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    This is a reflection on the writing process for my final Expository writing class paper.
    The process of researching for writing was an amazing learning experience to know many new methods of getting information

    Reflection: Corporal Punishments in school

    This is a reflection on the writing process for my final Expository writing class paper. The process of researching for writing was an amazing learning experience to know many new methods of getting information for my writing project. When I...

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    • Very interesting reflection, Onyu. I really enjoyed this topic as I am currently in the process of writing a research paper. I am wondering how you chose this topic and what the data showed from corporal punishment in the United States. I particularly enjoyed how you gave insight on this topic through the mention of a “Korean movie that contains teachers giving corporal punishments to students in school.” I was saddened when I read this, and I hope this can be changed in the future. If you would like to continue your search of corporal punishment in Korea, you should take a look at this article: http://1stforeverything.com/2013/08/29/corporal-punishment-in-korean-schools/. I look forward to reading more from you on this topic in the future.

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    In my Expository Writing class, I have been researching about the topic of corporal punishment in schools and its influence on student’s behavior and academic performance. In order to find multiple sources that h

    Reflective Essay For My Research Project

    In my Expository Writing class, I have been researching about the topic of corporal punishment in schools and its influence on student’s behavior and academic performance. In order to find multiple sources that have different perspectives on corporal punishment...

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    According to Merriam-Webster, Information technology is the technology involving the development, maintenance, and the use of computer systems, software and networks for the processing data. Information technology

    Information Technology

    According to Merriam-Webster, Information technology is the technology involving the development, maintenance, and the use of computer systems, software and networks for the processing data. Information technology has many benefits in our lives like preventing error, decreasing the amount...

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    • Hi,

      I really enjoyed reading your piece! I recently wrote an argumentative essay on technology. However, I believe that technology is more beneficial than harmful to society. I agree there are some negative effects of technology, but that is only because of us; we aren’t utilizing technology in a correct manner. Some people use their phones when they are driving which can cause deaths, however these incidents should be blamed on the driver, not the phone.
      -Sage

    • Hi Onyu,
      Your argumentative essay was an interesting read. I like how you focused on both the advantages and disadvantages of technology. By stating the advantages and then following up with an explanation about how their disadvantages overrule them, I could see how technology may be much more detrimental than I previously thought. However to strengthen the logos part of your argument I think you could add some statistics, credentials, or facts rather than examples which add pathos. Overall good job, reading your essay gave me a new perspective on technology.
      Jeana Park

    • Hi Onyu,
      Great job on your essay! I agree that technology can be distracting and bad at times, but that is only because of how we choose to use certain types of technology. Smartphones, for example, provide us with an unlimited number of ways to communicate and interact with each other as well as providing great educational resources if we use them right. However, if we use them wrong, smartphones will be a tool of distraction, causing us to lose sleep and our connection with the real world. It all depends on how we use the technology given to us.

      -Eric

    • I found many points in this very interesting and true but the internet can also make people less lazy and more active. For example, just yesterday I looked at a new website I friend of mine showed me that has many different techniques for working out. And everyone that becomes lazy makes that choice to use the internet to watch Youtube videos instead of sleeping or doing homework. If you text and drive, you are choosing to put yourself at that risk of ending your life and others. If your copying and pasting articles for school projects, that’s on you and no one else. You are making the choice to cheat yourself. If you post your entire life on social media then that’s your choice and those terms are almost always in terms of agreement when you sign up or the app whether that is Snapchat or Instagram. There is almost always a choice and that is up to the user, no one else.
      -Cullen

    • I really like the topic that you are writing about and how you highlight that technology can make people forget the importance of books in our lives.
      Great essay!

    • Onyu, I really liked your argument and it is a very important topic for everyone to be thinking about. Many people spend way to much time on technology and I think they forget about the harmful effects its over use. I really like how you structured you argument and it was a great piece overall.

