Tyler, I really enjoyed reading this post. This is very relevant today in football and other many sports. There are so many people who have suffered from concussions and have been impaired for the rest of their life. This is a great way to spread awareness. The photos were also a great touch. Here is this paper that has some great information on the long term consequences: https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3208826/

Tyler,
I really enjoyed your discussion about concussions. This post hit close to home and is a very important topic to me. When I was in third grade, my dad fell off his bike and hit his head. From that, he got a traumatic brain injury. He was in the ICU for 2 weeks and when I went to visit him, he didn’t know who I was. Like me, there are so many people that TBI’s have affected. There were a couple of things that I thought were really interesting. I loved all the stats that were stated in the 5th paragraph. I never knew “21% of high school only players were reported to have been diagnosed with CTE, and 91% of college players were also diagnosed with CTE.” Learning that was quite terrifying. I also loved that you took into account the family of those who have had concussions and brain injury’s. I think you had all the information needed to really shed light on this scary topic. Here is an article about TBI’s and what they entail. http://www.traumaticbraininjury.com/understanding-tbi/what-is-traumatic-brain-injury/ I thought that you might think that it was interesting! I loved your discussion!!
Maggie

Hi Tyler, I was really fascinated with your post. It was very informative and highlighted a lot of important details involving concussions and the impact it has on ones brain and overall life. I think it is a very relevant topic to discuss considering how large and influential football and other contact sports are. I think your essay was really informative and I hope you are able to spread more awareness about this growing issue. Here is a link to more information that think you would find compelling. I hope it helps and I can’t wait to read more things that you post. https://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/256518.php

Thanks,
Tess

Tyler, this is a very interesting topic which is very important in sports today, especially football. My cousin plays competitive soccer and has had three concussions, so I am familiar with how they affect athletes. The problem is that a lot of times, when athletes get concussions, they won’t report them because they don’t want to be restricted from playing. You might find this helpful: https://www.thedailybeast.com/whats-really-killing-athletes-with-concussions . I’m looking forward to reading more from you in the future.

Greetings Tyler! I have read through your inquiry and I agree with what you have written down. I’m also eager to see what your research paper looks like when you’re done 🙂 If you don’t mind, I wanted to help out with a couple of articles that I have found. Article one talks about the academic effects of concussions on children and adolescents (There is a PDF on the site as well that contains the research of the article’s topic) http://pediatrics.aappublications.org/content/early/2015/05/06/peds.2014-3434

Article 2 Is from the NIH Library and talks about the various diseases that can come about through concussions and how it has an effect on the social, emotional, and physical aspects of a person.
https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3208826/

I hope the articles that I have provided to you will help you in the research, if you have used either of these two articles before, let me know and I’ll try to find a better article. Have a Good Day!

-Epic J. Julian
Rangeview High School Junior

I believe that concussions and CTE are a huge problem in sports that involve contact. After multiple concussions, the victim might look completely fine while having serious brain trauma which could affect their focus and concentration towards something. I think that we need to have a goal towards finding a way of diagnosing victims of CTE before death and we need a way to possibly reduce the chance of concussions in sports and everyday life.

An article that I have found talks about the effects of multiple concussions on athletes who were diagnosed with three or more concussions. It’s written by multiple psychologists and neurosurgeons who should be great help towards your research. https://academic.oup.com/neurosurgery/article-abstract/51/5/1175/2744207

Hi Tyler,

I respect your choice to analyze such an in-depth and controversial topic and think you do an excellent job of evaluating both sides of the dilemma. I agree with you, that people should have the right to determine their own course of life and how to proceed in cases such as being faced with a terminal, often painful, illness. As referenced by the complex legal process for these laws in your paper, it seems that the moral issue is perhaps not the more complex of the two. The main point seems to be that there is no absolute case in which PAS is applicable, and with so many different scenarios and hypothetical situations, it is extremely complicated to draft legislation that is applicable to a broad base. I agree, the system in California seems to be the most desirable, with a multi-step process that prevents impulsive decisions. Overall, I think you do a nice job of objectively evaluating an extremely complicated topic.

Best,

Paul

Tyler, I would like to start off by saying your word choice was very unique and that is what enticed me to read your post. I agree that without curiosity, exploration would be impossible. You mainly talked about exploring through knowledge and I think this could be a stronger piece if you talked about the act of physically exploring. So, my question to you, where is your favorite place to explore and why? Interested in hearing back from you and hopefully I hear from you again soon.

Tyler, I feel exactly the same way. I too am driven to learn more about the world, even if the knowledge has no relevance at all in my life. One of my favorite things to do is to explore the outdoors. I pick a trail, and then just follow it to find wherever it goes. It’s a literal portrayal of the quest for knowledge. No matter how far you go there is always so much more to discover. I loved how you said if you’re the smartest person in the room then you’re in the wrong room. This is fantastic advice, as we should always surround ourselves with people who can make us greater. I’ll check back later for more great posts.

Tyler, I really like what you’ve said about the word, “explore.” Human beings have a natural instinct to explore the world and have an inherent curiosity for the place around them. If we never explored, we would never make progress. We could never advance. I also agree with what you said about if you are the smartest person in the room, you’re in the wrong room. We need to push ourselves to become greater beings.

I agree that you have to do what you love. As someone who wants to have a career as an artist I really relate to this topic because art is something I love and enjoy. I would rather have an enjoyable life making art than be rich but unhappy. I also really like how you used a picture you took in New York because it really adds to your message and makes your essay even more personal. Great job!

Great essay! I also agree that if you love what you do you will do good work, it’s almost common sense. It is just like that saying, “if you love what you do you will never work a day in your life”. I really like this philosophy and think that more people should carry the same mindset.

Dear Tyler, I totally agree with you that you cannot be truly happy if you don’t do something that you love. It can’t always work out to be a career but I like how you said that it can be a hobby of some sort. A kid always doesn’t see the world as other people but when they do, reality hits most of them hard. I believe it is always good to follow your dreams, even if it doesn’t work out I believe that there are good alternatives. Anyways you did a great job with this article and I hope it caught others attention like it caught mine.

Dear Tyler, This is a really great article. I agree with you that you have to fine and do something that you love. There is so many people out there in the world that think money is the most important thing. This is most of the time not true. People tend to be in situations where they get so much money but they are not happy with what they are doing with their life. These people can choose to do something about it or not change anything at all. Overall, we do need to do something that we actually love.

Dear Tyler,
I am emotionally struck by your post, “The Only Way to Do Good Work is to Love What You Do,” because in my life, my mother always wants me to be a doctor though I like other careers. I’ve never complained because I knew that being a doctor racks in money which I also thought made people happy.

One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “ I thought money is what made people happy”. I think this is true in many cases because many kids see money as a way to get stuff. Useless stuff that somehow makes them happy, but when they grow older it is your choice of what you like to do best that is better then a high paying job.

Another sentence that I agreed on was: “<when you can’t do this you feel lost,.” This stood out for me because many things in life, if not achieved make you feel lost. Like how I got lost when I failed a test, it brought me down. When I wanted to be a train driver my mother was like no become a doctor instead. It hurts to have your dream destroyed because someone’s saying is true.

Your post reminds me of something that happened to me. One time I got lost near Brooklyn and Manhattan on the Brooklyn Bridge, I went ahead to fast and lost track of my mother. I soon crossed the bridge to Manhattan and felt sad and lonely, feeling incomplete. Then I was reunited with my mother and I felt happy again. It is exactly like the example of being hurt when your dream is taken away

Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because this topic and the way you wrote it is very interesting. These many factors of life need to be known for many people to see the true meaning of life. Its not just money and having everything, it is about having and happiness.