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    In a small orchard not too far from here

    A little girl emerged timidly from her home every day

    To collect water from the fountain in the orchard that people traveled far and wide to attain

    But one day,

    The Orchard

    In a small orchard not too far from here A little girl emerged timidly from her home every day To collect water from the fountain in the orchard that people traveled far and wide to attain But one day, after a terrible...

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    • Nathan, I really enjoyed this poem. The words are very poetic and run very nicely together. It provides great imagery and really tells a story. Keep up the good work!

    • Nathan,
      Your poem told a beautiful story and reminded me of “The Giving Tree.” I really enjoyed the linear story structure you poem follow. My favorite part was the ending when you said, “The girl returned to the fountain for the last time, And took it apart brick by brick, And she threw each brick into a different vast ocean, So she could return all the water she took from the fountain, And more.” It was a bittersweet moment how the fountain didn’t give her any more water but she decided to do something nice instead of being greedy. Can’t wait to hear more from you.

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