favorite Word
    Dear Tyler, I am happy your favorite word is explore as it can be a very creative and thought provoking activity. While the word may be an enigma with its multiple definitions and uses. Your idea of relating curiosity and exploration is very clever, as curiosity can be a cause or an effect for exploration. Thank you Tyler I very much appreciated your favorite word,even though I wish you did more with your description and use of your word. Very good work I look forward to more writing from you.
  • Kristen's Jan 9, 00:51 comment on Jell-O
    Hello, Nishan. I'm a little late to the party, but I like the word Jell-O too (love the emphasis on the O)! I absolutely love your intro as well. Americans do come up with a unique meaning for a product. Sometimes, I forget that jell-O is animal bones, etc. and not just a fruity flavor! Overall great arguments especially when you linked Sri Lanka in there. - Kristen
  • Madeline's Jan 8, 17:45 comment on Why do we cast out those different than us?
    I think it’s very important to learn about these problems(as they have a bigger footprint on society every day) and educate others, and posting articles anywhere and everywhere is definitely a good step. Portraying different aspects of how we as humans have neglected those minority populations rather than one specific argument really helps prevent alienation of the overly opinionated readers you will come across. My only advice would be to strengthen each talking point by showing an opposing opinion that will help you prove your point, while also showing both sides of the argument clearly. For example, when talking about the father that is trapped in sanctuary, having a sentence pointing out the governmental/law side of the argument will give you the ability to not only prove the case even more, but also appeal to a reader’s sense of humanity. Readers can easily tell how much you care about the opposition that is faced by so many unheard voices around the world, and it comes across in your writing very clearly. This was an impactful piece to read and gave me something to think about.
  • Laurenz's Jan 8, 09:53 comment on How To Prevent School Shootings?
    I agree with most of your views. But i would take the easy accessability of guns as a bigger factor in why so many school shootings happen in America. You can just take a look at germany or any other european country and see that the rate of school shooting are drastically lower than in the US. Now one could say that this is caused by european schools beeing a better environment than american schools, but that is most certainly not true. It´s just that people that have Problems can´t just take the Gun of their parents and shoot up the school. But that still leaves the Problem, that troubled kids need more help to deal with their anger in another way than hurting someone else.
  • Samuel's Jan 7, 23:35 comment on How is the government limiting our privacy?
    Chris Thanks for your contribution here. I plan to share your post with my high school students in Philadelphia who are doing a deep dive into the topic of Online Privacy. Hopefully, they will gain some insights from your perspective. Cheers Reed
  • Kevin Murphy's Jan 7, 15:34 comment on Gun Control
    Branigan -- Your article had piqued my curiosity so much that I followed all your links and resources (such as https://www.hsph.harvard.edu/hicrc/firearms-research/gun-threats-and-self-defense-gun-use-2/) to read about "Defensive Gun Use". Your article also inspired me to create a summary of "DGU" studies since 1995-2018 from both sides (pros and antis). This link if you want to take a look : https://gungoal.com/blogs/dgu-wars-still-raging-strong/ Thanks so much for your hard work! Cheers, Kevin Murphy
  • Tyahmiya's Jan 4, 19:17 comment on Oh, White Light
    I love how this can relate to so many people in the world and I truly believe that this will help people come out the shadows for people who have went through sexual assault or going through sexual assault come out and speak about it because you are not alone.
  • Dior Bullock's Jan 4, 18:55 comment on How Would You Feel?
    This piece is powerful. Every man in the stresses would understand this story. As a women from the "ghetto" i feel this piece in every way. I've seen and heard this story a million times. Everyday i witness veriest view of brutality. This piece makes me sad and proud at the same time of how my generation moves as one, we now understand how police look at us but now sadly harm each other. Thank you for writing this piece it opened my eyes to a new interesting topic!
  • Tyron's Jan 4, 18:53 comment on Answering Essential Questions
    It was a good book but I wasn't able to go past chapter 15 but I got to see the movie and the was some parts that made me think, Why?
  • jamal lott's Jan 4, 18:49 comment on America was already great… What happened?
    for my opinion i have a half feeling on if america was great or not i see as yeah it was good in some cases like reaching beyond earth producing heathcare even just looking out for eachother or helping out for moral decisions
  • John's Jan 4, 18:44 comment on Answering Essential Questions
    The book The Hate U Give is one of the best books I've ever read. I really recommend it.
  • quill's Jan 4, 18:42 comment on Answering Essential Questions
    This is an awsmoe book I love it but the move was little better
  • mirrah's Jan 4, 18:41 comment on I know this…
    This was a very great book , The movie was amazing as well. I hope you enjoy watching The Hate U Give & Reading it.
  • Noelle Rojas's Jan 4, 18:40 comment on Answering Essential Questions
    i like the book i would recommend
  • Demetrius's Jan 4, 18:40 comment on Let Me Open Your Eyes
    I really have enjoyed The Hate U Give book very much. It had a powerful meaning to it and this post is just as powerful by explaining pretty much everything about the book. Great job on this page Ethan, you've really outdone yourself.
  • Tyron's Jan 4, 18:35 comment on Answering Essential Questions
    Same here. (>^-^)>
  • jhena's Jan 4, 18:34 comment on Knowledge is Power
    I strongly agree with this passage. Knowledge is very important and if the individuals that were put in a crisis would've had knowledge, it would've changed a lot.
  • Yani's Jan 4, 18:34 comment on Police Brutality
    Police Brutality is very big for the Black people in the United States because police people believe that they have control over us.
  • Kasiem Pope's Jan 4, 18:29 comment on Answering Essential Questions
    i loved this book and watch the movie. 10/10 and highly reccomened
  • markayla's Jan 4, 18:28 comment on Love is powerful
    words are powerful in general , everything you say has a meaning.
  • Destynn McLaine's Jan 4, 17:54 comment on Answering Essential Questions
    I enjoyed reading your piece on 'The Hate U Give'. The facts you give make the reader understand that you are not only writing from "hear-say" or opinions. I believe different readers would really like and understand your synopsis of this book.
  • Justin Rivera's Jan 4, 17:41 comment on How Would You Feel?
    This brought emotions to me for how life is like and how horrible it get's. People blaming you for stuff you didn't do. People putting you on blast. Hurting your feelings showing you hurt there is so many pain happening to innocent people. People being judge for who they are. I see there pain there emotion showing how they feel. I'm glad they brought this up for me I realize that hate isn't the way of life.
  • Nathan Torres's Jan 4, 17:35 comment on Answering Essential Questions
    This is a good respond of the book thank you for showing the back round of the story
  • Christian's Jan 4, 16:08 comment on Hate
    hate only creates more hate like war only brings more war it is a never ending cycle that we deal with in this world.
  • Go-Gi-Sgk Dimalanta's Jan 4, 16:05 comment on A Short Convo
    I thought this was a nice twist, rather than actually writing it out. I found myself smiling because starr and chris' relationship is playful and can talk about a lot of things.
  • Zahaad's Jan 4, 16:03 comment on Khalil’s court case
    Omar I enjoy reading your piece. I like how everything went together
  • bobby's Jan 4, 16:03 comment on Answering Essential Questions
    who did you come you with use ideas
  • zyria's Jan 4, 16:01 comment on Let Me Open Your Eyes
    I love how you really get in the book and talk about how its not just about Khail death . I also like how you made were though people can relate
  • alana's Jan 4, 15:55 comment on Crimes not associated (directly) with marijuana
    You did a good job very well thought out.
  • Karroline Torres's Jan 4, 15:50 comment on How Would You Feel?
    Left me shooken to the core. Such a strong piece and honestly left me without words. So amazing and glad I came across this poem.
  • AlexTheSavageAss's Jan 4, 03:57 comment on What Goes Around Comes Around
    All i saw was "The Cheaters"....
  • Joseph's Dec 22, 05:15 comment on Very Cash Money
    Dear Diego, What an elaborate poem. It’s almost deceiving how each line is so short yet the over all poem has a very deep message behind it. And it’s very impressive to me that you were able to convey such a deep message with such few lines and words. I don’t think I could ever do something like that. I also appreciate the bits of humor in your poem. Overall, your poem was amazing. Keep up the great work! Joseph Thornton
  • Sanath's Dec 21, 02:00 comment on Mob Mentality
    Hello Jacob, I really appreciate the fact that you brought the idea of mob mentality from the olden days, torches and screaming peoples, to the online aspect that it as has evolved into. The one thing I felt was missing from your argument is the working behinds mobs and what they are. While you may have provided examples it did not show your knowledge of the topic. I also found that you didn't include anything about the flaws of being apart of these "mobs". Overall your writing is superb but in my opinion there are some slight changes that need to be made.
  • Sanath's Dec 21, 01:54 comment on In a futuristic society could an increase in surveillance and control lead to herd mentality and lack of individual thought?
    I enjoyed your argument Abby, but one thing I found a bit off setting was your idea of mass shootings or other events as the "norm" kind of makes your argument seem insensitive or apathetic. Might've just been the way I read your post, but I think your writing is very good beside my earlier comment.
  • Ariana's Dec 20, 23:05 comment on The Scars of Hate
    Dear Joseph, I am intrigued by your poem because you made your poem rhyme and that made it really interesting and fun to read. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is “Apparently the strength of hate is unconditional, Yet whenever I see the word it’s only two dimensional”. This stood out to me because I feel like its true but also it caught my attention because it rhymed. Thank you for writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next.
  • Breanna's Dec 19, 18:10 comment on Irvin Shadow Box
    dear Irvin, what i like about your shadow box is how you put effort into it good job
  • Doraneli's Dec 14, 20:31 comment on Have You Heard? By Edwin C. Munoz Orantes
    Dear Edwin , Your poem was really cool. It showed the truth and made me notice the pain people that go through poverty go through. I can tell how much effort yu put into this poem which made me think that you’re great writer ! You did great and I liked the poem :). I got 2 questions for you. Does this topic get to you or make you feel some type of way ? Do you think that you should write more about this type of topics. If so , why ?
  • Beatriz's Dec 13, 06:02 comment on My Poem
    Dear Tania, Reading your poem about love was very interesting because I could really see the connection to Romeo and Juliet. The part where you said that sometimes some people can’t be together because of their parents is true since not everyone has the freedom to love whoever they want. My favorite line from your poem was “Love doesn’t have a meaning But it does have emotions”. The reason why it was my favorite was because for everyone love may be different for them based on their experiences. Thank you so much for sharing your poem and I look forward to reading more of your work on here. Sincerely, Beatriz
  • Evelin's Dec 13, 04:13 comment on Sunshine
    Dear Christina, I am very proud of you! Thank you for sharing your powerful poem. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is was when your wrote “Your face like an angel that can’t leave me An angel like a guardian of my heart . I think this is very appealing because I like how you compared their faces with an angle. Another sentence that I liked was ¨ My muscles to keep me strong when I’m low¨. This stood out because it shows what you feel at times and I’m sure there’s a lot people who can connect. Overall, I really like the rhyme that your poem had over each other! Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because you’re a great poet. Hope seeing wonderful poems!
  • Christina's Dec 13, 03:02 comment on This Is Oakland By Lupita M.C.
    Dear Lupita, I LOVED your poem. I can visualize the way Oakland is with your poem and how our youth is exposed to hate. I also like the way you used the feuds with oakland to compare with Romeo and Juliet. Something i connected to is when you said, “And I should be able to just be me, Without the fear of a gun”. This connected to me because i feel like whenever i going somewhere i'm not same because guns have become a big problem today and almost everyone has one and knowing that doesn’t make me feel safe. Overall your poem was really moving and I really enjoyed it. I hope you keep writing. - Christina
  • Christina's Dec 13, 01:19 comment on Parents Must End Wars And Start Peace
    Dear Daniel, I liked how you bring up a true and very real problem. Familys do cause stress. which can reflect onto people and their kids. I really like how you used the metaphor,“Pain can be a scorpion wanting to poison your mind.” I found this really interesting because when parents fight they are hurting their kids and that can be like poison. Overall your quote really MAKES your paper. Keep up the good work - Christina
  • Bryan's Dec 12, 22:04 comment on Love is Powerful
    Dear, Victor I like how you choose the topic Love, but what inspired you to choose love as your topic. Anyways your poem was great. A line that stood out to me was when you said, “Both would do anything so they could be together wishing they could go back to the moment where they fell in love even knowing that they shouldn’t be because they both came from “different places”. That line stood out to me because I feel like I can see that moment play out in my head. Overall your poem was good you should write more. Sincerely, Bryan Moreno
  • Bryan's Dec 12, 21:52 comment on My Community
    Dear, Kenya I like how you decided to write a poem about your community! A line that really stood out to me is when you said, “Me and my mom locked in the car. You know nothing new, another shooting”. That stood out to me because that was a way you decided to describe your community and it’s just like damn. Overall your poem was really good. Sincerely, Bryan Moreno
  • Dustin's Dec 12, 21:42 comment on Two genders
    Dear Beatriz, I honestly love your poem. It speaks out to people about what it's trying to say, and how it is unjust. I also like how you talked about other things that had differences, then you went straight to the point about what are differences and how one gender is more privileged than the other. I like how yo usaid, “ The war/ fights these two genders have is the words and actions. Their mouths are guns and their words are bullets that hurt each other.” This stood out to me because there is a lot of arguing between the two genders and sometimes we don’t even try to hurt each other. I really like your poem and hope that you continue these to prove a point.
  • Dustin Crawford's Dec 12, 21:40 comment on Two genders
    Dear Beatriz, I honestly love your poem. It speaks out to people about what it's trying to say, and how it is unjust. I also like how you talked about other things that had differences, then you went straight to the point about what are differences and how one gender is more privileged than the other. I like how you said, “ The war/ fights these two genders have is the words and actions. Their mouths are guns and their words are bullets that hurt each other.” This stood out to me because there is a lot of arguing between the two genders and sometimes we don’t even try to hurt each other. I really like your poem and hope that you continue these to prove a point.
  • Daniel's Dec 12, 20:46 comment on Alcoholism
    Dear oswaldo, your story inspiring. my dad also does drugs, so I know how you feel.but my dad is trying his best to stop smoking and drinking alcohol.
  • Jocelyn's Dec 12, 20:41 comment on Not Loving the Right Person by Cece Corado-Portillo
    Hey, My name is Jocelyn go follow me on instagram @Joceegobrazzy and add me on snapchat @Jocelyn17385.I really liked the part where you said “Adults say I should love a specific person but my heart says I should love whoever I want.” I agree with you because your heart is telling you to love whoever no matter if your parents are wrong about it. But at times your parents may have a point to tell you what to do and what not to do. Another than that i really liked your poem. Good Job. Sincerely, Jocelyn Figueroa
  • Jocelyn's Dec 12, 20:30 comment on love and war by matthew
    Hey, My name is Jocelyn go add me on instagram @Joceegobrazzy. I really like the part where you said “This separation will soon lead to desperation the desperation turns to fascination and soon all the dreams will vanish. This sentence is hella strong because a lot of families that get separated may feel or feel like this and it's sad to even think about it. Your poem is very strong lmao when you said “All these false stereotypes make me feel bad like crack babies.” that had me weak. Okayyy another than that I really liked your poem. Sincerely, Jocelyn Figueroa
  • Jocelyn's Dec 12, 20:18 comment on Why Me?
    Hey, My name is Jocelyn and I am really impressed by your poem. I really liked the part where you said “Waking up every morning feeling like shit depressed as fuck asking myself why the fuck did I have to wake up again then walk into school into humanities and put on that fake smile and say yea “I’m fine”. “ I really felt that because I be feeling like that at times but never give up shit I know it gets hard but you gotta keep your beautiful head up no matter what you going through. I’m really sorry your cousin committed suicide. My cousin recently passed away because of cancer and all tell you myself it's hard asf to say your “Fine” when in reality you feel sad and dead. Head up if anything i'm here much love. Sincerely, Jocelyn Figueroa
  • Ivy Delgadillo's Dec 12, 19:38 comment on My Community
    My favorite part of your poem was ”I try to imagine that the sound Of shattering glass is diamonds But, in reality its glass windows”. And I also like how you instead of writing about love, (a topic that almost everyone wrote about) you wrote about violence. Also, your choice of words was great, you are an actual poet!!!Good job, I really like your poem, and I look forward to seeing what else you upload.
  • Kassandra's Dec 12, 19:38 comment on Hate vs Hate
    Dear Jessica, I loved reading your poem! I liked the rhymes you put in, and about how you said that you“can’t put out fire with fire”; It’s great! I mainly loved when you said, “For what? Why? Because two communities can’t learn how to pacify? Peace and love is a gate To stop this hate. Hate VS Hate A lot of communities can relate. We all have this trait. It almost never goes away Like a scar from some jaguar. Hate VS Hate” Thank you for posting your poem; Keep on writing! Sincerely, Kassandra
  • Matthew's Dec 12, 19:33 comment on Spoken Word Poem
    dear Wendy, i really love the way your poem was made i think it was really beautiful and one of kind and the whole messedge was really good the way you worded everything made me feel like you had put a lot of effort into your poem keep up the good work❤❤
  • Gregorio's Dec 12, 19:32 comment on Love Story
    Dear kimberly, I enjoyed reading your poem because it got me intrigued into reading more into your poem. I also liked how you used sound effects to make your poem more lively. Your poem was detailed and I could see the clear connection to romeo and juliet.
