• Dear Yaharia,
    Your poem was very descriptive and vivid. While i was reading i was able to imagine in my head the actual scene that occured. i like your poem in general….good job

  • Family dynamics

    Sadness
    Tears running down our faces
    No one expected it to come this soon
    We knew he was sick
    But it was still to soon

    “RING RING”
    We got a call from Mexico
    All we heard was sobbing from the pho

    • Dear Octavio, This poem showed a side of you, you usually would not see. I think this is a very deep poem. I like the line, “The feeling of someone important in your life passing away is like a bullet to the brain” I like this line because, I can really relate to it.

    • Dear Flavio,

      Sorry to hear about your Grandpa passing away. You did a really good job of turning that traumatic event into a beautifully written piece. It must have been hard speaking about this topic but I appreciate you for doing so.

      Sincerely,
      Vesna Sot

  • Dear bless, the president wouldn’t have to worry about there kids tuition. he’ll prolly just hire a professor to go to the white house and educate them. i enjoyed your piece… keep it up though…

  • Dear manase, Animals are animals there going to pass (DIE) eventually. But as there are alive they should be left alone and out of harm. I enjoyed your piece keep up the good work……..

  • Dear Markie, if there weren’t any sports life would be pretty boring…watching sport is entertainment to some people. I agree with all the points stated in your piece.

  • Dear Writer, as stated in your second paragraph ” “In order for teens to grow up, they need to have the opportunity to experience the freedom of making their own decisions (age appropriate) and the opportunity to learn from mistakes”. How would a parent go about if their young adults keeps making wrong decisions. Also you could’ve explained what t…[Read more]

  • Dear Allison, i like how you explained the harm of under age drinking and the key components alcohol has that can even more severely harm a person.After reading this this really could help parents have a more concern on their young one.

  • dear vest. I like how yo u came out and talked about how your really felt this is a strong poem..

    sincerly, Octavio

  • Dear Rodrigo, this poem is well written and shows how he first go into the sport of soccer…really enjoyed..

  • Why I’m lazy as hell?

     

    I’ve been sitting

    On this hard ass red chair

    In this stuffy ass classroom

    For an hour

    I have not typed a single thing.

     

    This is why I’m lazy as hell.  

     

    • Dear Octavio
      Sometimes I feel the same way as you. I don’t feel like getting up to do hw or to go to school. Your poem is cool. I leaned a lot about you.

    • This is a very interesting poem. You used some diction that is very strong to express exactly what you feel and I think a lot of people appreciate that. I like how you started with a question and used your poem as the answer. Keep up the great work!

  • Why I’m lazy as hell?

     

    I’ve been sitting

    On this hard ass red chair

    In this stuffy ass classroom

    For an hour

    I have not typed a single thing.

     

    This is why I’m lazy as hell.  

     

    • Hella Lazy tavio but same. This poem is good because It is very honest about yourself and how you are lazy.

    • This poem is a very descriptive why this person is lazy as hell, reason why I say it is descriptive is because octavio saying that he doesn’t eat so that why he is lazy.

  • My full name is Octavio Carrazco Padilla. It was given to me by my dad. There wasn’t anything special about my name it was just given to me. Many people that i’ve talked to told me that my name sounds like the

    • octavio,
      You do have a pretty cool name. I think its interesting that you are more attached to your mothers maiden name since most people go by their fathers name, however it makes sense to identify with the side of the family that you are closer with. its interesting to look up the meanings behind your name even if that wasn’t the reason for your name. my name means honey bee but i don’t think thats why i was named melissa. with such a interesting name i bet your family history is a good story and i encourage you too learn more about the origins of your last name. thanks for a fun post to read.

    • Octavio,
      I liked your insight about your name. I thought it was interesting how each of your names have an origin and you feel connected to them. Like Padilla, your moms maiden name, since you grew up with her siblings and feel connected to them and thus really like the name. Carrazco, your fathers name, is interesting because like you said its not a name you hear often. And Octavio since it is again a unique name. I encourage you to learn more about the origin of Carrazco and Padilla since there is probably some heritage associated with it. Also, I encourage you to inquire to your parents more about why they named you Octavio since there is probably a story behind it.
      Hope to hear more!
      Chloe

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