I am amazed by Your post because some of the quotes you writing is was really cool. I like the way that you shows that how bad is Oakland and how is this affecting others. One of the sentence you wrote that stands out for me is “if a person lives in the hills they are most likely to have less crime/violence and it will also be a very calm area from what I have seen and heard from others”. I think this is a good sentence because it shows that how bad is Oakland is and how can this affect people. Another sentence that I was amazed by is “However, down in the flats there is more crime/violence and it is not calming like the hills. I know that it is not calm or a nice area to cruise around because I live in the flats and have experienced some violence; like gun violence”. This stood out for me because it sounds cool and the ways you said living in hills is like living in Oakland.
Thanks for your writing . I look forward to seeing what you write next, because like the bolg you writer and all the quotes you use in this bolg.
Thank you for sharing your work . My name is Ahmed and I am a student at Fremont High school. Something I like about your work is you wrote about Oakland and you want to let people know that violence should stop. Something that I have a question about is Why write only about Oakland CA. Please feel free to comment on my work in the future. The address to mu student blog is http://ahmedmfhs2022.edublogs.org/ .
Your passion and care for Oakland is truly amazing. You had great quotes that proved how and why Oakland was dangerous and your evidence surely backed up your claim. I really look forward to reading more of your writing soon!
Thank you! 💞 ~ I can see that you are a fangirl about anime and kpop for sure, and ARMY! I wasn’t really inspired by anything to write this, It was a school project and we had to write down what we had in our shadowboxes and what it represented from us. Mmm I’m not sure how I felt writing my story in public. I don’t really raw anything important…[Read more]
While reading your artist statement I got a feeling of joy because I felt that your words really made me feel happy. I like how much pride and love you have for yourself. I felt happy to read that. One line that stood out to me was, “I have a bracelet or necklace with a cross and that represents I am religious and that I am Catholic.” I think this is very interesting. Knowing you personally I never knew this about you. I’m also amazed that you added your religion showing your pride for that as well. Another sentence that I saw was, “ I grew up in Oakland and if I go on a trip or somewhere else and I finally come back to Oakland it feels like home”. This stood out to me because how aweing I thought this was. I think it’s very sweet to love a community that gets bashed a lot so much because it’s your home. Your post reminds me of myself in a way. I have a story that matches with your travel. You see I also traveled to mexico and brought it in as an object for my shadow box. I used it to show some of my identity so I think it’s cool we both did this similar. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you have to right next, because I see you have interesting stories I’d like to see more of. I also think your stories are sweet and give a great tone.
First, your profile picture is amazing, and so is your cover photo. Second I love your shadow box. I like how you represent yourself with your heritage, but you show there’s more to you than that. I also love to draw, so I connect to that really well. I spend every day trying to work on my skills, and improve. One day I hope it goes farther than just simple doodles. (A tip for people art (I’m not sure what you like to draw): Anatomy and posing is a very good thing to practice and work on. A great posing reference site is Posemaniac.com and just looking up anatomy and posing references and hitting images is a great resource as well.)
can i just say, I LOVE YOUR PROFILE PHOTO; TOKYO GHOUL AND BTS AHHHHHHHH YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW MUCH I SQUEALED 💞. this is probably one of the posts that made me laugh. your post was pretty entertaining and nice to read. the explanation of your story of your shadowbox, i can make many connections with them. especially when you mention watching youtube and drawing, its also a lifestyle of mine 😄 its so cool to relate to someone so much.
before you made your shadowbox, what inspired you to write your story?
did writing the story out in public make you feel more comfortable?
if you enjoy drawing, do you draw anything that is important to you (like family, friends, etc)?
i appreciate your writing, it came out strong and full of life. it was inviting and very sweet. and i hope your art career carries on farther than mine lol. i look forward to any more of you interesting stories on your blog 😊.
Thank you! 💞 ~ I can see that you are a fangirl about anime and kpop for sure, and ARMY! I wasn’t really inspired by anything to write this, It was a school project and we had to write down what we had in our shadowboxes and what it represented from us. Mmm I’m not sure how I felt writing my story in public. I don’t really raw anything important I just draw whatever I want to draw for example anime.
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.