  • Bryan's Dec 12, 19:32 comment on Spoken Word Poem
    Dear, Wendy Thanks for sharing your poem I thought it was a very good poem. A line that stood out to me was when you said, “Don’t you love someone so much? Despite everything. You love them even when you are hurt badly”. That line stood out to me because I feel like that’s so true. Overall your poem was good and I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing your poem. Sincerely, Bryan Moreno
  • Imelda's Dec 12, 19:32 comment on The Good and The Bad
    Dear Kelly, Your poem is beautiful. I really likes your last line “But the ultimate tragedy was their agony”. That last line was powerful and it rhymed. Looks like you put two topics in and made it all one. I also liked how you used exact lines from the book/film of R&J. Your use of metaphors is really strong and good. Overall your poem is very detailed and it has an amazing meaning to it! Sincerely, Imelda :))
  • Ivy Delgadillo's Dec 12, 19:32 comment on Love
    Hey Ariana, I love how you write your poetry! Infact, my favorite part of your poem was ”Now a days we throw “I love you’s” like it doesn’t mean anything”. I love it because it shows how real love is hard to find, and that what Romeo and Juliet had was real. And I also like how you keep repeating the words “some people” that way you can tell the difference between “love” now and in a story. I really like your poem, and I look forward to seeing what else you upload :)))
  • Valerie's Dec 12, 19:31 comment on This is What I See
    Dear Christy, I really enjoy how you tell your poem from your perspective. One sentence that stood out to me is when you said Papa was a drug dealer because they wanted to buy you (or the main protagonist) candy and would do anything to make you happy. Something you can clarify is who is telling the story because it sounded like it was your story but it wasn’t. Thanks for writing and I am looking forward to seeing more pieces like this.
  • Kelly's Dec 12, 19:31 comment on Unexpected
    Dear Imelda, I think your poem is amazing and very detailed. One part I like is that you put ¨typing¨ to make it seem like someone was actually typing. I like that your poem is relatable. ¨Falling in love is like a Ferris wheel it’s going all good until it stops in the middle you don’t know what’s wrong but you gotta stay strong¨, is one of my favorite lines from your poem because it totally relates to the struggles of love. You should keep writing and keep expressing your feelings because I think you will do great. Sincerely, Kelly
  • Kassandra's Dec 12, 19:27 comment on This Is Oakland By Lupita M.C.
    Dear Lupita, Thank you for sharing your amazing poem! I enjoyed reading every word in it. I love when you said “This is Oakland And I should be able to just be me Without the fear of a gun I should just be able to have simple fun And not be on alert and be ready to run Not having to fear anyone” That was very strong, and the rhyming and the wording of everything is great! I also feel the same way, that when we’re home, or anywhere, there’s no sure way to say that we’re safe. Keep up the amazing work of your poetry! Sincerely, Kassandra
  • Bryan's Dec 12, 19:26 comment on Violence!
    Dear, Chris Your poem is really good. I honestly like your poem I like how you chose the topic violence. But from all the things that happened in Romeo and Juliet what made you choose violence? I think you should have explained why you choose violence in your description but overall your poem was really good. Sincerely, Bryan Moreno
  • Chris's Dec 12, 18:34 comment on suicide
    Dear Diego, I really like how you expressed you poem here it really shows what people might think when they think about suicide. It really shows that you gave thought onto this common problem that is out there. I like when you said that “people commit suicides because of love and because of depression” it shows how strong your poem is some parts were you could improve is to add more details you had good ones but I think you could of added even better ones. Hope you keep it up!
  • Janeth's Dec 12, 18:34 comment on Love
    I like how you talk about how money and expensive things won't heal you when you need someone to be by your side. I also like how you add about how money won't make you happy. You added a lot about love and I like that because I think love is better than money and expensive things. I like how you chose to talk about Love because everyone needs love to be happy and there's love everywhere and their is not a lot of money and expensive things around.
  • Jadyn's Dec 12, 18:30 comment on Parents Must End Wars And Start Peace
    Dear Daniel, Your poem was very good I like how you chose a different topic than just love. I also like all the metaphors and similes you used in your poem. This poem was very accurate because usually when parents are arguing they don´t think we hear them or understand but we really do and that's why it was a good example when you said ¨Hurt by blades stabbing my mind and word’s hurting my ears.¨ In your poem I also like when you said “Pain can be a scorpion wanting to poison your mind.” I believe you are trying to say the pain you go through because your parents disagreements get to you and and go to your head and will make you stressed out and cause you to turn to something that you think will ease the pain but really cause something more serious than you thought the actual outcome would be. Your poem has a lot of meanings and messages in it even though your topic was feuding between families causing tragedies so great job! I Would Like to Hear More From You in the Future, Jadyn W.
  • Christina's Dec 12, 18:28 comment on Escape from Violence
    Dear Evelin, I liked how you used words in Spanish to express fear. With that fear it shapes your whole poem. I also like how you make nice how you used questions in your poem to make it clear people that people are confused. This also shows me that there are multiple personalities in fear. Overall your poem is moving and i hope you keep writing. Christina : )
  • Ashley's Dec 12, 17:27 comment on love and war by matthew
    Dear Matthew, I am proud about your poem , “Love and War”, because you connect to the story about Romeo and Juliet and create it about something that happens in Oakland. I really liked how you explain where the non- privileged people live and where the “privilege people” live in Oakland. Something that I like about your poem was that you talked about “street art” because we have a lot of street art in Oakland. One part of your poem line that stands out to me is ,“The most interesting thing is the division between the Oakland hills and the flat lands we know”. This connects to the whole community of Oakland because there’s a lot of division and gentrification going on in Oakland. Something you can work on it’s to capitalized the words that need to be capitalized. Make sure next time you reread your work. After all, your poem is amazing.
  • Jessica's Dec 12, 17:27 comment on The Universe Within Us
    Dear Judith I am very touched by your poem, “The Universe Within Us”, because the relationship that you show in your poem of you and your mom is beautifully shown with all the metaphors that you use of the universe. One part of your poem that stands for me is where you wrote, “And the stars that decorate the universe with the light you believe I deserve to feel instead”. This stood out to me because I can tell that you really put a lot of effort into this poem. Also, I like how the title of your poem matches the poem really nicely. Another part that I stood out to me is the last six lines. This stood out to me because I think it really brings out your topic. Thanks for your poem. I look forward to what you make next because this poem was amazing.
  • Beatriz's Dec 12, 17:25 comment on The Good and The Bad
    Dear Kelly, I am very thrilled to have read your poem because it really showed us the connection to Romeo and Juliet’s love story. I liked how the similes you used especially “she wears wings that shine with golden light”, the reason why I liked it is because you can actually imagine Juliet being like that since she was very happy to be with Romeo. Thank you very much for sharing your poem and I look forward to reading other work you publish. Sincerely, Beatriz
  • Ulises's Dec 12, 17:24 comment on Sunshine
    Christina Archibald, Great job on your poem about love I liked the part where you said “my muscles keep me strong when i'm low” that line shows that your strong enough to not go down. Another thing that I liked was when you did a simile on the kline “Happy is where I see your face face like an angel that can’t leave me.An angel like a guardian of my heart”. I think that this was good smile because it showed how they brought you happiness. Sincerely,Ulises
  • Victor's Dec 12, 17:23 comment on Love Can Be Your Worst Nightmare
    Dear, Bryan Thanks for sharing your poem with us, you are a Poet. A line that stood out to me was when you said “ Is just a chemical reaction it hits hard but slowly fades”. That line stood out to me because it's expressing a lot of feeling to that line and also connecting to R+J. Your poem was very good, you can tell that you took a lot to make this poem. Thanks for sharing your poem was us keep making more. #FAX
  • America's Dec 12, 17:17 comment on Why Me?
    I really like your poem i could tell that it came down deep inside you. People could relate to this because i feel like people have been through that. Nice job i really liked your poem.
  • Kayla's Dec 12, 17:16 comment on The Good and The Bad
    Dear Kelly, I would like to start off by saying I love how you cite lines from Romeo and Juliet. One of my favorite lines in your poem would have to be “She wears wings that shine with golden light”, this would have to be my favorite line because one you pulled it from the book to show how it connects to Romeo and Juliet. But it also shows that you know how to connect two things and add different styles to your poem. Sincerely, Kayla
  • Jocelyn's Dec 12, 17:15 comment on Girls Everywhere
    "We are not toys” I am really impressed with these words because I agree so much with you boys thing we are toys to play with like no boo we have feeling. But I really like your poem it's strong and powerful. “Our happiness does not depend on on boys" I also really like the part were you said we don't need to depend on boys like we really don’t we can do stuff on our own. Other then that I am very proud of you ma love Sincerely, Jocelyn Figueroa
  • Teresa's Dec 12, 16:59 comment on It Was Fun
    Dear Kassandra, I am very touched by your poem because it made me realize to not take the little things for granted. I felt very sad about how you explain violence takes away from you visiting your mother’s hometown because violence is a very powerful feeling that has severe consequences. One part of your poem that stands out for rme is where wrote “one day I will be with my family again”. I think that this is very vital because it shows hope in your writing. Even though many people are suffering, people shouldn’t give up. Thanks for writing this wonderful poem. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because the poem made me understand a lot of about world problems.
  • Maria Molina Reyes's Dec 12, 15:56 comment on Anahi´s poem
    Dear Anahi, your poem is really nice that it relates with violence that’s happening in the community or around the world.It seems that you took your time to do this poem working on your similes. The line that I really like was “I’m taught to love but also to hate” I feel that that’s a powerful line to me bc it talks in so many ways.
  • Beatriz's Dec 12, 14:21 comment on Love is a Privilege
    Dear Ivy, I am very amazed by your poem because I can see you put so much effort in writing it so that we could see a connection to Romeo and Juliet. One part of your poem that stands out to me is you used a flower to represent what was happening to romeo and juliet. Reading your poem was very to me because it was very creative and my favorite line was “They held the delicate petals that spelled out privilege and power, And the key to their true love was a lovely, lovely flower”. Thank you very much for sharing this poem and I can’t wait to see what other work you create next. Sincerely, Beatriz
  • Calvin's Dec 12, 06:36 comment on The Scars of Hate
    Dear Joseph, Your poem was too real. I really like how you thought about it a lot and wrote down a bunch of your ideas, especially the questions. I also find it interesting that you associated hate to gun violence. War and conflict has caused too many casualties. My favorite line was "Apparently the strength of hate is unconditional" because it reminded me of how much hate has spread everywhere. Do you think this world will ever become less hateful and change for the better? Thank you for sharing. Your poem was genuinely interesting.
  • Chris's Dec 12, 06:00 comment on Alcoholism
    Dear Oswaldo, I really appreciate the confidence you had to share this personal story to the class i know it must be hard for you to have your dad lost every day. This shows that you are strong by sharing this not only to our class but to the public as well. Thanks for sharing this with us hope we get more poems from you soon!
  • Chris's Dec 12, 05:45 comment on Growing Up Poem
    Dear Adrian, I like your poem it's strong it's simple and gets to the main point that "growing up wasn't always easy" your poem was strong i liked when you said "There are bullets, BANG! BANG! BANG! Bullets that dance through the air And hit innocents" This was really strong because it's true we see and hear innocent people get murdered by mean people all the time. Keep it up hope your next poem is as good as this one!
  • Janie's Dec 12, 05:12 comment on My Poem
    Dear Tania Your poem really shows what love is to some people. I like your poem because it relates to Romeo and JUliet because they couldn't be together because their families didn't get along, and your poem shows how they were feeling. I like how your poem had me questioning at the end. I like how you ended your poem by saying “Love doesn’t have a meaning, but it does have emotions” this confused me at the beginning but started to make sense because you're saying that love has no meaning but it has emotions because you get and emotion every time you see that person that you really love. -Janie
  • Imelda's Dec 12, 05:05 comment on My Community
    Dear Kenya, Amazing poem you have! Community is a big topic because in those communities we have a thing called home. I liked how you used “A plague Plague of both houses?Nah a plague on the people who created this“Street Disturbance” this part is outstanding. Usually we think about problems breaking out because of two households but it’s not always like that. You were very detailed and each line made sense. Your description is so detailed and it explains what you will be talking in your poem and why you chose it so it wouldn’t be confusing. Good job! Sincerely, Imelda
  • Janie's Dec 12, 04:56 comment on Girls Everywhere
    Dear Leslie Your poem is sooo good. I really like how you talk about female empowerment and how females should not depend on a guy to succeed. Something that stood out from your poem was “Our happiness does not depend on on boys” because many females feel like they can only be happy when there with a guy but that not true. I really like how you talk about how females are strong and you should not be ashamed about who you are. Some I really like about your poem was that is rhymes. I really like how you wrote this to inspire other girls and how it also relates to you and that this is a very personal poem to you. -Janie
  • Janie's Dec 12, 04:47 comment on Eyes
    Dear Martha Your poem is very creative, I really like how you related it to the eyes. Something that stood out to me from your poem was the lines “You took our loved ones and put them in cages like zoo animals” because you're saying that white people are putting us into categories and its very creative how you used similes in your poem. Some questions I have about your poem are why did you specifically choose to talk about eyes in your poem? You had a great poem and it was very creative.
  • Janie's Dec 12, 04:47 comment on This Is Oakland By Lupita M.C.
    Dear Lupita Your poem is so good. I think it's clear that you are trying to show how Oakland has a lot of violence. I really like your poem because your expressing the violence and I really like how u relate it to the Montagues and Capulets and how society is the capulets and whe are the montagues. I liked how at the end you said “but I fear it only begun” i really like how you ended your poem because it shows that you feel like violence will keep on getting worse going on in the future.
  • Calvin's Dec 12, 04:20 comment on The Universe Within Us
    Dear Judith, I think your poem is really interesting because it's crazy to think that people have had to go through these experiences. I really like how you included a lot of metaphors into your poem as well, it's really creative and meaningful. My favorite line was "Trying to get ahold of the world That was taken from your hands By hateful eyes," because it made me think about how we really have this problem in the world right now. The hate part is also true and I like how you put in the word "eyes" because they don't see some people as human.
  • Marleni's Dec 12, 04:15 comment on Alcoholism
    Dear Oswaldo, Your poem is a very personal story and I really appreciate you sharing it with our class. I like how you connected love to an addiction that will cause you to do crazy things. I could really see where you used the different literary devices! One thing you could work on is being more concise at times I felt as if you were telling the whole story. A suggestion is that you only take the key moments and use those in the poem. But overall, this is a very strong poem and keep up the good work!! - Marleni
  • Tania's Dec 12, 04:11 comment on This Is Oakland By Lupita M.C.
    Dear Lupita, I love your poem, I think it really explains the claim your trying to explain, which is violence. Your poem is really good because you rhyme, and that’s a good thing to do when writing poems. A line that stood out to me was,” This is Oakland, and I should be able to just be me, without the fear of a gun, I should be able to have simple fun, and not be on alert and ready to run, not having to fear anyone, I cannot wait until this war is finally done, but I fear it has only begun”. I think those lines are really strong because at the end it’s like wow, such a great ending. Overall you did amazing with your poem, I hope you post more on here, because you are a really great writer. -Tania
  • Calvin's Dec 12, 04:00 comment on Parents Must End Wars And Start Peace
    Dear Daniel, your poem is amazing! One line that stood out to me was where you talked about how hate is like a storm because it causes a lot of damage. I really agree with this line. Good job connecting it to the 2 families fighting in Romeo and Juliet. Thank you so much for sharing your poem!
  • Tania's Dec 12, 03:03 comment on A Female
    Dear Janie, Your poem is a really great poem about females and how society expects us to be. I think you explain really good that women should be themselves and should feel confident about themselves. A line that you wrote that stood out to me was,”Each one has something special to show, there’s so much in a woman, nobody sees it”. This line stood out to me because what you said is really true that everyone has something special but sometimes others don’t see. Good job on your poem, I hope you write more poems because your amazing at them-Tania
  • Ivy Delgadillo's Dec 12, 00:40 comment on Hate
    Dear Dustin, My favorite part of your poem was ”In many cases happinesses brings out hate like flowers bring out beauty”. And I also like how you keep repeating the word “hate” that way you can tell what this poem is about right away. Your poem does connect to Romeo and Juliet because it talks about how love can take hate away. Good job.
  • Jadyn's Dec 12, 00:22 comment on Khalid poem
    Dear Khalid, Your poem was great. I like how you explained love in different ways and forms. You said love can be visiting your dad in the hospital, helping your mom do dishes, or showing compassion like hugging your sister. I believe your trying to say that love doesn’t just have to be someone having a boyfriend or girlfriend and they have love for eachother , but can be someone like your mom, sister , or dad. I also like how you showed in you poem different ways you express your love for the people you care about. You talking about how you hug your sister is a way you show your love for her. When you explained it you did very well you said ¨Love is hugging my sister like she’s a bear that is chunky, but funny that giggles when you hug¨ that was said very well and a great simile. Overall you did very good. Great Job, Jadyn W.
  • Diego's Dec 11, 23:24 comment on Paranoia
    Dear valerie, Your is outstanding. I like the part when you compared oakland to gun violence. The fact that you chose to write about gun violence shows how you care about it. I also like how you started with the prologue of romeo and juliet it was good. I like how there is a lot of detail in this poem. Keep up the good work. sincerly , diego rivera
  • Anahi's Dec 11, 23:18 comment on Success Is Cause By LOVE!!
    Dear Maria, I like how your peom talked about love and how nicely you put everything togther. I like how in one your lines you said, “love is like a fresh rose in the summer”. I liked it because your including similies into your text. I liked it because I understood it in a good way and knew whta you meant by saying that. Someting I also liked about your text is that you talked baout both love and violence. Also good job because we were strugglig together but you end up doing good on it.
  • Maria's Dec 11, 23:14 comment on Sunshine
    Dear Christina, you poem is really nice a really like the title because I thought you was going to write how love is really cute because you tittle name is sunshine but at the end it finish with not being happy ending about love. So theres it comes the similes and metaphors you really did a good job because its interesting and it leaves you like on trying to know more. -Maria
  • Maria's Dec 11, 23:01 comment on Unexpected
    Dear Imelda, I just love the fact that you wrote the poem about the one person although he hurt you alot and it speaks a lot to me. I like how you added a lot of details like sounds the time and how you will feel about talking to him. The line that i really like of your poem was “Falling in love is like a Ferris wheel it’s going all good until it stops” because i could imagine in my head what's happening. I hope you find someones that loves you like you could love someone because you deserve it, you a great person.
  • Juan's Dec 11, 22:44 comment on Why do People Hate?
