Dear Victor,

One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is “It’s also saying that the parks are very important for everyone so that kids have where to have fun and for the community to have a place to go so that they can have fun as a community and it would also help the obesity rates go down.” I think that this quote’s meaning is strong because I see that you clearly explained that parks are really important to the community itself. An example of this is when you talked about connecting Parks and physical health and somewhat parks and moods. One thing that you can work on is fixing the order of your words, so it could be understandable and readable to the reader and I also recommend to make your sentences shorter.

Dear Victor,

I surprised on how you are saying that we should have more parks in Oakland because they bring our community more together. Also I really like how you said that kids and adults can be more involved with their community if we have more parks in Oakland. The fact that you showed evidence showing that parks make Oakland a better and healthier place for the people shows that you really are an expert on your topic. One sentence that stands out to me is when you said how kids these days just want to be behind a screen really is showing me that we need to have more parks in order for kids to be more active. Additionally when you said that some kids in Oakland dont really have easy access to parks reminds me of how I don't have easy access to a park and I think what your saying about putting more parks in Oakland can help residents it can help me too. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because you are a great writer and your way of helping your community is great.

Sincerely Oscar


Thank you for reading my blog. The part of your comments that stood out to me is when said “You choosing this topic brought a lot of relevance into parks that people treat badly or people think is only for little kids so I think it was a good topic to talk about”. I agree with this because we need to talk about this more in our community and people need to know this.

Dear Victor,

Thank you so much for sharing your poem, “Love is Powerful” on Youth Voices. The lines “love is beautiful” and “love can be ugly” stand out to me because they are such a strong way to start out your poem, and they give you a lot to think about. I also like how much emotion this poem brings. I feel like you really thought about how the best way to write it, and you executed it very well. Thank you for publishing your work, and I look forward to reading your next piece!

Julian

Dear, Victor
I like how you choose the topic Love, but what inspired you to choose love as your topic. Anyways your poem was great. A line that stood out to me was when you said, “Both would do anything so they could be together wishing they could go back to the moment where they fell in love even knowing that they shouldn’t be because they both came from “different places”. That line stood out to me because I feel like I can see that moment play out in my head. Overall your poem was good you should write more.
Sincerely, Bryan Moreno

Dear Victor,

One sentence that you wrote that stands for me is “ Soccer is very important to me because All my life I been playing soccer is like a second nature for me I love playing soccer.” I think this is is awesome because I can see that you really love soccer if you capitalize All and state “All my life.” I hope you follow your dreams to be a soccer player and don’t give up on it! 😀

Dear Victor,
One part of your paragraph, “The truth about me” that I like is where you take about soccer being really important to you! I like how you point out why you like cars and that your dad is the reason you are inspired on cars. A part that stood out to me is when you were talking about being Mexican, I agree that people see that being Mexican is a “bad” thing. I’m really happy that you are proud of being Mexican! Keep up the good work, hope seeing more of your hard work.

Dear Victor,
What stood out to me most was when you said “I chose to put the Mexican Flag because I want people to know I am not ashamed of my Ethnicity and my nationality the reason I am proud of my Ethnicity is because not a lot of people can say they are Mexican because in this society that is a bad thing if you aren’t “American” so they won’t say if the are.” This stands out to me because I am also Mexican and I also agree with not being ashamed of your ethnicity! I hope you continue on with this mentality and that you continue to embrace your culture!!

I like that you talked about how much soccer means to you. It’s nice to see that it has had such a positive impact in your life, and that is is really part of who you are as a person.