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Zachary commented on the post, Spaces Seem Infinite, and You Don't Exist.
I loved the words you used in this poem, they paint a very vivid picture of what you are saying
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I’m looking at a piece of coral
It reminds me of the seabed,
and all the years it spent stuck in the sand
watching the fish swim and the crabs crawl.
It acted as a home for some fish as their
predators
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I really enjoyed this poem! I thought it was so cool that you put so much meaning into a simple object like coral. I liked how when I first started reading your poem I was thinking of a boring piece of coral floating around seabeds, but as I finished I saw the coral in a totally different perspective. What a cool poem!!
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hey Zack , its Julius and I really like you’re poem, I like how the poem ends with “home, when after a long journey it landed”. It just puts a end to the poem very well. Also the poem makes me ask the question , do you want to be a marine biologist? I also like the fact the reef acts as a sort of guardian for the smaller fish who cant fend against these big fish.
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I enjoyed this poem. I feel like there was a deeper meaning behind this than what meets the eye. I loved how you talked about the journey of coral and how it ended up on shore and ended it’s journey. It was well written.
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Zachary wrote a new post
I want a fag for president, someone who has seen and been through
the worst and has experienced not being accepted. I want a president
who worked to get where he was and lived the exact struggles that
we face.
Read MoreI want a fag for president, someone who has seen and been through the worst and has experienced not being accepted. I want a president who worked to get where he was and lived the exact struggles that we face. I want...
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Your poem is extremely powerful. I am hopeful that in the future we will have a president that is a relatable figure for all, but currently we are so far from that. It’s sad that we have a president that threatens all the freedoms we have worked so hard for. Great writing.
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Zachary wrote a new post
I am from the wood table, from the living room furniture.
I am from the nerf guns and skateboards and drawing
Supplies.
I am from the cement roads, from the city skyscrapers.
I am from Evan and Susan. I am
Read MoreI am from the wood table, from the living room furniture. I am from the nerf guns and skateboards and drawing Supplies. I am from the cement roads, from the city skyscrapers. I am from Evan and Susan. I am from the...
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So cool how you described aspects of your childhood while describing how where you’re from shaped you. Also I can totally relate to the political arguments.
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I really like like the way you’ve written this. It’s projects like these that really make you think about what’s important in life. I think your adaptation of George Ella Lyon’s poem is really well done and thoughtful.
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I really like how you took everything in your life and put it into this poem it reminds me of some things that I did when I was younger. The way you ended this is very powerful. The whole none welcoming city hits me hard and really grabs my attention. Very nice work.
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I love how this poem flows and explains your background. It really gives u a good feeling and makes you happy. Keep going! This is a great start to poetry. Great job
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I like how your writing flows, you included both the city aspect and the home aspect. This was a great piece of writing
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Hey Zack! So based on reading this poem it’s about a piece of coral. You described the environment the coral was in and I can really picture it. I think it’s cool that you told the story of the coral, it seems like objects can tell stories!