• Hi Jasmine,
    I forgot to include one text in my response so I am replying again. Another one of my favorite parts in your essay is using the point of view of Arnold (a partly fictional character) who relates to so many people in the real world. Through the use of examples of discrimination that Arnold faced, that you brought up in your essay, you…[Read more]

  • Hi Jasmine,
    I really liked your essay! The aspects I like the best are how you relate founding documents to a novel to a real life experience (of your father). It helped me see how widespread and long lasting this issue is. Many Native Americans are impacted by discrimination on the basis of their race and Native Americans are the original…[Read more]

  • To be American is to be able to fight for both your freedom and the freedom of others that are seeking liberty and equality. All Americans should be able to have three basic rights that were given to us in the

    • Dear Prerna,
      This argument paper was amazing. The way you used your words and voice made it a very compelling read. As I was reading this I realized that we have very similar views on a lot of topics. I agree with your statement that having rights isn’t what makes you a American. There is so much corruption in this country and it is hard to unify ourselves because not everyone wants to be unified. I was going to talk about gun control is my paper, but I decided to leave it out, so I am happy that you touched base on the topic. I think it is fascinating how you also acknowledge that “humanity has never and will likely never be perfect” which I 100% agree with. I think it is interesting when people use the claim “Make America Great Again” because it makes me question, when was America ever great? I am curious what you have to say on this topic. Once again, great essay!

    • Hey Prerna,
      I like your opinion about to be American is to fight, I also talked about America history told us what we should be. I regard American history is a “fight” history, fight for freedom, fight for equality, and fight for our rights. You use a good related to the book The Absolutely True Diary of Part Time Indian we read these days, that is a strong evidence to explain some Americans still don’t have the rights and they struggling everyday. You also use suppose in your 4th paragraph, that’s make the essay more convincing and more diverse. It is an amazing essay! When I read this article, I can feel it is very powerful!

    • Hi Prerna!
      I really enjoyed reading your paper, it had a focused claim and great evidence. I completely agree with your views on this topic that there is inequality and if we want to progress in life we must work for it. I think the way you phrased this essay made it that much more compelling and made me understand what you were trying to say. The inclusion of the 13 Amendments and the Emancipation Proclamation brought a new view to your claim. I thought it was interesting how you said that our nation probably will never be perfect and made it obvious that there are flaws in our society. Reading this makes me wonder why can’t America ever be flawless or perfect? Do you think there is anything we could do to make that happen?

    • Hi Prerna! I loved reading your essay. You did a great job providing evidence from multiple sources including the Emancipation Proclamation, Civil Rights Act, and the U.S. Constitution. I also enjoyed learning about how many groups of people are discriminated against, since my essay was based on only Native Americans. I was able to learn new things! Such as the fact that “There is no federal law protecting employees from discrimination based on sexual orientation or gender identity in the United States” (“Lesbian, Gay, Bisexual, and Transgender Workplace Issues). This is so sad! I completely agree with you that we need to fight for our rights, especially as youth since we are the next generation to lead our country. In a time of division and fear, coming together to fight for a common cause is very rewarding! Have you ever been to a march? What is your opinion on school walkouts? Do you think they are effective?

    • Hi Prerna,

      I enjoyed reading your post. I like how you used evidence from different sources to back up the idea that discrimination is something that needs to be addressed. I agree that Americans should be able to access their natural rights, and it’s sad that many people aren’t treated the same as others soley because they look or act “different”. I feel that many people think mainly about skin color when the word “discrimination” is used, but discrimination is so much more than that. People are also discriminated against based on gender, sexual orientation, beliefs, etc…. I thought you addressed that concept well in your writing. Here’s a link that talks more about natural rights for Americans and also legal rights. https://www.thoughtco.com/what-are-natural-rights-4108952. In the last paragraph of your post you state, “It does not happen naturally, we cannot expect our basic rights to just be there without fighting for them”. What I’m wondering is if we have to fight for our natural rights, then are they really natural? Should we have to fight for our natural rights?
      Another concept that I agree with is that we, as Americans, need to work together in order to institute change for issues that we greatly care about. Not everybody agrees on how certain topics should be addressed and when we don’t agree with something, we citizens have the right to say so, and that’s what’s so special about America.

  • Hi Calaia,
    This is an incredible poem! Gun control is a problem in today’s world and one of the most debated topics today. The fact that you put this in poem form while acknowledging why the person who the gun is pointed at and the person holding the gun is a really creative way to talk about this. I agree on how many young lives are being taken…[Read more]

  • Hi Olivia,
    I am impressed by the way you don’t exactly take a side on the argument but instead act like an audience member who is looking for why this is such a heated topic in today’s world. I also like the fact that you bring in professional opinions and facts on the issue itself. I agree that we must look at medical marijuana as something that…[Read more]

  • Hello Maddie,
    I think you did an incredible job framing your argument. You gave statistics but also followed up and explained those statistics and why they are relevant to your main argument. Also, I completely agree with you on how much waste the United States, as well as many other first world countries, produce that could solve problems like…[Read more]

  • Hi Stella,
    I completely agree! We live in a system where no matter how hard you work for four years, one morning of testing could change your life forever. Not to mention that most of the standardized tests don’t test how hard you work to study for them you might still go poorly. Those who are poor tests takers often struggle with admission into…[Read more]

  • Hello Heymi,
    I found your post really interesting and a great perspective on what a lot of people in this country face when they don’t know English. My grandmother moved here thirty years ago and had to work hard in order to learn English so that she could get a good job for her kids. You seem to be doing really well on learning English,…[Read more]

  • I have also noticed a decrease in print throughout my life. Like you said, print is a dying industry because we are in the digital age. Kids would rather have thousands of free, personalized, articles at their fingertips than big pages of text that only come once a week. We can hope that eventually people will begin to realize that print is a…[Read more]

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