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    In my English class, we have read three stories which are Everyday use, The Lesson and “How to date a white and brown girl.” This is the link of the website where we read these stories.

    If Poverty Was a Human, I Would Have Killed It

    In my English class, we have read three stories which are Everyday use, The Lesson and "How to date a white and brown girl." This is the link of the website where we read these stories. https://nowcomment.com/blogs/158092 I think the...

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    Mama believes that I despise my adorable sister, Maggie, and I do not blame her for the way she perceives me because my mother did not get an education beyond 2nd grade. I know how it was almost impossible

    Loneliness Is A Battle With No Winner

    Mama believes that I despise my adorable sister, Maggie, and I do not blame her for the way she perceives me because my mother did not get an education beyond 2nd grade. I know how it was almost impossible for...

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    • Dear El-Hossin

      I am enthusiastic about your short story, “ Loneliness is a battle with no winner” It is a wonderful story. I really liked the way you portray Dee’s personality, and described how isolation was killing inside of her.

      The one line that stands out for me is, “ My loneliness made me feel me that I was obligated to reunite with my family.” when we are alone, our brain thinks very deeply and make us realize what we are missing.

      Your story helps me to understand “ Everyday use” that I once read, that you have to sacrifice something in order to gain something. Dee’s knows how to play around people by only caring about her desires and gain, what she craves for. Her confidence helped to pursue a better life, which was completely opposite for her sister Maggie.

      Thanks for your story. I am looking forward to seeing what you make next.

    • Dear El-Hossin Salem:

      I am enthusiastic about your short story, “ Loneliness is a battle with no winner” It is an intense story. I am fascinated by the way you narrated the story from a psychological aspect.

      One line that stands out for me is, “ My loneliness made me feel me that I was obligated to reunite with my family.” It makes me think that sometimes we do things that we don’t want to actually do or because we think that we have to actually do it. As humans, we have control over ourselves, so what makes us feel that we are forced to do something?

      Another line that stands out for me is, “I will never forget those days when I did not have any 6company but the bleak darkness of the midwinter” I think this section is intense because it makes me think that we actually realize the value of things when we lose it. We take everything for granted, but the bitter fact that nothing is for granted in this life.

      Your story reminds me of my childhood and makes me feel that when I was young I did a lot of things that I felt that I should do, but, in fact, I didn’t want to do it. In the meantime, I think that I should never do something to satisfy anyone, I should do just the right things despite everything.

      Thanks for your story. I am looking forward to seeing what you make next. Your way of writing shows your deep thinking, but also shows the influence of your life experiences on every letter in your short story.

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