    Dear, Ja'kari I am amazed by your poem. “Why do people hate?” because it talks about things that are real and I feel a lot of people can relate to.As well some of the metaphors you use like the snake one.One part of your poem that stands out for me is where you talk about other people and like what they say.I think this is interesting because it's true in some people's lives and some not.Another reason why is because its talking about something that is real and I feel I can relate to it in a way.Another part I liked is where well just the whole poem in general because although its controversial your giving your own opinion.As well, you give your perspective and that is very important in a poem. Thanks for your poem I look forward to seeing what you do next because your poems are good and you talk about real things like i've said and in a way me personally I can relate.As well it's just good over all.
  • Victor's Dec 11, 22:42 comment on Violence
    I thought your poem was very deep and very good. Also I like how you connect R+J to the real world. I really like how you said a line of shakespeare and added it to your poem. Thanks for sharing your poem and sharing your experience.
  • Maria's Dec 11, 22:35 comment on A Female
    Dear Janie, I really like how you defended women power and how we are strong no matter what other people say. I feel that whoever read this will like your poem because it speaks out to me and will for others. The fact that you choose this means alot because you care about women power and how they could be seen as on a lot of ways.
  • Anahi's Dec 11, 21:55 comment on Sunshine
    Dear Christina, I like how you included metaphors and similes is your poem I think it shows how you decided to meet all the requirements. I also like how when you said, “Hate brings me to faith but faith brought me to you” I liked this because it showed a lot about emotions and I just appreciate how you explicitly wrote it. I also like who you phrase also your words when trying put all the words together. I really like how you put everything together.
  • yasmin's Dec 11, 21:49 comment on Violence!
    Dear Chris I really like how your poem explained what is violence and you gave your perpective and your side of the story on violence. Something that you said that stood out to me is ''Violence creates death'' because then you explain on why that is true because people are dying everyday. I also really admire how you where repartive in your poem like saying "we" "we" "we" because you are saying like we as in all. Thank you for writing a wonderful poem. I look forward to seeing what poems you write next.
  • Jadyn's Dec 11, 21:49 comment on Love
    Dear Juan, Your poem is sooo good. I love how you showed how love isn't about the fancy presents or things you might have. It's about your true feelings towards the person not your feelings towards what the person may have. You also did good on having a flow in your poem and it wasn't just everywhere your lines connected with each other. I like when you said the materialistic things aren't going to be there for you or save you by using examples of the hundred dollar bill when you said ¨No matter how many 100 dollar bills you have Benjamin wont come out the bill and hug you if you are in need of one.¨ You really showed how those nice things cannot help you through your rough times. Only a person you truly love or can connect with can get through to you but if your just with someone just because of the things they own it won't happen. Overall your poem was great you explanations were very good so that I could understand your poem and what you were trying to say. Great Job, Jadyn
  • Irvin Padron-Vargas's Dec 11, 21:39 comment on Unexpected
    Imelda I love your poem because it has times and sounds of typing and that is a great detail you have added and the way your poem was written was amazing i really enjoyed reading your poem. Your poem feels real and i like the way you ended the poem. You are a great writer and hope to see more of your amazing poems. Irvin
  • Mary's Dec 11, 20:06 comment on Me Too Movement
    Jillian, I really like that chose such a heavy topic to talk about. It's great that women are able to talk about things that have happened to them in environment that's getting better about talking about these issues. I think it also important that you said men can be apart of the #metoo movement too. They are "important allies in the #MeToo movement." If more and more of us start to be there for each other in times of need change will begin to happen. I enjoyed your view on this topic and hope to see more of your writing in the future. Here's a link to another article you might like (hyper like didn't work) https://www.theatlantic.com/politics/archive/2018/04/this-is-also-gun-violence/556595/
  • Mary's Dec 11, 19:42 comment on Love Poem
    Hyper link doesn't work here's the regular link: https://www.powerpoetry.org/poems/love-hate-relationship-0
  • Mary's Dec 11, 19:41 comment on Love Poem
    Brian, I really liked this poem because I can relate to some of things you're talking about. For example when you say, "My love is school because I hate school. " I can agree. I hate school but my whole entire life revolves around school and is for school you'd think that I love it. I really liked how you were able to put that into words in a more clever way. This poem really intrigued me and I hope to see more writing from you soon. Here's another poem I think you would like called Love Hate Relationship
  • Mary's Dec 11, 19:15 comment on Transparent Backpacks
    Johnny, I like that you brought this topic to light. The recent school shootings that have been happening are devastating and I'm glad to see them taking more precocious measures like "students wear clear backpacks." But I also don't think the best way to stop violence is to bring on more policemen with guns. It may feel safe but some it may feel like another person with a gun is entering the school which makes them feel even less safe. Here's an article that I think you would like reading. https://www.theatlantic.com/politics/archive/2018/04/this-is-also-gun-violence/556595/ I like that you want safety in schools and I hope to hear from you soon.
  • Mary's Dec 11, 19:02 comment on Positive Mind
    I liked the quote, "I believe that a negative mind will never give you a positive life." because it just reaffirms your point that we need to start thinking positive and remove everything negative in our lives. Here's an article on how to free your mind that I thought you would like. https://www.lifehack.org/articles/communication/30-ways-free-your-mind-immediately.html
  • Mary's Dec 11, 18:57 comment on Love
    Here's a link to another poem about being materialistic you might like. https://www.poemhunter.com/poem/materialism-8/
  • Mary's Dec 11, 18:52 comment on Should immigrants in the United States be given citizenship?
    I forgot to put this quote in my comment that I liked, “It is unrealistic and inhumane to deport these individuals from their families and lives in the United States. These immigrants should be offered a path to legal status and eventually earned citizenship.” https://www.migrationpolicy.org/article/frequently-requested-statistics-immigrants-and-immigration-united-states
  • Mary's Dec 11, 18:43 comment on Positive Mind
    Noemi, I really like this positive outlook you have on life. It can be hard to think positive when there's bad things around you, but as you said, you have to persevere and keep going even when it gets hard. I'm sorry that you had to let go of your friends. That's really hard to do but if it's needed to give you peace of mind then you did the right thing. Hope to see more writing from you soon.
  • Mary's Dec 11, 18:34 comment on Love
    Juan, I thought this poem was beautiful and gave insight into the true meaning of love. I liked the part about your house not being able to visit you in the hospital. A lot of times we think about all the things we've bought or need to buy and forget that people and connection bring true happiness. I especially liked the end where it says, "Materialistic things can be recovered but broken love can't." It shows us in the end to be more concerned with love then the things we have. O loved this poem and I hope to see more writing from you.
  • Mary's Dec 11, 18:23 comment on Should immigrants in the United States be given citizenship?
    Patricia, This is a very interesting topic you chose. Immigration is a very touchy subject so I'm glad you took the time to talk about it. I think the article makes two valid point. Many immigrants did come illegally but it's wrong for us to just throw them out where they could end being in worse shape. Also many of them that came here were trying to escape something, so they had no choice but to come here. I think it would also be interesting to look at what percentage of immigrants have come in America in the last year and why to beef up your argument. Hope to see more of your writing in the future.
  • Judith's Dec 11, 04:41 comment on Poem
    Dear Calvin, I love your poem! It’s simple but yet says so much in the words you chose to use. You chose an interesting topic and the way you chose to describe it, with the metaphor of the strings and marionettes, is smart and amazing. It is clear how emotions taking control of actions connects to Romeo and Juliet. You took a cool interpretation of it. My favorite line of your poem is “Aren’t visible like silk or lace Yet they bind my body and my mind And in my heart is where they hide” because it shows the impact of emotions, even when they aren’t visible. It is also shows how they are caused by what the heart wants and impacts how the mind thinks. You’re the coolest! Thanks for sharing your poem!
  • Judith's Dec 11, 04:41 comment on Not Loving the Right Person by Cece Corado-Portillo
    Dear Cece, I loved how real your poem was. It shows some of the struggles many LGBTQ+ youth have to go through and because of it, I’m sure many people will be able to relate to your poem and feel not as alone. I like how you connected the topic of love from Shakespeare and turned it into something poignant and vulnerable. Because of this, my favorite line from your poem is “Love can mend situations,” “Love can destroy someone” because it shows the positive, yet hurtful impact love has on people. Thanks for sharing your poem!
  • Judith's Dec 11, 04:39 comment on Spoken Word Poem
    Dear Wendy, Your poem was amazing. I loved your metaphors of flowers because it just made your writing sound so beautiful. It shows how love can be a great thing but also has its consequences. You did a good job on connecting the topic of love to your life. My favorite lines were in your ending where you wrote, “And like the flowers our broken hearts will blossom together” Because it made your poem end with a bang! The imagery of hearts “blossoming” like flowers is fantabulous. Thanks for sharing your poem!
  • Judith's Dec 11, 04:36 comment on Love is tragic
    Dear Kalani, I love how your poem talked about the topics of love, violence, pain, and drugs because it shows how they constantly intertwine. You did a good job on connecting how Romeo and Juliet see love and how you see it. I am confident many will find it relatable. The line that stood out to me right away and made me think the most is, “The family are like bullets dancing through the air. On their own beat”. It emphasized the harm or impact that families might have on youth like bullets do. I also liked how you used personification and put “bullets dancing” because it makes it sound more beautiful. Thanks for sharing your poem!
  • Tania's Dec 11, 04:16 comment on Unexpected
    Dear Imelda, I really love your poem. I think many people can relate to your poem. I think your claim about how love doesn’t always end up being happy is really good and understandable. I really the part when you say,”Falling in love is like a Ferris wheel it’s going all good until it stops in the middle you don’t know what’s wrong but you gotta be strong”. This line stood out to me because of the simile you used and because you say you gotta stay strong. Overall your poem was so amazing, I hope you write more in the future because you are a really good writer. -Tania
  • Anaya's Dec 11, 03:24 comment on Success Is Cause By LOVE!!
    Dear Maria Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "As a baby when is born, Learning how to take steps in life" because you can really tell what you were going for. A connection I made to your poem is when you talked about how our generation is changing, how we need peace and love to get us through it because people are scared with suicide and shooting. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. Anaya
  • Evelin's Dec 10, 23:10 comment on Girls Everywhere
    Dear Leslie, Thank you for sharing your powerful poem. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is ¨ We do not count one forced marriage¨. I think this is very powerful because people think we have to get married when we don´t. Another sentence that I liked was ¨ You will soon find your power¨. This stood out because you´re showing the power that women have. Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because you´re a good writer. Hope seeing powerful poems!
  • Calvin's Dec 10, 22:42 comment on Don’t Judge Me
    Dear Khalid, I love how you show pride in who you are! What are some things that you would have put into your shadowbox? Good job writing about your counter and dominant narratives! I would love to hear more from you. Thank you for sharing with us!
  • Jadyn Walton's Dec 10, 22:11 comment on Love Poem
    Dear, Brian U.A You did a job explaining love in your point of view. The part that I liked is when you said “I love a person That doesn’t believe in magic when we’re together We Believe in fun.” It sounds like your saying you don’t love people who are fake or act fake towards you love people who know how to have fun and be real with you. Some suggestions I have is to try and make the poem have a flow so it doesn’t sound like your saying a bunch of things and it doesn’t connect with each other. I also likes when you made a simile in your poem when you said “ So I’ll smack them like Ms. Dodds smacking my noodles. Overall your poem is great and I enjoyed reading it. For more examples you can visit my poem: https://www.youthvoices.live/2018/11/28/theyre-coming-gentrification/?highlight=gentrification.
  • Ruddy's Dec 10, 15:49 comment on T4P. The Arrival. Chapter 2.
    Dear Table 6: I am Ruddy by, tablet 5, with your image, “T4P. The Arrival. Chapter 2.,” because… Here we can see how this man tries to have a bed with drawings because he does not know language, we can also see how the man is trying to talk to the other man but he does not understand it, then he has to keep showing him the drawings. One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Observing the man who has left his family to give him a better future directing a ship with an unknown destination with a sad one for his family.” I think this is important because… Here we can see how this father is trying to talk to a person who does not understand it, and in most cases these people feel embarrassed because they do not speak in the same language and therefore they are not understood. Another sentence that I like was: “all are lined up by the ship waiting for their turn to seal their papers to be in the city .” This stood out for me because…this happens in real life, to get your passport you have to make a line to be able to have your passport, even when you are going to travel you have to make a line for you to review and for your signature your passport to be able to travel Your image… connects to something from my group’s chapter. In the first chapter of The Arrival, We can see a man in the ground is reading a book, Then we can see how a another man try to help him and the images look like in the background Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because… The summary is very detailed in all the things that happen in the book.
  • Madison's Dec 10, 00:53 comment on Exploring a Political Topic: Animal Testing
    I truly enjoyed this post and it makes me want to change the way we live and the way we treat animals. I totally agree with you when you say "I will do my best in using products that don’t involve the torturing of animals." And I also found this amazing website that makes people aware of the problems like you do here... http://www.lonestar.edu/stopanimaltesting.htm Thank you Raine!
  • Madison's Dec 10, 00:48 comment on Why do we study Shakespeare today?
    I really enjoyed reading your post. This post made me think about Shakespeare in many different ways. Before i didn't put too much thought into his work, but after reading this, it opened my eyes. It opened my eyes to see that his writing is a door way to many other great writings. He just might be the main reason why we have such great stories today. Thank you and I found this really cool website I thought you might enjoy... http://www.shakespeare-online.com/essays/importance.html
  • Madison's Dec 10, 00:40 comment on Me Too Movement
    Interesting way of putting the facts together with your piece... I absolutely love it. The way you engage and explain the amazing work that the Me Too movement provides for others who need it. I agree with you a hundred percent that the genders should be equal. I found this article that I think you might enjoy reading...https://www.nytimes.com/2018/02/09/us/the-metoo-moment-when-mothers-and-daughters-talk-metoo.html?rref=collection%2Fseriescollection%2Fmetoo-moment&action=click&contentCollection=us&region=stream&module=stream_unit&version=latest&contentPlacement=2&pgtype=collection Good job Jillian!
  • Madison's Dec 10, 00:36 comment on In Education With All, For All, I Believe
    I absolutely loved this statement you have! I totally agree with you when you said, " I believe that teachers “must bring to the forum more than their enthusiasm for students and their knowledge of subjects,” and that the purpose of schooling should be to learn to solve problems of and within a democratic society." I found this really cool website and organization that is on your side about the education for all thing... https://www.campaignforeducation.org/en/what-we-do/policy-and-advocacy/archive/about-education-for-all/ Good job!
  • Anaya's Dec 7, 23:02 comment on Love Can Be Your Worst Nightmare
    Dear Bryan, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was, "What people call Love, Is just a chemical reaction. It hits hard, But slowly fades." because the very beginning of the poem you can tell exactly how Romeo feels about Love now. A connection I made to your poem is how you talked about feeling hopeless because everyone feels hopeless at some point and you told this so vividly that I could see and feel the hopelessness in his eyes. Your poem also reminded me of how some people really do give up on love and how Romeo found his Juliet(even if they died), his true love. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. Anaya
  • Kelly's Dec 7, 22:44 comment on Two genders
    Dear Beatriz, One thing that I like about your poem is that you talked about sexism. I like the topic because it does connect to our society since people think men are better than women. But also sexism connects to Romeo and Juliet since there was many comments made about women needing to get married to a man. I really like how you said, “Their mouths are guns,Their words are bullets”. I loved this because it is true how words can hurt each other and that words are powerful. Sincerely, Kelly
  • Kelly's Dec 7, 22:15 comment on My Poem
    Dear Tania, I think you did a great job on your poem about Romeo and Juliet and about love. I love how you repeated the phrase, “Love doesn’t have a meaning, But it does have emotions”. I like this because you can’t describe love in just a couple of words, love is powerful and complicated. I also like how you described how the feeling of love feels like and how you used similes to describe it. A suggestion I have is try to incorporate more literary devices, like personification and Onomonopoeia. Using those devices would make your poem stronger and would make it more interesting. Overall I love your poem because it describes love well and connects to Romeo and Juliet. Sincerely, Kelly
  • Asa's Dec 7, 18:18 comment on Hate vs Hate
    Dear Jessica Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "We need to motivate people To stop this resentment. So love can be present." because I agree with what you are trying to say. A connection I made to your poem is that the world has a lot of hate right now which is not good. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. -Asa
  • Asa's Dec 7, 18:16 comment on My Life Story
    Dear Kayla, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "At times I felt y’all weren’t even there for me And you caused me to separate from my other siblings" because I think this line is very emotional and deep. A connection I made to your poem is that I can understand how hard it is to be part of two worlds. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. -Asa
  • Paxton Lyman's Dec 7, 18:13 comment on Unexpected
    Dear Imelda, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "I looked at you and I thought you were mine I looked at your pupil the size of a dime Tryna make you mine but there was no time " ,because of the use of rhyming combined with your feelings. A connection I made to your poem is the feeling of finding out about someone not actually caring for you. Your poem also reminded me of happiness that can happen when someone does love you and care for you. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. Sincerely, Paxton
  • Hanna's Dec 7, 18:08 comment on Love is a Game
    Dear Teresa Thank you so much for sharing your poem with me, it was very powerful. What I really liked about the poem was how it was written from Romeo's point of view and from Juliet's point of view. Juliet not wanting to fall for Romeo and Romeo knowing he was going to. I liked how you put that both of them wanted to be together but the knew they couldn't so they kept it a secret. One of my favorite lines was “Everything is so different when I’m with you, It’s like a warm fuzzy feeling leaving my whole body complete, we are like thing 1 and thing 2 for nothing else can be compared to you.” I liked this line because it really expressed and showed how much love and affection they felt for each other. Thank you so much for sharing your poem with me and I look forward to reading your next post! -Hanna
  • Anna's Dec 7, 18:00 comment on Parents Must End Wars And Start Peace
    Dear Daniel, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was, “Hate is like a storm ready to cause a massive amount of damage”, I think this is very well described and, is so true, that hate has such a great effect on people. I think this poem is very powerful and I know from a personal experience when family fights, it can be really hard for everyone. I think this is a hard topic to talk about, however at the end of the day, disagreements can stress out everyone. I'm look forward to reading your next post. -Anna
  • Chiara's Dec 7, 17:58 comment on Love
    I like how you compared the sacrifices your mom made for you to those Juliet made for romeo. The way this poem was written makes it particularly powerful, because instead of complaining about your past struggles you took a different turn on it and praised you mother. That separates your poem from the other poems I've read. I really enjoyed your poem also because it's not too long and goes straight to the point.
