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  • Dear Ian:
    I am intrigued with your reading of Rachel Sherwood’s poem, “The World in the Evening,” because when you read it I was able to get a deeper understanding of what this poem could mean. One set of lines that stands out for me is,

    “miniature guerillas
    that mimic the ancient news of the world
    and shout threats, piped high across mock fence…Read More

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    I chose this poem. Or, rather, it chose me. I chose this poem because it was an informative poem. The poem captured my attention when the author explained the characteristics and the meaning of a hedgehog through a story. Before reading this poem I initially did not know that much about hedgehogs, but now I bear little information about hedgehogs. Because of this poem, I can say I relate to a hedgehog. My first impression of this poem was it was going to be dry, meaning I wasn’t going to be engaged; However, I was really fascinated with the poem yet, at the same time it made me want more. A line that particularly makes me feel fascinated is, “The hedgehog
    Shares its secret with no one”.

    A part that makes me want more is the lines, “We forget that never again
    Will a god trust in the world”. This could be because the author started to bring up a new concept and then the poem ends abruptly.
    What I know about the situation is Paul Muldoon is communicating the hedgehog’s characteristic traits to the readers. What I know about the speaker is that they are the kind of person who makes his poem like a puzzle, and it’s up to the readers to attach the pieces. This is suggested by the words “ We forget the god
    Under this crown of thorns.
    We forget that never again
    Will a god trust in the world”.

    The speaker seems to be speaking to readers who are curious about hedgehogs and perhaps to Religious People. I say this because the speaker mentions god. The traits of the hedgehog have been frowned upon, people would agree that we should be able to trust each other but I think Paul Muldoon is saying that we should learn from the hedgehog, we shouldn’t trust too many people. The last two sentences remind me of how Jesus trusted someone and ended up getting betrayed. I think that is why Paul is encouraging the hedgehog’s values. The poem revolves around several themes, including fear and trust.
    If this poem were a question, the answer would be “yes I agree with the hedgehog’s actions or no I don’t agree with the hedgehog’s actions”. If it were an answer, the question would be “ do you agree with the hedgehog’s actions?” The title suggests that the poem is about the hedgehog.
    The poem’s form is narrative. This form is a vehicle for the content of the poem. If the poem were, say, a Haiku, it would not guide me toward an understanding of its meaning. This poem tells a story, a story where a reader can get sucked in the poem in a matter of seconds. The narrative form guides me to an understanding of the poem.

    Hedgehog, by Paul Muldoon, read by Ocean

    The snail moves like aHovercraft, held up by aRubber cushion of itself,Sharing its secret With the hedgehog. The hedgehogShares its secret with no one.We say, Hedgehog, come outOf yourself and we will love you. We mean no harm. We wantOnly to...

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    • Dear Ocean,

      I am delighted by your poem “Hedgehog”, by Paul Muldoon because of “The hedgehog gives nothing
      Away, keeping itself to itself”.

      ” We wonder what a hedgehog Has to hide, why it so distrusts”, stands out for me. I think “We forget the god Under this crown of thorns”, are thought provoking because of, “We forget that never again Will a god trust in the world”.

      Your poem reminds me of the underline messages and metaphors used in a open mic where an 11 year old poet read her poem “things that I believe”, where she used simile to describe people and animals .

      Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next.

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    I Remember

    I remember when I used to dress up as my favorite fictional characters, Naruto, Rengoku from Demon Slayer, and Snake eyes from GI Joe.I remember my first comic.I remember my first video game system, it was a Black Genesis.I...

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    • Dear Ocean,
      I can also remember my first time listening to Clint Eastwood by the Gorillaz and I still find joy in playing it when I skate, or when I work out. I can also remember the first comic I ever read. although I never dressed up my favorite demon slayer character I remember the first time watching it. I really enjoyed reading what you had to say because it brought up memories that I thought I had forgotten.

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    Where I'm From

    I am from Ticonderoga Pencils,  from Downy and Coat-Hangers  I am From Battery Park, and the Blacktops in Central Park I am from the clamor the 1 train provides    I am from Purple Rice and Kimchi. from Nate  and Natashia  from the know -it -alls and...

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    • Dear Ocean:
      I am amazed with your poem, “Where I’m From” because you’re talking about all these unique things that makes you, you.
      One line that stands out for me is, “From those memories I know I am the product of intellect and diverse cultures ”. I think this line is great because you’re talking about your family.
      Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next.

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    Ocean commented on the post, New York City

    Thanks for your poem! I look forward to seeing what you make next because I like how you use different literary techniques one of which is enjambment. I also liked how you talked about NYC Culture like music and entertainment.

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Hedgehog, by Paul Muldoon, read by Ocean

I Remember

Where I’m From

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what I feel is the need to nod my head because this poem is truly a musical, when she rhymes Maya pleasures the readers by rhyming, so maybe that's why she rhyme in this poem.

Maybe, Hopscotch represents the struggles of black life so when she loses, she won because she is now escaping the struggles of life.

Another example of diction

I wonder what she meant by “they think I lost. I think I won” I think there is a deeper meaning behind that sentence.

The title Harlem Hopscotch maybe has something to do with the struggles of Black Life and how Black People lived in poverty and how Black People used hopscotch to distract themselves from these challenges.

The sound is weird, the echoing and the repeating of the words make the song annoying. I think Maya Angelou's intention of making the song sound annoying is to make it resonate with the reader. Also, the sound maybe has something to do with being annoyed.

When both feet land Maya Angelou talks about the challenges in life. So maybe What Maya Angelou is communicating is: that adults have a lot of problems to deal with so they distract themselves by playing a child's game.

I definitely agree as soon as the narrator's feet are on the floor Maya Angelou immediately talks about the obstacles in life.

I'm not sure if this I right but based on the second stanza my analogy from reading this is that Maya Angelou is using personification to communicate the struggles of black life and how people use hopscotch to distract themselves from it.

March: Book One

Point of view of March Vol 3

“My judgment had been due to my sense of how little they appeared to want. I could not conceive of peddling myself for so low a price. But, for a higher price?For Fonny”

I noticed that Daniel is a witness and he can provide alibis that Fonny wasn't there the night of Victoria rape but sadly he's in jail.

I think that Victoria knows that it wasn't Fonny that raped her. I think she just blamed the black man to get all of this over with. This is a very stressful situation and no woman should go through this.

This is a very explicit comment but I think what Daniel is saying is that the white man gets pleasure from hearing the black man suffer. I think Baldwin is talking through Daniel and is sharing his views as a black man, and what the white man has done to

Is Sharon planning to go all the way to Puerto Rico?

he's not acting soft. He went to jail because the police thought he stole a car, and it's unfair.

How much Sharon cares for Tish and Fonny and even the baby that’s in Tish!

Why does Fonny want Tish to marry him, I personally think they're to young Fonny is 22 and Tish 19, is it because people got married at such a young age in the 70s and it was common ? Or does Fonny love Tish so much he couldn't wait

If Beale Street Could Talk

This reminds me of the Kalief Browder case were a black man was accused of stealing a back pack and was sent to Rikers Island for 3 years. He never stood trial or was found guilty of any crime, he spent three years in prison.

Notice how Baldwin is slowly revealing why Fonny's in jail. This technique leaves readers biting their nails!

This is Love

I think this sex scene is more than sex.

This is a very graphic scene but what we can retrieve from this, is Baldwin is a very descriptive person/author

I think it's more than just an newborn I think Mrs.Hunt started this fight mainly because she feels Tish is corrupting Fonny.

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