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  • Dear Oliver,
    I am interested in your poem because of the way you talk about how cars made you happy.

    I like the lines when you say
    “London
    Our place of happiness”
    I like this line because of how peaceful it sounds. A place of happiness.
    I look forward to seeing more of you work.

  • Ivan your writing was good. I liked how you explained this poem and how laid everything out. If there was one thing you can say more of is how we the people can make a change in everything thats going on. Thank you for your writing. I hope to read more of your work

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    “The Raven” by Edgar Allen Poe

    What makes someone insane?  What does it take to be sane?  “The Raven” by Edgar Allen Poe provokes these questions.  On the surface, it is a poem about a man who encounters

    Humane and Inhumane: What's The Difference?

    “The Raven” by Edgar Allen Poe What makes someone insane?  What does it take to be sane?  “The Raven” by Edgar Allen Poe provokes these questions.  On the surface, it is a poem about a man who encounters...

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    One of the most interesting lines in Edgar Allen Poe’s poem “The Raven” is in stanza 15, line 1.  the speaker is freaking out and is talking about how the raven is a devil. What came before this was that the ra

    Questions about "The Raven" by Edgar Allen Poe

    One of the most interesting lines in Edgar Allen Poe’s poem “The Raven” is in stanza 15, line 1.  the speaker is freaking out and is talking about how the raven is a devil. What came before this was...

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    1,2,3,4 then run fastHurry before they catch upChasing you for what you areRun with the ball and pass itThey pass it back and you runComing for your life it’s onChasing you again, you runMake a point and love w

    Pelham Bay Park

    1,2,3,4 then run fastHurry before they catch upChasing you for what you areRun with the ball and pass itThey pass it back and you runComing for your life it’s onChasing you again, you runMake a point and love will...

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    • Dear Octavio

      I’m assuming that this is about soccer or some sport. If it is then I really like how you didn’t straight up say it but instead made hints to it such as ball, pass, and shoot.

      One line that stands out for me is You miss and hate will come. This line is intriguing because of how it’s talking about something that should be enjoyable yet when you describe it, it seems like if you aren’t good at what you do you will be an outsider who nobody cares for.

    • Dear Octavio:
      I am Interested by your poem, “Pelham Bay Park,” because I used to live around that area and took the same trains as you so it’s kind of cool to go to the same school as that person.
      One line that stands out for me is, “All you had to do was shoot” I think this line is striking because you seem like you are talking about basketball and soccer but then it seems like a deeper meaning if you think about it on a deeper level.
      Another line that stands out for me is, “Chasing you again, you run” I think this line is interesting because You seem like you are running from something deeper than just an opponent.
      Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next. because you you are a good detailed writer and know how to get a reader attracted to your writing

    • Dear Octavio

      I am interested by your poem “ Pelham Bay Park” because I live very near to Pelham Bay park and I like the way you are describing life there.

      One part of your poem that stand out for me is where “Hurry before they catch up”, this line surprises me because I think that you are saying something about sports but then this line could have another meaning like running from someone for something that you did.

      Another part that i found interesting is where “ Chasing you for what you are” . This stood out for me because what i got from that line is that people can be jealous and will hate you for what you are.

      Thanks for your poem. I really enjoyed it.
      b

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