  • Kelly's Dec 7, 17:57 comment on Love Story
    Dear Kimberly, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "I don’t get the feeling I’m clueless." I really like the transition from not knowing anything about love and feeling, then not being able to leave once it was felt. I felt that it was beautiful and truthful. A second line that was powerful was "I give them lies…" because it reminded me of the cheesy quote, "Love makes you do crazy things." A connection I made to your poem is "Urgent ,I’m growing up, each second time is wasting" ( added some comas.) because with every second that goes by, there will always be something you want to do so you wont't regret it later on in you life. Your poem also reminded me of a life of a teenager . Usually not being or just being able to detect the feelings of people and your own. I really love your poem and how it also shows how helplessly in love Juliet was with Romeo. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. Kelly
  • matteo small's Dec 7, 17:57 comment on My Poem
    Dear tania, Thank you so much for sharing your poem with me. One line that stood out to me was “when you meet that someone, when your heart skips a beat” I think that this is true in the play Romeo and Juliet. In the play Romeo seeing Juliet changed Romeo. Thank you for sharing your poem with me and I look forward to your next poem! -Matteo Small
  • Naomi's Dec 7, 17:57 comment on Spoken Word Poem
    Dear Wendy, thank you for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was, ¨Don’t you love someone so much? Despite everything, You love them even when you were hurt badly.¨ This was interesting to me because it shows the Drama Between Romeo and Juliet, how you could love someone and hate them at the same time. I think you worded everything beautifully, with tons metaphors to add poetic value. Thank you so much for writing and I’m looking forward to reading your next post. -Naomi
  • Zane's Dec 7, 17:56 comment on They´re Coming (gentrification)
    Dear Jaydn, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry, I really love it. My favorite line for the poem is "I love humanity but this poem is about fairness." I like this quote because it shows what your trying to project with this poem. Something I relate to in this poem is talking about being treated unfairly because of something they cannot control. I know a lot of people that have that same problem and I love that you are really trying to help the issue. Zane
  • matteo small's Dec 7, 17:55 comment on Love is tragic
    Dear Kalani, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. One line that stood out to me was “Drugs will ruin your life, and I completely agree but love is the most Fucked up drug of them all.” because it is true, during almost every breakup you feel sad and depressed. A connection I made to your poem was how the police only are brutal to the people of color. Your poem reminds me of how the police attack lower income communities. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post.
  • Coralie's Dec 7, 17:53 comment on Very Cash Money
    Dear Diego, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. It is really good. A line that stood out to me was “Knowing that they didn’t mess up Power messed them up” because I think that line could have different meanings. I like that this poem addressed the problems of money and the problems of not having money. Thank you so much for sharing and I look forward to reading your next post. Coralie
  • Penelope's Dec 7, 17:53 comment on suicide
    Dear Diego Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was ¨ We might not resurrect like phoenixes But we do show how oppression is worse than any war.¨ because I really enjoyed how powerful this line was. A connection i made to your poem is how hard it is when young people to be depressed. Your poem also really reminded me of the tragedy of suicide in this time. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post.
  • Julian's Dec 7, 17:53 comment on Love is Powerful
    Dear Victor, Thank you so much for sharing your poem, “Love is Powerful” on Youth Voices. The lines "love is beautiful" and “love can be ugly” stand out to me because they are such a strong way to start out your poem, and they give you a lot to think about. I also like how much emotion this poem brings. I feel like you really thought about how the best way to write it, and you executed it very well. Thank you for publishing your work, and I look forward to reading your next piece! Julian
  • Piper Owsley's Dec 7, 17:53 comment on Sunshine
    Dear Christina Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. Your poem shows how something goo can come out of anything I really liked how you put a lot of emotion and thought into your poem Your poem is a really good interpretation of Romeo and Juliet. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. Piper
  • Anna Merk's Dec 7, 17:52 comment on Love is powerful
    Dear Miguel Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "you can't buy true love" because this is true for everyone, I find this similar with friends as well, true love and friends will come to you not, by you reeling them in with materialistic items or money. A second line that was powerful was "the only way you can put out love is with hate" because I found this as more advice that everyone can use, when people are mad I think they want to be hateful back, but that is just doing the same thing back. Your poem also reminded me of advice that our current political climate could use . Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. -Anna
  • Mikayla's Dec 7, 17:51 comment on The Good and The Bad
    Dear Kelly Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "Love grew into a tragedy But the ultimate tragedy was their agony." because it really described most of the relationships i've witnessed. A connection I made to your poem is how committed some people are because that one person in a relationship might be the only person they have. Your poem also reminded me of a beautiful description of a love movie. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. Mikayla
  • Julian's Dec 7, 17:51 comment on HURT
    Dear Jocelyn, Thank you so much for sharing your poem, “HURT” on Youth Voices. The meaning behind the poem is super strong, and you did an excellent job with your writing. Your poem reminds me of the book/movie, “The Hate U Give” because the character Khalil gets killed even though he was completely innocent, just like your uncle. Thank you so much for publishing your work, and I look forward to reading your next piece. Julian
  • Naveen's Dec 7, 17:51 comment on Love
    I can connect to this quote because I know that parents wake up at 5am and work till 7pm, to keep us fed and happy. Nice job writing this quote in a way that most people can relate too!
  • Coralie's Dec 7, 17:50 comment on Anahi´s poem
    Dear Anahi, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. It’s very good. Your whole poem was very powerful, but the line that stood out to me the most was “Do you really have a reason to be violent We taught to be rivals” because this made me think about why people are violent. I like that this poem addressed that both love and violence are painful in different ways. Thank you so much for sharing and I look forward to reading your next post. Coralie
  • Mikayla's Dec 7, 17:50 comment on The Universe Within Us
    Dear Judith Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "Trying to drive out the darkness that surrounds you, Trying to close up on you Just like all the other borders orbiting around you." because it really described how Trump is separating families and taking away kids. A connection I made to your poem was close to an movie I saw. Your poem also reminded me of a beautiful description of a love movie. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. Mikayla
  • Charlotte's Dec 7, 17:46 comment on Revenge and Love
    Dear Latrell, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "Bullets whisper into my ears" because this line was very poetic as well as meaningful. A connection I made to your poem was The Hate You Give because Starr’s best friend is killed and she feels overwhelming sadness because of it. Your poem also reminded me of how the families of Romeo and Juliet must have felt after they died, the overwhelming sadness and loss. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. ~Charlotte
  • Charlotte's Dec 7, 17:45 comment on The Scars of Hate
    Dear Joseph, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was “Those between the bullet and the target, I mean, they didn’t do nothing wrong, what do they get?" because I agree. Why would someone want to kill innocent people, or even kill at all? Something I connected to in your poem was how you seem to be writing against unnecessary violence. Your poem also reminded me of the school shootings in Sandy Hook and Parkland. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. ~Charlotte
  • Joey's Dec 7, 17:44 comment on Why Me?
    To Jennifer, Thanks for sharing your poetry on YV! I liked the way you tied together the story of Romeo and Juliet, with your personal experiences. I feel like most people can relate to your poem to some degree, and I think your writing really comes from the heart. However, I was slightly confused by your last two lines. What is to be or not to be, and why do you question it? Thank you for releasing your poem on YV, I enjoyed reading it.
  • Hanna's Dec 7, 17:44 comment on Love
    Dear Ariana Thank you so much for sharing your poetry, it was really good! My favorite line was “Love, it is lucky to be found like the treasure that is hidden underground where the X marks the spot only to find that X is nowhere to be found” I liked this line because it is a great metaphor for how rare and hard it is to find true love. A second line that was very powerful to me was “It is a privilege we often take for granted, now a days we throw “I love you’s” like it doesn’t mean anything “ I liked this line a lot because saying I love you should mean something when you say it. Some people take it for granted when it should be cherished. This poem reminded me of the quote “ It’s not hard to make decisions when you know what your values are” by Roy E. Disney. It reminded me of this quote because Romeo and Juliet felt true love for each other, that's why when Juliet saw that Romeo was dead she made the decision to kill herself too. Thank you for sharing your poem with me and I look forward to reading your next post! -Hanna
  • Piper's Dec 7, 17:38 comment on Not Loving the Right Person by Cece Corado-Portillo
    *Dear Cece
  • Kelly's Dec 7, 17:35 comment on Girls Everywhere
    Dear Leslie. Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "Not every girl is the same" because many people act like they can treat females the same, sometimes good,sometimes bad. A second line that was powerful was "You will soon find your power" because so many girls around the world aren't in control of there own lives or won't take control of their lives. A connection I made to your poem is the need to be someone else instead of yourself. Your poem also reminded me of Juliet from "Romeo and Juliet." Juliet wasn't able to make her own choices like when she was sent to marry Paris. Maybe things would have gone differently if Juliet had a choice. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. From me, Kelly
  • Piper's Dec 7, 17:34 comment on Not Loving the Right Person by Cece Corado-Portillo
    Dear Piper Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "Some deny me as if I was a stranger looking for shelter" because it really shows how someone can feel when they can't express themselves. I really liked your poem it shows how your freedom can be taken away by a religion or what someone believes in. Your poem reminded me of how people are discriminated because of their sexuality. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. Piper
  • Penelope's Dec 7, 17:34 comment on Oakland and Romeo & Juliet
    Dear Marleni Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was " They sacrifice everything for their Devotion Not knowing …It would end their rose from growing" because I really liked how you represented their love as a rose.¨ A connection I made to your poem is how much backlash people in biracial relationships get. Your poem also really reminded me of Romeo and Juliet with a little twist which I really enjoyed. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post.
  • Naveen's Dec 7, 17:33 comment on Hate
    Dear Dustin, I could really connect to this poem because it reminded me of how sometimes hate can be the most powerful emotion, but there is always a counter-weight. Everything has an opposite. How you wrote that love could take away the hate.
  • Katelyn's Dec 7, 17:33 comment on It Was Fun
    Dear Kassandra, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was " The fun was everywhere and anywhere you can see” because it was a very uplifting line . A connection I made to your poem is being with my family and having fun. Your poem also reminded me of going to visit my family that live in a different place . Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. Katelyn
  • Naveen's Dec 7, 17:32 comment on Poem
    Dear Calvin Thank you for sharing your poetry and having the courage to allow hundreds of people to read it. Your poem reminded me of how people can create or destroy friendships depending on their mood. Once I read what this poem represented the whole poem came together, and it was truly great. Good job!
  • Zane Liebert's Dec 7, 17:31 comment on Success Is Cause By LOVE!!
    Dear Maria, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. The line that stood out to me was "Spreading love to all the communities that need help." I liked that line because I really think it is a great example of what we need to do with all of our communities. A connection I made to your poem is to stay in present and future and not to worry about the past because that is something that I try to do a lot. I really like your poem and I can't wait for more of your work! Zane
  • katelyn's Dec 7, 17:31 comment on Paranoia
    Dear Valerie, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was "The brightness of the yellow tape as it shouts CAUTION" because it was very descriptive and in my head could see that very clearly . Your poem also reminded me of how I felt after hearing about all of the recent shootings . Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. Katelyn
  • Joey's Dec 7, 17:18 comment on Love is a Privilege
    To Ivy, Thanks for sharing your piece! I really liked this poem, not only for the smart rhymes that you managed to incorporate into your poem, but because of the way it flowed. The section I like the most was the last five lines. One of the reasons I liked it was because it was one of the strongest rhymes, but I was also a little confused with what you meant by “Your Majesty.” Were you referring to someone with lots of privilege being the oppressor? Thank you so much for writing, I look forward to reading what you next.
  • Nigel's Dec 7, 17:05 comment on Gerrymandering in Utah
    Hey Sean, I really liked how you showed both sized, analyzed both and then explained in a persuasive manner why you chose your side. The amount of research is shown in your detail.
  • Nathan Royle's Dec 7, 17:03 comment on Legalization of Prostitution Regarding Health Checks
    This topic, along with many other topics outlawed, fall into the same category; if it were legalized, there'd be a lot less of it and the restrictions would allow breathing room for improvements and reform. A great topic. I applaud you! Nathan
  • Alexander's Dec 7, 17:03 comment on Should The US Decrease Its Drinking Age?
    Anthony, I believe you strongly explained both the negatives and the positives of lowering the drinking age. I am torn between because both sides have very strong points to them. I think parents helping teach their kids about alcohol could help whether or not the law is changed.
  • Lily's Dec 7, 16:59 comment on Should The US Decrease Its Drinking Age?
    Anthony, I think you brought acrosss very good points in your essay. Drinking for many kids is a “forbidden fruit” which makes some want to drink even more just for the feeling of rebellion. If the drinking age were to be lowered or if more parents exposed their children to alcohol then maybe their children wouldn’t feel the need to binge drink in spite of rebellion.
  • Sam Einhorn's Dec 7, 16:58 comment on Should The US Decrease Its Drinking Age?
    Hi Anthony, I enjoyed reading your post. I thought that you made many good points, and did a wonderful job looking at both sides of this argument. I personally see both sides as well. There could be many positive as well as negatives that could come out of this change in law.
  • Alana's Dec 7, 16:58 comment on The College Debt Crisis in America
    Hello Ari, We really thought your article was pretty interesting, student debt is a leading issue in our generation. You tackled the topic in a succinct way and we appreciated the links you included in your article. We also like how you later commented and corrected your writing to clarify your previous statements and explain more of your reasoning. We think you could expand your essay by connecting the student debt problem to your own life or experiences to make your writing more interesting. Alana and Chelsea
  • Nathan Royle's Dec 7, 16:58 comment on Gerrymandering in Utah
    Great article! While I was reading this, I thought to myself, "Isn't gerrymandering illegal?" Because if it is then the fact that Republicans are doing it with not a lot of resistance means more corruption in the political system. A great claim though, I agree that we should outlaw gerrymandering!
  • Will Jones's Dec 7, 16:57 comment on Legalization of Prostitution Regarding Health Checks
    Emmanuela, I enjoyed reading your take on the legalization of prostitution. You have what can be an excellent argument. However, I think you need to do a little more research, cite your sources, and better use your evidence. For example, this is a great fact that supports your argument, "studies show that over 99 percent of females who are in the sex industry get an STD" however, I have no idea where this fact came from. Additionally, it is my understanding that depending on where one lives in the United States, prostitution is already legal to some degree. I agree with you that mandatory health checks, or even licensing workers in the prostitution industry would be a great way to stop the spread of STD's. I would expand upon this in my argument, and well define the current laws regarding prostitution in the United States. So far you have an interesting take, and you just need to spend a little more time researching and defining your argument. Cheers! Will
  • Max's Dec 7, 16:54 comment on Should Churches Be Tax Exempt?
    Thank you for presenting both sides of this issue, Skye. It is important for us citizens to remain informed about both sides of these issues so we can come to our own conclusions. With the issue of the tax-exempt status of churches in particular, whether we remain inactive or change the policy can have huge ramifications, as I'm sure you are aware.
  • Noel's Dec 7, 16:54 comment on Gerrymandering: The Practice That Diminishes Democracy
    This post is really informative and gives a lot of insight into a rather important topic. Your use of diction is great, and it makes the piece flow pretty well. I thought the pacing was fine too, you conveyed a good amount of information using clear, concise, vivid language. I think one thing you might improve upon is establishing your stance on the matter more. You've clearly stated your view on the matter, but I think you would find it beneficial to make use of more statements like the last one in your final paragraph. These, coupled with your excellent use of diction, would make this piece even better.
  • Jacob Richardson's Dec 7, 16:53 comment on Is The Death Penalty Immoral?
    Hey Bella, I really liked your piece about the death penalty. I thought you did a really good job of showing both points without showing a certain bias toward either of them. Also I liked how you asked the question, “What makes human beings decided what is moral and what is not?”. It makes the reader think and I liked that. Overall I thought the piece was well written.
  • Martha's Dec 7, 06:07 comment on Love is a Game
    Dear Teresa, I believe you did an excellent job on your poem because it made me feel like I was going through that experience and actually made me feel like I was experiencing the story of the poem. I know that made your poem really strong, also the last sentence left the reader wanting more of the story leaving us ATTACHED. I don’t believe your poem has any flaws because it is very strong to me because it showing me all the tools we learned in Portugal's class. Thank you for your beautiful piece of writing I’m looking forward to what you write next because i'm obsessed. Sincerely, Martha
  • Adrian's Dec 7, 04:53 comment on “Love Not Hate”
    This poem is great it shows the bad and the good for people where you that love is the answer not hate, I like how this poem show that gun violence is all around. One question I have for you. What is normal? What makes someone or something normal? A websites that can help you is grammarly.com
  • Ari's Dec 7, 02:19 comment on The College Debt Crisis in America
    Small corrections: First of all the way you worded the different age groups percentages of student debt was very confusing and some elaboration would be nice. Second of all you say you annotated three articles but I only see Forbes and Betrayed by the dream factory. Now that that's out of the way I can actually tell you how I feel about this. I love it. I agree with you that the student debt crisis is yet another huge problem in today's society that has been created for the younger millennial and gen-Z generations by the baby-boomer generation. It definitely surprised me that these baby-boomers had any portion of the college debt at all because not only did they graduated from college so long ago, college was also much cheaper back then. To answer your question about whether a college tuition is worth it anymore due to the economic strains it puts on graduates is increasingly becoming no but isn't there for everyone yet. First of all it has to do with what you are getting a degree in and how much the place you are going costs. For example when I went to an intro to engineering at MSU (Michigan State University) camp this summer they said you could right out of college get a job paying roughly 40,000 to 60,000 a year. Compare that to minimum wage (being generous is about $10 an hour some places) multiplied by 2100 hours worked in a year if you work 40 hours a week for 52 weeks you get roughly $21,000 a year. My brother goes to NYU and I know his annual tuition is about 70,000 a year multiplied by 4 years is $280,000. Take that 280000 and divide it by the difference in salaries and it takes roughly 7 - 14 years to work off that tuition assuming you have 0 cost of living. If you factor in cost of living and interest you can tack on another 6 years of work that's 13 - 20 years of your career paying off college tuition out of a 40 year work career. The question is whether you think 13 - 20 years of a 40 year work career is fair for being able to work any job you want because you went to a prestigious college. Do you?(BTW NYU is one of the most expensive colleges so its usually going to be on the end closer to 13).
