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  • I believe this poem is about how he express himself through basketball and how judgmental and serious some people take it.

  • I didn’t have the confidence to shoot the ball either but then I realized its either we win or overtime so i shot it. Sometimes you just gotta let it flow and see what happens

  • Thanks for the comment and the only reason I believed in myself was because I had a group of great teammates. But, listen sometimes its better to take the last shot instead of the first because the last shot matters more.

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    10 seconds left – what should I do?Should I pass or should I shoot?What if I miss and it’s a brick?  But no – my teammate comes and sets the pick…Around I go with the ball in a flowThe defense picks me up so no

    Just a Kid With a Ball And a Dream

    10 seconds left – what should I do?Should I pass or should I shoot?What if I miss and it’s a brick?  But no – my teammate comes and sets the pick…Around I go with the ball in a flowThe...

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    • Dear Terren,

      I am inspired by your poem because you believed in yourself in those moment when you shot the ball.

      A line that stands out for me was “But no – my teammate comes and sets the pick…” . I think this line is striking because you showed that you had support in those moments and also showed that with support you can win everything.

      Thanks for writing. You inspired me and maybe I will take that last shot sometimes.

      • Thanks for the comment and the only reason I believed in myself was because I had a group of great teammates. But, listen sometimes its better to take the last shot instead of the first because the last shot matters more.

    • I didn’t have the confidence to shoot the ball either but then I realized its either we win or overtime so i shot it. Sometimes you just gotta let it flow and see what happens

    • You’re picture that you chose really gave me an idea and allowed me to better picture everything you talk about in your poem

    • Great Picture, Basketball is my favorite sport.

    • Dear Terren:
      I am empowered by your poem, “Just a kid with a ball and a dream” because I like your rhymes. I also like how you asked questions like “should i pass or should i shoot what if i miss and it’s brick”
      One line that stands out for me is, “I get to my spot so i could shoot”. I think this line is interesting because it shows that you know a lot about basketball. I like Basketball sometime I play Basketball.
      Another line that stands out for me is,“ SWISH!! Nothing but net as I see the clock empty.” I think this line is thought-provoking because when you say the clock is empty you is serious. You wants that ball to go in the hoop and get a score. You want to shoot in the basket.
      Your poem reminds me of memories of watching the stories about the NBA on the tv. On Tv, I saw Lebron James making a shot in the hoop. Lebron James is good at making shots.
      Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next. I would like to hear more about Basketball. What will bring me back to you posts is if you keep writing about basketball. I like basketball. It keeps me moving and energetic. I hope to see more about basketball.

    • Dear Terren:
      I am astonished about your poem, “Just a kid with a ball and a dream,” because the line syou chose to write made me think about the shot and the steps towards that shot. also you make me think about how basketballers would feel when there is very little time on the clock left.
      One set of lines that stands out for me is, “
      Around I go with the ball in a flow
      The defense picks me up so now it’s a give and go
      FASTER , FASTER, it’s just 5 seconds left
      The clock too close to zero: this is a time to be a hero”. I think these lines are amusing because i didnt think lines could make me feel interested in basketball when i dont really even watch it. i dont know what you did but the ryhmes also helped with it cause it kind of made it hyped up.
      Another line that stands out for me is, “
      I get to my spot so I could take the shot
      SWISH! nothing but net”.
      I think this line is intriguing because the sounds you wrote helped me imagine about the basketball game. the way you described this helped me think more about these moments and when i watch basketball games this helps me understand the situation.
      Your poem helps me understand a some things about basketball games that I once heard or watched. its like watching some basketball game thats very long then its up to the last few seconds and some would shoot while some will pass nad with this poem i think i could understand what people think about in the game. i could see that the moment they take the shot and makes it and wins the game is the best feeling around but i fel like some people would lose and that could be the worse feeling of all.
      Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next. i will look forward to the exciting parts and the rhymes. hope you keep on writing about more sports that you play and understand

  • Sorry to hear that you was getting bullied. I hope that it made you into a stronger person. Thank you for your comment it was greatly appreciated.

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