Oswaldo I think that this poem is very personal and rings very true to a lot of things that have happened in my life. I love that you made multiple comparison’s like to Romeo and Juliet and tied that into why something like this can become so bad. I found this article which I think really ties into your post and you might enjoy. Thank you again for sharing. https://www.healthline.com/nutrition/alcohol-good-or-bad#section1
Your poem is a very personal story and I really appreciate you sharing it with our class. I like how you connected love to an addiction that will cause you to do crazy things. I could really see where you used the different literary devices! One thing you could work on is being more concise at times I felt as if you were telling the whole story. A suggestion is that you only take the key moments and use those in the poem. But overall, this is a very strong poem and keep up the good work!! – Marleni
I really appreciate the confidence you had to share this personal story to the class i know it must be hard for you to have your dad lost every day. This shows that you are strong by sharing this not only to our class but to the public as well. Thanks for sharing this with us hope we get more poems from you soon!
This shadow box represents my identities which are being a soccer player, a car enthusiast, and having a family business. These three identities have impacted me a lot in my life so far. I think that the identity
One part of your shadow box that stands out for me is the soccer field that you put in your box. I felt like how the field shows how you like to play sports and be active. This stood out to me because I also am a very active person and really like all types of sports. Also, the images of the car show that you enjoy cars and that they represent you. Thank you for your writing and creating this shadow box.
One part of your shadow box that really stood out to me was the picture of your father. The picture of your father really shows that you love your family. I also agree with the family love, another thing that stood out for me was your soccer field that shows that you enjoy sports and especially soccer.Nice job on your shadow box !
I like your shadow box because you had a lot of stuff that you like and what has impacted you so far in your life and see that you really like cars. I also see that you have a soccer field and see that you like to play soccer and see that you have pictures of yourself and your dad. I enjoyed seeing your shadow box.
I like that you added photos of yourself and your dad because you care about family. You also added things that you like, especially the car and you like to play soccer because you made the field.
I think your box is really interesting because I can really relate to the things you talked about like living in oakland and having side shows around. I think this really represents yourself and what you identify as. there’s one thing you could have done better and that was your identity for mexico because people are going to ask why…[Read more]
I like your box because it has things like pictures of your family and cars.I also like sport cars and they are very cool.Another thing that I like about your box is that you had a small soccer field and I like soccer.I liked everything about your box.
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