My name is ShaDiamond Pinckney and I am a 15 years old sophomore. I attend Nelson Mandela School for Social Justice. I am from Brooklyn, New York and my neighborhood is Bed-Stuy. The law, NY is one of only two
I like that not only you make a convincing argument in your essay and show the conflict very well but also the fact that by the time I reach your conclusion you have a very good idea for how to resolve the problem you earlier presented.
This is not only well argued and tolerant (not preachy or forcing your opinion), it is very eloquent and well written. Your thoughts are easy to understand. I hope this was as good to write as it was to read. Well-procured, and sentence structure really draws the reader in. The information is relevant and not driven by unilateral passion, but logic. Nicely done.
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.