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    There are approximately 170,000 words in English and meaning of each words can be different to everyone. The word “Independence” is very special to me. When I first came to America in 2012, I did not know any Eng

    Independence

    There are approximately 170,000 words in English and meaning of each words can be different to everyone. The word “Independence” is very special to me. When I first came to America in 2012, I did not know any English,...

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    North Korea’s threatening with nuclear weapons has been a huge issue, but it seems like everyone does not know much about the issue. So I wanted to write about some details about North Korea’s nuclear weapons. The

    North Korea is not completely wrong

    North Korea’s threatening with nuclear weapons has been a huge issue, but it seems like everyone does not know much about the issue. So I wanted to write about some details about North Korea’s nuclear weapons. The North Korean...

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    • Onyu,

      I found your post interesting in the way that it describes the assent of power that North Korea has accumulated. I often wonder to what extent does their power want to reach? I also wonder to which extent does North Korea plan to protect itself. I would say that North Korea’s goal is to do harm to the United States of America. Unfortunately this has been drilled into the heads of many civilians in North Korea. Speakers run throughout the city of Pyongyang and North Korean news is essentially audible all over big cities. Many of the news they report are descriptions of America as an evil country or the root of all evilness. I think one of the other questions to ask is where are they getting the money to fund their nuclear arsenal. Russia? China? Anyway here is a link to a documentary that is very formative and something that you may enjoy. http://www.pbs.org/wgbh/frontline/film/secret-state-of-north-korea/

      -Thomas

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    North Korea’s threatening with nuclear weapon has been a huge issue, but it seems like everyone does not know much about the issue. So I wanted write about some details about North Korea’s nuclear weapon. The Nor

    North Korea; Different point of view

    North Korea’s threatening with nuclear weapon has been a huge issue, but it seems like everyone does not know much about the issue. So I wanted write about some details about North Korea’s nuclear weapon. The North Korean government...

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  • for some reason my infographic is not showing up in the post, here is the link for the infographic https://magic.piktochart.com/output/22696584-north-koreas-nuclear-weapon

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    I made a Prezi for my media.

    Some of the videos in the Prezi might not work with school accounts.

    The link…..

     

    Nuclear Development of North Korea

    I made a Prezi for my media. Some of the videos in the Prezi might not work with school accounts. The link.....  

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    If people were asked if they want another World War, their answer would most likely to be strongly disagreeing to having another World War. The World War I killed 16.5 million people and the World War II killed 56

    North Korea Nuclear Weapon

    If people were asked if they want another World War, their answer would most likely to be strongly disagreeing to having another World War. The World War I killed 16.5 million people and the World War II killed 56...

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    • i like the paragraphs you write about world war its true that in war a lot of people killed without any reason.i think you should more add about protecting your country

  • Abinaov, I really like the way you made this infographic to explain your topic. It is very well organized and easy to understand.

  • I really like the way you made infographic about Hunger. It is very well organized and easy to understand the topic.

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    [iframe width=”800″ height=”3435″ frameborder=”0″ scrolling=”no” style=”overflow-y:hidden;” src=”https://magic.piktochart.com/embed/22696584-north-koreas-nuclear-weapon”>

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    The link to my annotation is HERE and link of the actual article is this Link

    The website that I used to annotate have many good information and backgrounds about North Korea’s nuclear development.

    One of t

    North Korea's Nuclear Weapon: Annotation

      The link to my annotation is HERE and link of the actual article is this Link The website that I used to annotate have many good information and backgrounds about North Korea's nuclear development. One of the problems that is very important...

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  • Thomas, you did a great job writing your essay about freedom. It looks like you put some times and hard works into it. Your essay is very well organized. I really like you used freedom to discuss the adventures of huckleberry finn, I think Freedom fits very well with the book. Your example is very clearly related to freedom, I think the freedom is…Read More

  • Hi Tuan, I strongly agree with that you Mark Twain is using words and phrases that are very improper such as the “N” word. I think it is very interesting how Mark Twain decided to use the “N” word instead of replacing with other word that is not offensive to black people. It is very uncommon to see the “N” word in the book in the 20th century. I…Read More

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    Mrs. Reed

    American Literature

    11 May 2017

     

    The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn: Race & Racism

     

                    The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn by Mark Twain contains many examples of racism.Th

    The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn: Racism

    Onyu Pak Mrs. Reed American Literature 11 May 2017   The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn: Race & Racism                   The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn by Mark Twain contains many examples of racism.The main reason why the book...

