I am feeling understanding about your poem because sometimes I do feel like this. This poem explains how some people are feeling lost but they are still beautiful. Some people feel this way and your poem explains how they should think of the bright side and not give up. I really liked your poem and it is really inspiring to me.
If I said I’m from New York in a Mexican townWhere I’ve lived all my life and people pass by everydayWould you know where I’m from?Where I’m from the sky rings with heatAnd the field screams soccerWhere there a
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You can not predict it But the future
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Create your future
Thanks for your writing. look forward what you write next because this post was nice and i hope your poss another one.
She doesn’t rememberShe doesn’t remember her first gift She doesn’t remember her first liftShe doesn’t remember her first day at schoolShe doesn’t remember punching her friendShe doesn’t remember what she did
This poem was very good and I think the concept you chose to write about is interesting. We never really remeber all the firsts we’ve had in our life just bits and peices. I especially like the end where you said, “She doesn’t remeber this but her life could have been worse.” It really puts in perspective the hardships we go through. Yes, it may have been a horrible experience but there’s others out there who may be experiencing hardship just as hard or even worse as us. Looking at life through this lenses helps us to see we’re not alone in our trials but to also count the many blessings we have. Here is a poem I think you will like about a girl experiencing different things for the First time. (Sorry the hyperlink wouldn’t work) https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poetrymagazine/poems/54757/first-time
I really appreciated this poem and hope to read more things from you.
Your poem was very deep going into so much detail about your life. I liked how it showed the good and bad that can happen in a persons life story. Parts such as when you were cut by a thorn were very engaging because of how you include the smallest thing yet it can have a big effect.
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