  • Maria's Dec 7, 01:27 comment on “Nunca Valoramos Lo Que Tenemos, Hasta Que Lo Perdemos”
    Querida: Sofia Gracias por tu escritura me pareció muy interesante porque es muy cierto lo que escribió como dijo veces no aprendemos a valorar lo que tenemos con nosotros hasta que lo perdemos nos damos cuenta que es importante y que lo necesitas así es el tiempo es algo que nunca volvería para atrás. Espero seguir viendo lo que sigue escribiendo y otras vez gracias por escribir y aprender mas cosas nuevas.
  • Jennifer's Dec 6, 22:38 comment on Why Me?
    DORANELI
  • Jonathan Castro's Dec 6, 20:16 comment on T4P. The Arrival. Chapter 5.
    is interesting how explain the book is awesome
  • Gaby's Dec 6, 18:16 comment on Love is powerful
    Ingrid, Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was, “The only way too put out Hate is with Love" because i 100% agree with this line. I think this message needs to be spread throughout the world. I connect to your poem because i have realized that fake love is one of the most toxic things ever. Your poem also reminded me of a Martin Luther King Jr. quote, “Hate cannot drive out hate; only love can do that. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post. Gaby
  • Zane's Dec 6, 18:10 comment on Why do People Hate?
    dear jaikari, thankyou so much for sharing your poetry, a line that stood out to me was ´´You have to put it into your own perspective.¨ i connect to your poem because I know sometimes you have to go through things alone. I thought you have a lot of courage posting a poem like this and i think this is really good. thankyou so much for writing this poem and I look forward to reading your other posts. Zane
  • Gaby's Dec 6, 18:07 comment on Love and Hate
    Irvin, This is a very powerful poem! It is clear that the words you wrote are words from your heart. I can relate to your poem because I have experienced much hate and much love in my life. One thing that i thought about a lot while reading your poem is how love and hate are so closely connected. I think you say that very confidently though it is a confusing thought. My favorite line of this poem is, “Violence can be solved if love more present.” I think this line needs to be shared among our nation. Thank you for that. Gaby
  • Naomi's Dec 6, 18:05 comment on Violence!
    Chris, this poem shows very literally the negativity of violence, and how it affects others. I found it very interesting how you mentioned that violence is started by people who are hurt. I can tell the words you wrote are what you truly feel about violence, and how we don't know how to end it, but we know its a toxic chain reaction that needs to stop.
  • Edwin's Dec 6, 16:54 comment on T4P. The Arrival. Chapter 5.
    Dear T4P I am happy with your post symbolism in the chapter V of the Arrival because we can understand the situations about immifrations that is too hard by go to another place for have better life. the wrap up is very well because have a good explication for example " the father has an internal conflict because he wants to be with his family but he cannot because he went for another country" in this quote we can understand the situations that the fahter have.
  • Angie's Dec 6, 16:50 comment on T4N: the arrival chapter 1
    in this image i can see the pain of the parents that need leave his kids to can protect them
  • Hector's Dec 6, 14:48 comment on T4O. The Arrival. Chapter 2
    Dear: Delsy I am agree with your post "setting chapter 2 The Arrival Because… info and show to the readers what is the process for the man to get in the new city and its something that imigrants know One sentence you wrote that stands out me is: “after the father arrival to a new place with different animals, plants, people , language, and culture also a new type of life.” I think this is how every immigrants feel.
  • Cesarina's Dec 6, 14:45 comment on T4O. The Arrival. Chapter 2
    dear:students, i am agree with your post symbolism on chapter 2 of the arrival, because all yours said its true how fathers and mothers leave of theirs countries to help theirs family for many reason and to resolve the problem they got
  • Ashley Antigua's Dec 6, 14:45 comment on T4O. The Arrival. Chapter 2
    dear classmate, i like the summary because is very detailed and we can understand the chapter without reading it, also it tell shows us why the setting is important
  • Luis's Dec 6, 14:45 comment on T4O. The Arrival. Chapter 2
    Dear Delsy I really like this chapter II of The Arrival because the way your group and you express the feeling of the man getting in the new country. One thing I really like it was " When he finally get to that new places he saw a statute of that It look like a immigrant and a person that is from places". This is a good connection because the author message about all the book its about immigrants and that's what i like it
  • William's Dec 6, 14:43 comment on T4P. The Arrival. Chapter 1.
    It's nice but they need to be more specific...
  • Alex's Dec 6, 14:43 comment on T4O. The Arrival. Chapter 2
    I am happy with your central idea in chapter 2 of the arrival, because it is really important. It helps me in my understanding of this chapter. this central idea helps us understand or have an idea of how immigrants are received in new countries and in my opinion its a very good argument. another sentence that I liked was is because I can connect it with my life because when I arrived in the united states they gave me a very good welcome
  • Mariely's Dec 6, 14:43 comment on Bravery
    Thank you , thank you for taking your time to read this , a little kindness wont harm which is what is needed in the world so ,spread kindness, always try to be you
  • Mariely's Dec 6, 14:41 comment on Bravery
    Thank you , thank you for taking your time to read this , a little kindness wont harm which is what is needed in the world so ,spread kindness, always try to be you .
  • Ramon's Dec 6, 14:40 comment on A Drastic Change in My Life
    i can't relate to the american dream but good looks
  • Mariely's Dec 6, 14:38 comment on Bravery
    Thank YOU, i'm glad i was able to inspire you to look closer into your background and embrace it tho it takes times ,always try to be you ,take your time. Never thought i would of intrigued someone with my writing so,thank you.
  • Ramon's Dec 6, 14:37 comment on A Drastic Change in My Life
    lol it wasn't that easy to be this honest good looks.
  • Mariely's Dec 6, 14:32 comment on Bravery
    Thank you , Even if the future may not be clear yet for anyone its still okay to take time for yourself and keep trying in life, its never too late , you'll get there . always hope.
  • Mariely's Dec 6, 14:29 comment on Bravery
    Thank you for taking your time to read this ,I'm glad you enjoyed , In the near future just keep on trying often trying is what matters ,you'll get there.
  • Alfa's Dec 6, 14:26 comment on T4O. The Arrival. Chapter 2
    this group wrote a good summary!
  • Kanika's Dec 6, 04:55 comment on They´re Coming (gentrification)
    Dear Jadyn I like how you chosen to write a poem about Oakland because most people wrote their poems about love and your’s stand out and because you’re talking about things that person of color in Oakland can relate to. Also I loved how you choose a flag as your picture of your poem because I feel that it represent how America is supposed to be like all white people should be in power and just take over things and push out all the blacks to show them who’s boss to try to make America great again. Over all the poem was beautifully wrote and make’s lot of people understand where you are coming from.
  • Calvin's Dec 6, 04:03 comment on My Shadow Box
    Dear Wendy, Your shadow box theme is really nice and I love how you included a lot of pictures of memories you've had with your friends and family. It's really cool and creative how you kind of applied dominant and counter narratives to your black roses thing as well, how people see it as a depressing color but to you it's a really pretty color. Thank you for sharing your shadow box!
  • Calvin's Dec 6, 03:40 comment on My Shadow box
    Dear Kenya, I really like the way you decorated your shadowbox. I really liked how you gave examples of your dominant and counter narratives. What did the rest of your artist statement say by the way? Good job staying strong fighting against these dominant narratives ! Have you gotten any awards from competitive swimming? I would love to hear more about it. Thank you!
  • Sofia's Dec 5, 23:57 comment on My Stress Management Goal
    I am amazed by what you write about soccer, because I also play football and something that helps me destress a bit from school and get home with the desire to do my homework. A phrase that you wrote that stands out for me is "The best time to adapt to this technique in my daily life would be after school, after a stressful school day I can go throw the ball and have fun" because it is true me when I arrive from school and I go to practice. I released all the negative energy and came home wanting to do my homework, a bit tired but not stressed. Thanks for your writing. I hope to see what you write next, because it was interesting to see what you think about soccer.
  • Roger's Dec 5, 20:37 comment on T4P. The Arrival. Chapter 2.
    Dear Garinely : I am happy with your post, “The Arrival Chapter 2,” because… the central idea have a good explanation One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “ It’s easier show a picture than speak, because if a person speak the language of another country the other person will not understand it” I think this is very interesting because… people from other country dont realize that other country is hard to experience it. Another sentence that I like was: “ is that the language is a problem when a person immigrated to another country. The author show us when two people try to talk and use picture to understanding each other.” This stood out for me because…it hard to earn other language Your post connects to something from my group’s chapter. In the "The Arrival chapter IV , the man had hard time to read at his job. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because is interesting.
  • Garileny's Dec 5, 20:29 comment on T4M. The Arrival. Chapter 2
    I am happy about the work, because it represent shows the dificult moments that immigrants live. Your image and analisys connect to my group’s in the part of the setting, because, I made the same chapter as you and also the the symbols that the author used to represent normal things like, liberty and communication. Thanks for your writng. I look foward to seeing you write next because this was really good.
  • Diana's Dec 5, 20:25 comment on T4P. The Arrival. Chapter 4
    Dear Madelyne I am happy because you talking about the immigrant people with your post, “The Arrival. Chapter 4,” because you show many points, and also you change the people life, that people was working with the big machine and they need to take the factory, One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: in that picture you can see to many people working in the different machine an also the person need to work because they have to many opportunity to have a work ,
  • Garileny's Dec 5, 20:20 comment on T4N, Chapter VI The Arrival
    Dear T4N I am surprise about the work, because it represent the idea of the different reason why people immigrate. Your image and analisys connect to my group's in the part of the setting, because in reality all that the father wants is to be with his family but he left because he have to find a better place to them. Thanks for your writng. I look foward to seeing you write next because this was really good.
  • Ingrid Ramirez's Dec 5, 19:40 comment on Love is powerful
    Dear Miguel, I like your poem and how it talks about love. The quote that i really like is, “We can’t buy true love” because that is so true and i believe in that to. If a person buys love then it is basically selling their happiness. Good job on your quote. A question I have for you is why did you write this quote? (2) What inspired you? One suggestion I have is that , in this quote you have, “The only way too put out Hate is with Love”. The “too” is wrong because it’s supposed to be with one “o”, so it’s “to” and not “too”. Sincerely, Ingrid
  • Diego's Dec 5, 19:40 comment on Not Loving the Right Person by Cece Corado-Portillo
    Wowee, thanks for posting a very personal topic on how you are dealing with this very sensitive subject matter. It must have been a difficult thing to post this out to the interwebz. But it's a very good thing you did because it can give others (like myself) a perspective on how devastating it must be to bisexual and not getting support from your loved ones.
  • Kenya's Dec 5, 18:34 comment on Love and Hate
    Dear Irvin, Incredible job on your poem! You're poem is extremely touching and I honestly really enjoyed reading it. I think you did an outstanding job coming up with each line of your poem, it's really clear that you tried really hard on this assignment. I really liked the line where you said, " Love is like a tree it has deep roots and grows everyday". I really like this line because it hit me because it was so accurate to my perspective on love like it keep getting stronger and grows similar to trees and I think you made a strong point! Thank you! Kenya Sanchez Orozco
  • Wendy's Dec 5, 18:33 comment on What Is Love?
    Ashley, You did a great job with your poem it really stood out to me because I can see the connection to Romeo and Juliet. I really like the line where you said “But “money” is not the definition of love,” this stood out to me because a lot of people will use others for their advantage instead of actually wanting to be with them. One suggestion I would make is to watch out for your capitalization. Other than this I think your poem is really strong and you are an amazing writer good job. Thank You-Wendy 🙂
  • Tania's Dec 5, 18:30 comment on My Life Story
    Dear Kayla, You did such a great job in your poem. You showed and expressed so much emotion into your poem which is really good. I think your claim about war between your parents is very clear and very deep. I think it’s very brave of you to say such things as the ones you have explained. I really like the part when you say,”Y'all cause me to leave the people I love, This is why it’s hard for me to find trust”. I think it’s a really good quote and I wish I could hear your poem since it shows lots of emotions. Thank you for expressing your words, keep on writing your really good at it. -Tania
  • Christina's Dec 5, 18:30 comment on Violence
    Dear Ulises, I enjoyed how you express how you see homelessness in Oakland. I thought this was a strong topic to talk about because all around Oakland and many other places lots of people are facing homelessness. Something that you could do better on is rhyming your poem or is repeating a word to make it flow clearly. But overall I like how this was like a statement about what prices raising are making people homeless. Sincerely, Christina A.
  • Edwin's Dec 5, 18:28 comment on War and Violence!
    Dear Oscar, Hi it’s Edwin and I wanted to say that I like how you connect your poem to Shakespeare and to the community of Oakland and the world at the same time! Its very understandable when reading it because it relates to many moments that happened this year which were based on violence and war. Also I wanted to ask you that why did you made this poem based on violence and war and what was its purpose? Thank you for your time. Have a great day! Edwin M.
  • Calvin's Dec 5, 18:26 comment on What I see
    Dear Kanika, I really like the topic of your poem. It's really prominent in this area. It's clear from your poem that violence can cause a lot of destruction and sadness. You did a good job connecting Romeo and Juliet to things that are happening right now! Where else do you think you can apply that to? When you talked about losing someone to a gun it was really sad. I appreciate you for writing about that problem.
  • Lupita's Dec 5, 17:27 comment on Success Is Cause By LOVE!!
    Dear Maria, Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem. I love how you compare love to delicate yet beautiful things but then you also slightly connect this to a bit of the violence that is happening around us. One of my favorite lines from your poem is “Love is so pure that’s you Have to learn how to take care of As a baby when is born Learning how to take steps in life”. This is one of my favorite lines because it shows that love is delicate but if you take care of it, it can grow and become stronger throughout time. It also shows that love will only work if you put time and effort into it only then will it be beautiful. Thanks for publishing your great poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next because you compare things in a way that many people can relate to what you are writing. Not only that but you put your own spin on things that people think are simple and show them that those simple things can make a big part of your life.
  • Oscar's Dec 5, 17:25 comment on The Remedy For A Broken Heart Part 2
    Dear Doraneli, I thought your poem was great and I love the way you connected Romeo and Juliet to your own personal life. I really like how you included the beginning of Romeo and Juliet in your poem to show your story. I think the part that stood out to me the most is, ¨ Can you hear us? Do you feel it? Have you seen us? Have you lived it?” I think that this part is really good in your poem and really making the reader question about what the poemś image is. The outline of the poem is great and overall it was amazing. Thank you for sharing your poem!
  • Claudia's Dec 5, 17:25 comment on cómo se sentía su hermana, en el lugar de las alas
    EStimado German: estoy asombrada por tu cuento porque aprendí de que es bueno dar de comer a los animales y es un buen gesto.
  • Rodolfo's Dec 5, 17:22 comment on Latina Americana
    estimada erica estoy asombrado por tu escritura una parte que me gusto de tu historia fue pero es difícil no hay nada que se entienda y se me complica en el inglés pero yo que se da un día lo voy a hablar muy bien, quiero felicitarte por tener esa esperanza de aprender inglés espero leer tu próxima escritura espero ya hayas aprendido unas palabras en inglés y tenga que traducirlo 😂😂😂😂😂.
  • Alejandro's Dec 5, 17:18 comment on Nissan GTR r35 el mejor coche
    Dear duardo I am impactado por su publicacion publicación Nissan GTR r35 el mejor coche porque...entrevista con Jay Leno que “nosotros (Nissan) en realidad ofrecemos un ‘modo de lanzamiento'”. [36] El manual del usuario del GT-R indica que apagar el VDC solo está destinado a escapar de situaciones de poca tracción, como barro o nieve. Nissan ha reprogramado el año 2010 del modelo GT-R para reducir la velocidad del motor en el lanzamiento a alrededor de 3.000-3.500 rpm con VDC habilitado, lo que pretende mejorar los tiempos de aceleración. Una frase que usted escribió que destaca para mi es El aumento en la potencia del motor de los modelos posteriores combinados con el “R-Mode Start” ha reducido el tiempo de 0-97 km / h (60 mph) a 2.7 segundos. Creo que esto es impactante por que… es muy asombroso gracias por su escritura espero ver lo que escribes a continuación por que tu escritura es muy interesante
  • German's Dec 5, 17:16 comment on ENEMIGOS ETERNOS
    Estoy impresionado por tu publicación enemigos eternos lo que me gusta ver mas de dragon ball z es las peleas de goku, lo que me gusto que goku golpea a nappa sin compasión dejándolo fuera del combate y ahora se avecina la batalla contra vegeta para la salvación de la tierra. Y los guerreros fueron rescatados por goku que ha llegado del camino de la serpiente para derrotar a los saiyayines. Gracias por tu escritura espero ver que escribas a continuación.
  • Rolando's Dec 5, 17:04 comment on La Cultura no define a uno mismo
    Estimada Veronica : Estoy impresionado por su publicación de "La cultura no define a uno mismo" porque a mi me indigna el racismo y todo lo que tenga que ver con eso. Una frase que usted escribió que se destaca para mi es : "los gringos y los mexicanos tenían dividido el pueblo en Corazón descalzo me recuerda que en el mundo existen muchos racistas" creo que esto es algo desagradable porque no puedo creer que todavía haya racismo en el mundo. Gracias por su escritura. Espero ver lo que escribes a continuación , porque este tema es algo interesante de leer por lo cual me obligará a leerlo otra vez.
  • Fredy's Dec 5, 16:56 comment on Philippe coutinho history
    Dear:Alberto I am happy for the publicacion que pusiste no es tan grande pero algo es algo y estoy asombrado de a historia de "Philippe coutinho" y los detalles que dijiste. espero vuelvas a publicar otra
  • Edwin's Dec 5, 14:44 comment on T4O. The Arrival. Chapter V
    Dear T4O, I am Edwin Henriquez from T4N and you guys have a problem in central idea, the central idea is very tiny and do not have many information
  • Amani's Dec 5, 03:07 comment on The Value of Hard Work
    Emily, I very much enjoyed reading this. I think you structured your essay very well. I like how you began by talking in general about American values, then you went on to summarize the book "Breakaway", and then in the end relate it to others, all the while maintaining the topic of values. I have never read the book "Breakaway", however after reading your response to it I feel like I know it. One of the things that I enjoyed the most about your essay is how you talked about how we must encourage kids to follow their own American dream, instead of pushing them to follow a path that we want them to. Thank you for sharing this, and I hope to read more from you.
