As soon as I saw that you wrote this, I clicked on it because you always state some big facts. And this, this is an example of that. Best part about it was that I liked how your post was short but it contained heavy information.
Rags to riches. Started from the bottom, and now you at the top. That’s what most of us dream of. The United States is filled with opportunity. No matter where you came from or where you started, you can end up
Andre, just keep your head straight and focus on what you want to be in life. You can be whoever you want, you just have to work for it. Keep your head high and avoid all the people that are trying to bring you down.
Andre, you have the choice to do and be what you want in life. America is known as the land of the free. But it is up to you to decide what that freedom means. You make a compelling argument, but maybe in the future, you might try to define what it is to be free. I have found in life freedom constitutes many things to different people. Don’t let anyone else tell you how to be free. Live your dream.
I agree that the American dream is often interpreted as that idea of “rags to riches.” Using the current wave of rap artists as an example is a great way to show how that idea is being represented in mainstream culture. I really enjoyed your description of the appeal that still remains in the U.S. Freedom is the broad idea, and it conflicts with a desk job.
I liked how you used descriptive words so I, the reader, could picture the scenery in my mind. The best part I liked is how you closed your poem. “… from patience and from being successful, Dreaming and enjoying. I am from these moments. I am from this home of love.” I just thought it was cool because I could relate to that.
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.