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You had a solid start, just work on your spelling and grammar or have someone check it for you. Elaborate on your evidence because is kind of unclear what racial group you are talking about unless you are talking about everyone which is very broad because police brutality can...

You had a strong start but it still needs some revision with the grammar and a few spelling errors. your problem was stated clearly but your solution was not that evident and strong. The evidence you had was solid because you got other's perspective into the topic, just find...

In my personal opinion you guys had a very strong start. I liked how you explain the racial discrimination but you lost me when you said "simple minded people" you maybe got too excited and that is why you started insulting others, which would not help your cause because...

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Drug Users Regret Using Drugs View Comment
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  • January 26, 2017

Dear Yasmin : I am shocked with your post, “Drug Users Regret Using Drugs” because it is very surprising how people in Oakland know so much about what drugs do to you and it affects our lives and the ones around us. I liked how you used evidence and...

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Is Mistake Considered a Sin? View Comment
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  • October 3, 2016

Dear Kathleen : I am surprised with your post, “Is mistake considered a sin?” because it is a topic that caught my attention, it is very debatable but a very important topic. One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Life is all about mistakes, humans make mistakes, it’s...

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Poverty View Comment
  • @Tomas.717
  • September 27, 2016

Dear Emily : I am very happy with your letter, “Poverty,” because poverty is a big issue in the United States and most of the people that suffer of it do not not know how to react to it or what to do. One sentence you wrote that stands out for...

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Free Education Simply Won’t Work View Comment
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  • September 27, 2016

Dear Patrick: I am astounded with your letter, “Free Education Simply Won’t Work” because yes i know our taxes would have to be risen for our education to be free, but i think we should try to find a different way to pay for free college. One sentence you wrote that...

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Renewable Energy View Comment
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  • September 22, 2016

Dear Ellie: I am interested by your post called “Renewable Energy” because I personally think that we should start looking for a different way to make energy, and what better way than to advance in technology and use solar panels and other resources available? One sentence you wrote that stands...

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