  • Amani Jammoul's Dec 5, 02:56 comment on Vaccination Fascination
    Emma, This essay is very fascinating and thought-provoking. I enjoyed reading it because I feel like I became better informed after finishing it. I think it is great that you present all different perspectives in regards to vaccines. You mention that "not enough evidence exists to prove that they are more harmful than helpful", however I think you could maybe elaborate more on that. I think you may find his article helpful in doing further research on the pros and cons for vaccinations: https://www.solvhealth.com/blog/pros-and-cons-of-vaccines. It includes the side effects, who should get them, what's in them, and more. I look forward to reading more from you.
  • Anthony's Dec 5, 02:45 comment on You Attract What You Think
    Angela, I agree so much with what you're saying. Positivity is a mindset. Although not scientific, it can still effect our lives day to day. We can take a load off of ourselves by not letting things out of our reach weigh us down. Being open minded literally opens us up so much more than embracing negativity and barriers.
  • Anthony's Dec 5, 02:36 comment on You are worth so much
    Your story was amazing Nicolette. I respect what you went through, and the sentiments you learned and are telling us right now are very important. We are all worthy of our own, and each other's respect no matter who we are or what we've been through.
  • Elena's Dec 5, 01:05 comment on The Value of Hard Work
    Emily, I really enjoyed your article. I liked how you addressed such a difficult topic to talk about when you added the question “ what if” it really made me think about what I could do to step out of my comfort zones. You did a great job using quotes, one of my favorite is “ Whatever brings you down will eventually make you stronger” I like this because when people step out of their comfort zones there is often times a let down that is paired with it. This quote is inspirational to the people who have let downs so they know that those hardships will make them stronger later on.
  • Doraneli's Dec 4, 20:27 comment on Why Me?
    YES SISTER
  • Michell's Dec 4, 19:23 comment on T4P. The Arrival. Chapter 2.
    i like it a lot as you show your essay , because its really interesting know how immigrants are received
  • Michell's Dec 4, 19:14 comment on T4P. The Arrival. Chapter 2.
    the central idea is interested
  • Michell's Dec 4, 19:12 comment on T4O. The Arrival. Chapter 2
    I like the central idea
  • Hector's Dec 4, 19:10 comment on T4P. The Arrival. Chapter 2.
    the central idea is really good
  • Penelope's Dec 4, 18:41 comment on How bad is teen depression?
    Hello Jean Carlos, I think this is a very important thing to discuss. I often think people avoid talking about these sorts of things because it can hit a personal area or can be too deep for someone to understand fully. I like how you talked about teens and how the modern era is affecting depression and making it worse. Thank you for opening up to such a difficult topic.
  • Penelope's Dec 4, 17:58 comment on Am I ready to graduate?
    Hello Yadira! Graduating hasn't really been such a scary thing to me. As I approached my senior year, I knew I was ready immediately. In face, as I write this, if I could graduate right now, I could. We are some of the lucky ones to be ready. I'm very proud of you for figuring yourself out and knowing what you want to do in your future. I know you wont give up and will strive for your goals. I believe in you.
  • Penelope's Dec 4, 17:49 comment on Creativity
    Hi Erik! I absolutely love this. I agree that creativity is one of the most amazing things in the world. Without it, we wouldn't have some of the most wonderful ideas that were created for our day to day use. Without creativity, our dreams wouldn't be able to become a reality because we wouldn't have dreams. When we read books, we would just stare at words and not watch the characters come to life through the pages. If no one had creativity, we wouldn't even have these beautiful books in the first place. Creativity is vital, and we must do everything to keep it safe.
  • Sophie's Dec 4, 17:02 comment on Plastic vs Our Environment
    This article taught me a lot about the significant waste in our world. Here is a link to another site you may find interesting. https://www.lrsrecycles.com/the-impact-of-plastic-waste-on-our-environment-and-what-you-can-do-about-it/
  • Sophie's Dec 4, 17:00 comment on Failure
    These poems are amazing! I love the way you reacted them back to Romeo and Juliet's love story. Here is a link to some more poetry that relates to Romeo and Juliet. http://www.beltwaypoetry.com/beete-shakespeare/
  • Angelica Rodriguez's Dec 3, 19:33 comment on The Pay Day Dilemma
    Gwen I really liked all the input and information that was in your article and how sad these facts can really be and how real it is in today's world. How true it rings and that it shouldn't be this way. I also liked when you mentioned STEM as well. I also found this article that I think would be helpful to your research as well. Thank you again Gwen. https://inequality.org/gender-inequality/
  • Angelica Rodriguez's Dec 3, 19:12 comment on Alcoholism
    Oswaldo I think that this poem is very personal and rings very true to a lot of things that have happened in my life. I love that you made multiple comparison's like to Romeo and Juliet and tied that into why something like this can become so bad. I found this article which I think really ties into your post and you might enjoy. Thank you again for sharing. https://www.healthline.com/nutrition/alcohol-good-or-bad#section1
  • Oakley's Dec 3, 16:56 comment on Comfort Zones
    It is a hard yes wonderful thing to expand you horizon and try something you normally would not. I agree with your writing and I really liked the part about how maturity is a form of wisdom.
  • Elisa's Dec 3, 13:56 comment on Who I am by Elisa Torres
    Hello there! Thank you reading my essay, about the fire I can't say much because I was young maybe 7 to 8? I just remember people dying and firemen going in the building when the bomb went off and caused a fire. How it affected me you ask? Well being a little kid and seeing people dying was a nightmare when I was young. I told my mom I was scared and hope there wasn't a bomb. As in now I'm still worried but not as much how I was back then. Thanks for liking the story! -Elisa
  • Isabell's Dec 3, 13:30 comment on Feedback request on Human Trafficking thesis 🙂
    Bladimir, You have a strong start to your thesis. You are covering an important social issue, and I look forward to seeing where you go with your project. With your project, will you be looking at human trafficking on a global aspect or in specific countries? I believe that with your research you will have the information to create a proposal for addressing human trafficking issues. Here is a website that covers some statistics of human trafficking that may be helpful for your research. https://www.justfacts.com/sexuality.asp Sincerely, Isabell
  • Isabell's Dec 3, 13:20 comment on Gun Control in the US and the World
    Katie, I found the third article you mentioned very compelling. I think it is important for the U.S. to analyze our current gun policies and the problems that are occurring. The U.S. is a relatively young country and should consider some of the policies adopted by other countries. I agree with you that there is a tug-of-war between the states and federal government. Here is an interesting article outlining gun violence statistics. This may be helpful in furthering your research. https://www.justfacts.com/guncontrol.asp
  • Alexis DiGregorio's Dec 2, 23:22 comment on What it Means to be American
    Johnna, I really enjoyed reading your article. I have thought the same things many times and agree with what you said about native born Americans taking for granted the privileges we have. I also agree that to many immigrants America is an escape from a dangerous life, however we are not the most welcoming and do not make it easy for immigrants. I think you have some great points in this article and I hope that by reading your article others will understand your point as well. Thank you for sharing!
  • Sante's Dec 2, 22:06 comment on Feedback request on Human Trafficking thesis 🙂
    Hello Bladimir, my name is Sante and I am a senior from Judge Memorial High School. When I initially ready your thesis, it pushes me to believe you are going to argue that human sex trafficking targets young women under the age of eighteen. If this is the case, there are a multitude of amazing resources that can help you to convey this point. One I was able to find was an article on Focus on the Family’s website (https://www.focusonthefamily.com/socialissues/family/sex-trafficking/sex-trafficking-the-facts). It touches on the basic information of what sex trafficking is and how widespread it is. I think it would be a good place to start your research. I believe you could be a little more clear in the decision of your thesis. Instead of saying “Human Trafficking in the form of sexual exploitation”, you could simply say “Human sex trafficking”. Theses should be clear and concise, so I would work to make your statement more directed. I’m excited to see where you take your research!
  • Sante's Dec 2, 21:44 comment on Being aware of our Environment
    Chanaka, you being up a lot of important economic issues revolving around plastic and propose some great solutions. I didn’t know that you cannot recycle the cap and small ring on a water bottle, and I feel like that information should be more available to people. It is extremely concerning to hear about how, “we have 11 giant plastic islands that are floating in our oceans”. I think one of the major ways we can help with this is by bring light to the fact of how much we are hurting the world around us. One of the organizations that is pushing to do this is the Plastic Pollution Coalition. They are making an effort to educate people about the eight million tons of plastic that go into the ocean every year. I’d love to hear more about what the individual can do to reduce plastic pollution and how we can use policy to push industry away from plastic usage. PPC: https://www.plasticpollutioncoalition.org/pft/2017/2/28/how-to-hold-governments-accountable-for-reducing-plastic-pollution
  • Jayvon's Dec 2, 21:37 comment on Dustin’s shadow box
    Dear ________Dustin______, Thank you for sharing your work. My name is ______Jayvon_______ and I am a student at Fremont High School. Something I liked about your work was ________________all the artifacts you had inside your shadow box_________________. Something I have a question about is ______________the hand print___________________. Please feel free to comment on my work in the future. The address of my student blog is http://jayvonafhs2022.edublogs.org/2018/11/30/assignment-3-the-identity-shadow-box/. Thank You!
  • Jillian Nelson's Dec 2, 11:56 comment on Meeting My Family
    Abraham, Thank you for sharing your story, it is very inspiring. I can relate to you in so many ways. I too am a soccer player and I am going to continue playing soccer in college. It is an amazing sport that brings people from so many different backgrounds together. I can also relate to the family aspect of your story. Sometimes your friends can let you down, and don't get me wrong your family can let you down too, but they will always be there for you no matter what. This feeling of belonging within your family is something that is indescribable. Having that kind of support system and love is what everyone is deserving of and I am so glad you have that. you mentioned that language can be a cultural barrier coming from another country, I would like to know more about the other cultural barriers you faced when moving here. Thank you again for sharing your story, I hope to see more of your posts in the future.
  • Jillian Nelson's Dec 2, 11:46 comment on You are worth so much
    Nicolette, Thank you for sharing your story, it is truly inspiring. I definitely have not gone through everything you have, but I can relate to the feeling of worthlessness and self doubt. That feeling is the worst feeling in the world and I am so sorry you had to feel this in such a drastic way. Just like you, though, as I have gotten older I have found my real friends and people who build me up instead of tearing me down, which makes all the difference in the world. I would like to hear about some of your coping mechanisms you have learned, so I could maybe implement them into my own life. Thank you again for being so courageous and sharing your story, you are amazing and worth so much! Jillian Nelson
  • Isabella's Nov 30, 20:36 comment on Why isn’t everyone the same?
    You make very interesting inferences on how we all perceive each other. It's amazing to think of how different we all are from one another. These things are what make us all so unique. It also becomes hard sometimes because many have xenophobic views that prevent us from wanting to be original and different from the rest. But, the most we can do is be there for one another and be an ally for those who can't be free to express themselves.
  • Katelynn's Nov 30, 19:31 comment on Why doesn’t everyone finish high school at the same time?
    Abel, This is a very interesting question as well as important. Everyone deserves the right to a great education, no matter their economic status or situation. Maybe look at other points of view on education- different countries and school systems- to help form your ideas.
  • Ozzie's Nov 30, 19:20 comment on a poem is a lot like…
    Dawn I love the fact that you made a poem about a poem. I enjoyed the line, "a poem is like a shout in the dark you hope others can hear, but it’s mostly for yourself", because every poem and writing has a meaning that is different to eveyone. The way you used such descriptive words all throughout was fantastic, and really gave us a sense to how a poem is written and the emotions you feel, to after it is written and the emotions others feel reading it. I poem i think you should look at is "?Poetry" by Pablo Neruda. It is similar in the way that you both treat poetry as something tangible and capable of making sounds. http://www.tnellen.com/cybereng/poetry/QMpoetry.html
  • Patricia's Nov 30, 19:19 comment on Why doesn’t everyone finish high school at the same time?
    Abel, I feel like you covered a lot of important information about education. It is true that students get better education than others. You made some valid points that education should be equal for all regardless of money status and power. Each child deserves the best education that matches their individual strengths and in turn helps them with their weaknesses.
  • Maggie's Nov 30, 19:16 comment on Who I am by Elisa Torres
    Hi Elisa, Thank you so much for sharing your story with us. I really appreciated getting to read about you and your life. I would be curious to hear about the fire that you experienced when you were younger and how it affected you. It was really cool to hear that you like to act because I also really enjoy acting and performing, so I related to that part of your piece. Thanks again for sharing! --Maggie
  • Erik's Nov 30, 17:44 comment on Comfort Zones
    I think everyone needs to come out of there comfort zone every now and again for example when I stepped out of my comfort zone when I was at a amusement park and went on a ride I didn't like I realized it wasn't that bad actually it was really fun.
  • Erik's Nov 30, 17:38 comment on Life’s a Game to Love
    I also believe in fate and that god has plan for all of us even if we don't see it or if things are going good or bad he has a plan for you.
  • Kasandra's Nov 30, 15:46 comment on Overprotective Parenting Leads to Struggling Young People
    I really enjoyed reading this post, Ed! I really liked the line where you emphasized the difference between parents solving their kids problems for them or solving their problems with them. Based on your post I think you would like this argument (https://www.psychologytoday.com/us/blog/beastly-behavior/201608/yes-overprotective-parenting-harms-kids). I look forward to reading your future posts!
  • Kasandra's Nov 30, 15:39 comment on Dress Codes: more harm than help?
    Great article, Anika! I really enjoyed how you highlighted the struggles that dress codes bring to women. Based on your post, I think you would find this article (https://www.theodysseyonline.com/real-impact-school-dress-codes) interesting. I look forward to reading your future posts!
  • Halley's Nov 30, 06:10 comment on Are New World Ideas more Important than the Health of Society
    Hi Ruby! I find your article very fascinating. I think you provide solid evidence that backs up your points very well. I like how you talk about the importantce of vaccines. I specifically enjoyed your point about lightening. Here is an article you may enjoy about vaccinations and the impact they can have on a large group of people! https://www.washingtonpost.com/outlook/2018/11/29/why-small-groups-vaccine-refusers-can-make-large-groups-people-sick/ I look forward to reading what you write next!
  • 2019 Chanakya Duggineni's Nov 30, 05:02 comment on Building a Safe Classroom
    I wrote a really great comment, and unfortunately Youth Voice is an awful website that still has bugs and it failed to post and now I'm unable to get back my comment. So here's a new comment that may not be as detailed, but will get my point across. I really enjoyed this article and the amount of detail and care you do for these African-American students you do in your big city school. I think you have the right motive to educate these minority students in all their classes they see in a positive light. But I also think its not only about educating these groups in their favorable way, but the United States is one of the few successful countries in the world that has citizens with all types of backgrounds which is extremely important. Because these citizens bring culture to our country. And it is important to acknowledge and support these people. But I believe it's not only about accepting these cultures and minority groups it's important to make them feel involved in their country. It's important to know these students belong and have a place in the world instead of feeling left out. Here's an article I believe you would enjoy. It talks about the growing minority groups in the United States and how more students feel more welcome and involved in their schools. https://www.csmonitor.com/USA/Education/2016/0415/Racially-diverse-new-majority-set-to-reshape-US-public-schools
  • Amy's Nov 30, 05:00 comment on Student Loans: A Crisis for Those Who Want to Succeed
    David, this was a very informative post. You were able to outline a strong argument in your first two paragraphs and then support your claims with an abundance of statistics in your video. The fact that just under 20% of students graduate with more than $50,000 of debt was very alarming. I particularly liked how you explained the problem of college debt by saying that college diplomas are becoming increasingly more important. You might enjoy this Washington Post article that explains this issue even further: https://www.washingtonpost.com/opinions/catherine-rampell-the-college-degree-has-become-the-new-high-school-degree/2014/09/08/e935b68c-378a-11e4-8601-97ba88884ffd_story.html?utm_term=.037ed514450e. I would love to hear more from you about what you thing is the most effective solution, and the best way to implement it.
  • Amy's Nov 30, 04:51 comment on Sexual Assault and the Supreme Court
    Maggie, I really enjoyed this post. I did not know that so many women were held by police for protesting. I particularly liked when you said, "It is time that we stop condoning sexual assault and giving offenders power." This was a powerful line because it plays into the frustration that many people are feeling right now about Kavanaugh's Supreme Court confirmation. I would love to know what you would say to people who argue that there was not enough evidence to prove that Mr. Kavanaugh assaulted Dr. Christine Blasey Ford. You may find this Atlantic article about why Susan Collins voted to confirm Kavanaugh interesting: https://www.theatlantic.com/politics/archive/2018/10/susan-collinss-kavanaugh-sexual-assault/572347/.
  • Miriam's Nov 30, 03:40 comment on How can gun violence be avoided?
    Adelphe, I agree that it should not be as easy as it is to obtain a gun, especially if one is not mentally sound enough to use a gun. I think adding information on why gun regulation is so hard to pass in Congress would dramatically help you argue your point. Adding statistics will only persuade some people, but exposing the truth of why the government is not doing enough will persuade more. This article might help you, https://www.nytimes.com/2018/03/12/us/politics/trump-gun-control-national-rifle-association.html
  • 2019 Chanakya Duggineni's Nov 30, 03:26 comment on why minimum wage?
