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I am made of staying in my room all day, doing my homework, and listening to music, while telling my parents to find a new hobby other than just yelling at me that I don’t do anything, as if I didn’t do much by just existing.
I am made of traveling all together from across the world to the other, of leaving no one behind, even if we’re risking the whole world, yet it isn’t a loving/happy family. It’ just sad.
I am made of getting amazing advice, but not listening to it because even though I believe it, I think that it’s not for me, of giving life changing advice, but not following it, but then again, the coach doesn’t play, only teaches.
Nicolle, I really enjoyed this poem and the metaphor you used, “the coach doesn’t play, only teaches.” It really reminded me of my own friends or teammates who give me advice and I don’t know what to do with it. I would love to hear another poem because of the great techniques you used (Rhythm and Metaphor.) to great success. I also loved the topic and how you talked about your parents because I feel the same way at times. Thank you for the poem and hope you write more!
Dear Nicolle,
I am excited about your poem because you stayed in my room all day, doing my homework and listening to music while telling my parents. This is very cool. I think.
One thing piece of imagery that stands out for me is traveling all together from across the world to the other, of leaving no one behind, even if we’re risking the whole world. I think this is interesting because you are unique.
Your poem connects to my own experience. I think we have common things but the main thing that is different to me is that you tell your parents about your hobby they yelled at you but my parents don’t do this.
Thanks for your work on Youth Voices. I look forward to seeing what you write next because <my thoughts is great with you I think some common between me and>
Hey, it’s me, the guy who spells his name K-h-o-a. I really like your concept of image. It’s beautiful, nine on ten. Also i love your poem. It’s very interesting about how you tell about your habits and dreams. I want to travel around the world too. I hope i can see more post from you
(P.s: I hope you can follow your dreams) <3