I liked how you brought real world problems into your poem. It really made a deeper understanding of the struggles in the situation. You talked about the weather changing and all of the destruction that is happening which can make people think deeper into the poems theme.
Your poem was very deep going into so much detail about your life. I liked how it showed the good and bad that can happen in a persons life story. Parts such as when you were cut by a thorn were very engaging because of how you include the smallest thing yet it can have a big effect.
I remember somethingsBut I don’t remember othersI remember my great grandmotherSeeing her every year as a young kid.I don’t remember my school life as a young kid thoughI remember when my old babysitter was lat
If I said I was from a New York boroughwhere there’s light in the day and night,would you know where I’m from?It’s best at night when the sky is dark but the city is still shining bright.Where I’m from, I
Hey, Oliver. I stumbled across your post and was compelled to read it by the title. I really like what you wrote and if your title was set in place seriously, I encourage you to keep working until you are more confident in your work. I would love to hear more about where you are from in the future!
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.