    Elena, I really enjoyed the insight you had about the pros and cons of minimum wage, like you I believe minimum wage should be raised, and I still believe it should be raised after reading this article. For example in Utah the minimum wage is $7.25, if that were to get increased by just as little as 1, 2, 3, or even 4 dollars it'd really help those living on the whole "Living on pay check to pay check system". I hope this article I found will help you get some insight on the history of the minimum wage in the United States and it's impacts. https://www.thebalancecareers.com/pros-and-cons-of-raising-the-minimum-wage-2062521
  • Madison's Nov 30, 02:42 comment on Being aware of our Environment
    Chanakya this post was amazing! It was a real eye opener. I didn't know how bad the trash of plastic has gotten in our environment but because of your post and your sources, I have been aware of the tragedy. Thank you and good work! This post reminded me of this article that I think you might like... https://www.washingtonpost.com/outlook/scientists-know-plastics-are-dangerous-why-wont-the-government-say-so/2018/09/12/3b90fcee-b071-11e8-a20b-5f4f84429666_story.html?utm_term=.ce30e31ebd1e
  • Madison's Nov 30, 02:37 comment on Parents Must End Wars And Start Peace
    I really enjoyed reading this poem. The facts you state are so disturbing and sad but they seem to be true. And I think you open people's eyes when they read this and make them take a step back on their lives. I can't relate to this so much and it really touched me, thank you. Heres a site I thought of while reading this... https://www.verywellfamily.com/how-parents-fighting-affects-children-s-mental-health-4158375 Good job!!!
  • Elisa's Nov 30, 01:57 comment on Who I am by Elisa Torres
    Hello! Thank you for reading my essay. So, you ask why I prefer to be called by the name Elisa? The reason why I prefer to be called Elisa is because I see myself as a girl and a school I went to called Bronx Theatre High School is a LGBTQ community school and helps students to open up. Teachers there were nice and of course I was shy to open up yet they made me feel like I’m a person. I signed up to go to a show and it was a dance for people who come out as LGBTQ and I wore a dress practicing for it, and then I broke down in tears because I was too scared. After that my teacher helped me and I was talking about how I felt and he asked me what I want to be called and what pronoun I want to use to refer to myself. I said “Elisa” and the pronoun “she”, and he told me not to be scared, and he helped me by telling my teachers and classmates also. I felt comfortable and then I started to open up a lot and not be scared anymore. As to the fire, I can’t say much because I was young, maybe age 7 to 8? I just remember people dying and firemen going into the building when there was a fire or bomb that went off.
  • Mariah's Nov 29, 23:40 comment on Happiness is a Choice
    Kait, I really enjoyed reading your post! I have also recently gone through some personal struggles that moved me to take more control over my own happiness. I very much agree that there are things that are completely in control of and can have an influence on our happiness. However, there are external forces at work that can alter how accessible happiness is to certain people. Here is a link to an article that discusses how poverty has a negative impact on people's potential to achieve happiness. https://newrepublic.com/article/120859/money-doesnt-buy-happiness-poverty-increases-sadness-study I think you will find it very interesting because it explains both the internal and external forces that are at work when searching for happiness. Great job!
  • Mariah's Nov 29, 23:32 comment on Gun Control in Politics
    Branigan, this is a very interesting article. I appreciate how you mentioned both perspectives on the issue. You brought up an interesting point when you discussed how politicians now experience pressure to pick a side. I think that most voters expect candidates to speak up about this issue because of the expansive impact it has on our lives. I think you could go more in depth on the reasons why people do and do not support gun control. Here is an article that outlays some of the different interpretations of the Second Amendment that may help you do that. https://www.theguardian.com/us-news/2017/oct/05/second-amendment-right-to-bear-arms-meaning-history Overall, very nice job!
  • Olivia's Nov 29, 22:52 comment on Airpot Security: The Tale of Legal Groping
    Hi Anika! I found your post extremely interesting because I hadn't known just how many problems TSA was having. These are serious concerns and I appreciate you bringing them to our attention. Your suggestion to look to other countries for guidance and follow by example is probably the best way we can handle these issues in my opinion. If we implement what we know works somewhere else, the problems can be fixed without creating more problems. I have linked an article from the Washington Post below and I'm curious to see what you think of it. It outlines the recent airport security report of the inspector general, and things aren't looking much better. I hope you find it as interesting as I did. Good job! https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/trafficandcommuting/inspector-generals-report-questions-whether-airport-security-is-up-to-snuff/2017/11/09/bfc1f96a-c552-11e7-afe9-4f60b5a6c4a0_story.html
  • Joseph's Nov 29, 22:49 comment on School Shootings on The Rise
    I think this is a good article and strives to get an important point across. I personally think that mental health is an issue that needs to be tended to first. Banning guns will not stop someone with a strong will to do malice. More than a half million guns are stolen each year, according to Giffords Law Center, and then sold. Although banning weapons sounds like an effective idea in the process of stopping school shootings, I think we, as Americans, have a priority to first help the mentally ill. https://lawcenter.giffords.org/gun-traffickingprivate-sales-statistics/
  • Olivia's Nov 29, 22:41 comment on Diversity and Strength in America
    Hi Teo! The topic of diversity in America and how it has affected our lives and culture is extremely interesting. I love the connection you make to fear of the unknown and diversity, because ultimately people like being comfortable and we certainly find comfort in people who are like us. I would like to hear if you have any suggestions on how we can use diversity to promote a feeling of safety, because often times it does the opposite. I linked an article below that I think you might be interested in hearing about how diversity is a strength to our society. It goes along nicely with the point of your post. Well done! https://www.bloomberg.com/opinion/articles/2018-09-13/diversity-is-an-american-strength-not-weakness
  • Joseph's Nov 29, 22:30 comment on Is There a Hope For Less Student Loans?
    This a very interesting and informative post. It is unfortunate that student debt is growing, but good that it is growing slower than before. As I near college, student loans and debt concern me, as it seems as if there is no getting around the responsibility of paying them off. The results from CBS News are pleasing, but not very assuring. I think that colleges and universities should be more involved in helping students pay them off. Great job!
  • Miriam Smith's Nov 29, 21:43 comment on Polar Ice is Disappearing, Setting Off Climate Alarms
    Andrew, I found your topic very interesting because I am very concerned about the effects of climate change. I think including solutions to your topic would help your argument significantly. This resource might be really beneficial to you. https://climate.nasa.gov/solutions/resources/
  • Jacob's Nov 29, 21:40 comment on Very Cash Money
    Gisselle, this was VERY cash money of you. I think that a lot of aspects that can be contrived from the economic turmoil of recent times goes overlooked. This did a very good job about addressing that. Here's a link that may be able to hep you in your further studies: https://www.newyorker.com/magazine/2017/05/15/is-the-gig-economy-working
  • Tarek's Nov 29, 21:37 comment on Gun Control in the US and the World
    You make an interesting point, and although i disagree with the overall banning in guns, i would agree that some restrictions should be put into place. This is a very interesting topic to me and you should check out https://nowcomment.com/documents/116622#.XABcJRNKj3A
  • Jacob's Nov 29, 21:35 comment on Gun Control in Politics
    Branigan, you made several clear points in this article, and I'm glad that people are taking notice of this important issue. I like how you took the stance of both sides and showed very little bias over the course of your entire rhetoric. Here's a link that might help you in your future research: https://www.nytimes.com/topic/subject/guns-and-gun-control
  • Alexandra's Nov 29, 21:32 comment on Are Animals dying for our Needs?
    Luis, I really enjoyed your discussion on animal testing. I also liked how you brought in the idea of zoos being areas of exploitation. That was super insightful. I think this article about animal testing will help! http://www.crueltyfreeinternational.org/why-we-do-it/what-animal-testing
  • Andrew's Nov 29, 21:29 comment on Drop or Pass the Prop?
    This work was very intriguing to read. I was surprised at the facts you gave. Are you in support of or against prop 2? Good work!
  • Alexandra's Nov 29, 21:26 comment on Being aware of our Environment
    Chanakya, I really enjoyed you article discussing the build up of plastic on our planet. For my research project, I am also looking into pollution, but I'm researching light pollution. I think this article regarding a type of plastic-eating-bacteria will help! https://www.popsci.com/bacteria-enzyme-plastic-waste
  • Andrew's Nov 29, 21:19 comment on Failure
    This was a very interesting piece to read. I loved how the wording is laid out and presented. Good job!
  • Sera's Nov 29, 21:16 comment on Should the Minimum Wage Be Raised?
    This is some very interesting information, and I enjoyed reading about your take.
  • Sera's Nov 29, 21:14 comment on Plastic vs Our Environment
    This article was very helpful in educating me on this topic.
  • Alejandro's Nov 29, 17:42 comment on “Love Not Hate”
    yo poem it´s ok
  • Madeleine's Nov 29, 17:14 comment on Paranormal
    Dust, I enjoyed your poem mostly because it was short and concise, yet interesting and informational. Your passion and love for your country shows through in each line and I loved the little facts like "morning tea" that accompany it. The passion most strongly shines through with the strong openings of "I am". This phrase shows that you identify with Bangladesh; that you are one with Bangladesh. I look forward to reading more poems of yours, keep it up!
  • Ej's Nov 29, 13:26 comment on Protection of Privacy
    Your patience isn't long enough Oliver
  • Abigail's Nov 29, 03:17 comment on I’d rather listen
    Ronaysi, thank you for sharing your story. I know it is often difficult to talk about yourself, but you did a fantastic job. I find it difficult to speak or even write about myself as well. It is uplifting to hear you came to the US for a better future and I hope you found one. It sounds as if you are well prepared for your future with a chosen career and a backup plan. Good luck and keep up the good work!
  • James's Nov 29, 02:14 comment on The open eye
    Ajonea - I love this poem. The title caught my eye and I am so glad I clicked on it. Your analogy with the "open eye" is remarkable and this poem really shows how a few words can speak a thousand truths. I especially like how you ended your poem with "The world kinda needs you", it stands out from the rest of the poem and leaves the reader with a profound take away. I hope to hear more from your work, it is really impressive.
  • Dawn's Nov 29, 02:00 comment on a poem is a lot like…
    Dear Emmanuela, We appreciate you taking the time to read our poem and respond. We like that you lifted up a line from the poem that you enjoyed. We read “Perspective” and are interested in knowing more about the parallels you are drawing between King’s poem and our poem. We are interested in hearing more specifics from you about content or form that clarify the connection between poems. We look forward to your response. Sincerely, Dr. J.K. McLawns
  • Katie's Nov 29, 00:08 comment on What Have We Come To?
    Campbell, I think that one of our biggest issues in America is definitely division, like you said. Everyone is either a "liberal" or a "conservative", and we all demonize each other. I think that the rise of technology has contributed to this, because people can insult people without actually having to look them in the eye, making it much easier to pretend that they're just evil.
  • Damaris's Nov 28, 20:14 comment on Karma
    Dayana, One thing you said that stands out for me is "Treat people how you want to be treated because it will come back sooner or later." I think this is a very important quoit because i've had this experience with family and friends.
  • Ricardo's Nov 28, 19:59 comment on You are worth so much
    Hey Nicolette, I really loved your story, I thought it was very inspiring it really made a bit of an impact on my life. I feel like if I get to know you, you can change the way I look at things a bit.
  • Ruby's Nov 28, 19:22 comment on Who I am by Elisa Torres
    Issac, Your writing is very interesting and I loved learning more about you. I love how you started your essay with "Who am I?", it really drew me into your piece. Then you followed with your name and what you like to be called. I wish that you would explain why you like to be called Elisa because that part was very intriguing for me. I also liked the part of your writing where you talked about the fire that impacted your life. Maybe if you wanted to make it more detailed you could add an article about the fire and what happened. Overall I really liked your piece maybe just add more detail.
  • Ruby's Nov 28, 19:11 comment on How Poverty affects the nation
    Emilee, I loved your piece on the effects of poverty in our nation. The way that you used the relation of a book you read to current national events makes the topic easier to understand. My favorite part was your last paragraph, when you said "Poverty is a hard thing for all people to understand no matter your social class to how others might be living." because it really shows the variance of poverty. I also think that it was good that you added your sources, you could maybe look at this website if you needed more information, https://www.thenation.com/article/democrats-congress-house-anti-poverty-agenda-economic-justice/. Overall I loved your writing, thank you for sharing your views.
  • Destinie's Nov 28, 18:02 comment on You are worth so much
    Nicolette, amazing job! The fact that you shared a personal story AMAZES me! The way you broke down and explained self worth and self confidence really made an impact. I don't know you personally, but by reading this I can just tell that you are an amazing sweet girl! Thank you again for sharing with us!
  • Kasandra's Nov 28, 18:02 comment on Respect
    i really like that you decided to right your essay on respect because personally i feel like these newer generations are being raised with the lack of knowledge of what respect is and how much it is needed every day. I see how elder people get on the bus and it's already packed with young people and not one person gives up there seat that's sitting in the front. Those seats are specifically for the eldery and disabled and yet people sit there when there are empty seats in the back of the bus. Hopefully your essay goes to many eyes of young people and they learn from it, and realize that respect is something everyone needs to use in their day to day life.
  • Brianna's Nov 28, 18:02 comment on Respect
    This post is very true, and I agree that respect and karma go hand and hand somewhat. My favorite part was when you said. 'Although I am respectful to others I still don’t always get respected back, but I can’t let that discourage me; it makes me want to give more to influence people to be respectful.' It is inspiring to see you not be disrespectful just because one person didn't respect you.
  • Salahuddin's Nov 28, 17:59 comment on The Importance of Family
    I really like how you realized the importance of family at a young age. I realized it at a young age and I had to go through my parents having a divorce and having to how much it killed my dad to not be with her anymore. I distanced myself from my family because I had no interest to talk to them but soon I realized that family is all you have. Your friends won't give you that rent money if your in need of it but your family will help with no hesitation because that's what family did so no matter how close I was to my friends or how much I liked them more than my family members I realized that my family was with me from the start so they are going to be with me in the end and I see the stuff that happened to me and the stuff that went through my head in this essay and it's really touching that you had were able to get through it and accomplish many things.
  • Nicolette's Nov 28, 17:57 comment on The Importance of Creativity
    I love your story and the topic. Art is such an important form of expression and i relate to this on many levels. Art is beautiful and it helps release emotions that you cant express verbally.
  • Destinie's Nov 28, 17:56 comment on Respect
    Hamza I highly agree with the message you are putting out there. Respect plays such an important role in life. You couldn't have worded it any better, amazing job on explaining your reasoning!
  • Salahuddin's Nov 28, 17:52 comment on United by Differences
    It's very amazing how something like that has inspired you to help others, something like that is where true passion comes from and it's really inspiring
  • Angel's Nov 28, 17:52 comment on Karma
    Dear Dayana, I am very intrigued by your post because I know what it's like to be in toxic relationships with people that just want attention. I've dealt with being the toxic person as well, but I know it was wrong and your post is just another reminder of the thing I shouldn't be or shouldn't have to deal with. And I do truly enjoy the idea of karma and the philosophy of letting things take motion in my life. One thing you said that stands out for me is: “Treat people how you want to be treated because it will come back sooner or later," I think this is an interesting idea that many people have tried living by because you place yourself in the shoes of several people and try to view things from their perspective and wonder how the things you do or say will affect someone. However, I'm not a fan of that saying, for even when being the best person to everyone and caring for their needs, that positivity isn't always reciprocated by either those people or the universe. I can't describe how many times I change the methods of positivity and still receive a backlash of negativity instead. Thanks for your project. I look forward to seeing what you write next because what you're saying is true and needs to be shared out to people so they can understand that we need that kind of mindset. Your piece spoke out to me, and I hope it does the same thing to other people.
  • Kasandra's Nov 28, 17:51 comment on You are worth so much
    girl omg you are so brave for sharing such a harsh part of your life, you're so strong i would never have the guts to put something personal out there and i admire you so much for it. I love how you grew from all of that negative stuff and I'm super happy for you and may your relationship last many many years. Thank you for sharing you story. I can relate to it on so many levels and it feels nice to see how I'm not the only one and can finally relate to someone who went through this my age. I feel like teenage depression isn't taken serious, but mental health of all ages is important and matters.You are worth so much you don't even realize it and you deserve to be happy. <3
  • Nicolette's Nov 28, 17:45 comment on Happiness is a Choice
    Kait, i love your essay. I feel like a lot of teens believe they need to be in control of every part of their life but the quote "control what you can control" is a great phrase to use seeing as we truly are the only ones keeping ourselves from our own happiness because we feel that some thing else is controlling it and the ore we focus on trying to control the other aspects of our lives the more stress that causes.
  • Deenie's Nov 28, 17:38 comment on Hard Work and Dedication Can Beat Natural Talent
    Hadley, I would like to say that it is amazing how you put so much dedication at something you thought you weren't good at. This piece really connected to me because I once thought I wasn't good at a sport because of my size and weight but I continued to push my self and gained weight and worked out constantly, I made it my mission to be the best I can be. So I really am inspired by this essay because I have a connection with this essay that I haven't realized until I was finished reading.
  • Nicolette's Nov 28, 17:36 comment on Respect
    Your topic is so important and i believe that for teens it often is difficult to know you are worthy of respect. I love that your personal take on respect has to do with the fact that you yourself know that you deserve it.
  • Madeleine's Nov 28, 16:23 comment on Creativity
    Hey Erik! I believe creativity to be a major part of everyone's life. Creativity can be big or it can be small. It can be positive or it can be negative. No matter its form, it is always prevalent. It is because of these beliefs that I found your post to stand out. I loved how you mentioned the creativity inside of everyone and the ways in which you applied this creativity to the real world through inventions throughout history. I agree that our world would fail to grow and change without this fundamental element. In saying that, I believe it to be highly important that we continue to nurture and encourage creativity throughout our world. I hope to hear more about your ideas concerning creativity! Thank you!
  • Emma's Nov 28, 16:23 comment on A Drastic Change in My Life
    Ramon, thank you for sharing a little about your life. I admire the honesty behind your writing, and it helped me learn a lot about you in a short amount of time. It is wonderful to hear about your family and the opportunities you have found together in the United States. You have shown me the importance of gratitude and have inspired me to be thankful for the life that I have. I would love to hear even more about your story. Thanks for your willingness to share!
  • Lindsey's Nov 28, 16:21 comment on Why doesn’t everyone finish high school at the same time?
    Abel, This is an interesting take on education inequality. Many of the points you make are extremely true. Lots of families don't have access to a good education due to income. It is unfair that those with less money have less opportunities. Hopefully a change is made to support families with low incomes so they can send their children to high quality schools and guarantee them a better future. Thanks for sharing!
