Old field, mi cancha, bound by Fordham Plaza,
Lined with soccer fields where we have so much fun
with soccer balls, footballs and colorful walls.

Mi cancha, my town
El este de Arthur Avenue

The Ciccarone Park
Y el hospital de St. Barnabas

Las canchas me ligan to its
sidewalks and friends
Its different sport fields and risas

Old field, my friend
Bound by all my friends and family
La cancha grande de mis amigos y familia.

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Orlando
May 22, 2019 7:21 pm

Dear Oscar :

I enjoyed your poem, because it talks about one of my favorite sports, soccer.

One thing that stands out for me is that you threw in some Spanish words in there. I believe that makes the poem more interesting and it engages the reader and keeps them hooked. It is also very creative because it shows what type of languages and people are heard and seen around there.

Another thing you did that I enjoyed is how you used the fields surroundings to try to describe the location.

Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing more of your work!

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