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    • Onyu, I totally agree with you on the idea that this book relates directly to racism. I strongly believe that twain expressed the use of the n word as much as he did because he wanted to show the reality of what happened in the past. Good job with your analysis and keep up the good work!

  • I strongly agree with your point that water is very important in our daily lives. I also think that water pollution is an issue that we all should care about. If we don’t care about water pollution, there will be no other similar liquid to replace water.

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    An Issue that I care most about is the North Korea. Recently, North Korea have been threatening other countries with dangerous nuclear weapon, ICBM, which can possibly go across a continent. I strongly believe

    Being Threatened By North Korea

    An Issue that I care most about is the North Korea. Recently, North Korea have been threatening other countries with dangerous nuclear weapon, ICBM, which can possibly go across a continent. I strongly believe that this issue could lead...

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  • Thomas, I agree with your analysis for your quote that speaking style is very different. Also, Jim who is uneducated have very different dialect.

  • I definitely agree with your analysis. Huck Finn’s relationship between his father wasn’t very good. You have chose very good quote, which gives good details about Pap, Huck’s father, characteristics.

  • Tuan, I think your topic is very important these days. It is very easy to get peer pressured by friends and it can influence in very positive or negative ways. I really liked your example students just following the crowed when we were playing agree and disagree game. I was also peer pressured by classmates at that time, because I didn’t wanted to…Read More

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    Chapter 6~8

    Pg. 39 : “Well, one night I creeps to de do’ pooty late, en de do’ warn’t quite shet, en I hear old missus tell de widder she gwyne to sell me down to Orleans, but she didn’ want to, but she could git

    Dialectical Journals Huckleberry Finn

    Chapter 6~8 Pg. 39 : “Well, one night I creeps to de do’ pooty late, en de do’ warn’t quite shet, en I hear old missus tell de widder she gwyne to sell me down to Orleans, but she didn’...

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    Hey Thomas! I strongly agree that friendship is very important in relationship with others. I also think that having friends who helps you out to get use in new place is very important. I felt the same as you, because I was in similar situation like moving into new place without knowing anyone in that place. Thank you for your essay and sharing…Read More

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    I believe that everyone should have the opportunity to achieve their dream or succeed. Unfortunately, in some countries, people don’t have the opportunity to achieve it due to having too many obstacles.

    When I f

    Overcoming Obstacles to Achieve Your Dream

    I believe that everyone should have the opportunity to achieve their dream or succeed. Unfortunately, in some countries, people don’t have the opportunity to achieve it due to having too many obstacles. When I first decided what I wanted to...

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    • Your story is nice and all but for most people that were born in this country, that isn’t the case. A lot of people who live here often don’t get opportunities to succeed.

    • Hi Onyu!
      You’re story is actually one I relate to. I moved here from korea at age 3, so I don’t know a lot about the korean education system, but my dad always tells me how many more opportunities there are here. He said that it is so much more competitive in korea! I’m just so grateful to be able to go to school here too! I hope you continue to chase your dreams and look for more opportunities!

    • Onyu I totally agree. The Korean educational system is very competitive and results in a lot of stress for Korean students. Gaining your self confidence should always be your number one goal, then after that you can aim for your goals. I hope you gain that confidence even more, and I will support you throughout.

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    Onyu Pak commented on the post, 1984 = 2017?

    I really enjoyed reading your post. It is very well summarized.

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    I think Police Brutality is a big issue. It is because police are people of the law who are supposed to protect the people and enforce the law on the wrong doers. They are supposed to be someone who you can

    Police Brutality

    I think Police Brutality is a big issue. It is because police are people of the law who are supposed to protect the people and enforce the law on the wrong doers. They are supposed to be someone who...

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