  • Abigail's Nov 28, 16:20 comment on Creativity
    Erik, I found your thoughts on creativity fascinating. Human creativity is often taken for granted even though it is an integral part of our culture and society. As you pointed out, it has allowed us to create unimaginable things that have changed who we are. Creativity is also a very personal trait, something that can mean the world to us but nothing to someone else. Like you, I believe this trait makes us unique. I enjoyed reading about your game. It allowed me to glimpse your creative spirit. I hope to continue to share your ideas and pursue the creation of your game.
  • Raine's Nov 28, 16:20 comment on You Attract What You Think
    Angela, I really liked your thoughts on the law of attraction. I agree with you when you said that good things will come your way if your positive and optimistic.
  • James's Nov 28, 16:19 comment on Respect
    Britney, I really appreciated this article and enjoyed reading your perspective on the ideas of respect. I agree with your basic ideas of respecting people who give you respect, and think that this would build solid relationships founded on mutual respect between two people. I feel your article is blunt, but honest and I respect that. I hope to hear more from you in the future.
  • Abby's Nov 28, 16:19 comment on A Drastic Change in My Life
    Ramon, The story you shared is the picture of the American dream. I'm so happy that you and your family were given the opportunity to live the U.S. and hopefully have a better future. Reading this, helped me realize how other people haven't been given the same opportunities as I have and to be grateful for what I've been given. This is a refreshing perspective that I think a lot of people would benefit from reading. I would love to hear more about your story. Abby
  • Sean's Nov 28, 16:18 comment on A Story to Be Told
    Ajonea, I really liked how you used metaphors to help produce an image of this person. Your writing style appears more as something that you truly wanted to write about and feel very passionate about.
  • Oakley's Nov 28, 16:18 comment on What was the origin of Halloween?
    I found this article interesting. I love Halloween but I did not know its history, or anything about Samhain.
  • Mack's Nov 28, 16:16 comment on I Am From
    Angela, I really liked reading your poem. This really make me imagine how you look and the lifestyle that you live in. This was an easy read and very catchy with the " I am'. Keep writing and good luck to you in the future!
  • Emma's Nov 28, 16:15 comment on You are worth so much
    Nicolette, thank you for courageously sharing your story. Hearing about self-confidence from such a personal perspective helped me see it in a new light. It's obvious that self-esteem starts building at a young age, something that is evident in your story. So many people struggle with their self-image. I think sharing your story with even more people would have a tremendous impact. You have inspired me to strengthen my own self-esteem, and for that I am incredibly grateful. It is wonderful to hear about your recovery. I wish you the best of luck as you continuously discover your infinite worth.
  • Raine's Nov 28, 16:15 comment on Creativity
    Hi Erik, I really enjoyed reading this piece of writing. I love expressing my creativity and incorporating it into everything I do. I agree that its one of the more important traits one can have because it can be applied in multiple areas throughout one's life.
  • Skye's Nov 28, 16:14 comment on Meeting My Family
    Abraham, thank you for sharing your story. Your determination in soccer is really inspiring to read, and I hope you continue to be passionate throughout the rest of your life. The way you write about the role of family in your life is beautiful, and the examples you gave of times they were there for you were so powerful. From just this short essay, I can tell how hard working you are. Not only to immigrate as a child, but to be bilingual, is a show of your strength. Living without a parents can be very difficult, but you are still able to look on the bright side of having family in New York. I hope you continue to carry this optimistic attitude and positivity.
  • Branigan's Nov 28, 16:14 comment on Why doesn’t everyone finish high school at the same time?
    Hey Abel, I really enjoyed reading your post. You made a lot of good points that I really hadn't thought about before. It is interesting to see another point of view on an issue such as this. I would recommend taking a look at other countries around the world, and how they interact with education. Some may do it slightly better than others, and that could help to fully form your ideas. I hope to read more of your work!
  • Clara's Nov 28, 16:14 comment on Be Who You Are
    Brianna, this post is very self aware and it evokes in me a conscious perception of how I act around my peers at times. I agree that at times you find yourself sacrificing your individuality for a contrived thought of popularity. It is brave that you left your safety to find your real self and I can see now that you are unapologetically you. My favorite quote from your post is, "So people can call me what they want, because that’s how they interpret me, not how I interpret myself." It is inspiring to see how comfortable you are with yourself and I respect you immensely!
  • Anna's Nov 28, 16:13 comment on Baldwin’s sophisticated take on racism
    Ajonea, I found your analysis very interesting and agree with you that Baldwin makes a strong argument. African Americans are still feeling the wrath of racism and this topic is as relevant as it has ever been. While we have made strides toward equality, we are no where near perfection. To empower your writing even more read over it and edit out grammar mistakes. Furthermore, capitalize the beginning of the quote you use for grammatical reasons and emphasis. I very much enjoyed your analysis of how Baldwin used syntax as well. Literary tools are always important to recognize. Thank you for sharing!
  • Oakley's Nov 28, 16:13 comment on Has technology helped or harmed the development of the world?
    I also agree that there are definite benefits to technology, but I also believe that there is a time and a place. Modern advances in technology are amazing in what they ca do for the sick and the injured and even work, but i feel it has really taken over our everyday lives, especially in regards social media.
  • Mack's Nov 28, 16:11 comment on Why???
    Beatrice, don't let this get to you. It is hard for her understand right ow but at the end of the day she still loves you. Just remember to be happy and to be who you are and that you are accepted. Be confident and don't let others tell you something that you know that you arent.
  • Hailey's Nov 28, 16:11 comment on Why???
    Hi Beatrice. Thank you for sharing this short essay with me! I loved how you opened up about your feelings towards your mom and I get how people might not always understand you as well as you would like them to. Your opening sentence was impactful when you said "I just don’t understand why my mother does not understand me". Keep up your good writing!
  • Sean's Nov 28, 16:10 comment on You Attract What You Think
    Angela, Although there may be no scientific evidence to the law of attraction being as real and true as gravity, there is evidence of people thinking positive thoughts and thus being able to notice the small things, such as finding money or having someone buy you a drink. Psychologists have done extensive research on whether or not thinking positive thoughts affects your day to day life. Here is a link from Harvard that displays how positive thoughts can be linked to healthier living. https://news.harvard.edu/gazette/story/2016/12/optistic-women-live-longer-are-healthier/
  • Abby's Nov 28, 16:10 comment on You are worth so much
    Nicolette, Thank you for sharing your story. Your story gives a personal perspective on anxiety, depression, and eating disorders. Reading your narrative also helped me to understand how experiences at a young age can shape you for the rest of your life. It was really inspiring hearing how you were able to overcome obstacles especially when you said, "For one of the first times in my life I feel truly important and accepted". You are so brave for sharing this very personal part of your life, and by doing this, you might be helping someone who is going through something similar. Abby
  • Matt's Nov 28, 16:10 comment on My thoughts on “This is America, by Childish Gambino
    I enjoyed this post and everytime I watch to music video I notice something new. There are a lot of deep messages in this video. That main one that I noticed was that people only show the good things going on in some people's lives but they don't show their problems and things that need to be fixed.
  • Lindsey's Nov 28, 16:09 comment on You Attract What You Think
    This is a great take on the Law of Attraction. I agree with you that it is difficult to dedicate time to something that is categorized as a pseudoscience, but you make an amazing point that it doesn't hurt to try. Positivity is a driving force in happiness and applying the Law of Attraction to your life, despite its lack of evidence, can be a tremendous help. One other practice that can be useful is a gratitude journal. By acknowledging what you do have and what you appreciate in life, your positivity spikes.
  • Chris's Nov 28, 16:09 comment on Dear You
    I really enjoyed your poem. I found it really easy to connect to because I think most people have experienced something or someone like this in their lives. You did a masterful job at bringing all of your emotions together in a poem, and I think that you should continue to write poetry.
  • Skye's Nov 28, 16:08 comment on Respect
    Britney, the way you talk about respect is so eloquent and relatable. This is a topic I think everyone can relate to, especially other high school students. It is very strong of you to be able to speak from experience and talk about your own struggles with friendships and the show of respect. This essay speaks to the experience of so many people, and it is very refreshing to see someone discuss their own experience. I particularly appreciated the part where you discussed the summer of 2016, since you opened up about your own struggle.
  • Branigan's Nov 28, 16:06 comment on Creativity
    Hey Erik. I really enjoyed you ideas around this topic. I wouldn't consider myself to be very creative, but it is something that I definitely need to work on. I hadn't thought about a lot of the examples you brought up, and I definitely will think about those in the future. I hope to hear you again!
  • Anna's Nov 28, 16:06 comment on You are worth so much
    I am incredibly impressed by your courage shown through your story. Your willingness to share will touch many lives and you have chosen a topic which is not talked about enough. I agree with what you said, most everyone struggles with self image and self confidence at times. I know I have. I found your use of repetition toward the end very empowering, specifically when you said, "I am worthy of so much. I am worthy of happiness. I am worthy of love. I am worthy of respect." If you could change one thing maybe proof read to eliminate grammar mistakes, but overall I loved your essay. Especially in today's world, technology has made low self esteem a common issue and people are in need of your message more than ever. Thank you for sharing!
  • Hailey's Nov 28, 16:05 comment on Positive Mind
    Hi Noemi, I love your essay on positivity! When you said " I mean It was hard to stop talking to them but I knew that those who I use to call friends were not really my friends", I agree that even though if it isn't the easiest thing to do, that the best thing to do is cut the negative people out of your life. The one thing you could improve on is to make sure that you check you grammar, and also make sure that your tenses are consistent. Keep up the good writing and I hope to read more from you.
  • Matt's Nov 28, 16:05 comment on You Attract What You Think
    After reading your post, I agree with what you're saying about how we attract what we are thinking about. I have heard that you attract what you fear in the past. I think that's true. In sports for example, if you fear injury you are more likely to get injured.
  • Chris's Nov 28, 16:03 comment on Positive Mind
    I completely agree with your point. In my experiences, I have found that having a positive mind set helps in many ways. When approaching everything I do I try to have a positive mindset because it helps you achieve more and do better. I think it is very important that you pointed this out because it is a lot easier to have a negative mindset, but if people put in the extra effort to approach things with a positive mind set, they will see an improvement in their lives.
  • Katherine's Nov 28, 15:55 comment on Bravery
    Mariely, this was very intriguing! Your thought process about this topic was very interesting to read and I enjoyed what you had to say. I specifically liked when you said, "This option I was most sure of but any of these options are just options that I’m not sure about, and I also try not be so anxious about the future and try to just simply get somewhere." I too try not to be so anxious about the future, but it can often be hard! Thank you for this! I look forward to reading to what you write next.
  • Emmanuela's Nov 28, 05:37 comment on Soccer is Life!
    I personally don't have any experience with sports but I understand that in order to play it takes so much time and skill to develop. I know several people who play soccer and are constantly practicing in order to perfect their craft. This is something we can all relate to, similar to school because we are constantly reading and studying to be the best we can be. Here are some articles which explain how doing a sport can actually help you positively in life. https://www.muhealth.org/conditions-treatments/pediatrics/adolescent-medicine/benefits-of-sports
  • Emmanuela's Nov 28, 05:26 comment on I hope this never happens to me
    The effects of tsunamis as well as earthquakes are truly devastating and tragic. I as well hope they never occur in any other parts of the world. It is very sad seeing how many lives are ended as well as whole cities that are torn apart. Here are some articles regarding earthquakes I think would be interesting to learn further information about earthquakes and where have hit in different countries. a https://earthquake.usgs.gov/
  • Emmanuela's Nov 28, 05:10 comment on Speaks Three, Understands Four Languages
    I liked how you started it off with "before saying something bad to say about me just come ask me", it says a lot about you, and seems that you are an honest and understanding individual. This is something I can respect. I truly enjoyed learning about your life and where you come from. I am glad that you have been focused and motivated in your readings and learning English. Learning English is such a great accomplishment and you've already come so far. This article discusses the positives of knowing more than one language and I think you would enjoy it. https://www.fluentu.com/blog/advantages-of-learning-a-foreign-language/
  • Emmanuela's Nov 28, 05:02 comment on Why doesn’t everyone finish high school at the same time?
    These are very good questions to ask about such a serious topic, a topic which is dependent on not only our future success, but the success of our country. Though schooling should be a right for everyone and should be accessible to everyone, in some cases its not. Everyone goes through personal experiences whatever it may be, which limits their school experience. But we should work around these limitations to allow everyone the right to the same level of education. This article gives further information to those who are affected by poverty in America. https://www.childfund.org/Content/NewsDetail/2147489206/
  • Emmanuela's Nov 28, 04:40 comment on Meeting My Family
    I love your story and hope you continue to pursue your dreams in playing soccer. I think it is important to have such a mentality at your age because it will guide you through the rest of your life and keep you on a positive and successful track. You have already accomplished so much, it is very impressive to be able to speak two languages. It just shows that if you truly want something you must work for it and will achieve it. At the end of the day blood is always thicker than water, so continue to keep that strong bond with your family and I wish you the best life and continue your dreams in pursing a professional career in soccer.
  • Emmanuela's Nov 28, 04:26 comment on a poem is a lot like…
    I truly enjoyed this poem because it was such a special and unique perspective to poetry I have never heard before. I thought the line " a poem is a mouthful of dreams, masked by words unable to know their true emotions" was very true because as the reader we never truly understand the meaning behind the poem is or its inspiration behind it, its left to us as the reader to interpret from the words what we think it means. A poem this reminds me of is Perspective by Amy King.
  • Emmanuela's Nov 28, 04:15 comment on Coming Together
    I enjoyed what you took from the book because it is a lesson for all of us to learn, in order to make a change you must be part of the change. Though it can be sometimes scary or even intimidating it is necessary to occur in order to see progress and change. Here is another link to further information regarding the me too movement and what had inspired the creator to make a change for others. https://www.ajc.com/news/world/who-tarana-burke-meet-the-woman-who-started-the-too-movement-decade-ago/i8NEiuFHKaIvBh9ucukidK/
  • Beatrice's Nov 28, 00:37 comment on You are worth so much
    You are so brave to tell your story. The world needs more people like you. You are so brave. You are an inspiration. Your last line should be on tee shirts and merch to inspire people. I went through the same thing as you. I understand how hard it is to tell your story.
  • Beatrice's Nov 27, 23:50 comment on Coming Out Pansexual
    Your story made me want to write about my own. You inspired me.
  • Beatrice's Nov 27, 23:30 comment on Why???
    Feel free to contact me.
  • Chanakya's Nov 27, 23:25 comment on YV2~ Pros and Cons of School Uniforms
    I think you make some really good points, but personally I don't care about uniforms anymore. I've just gotten used to them at this point. But the advantages of them aren't just to help everyone look the same or help stop bullying, but it's nice to have them. Instead of sitting in front of your closest picking out an outfit for 10-20 minutes every morning you can just put on your uniform and only worry about your hair. Its more about the simplicity rather than all the other stuff.
  • Beatrice's Nov 27, 22:30 comment on Teachers Can Be Fine
    Thanks for the article. I am glad that you found this topic interesting. I hope you like other articles that I have written
  • Beatrice's Nov 27, 22:28 comment on Teachers Can Be Fine
    Thanks for the article it was great. I'm glad that you like the point that I made.
  • Julissa's Nov 27, 21:43 comment on La noche que pensaba que iba ser espectacular
    Me gusta tu comentario sobre tu libro que esta leyendo. Hicistes bien tambien en comparando el libro que estas leyendo a un evento en la vida real. Me gusto como hicistes esa conexion. Me gusta tambien como todo lo dijistes directo y hablastes sobre lo importante del libro. Quizas para la proxima vez, a lo mejor puedes hablar mas sobre que mas paso en el libre. Y en vez de conectarlo con tu vida, puedes conectarlo con eventos que pasan en nuestro mundo.
  • Audrey's Nov 27, 21:42 comment on Comfort Zones
    Emma, I think you provide valuable insight about embracing trying new things and how it can create positive change in your life. I like how you acknowledged that everyone's comfort zone is different and thats okay. I read something the other day about a few reasons why stepping out of your comfort zone can be beneficial for people. Here is a link in case your interested (https://www.forbes.com/sites/annlatham/2018/04/11/16-reasons-why-you-should-get-out-of-your-comfort-zone-now/#3d6b797a62e5) Thank you for sharing this article. I look forward to reading more from you in the future.
  • Johnny's Nov 27, 21:41 comment on Why does everybody go crazy when they see the Lamborghini Aventador?
    Wilson, this is intriguing! It truly is a beautiful car. It is evident that Lamborghini crafts their car with great precision and detail to an extent that is superior to other car makes. It represents luxury which is rare in our society. You normally don't see multiple Lamborghinis traveling down the street at the same time, except for cities like Los Angeles and Vegas where most people are very wealthy (hence why they reside there). I believe as there are more car models released the Lamborghini will eventually decrease in value, but there's no doubt that there will be new Lambo models, more stunning than the Aventador in the near future.
  • Griffin's Nov 27, 21:40 comment on Meeting My Family
    Abraham, Your story is inspiring for me because it is rare these days that people are willing to follow their dreams. It is so cool that you are training to be a professional soccer player while still maintaining your studies. I appreciate your candidness in telling a piece of your story. It is so cool that you are able to speak two languages fluently; I have always wanted to speak more than one language. I am sorry to hear that you got locked up and that you expected more from your friends, but it is good that your family was there for you when no one else does. I can only imagine how much you appreciate them.
  • Alexis's Nov 27, 21:39 comment on Why isn’t everyone the same?
    Crismeylin, I really liked the thoughts you shared in this post, I think that it is a difficult question of whether we should all be the same or not. I agree with what you said that everyone is different because we all have our own individual minds. We do not all think the same and therefore do not all act the same. However, while it would be easier to accomplish communal goals if everyone wanted the same thing it could also be dangerous. I think it is important for people to think and act differently because it allows for debate and working together to make compromises for everyone. Do you think it would be better if everyone thought the same or if people had different opinions? Thank you for sharing you thoughts.

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