Very interesting reflection, Onyu. I really enjoyed this topic as I am currently in the process of writing a research paper. I am wondering how you chose this topic and what the data showed from corporal punishment in the United States. I particularly enjoyed how you gave insight on this topic through the mention of a “Korean movie that contains teachers giving corporal punishments to students in school.” I was saddened when I read this, and I hope this can be changed in the future. If you would like to continue your search of corporal punishment in Korea, you should take a look at this article: http://1stforeverything.com/2013/08/29/corporal-punishment-in-korean-schools/. I look forward to reading more from you on this topic in the future.

Hi,

I really enjoyed reading your piece! I recently wrote an argumentative essay on technology. However, I believe that technology is more beneficial than harmful to society. I agree there are some negative effects of technology, but that is only because of us; we aren’t utilizing technology in a correct manner. Some people use their phones when they are driving which can cause deaths, however these incidents should be blamed on the driver, not the phone.
-Sage

Hi Onyu,
Your argumentative essay was an interesting read. I like how you focused on both the advantages and disadvantages of technology. By stating the advantages and then following up with an explanation about how their disadvantages overrule them, I could see how technology may be much more detrimental than I previously thought. However to strengthen the logos part of your argument I think you could add some statistics, credentials, or facts rather than examples which add pathos. Overall good job, reading your essay gave me a new perspective on technology.
Jeana Park

Hi Onyu,
Great job on your essay! I agree that technology can be distracting and bad at times, but that is only because of how we choose to use certain types of technology. Smartphones, for example, provide us with an unlimited number of ways to communicate and interact with each other as well as providing great educational resources if we use them right. However, if we use them wrong, smartphones will be a tool of distraction, causing us to lose sleep and our connection with the real world. It all depends on how we use the technology given to us.

-Eric

I found many points in this very interesting and true but the internet can also make people less lazy and more active. For example, just yesterday I looked at a new website I friend of mine showed me that has many different techniques for working out. And everyone that becomes lazy makes that choice to use the internet to watch Youtube videos instead of sleeping or doing homework. If you text and drive, you are choosing to put yourself at that risk of ending your life and others. If your copying and pasting articles for school projects, that’s on you and no one else. You are making the choice to cheat yourself. If you post your entire life on social media then that’s your choice and those terms are almost always in terms of agreement when you sign up or the app whether that is Snapchat or Instagram. There is almost always a choice and that is up to the user, no one else.
-Cullen

I really like the topic that you are writing about and how you highlight that technology can make people forget the importance of books in our lives.
Great essay!

Onyu, I really liked your argument and it is a very important topic for everyone to be thinking about. Many people spend way to much time on technology and I think they forget about the harmful effects its over use. I really like how you structured you argument and it was a great piece overall.

Onyu,

I found your post interesting in the way that it describes the assent of power that North Korea has accumulated. I often wonder to what extent does their power want to reach? I also wonder to which extent does North Korea plan to protect itself. I would say that North Korea’s goal is to do harm to the United States of America. Unfortunately this has been drilled into the heads of many civilians in North Korea. Speakers run throughout the city of Pyongyang and North Korean news is essentially audible all over big cities. Many of the news they report are descriptions of America as an evil country or the root of all evilness. I think one of the other questions to ask is where are they getting the money to fund their nuclear arsenal. Russia? China? Anyway here is a link to a documentary that is very formative and something that you may enjoy. http://www.pbs.org/wgbh/frontline/film/secret-state-of-north-korea/

-Thomas