My name is Evelyn Diaz Garcia and I am a student at Fremont High School here in Oakland. I just read your project blog post and I have some feedback.
One thing I liked about what you wrote was that you guys really took the time to add many information that informs people about this issue.The information you guys provided us is great because you guys didn’t only give us sources and quotes from articles but you guys also gave us numbers and percentages that showed us more about how bad this issue is.You guys really did a great job keep it up.Something I have a question about is What inspired you guys to write about this issue?
Something I liked about your writing was that you pointed out this topic and trying to help the people that are going through this domestic violence.” … Still, others may have learned this behavior from growing up in a household where domestic violence was accepted as a normal part of being raised in their family” (Goldsmith).I agree with this quote as well because I think if yo grow up in a home where there is domestic violence children are going to grow up thinking it is okay and normal.
Hi, My name is Ariana. I really liked your article and I like how you said that domestic violence has a lot of affect on families because many parents may take anger and stress into their own hands and it can affect the kids/children’s lifestyle and childhood. I think in the USA there is a lot of teenagers and kids that grow up belong scared or very independent due to things that happened between their parents or at home. Maybe some kids even don’t have a relationship or bond with their second parent because of the use of violence that they took out on the other parent.
The thing that caught my attention was that you pointed out how domestic violence could affect in different way how it affects families in different ways.Something you did pretty well was to provide lots of evidence to back up your topic. 🙂
I am delighted by your post, “Animal Testing” because you explained very clearly how animal testing is a good thing and it is okay for researcher to do it. A sentence that stood out to me was “This proves that animals experimentation is benefiting people and there are not many animals that are dying because of our own benef…[Read more]
I am very delighted by your post, “Animal Testing is Ethical” because you explained how animal testing helps humans in many ways and how the humans benefit from the research. One sentence that stood out to me was, “This article points out that if medical researchers were to test on humans it can be very harmful and lead to death…[Read more]
I am very delighted by your post, “ Henrietta lack’s family should be owed money” because you explained how Henrietta’s family deserve the money that the scientist/ doctors get. One sentence that stood out to me is “Henrietta should be honored because she did a lot to this would that save people who had the disease and there was…[Read more]
I am delighted by your post Is “Testing on Animals Ethical?” because you had a evidence that back up’s your opinion and makes it stronger. One sentence that stood out to me is “This is ethical because animals have helped find treatment and cures for diseases, virus, and infections such as, cancer, polio, and other deadly illness”. This stood out to me because the question that you had in your title you expressed and talked about ti more throughought your writing. I agree with what you are saying about how animals have helped us his because I also believe that animals has helped us and is still helping animal researcher with finding new vaccines for people. Thank you for writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because your introduction makes readers read further on.
I am really shocked about your post “animal research” because you talk about how the scientist should do testing on animals. I agree with you because without the animals there would be a lot of people who are dying because of the disease. One sentence that you wrote that standed out to me is “Without animal research, medicine as we know it today wouldn’t exist”. This quote standed out to me because it is really true that without animal animal testing there wouldn’t be a lot treatments of any of the medicines that we take no they wouldn’t be exciting and there would be alot of people dying because there is no cure. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you post next because you had some really thoughtful response and you had a really strong claim.
Dear Naycet :
I am astounded by your post and argument on, “Is testing on Animals Ethical?,” because I’ve only read articles that thought animal testing harmed animals and therefore did not support it. Hearing your perspective on this issue really opened my eyes, even if I don’t necessarily agree with what you were saying.
One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “This is important because if we never have used animals in the past there is no way that the treatment could have been made and there would be many people getting affected and dying.” I think this is interesting because I haven’t thought about animal testing this way. I agree that we would have be so medically advanced if it weren’t for animals but I feel like scientists could have taken a different approach to this situation. They could have used humans that were willing to “sacrifice” themselves to scientific research. I would think that there are some people willing to volunteer knowing that they may save tens of thousands of people.
Another sentence that I found enticing was: “Instead, the drug or technique is tested in animals to make sure that it is safe and effective… Some animals have biological similarities to humans that make them particularly good models for specific diseases, such as rabbits for atherosclerosis or monkeys for polio.” This stood out for me because I realize that these tests are tested for how safe they are before they are administered but if they are so safe and dogs have similar DNA to humans, why can’t the tests be performed on humans?
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because this piece was intriguing and it helped me understand that there are people who believe that animal testing is considered to be ethical, even if I am not one of them.
I was very delighted to read your post “How Does Police Brutality Affect The Community?” because the discrimination that People of Color is very important but no one wants to listen to the problems and make a change. I agree with you when you said that money should be put more in schools than police department because then kids wil…[Read more]
I was very delighted to read your post “Violence In Oakland” because it explains the violence that gangs brings to Oakland. I agree with you when you said that police aren’t doing anything to solve your case because they are too focused solving other cases. One sentence that stands out to me is “People from outside of Oakland…[Read more]
I am impressed by your writing because it is true that there are people getting killed everyday. This is really sad that the police who is supposed to protect us, they are killing our people. A sentence that stood out to me was the first quote that you use because this is a really sad quote but it is the reality. Your entire post stood out to me because it sounds like people are not recognizing the police brutality that is happening here in Oakland. I acknowledge that you did your blog on this topic. Your post reminds me of one’s that I saw this happening here in Oakland. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next.
I am overwhelmed by your poem ‘’The Pain It Takes To Love’’because…when many people read your poem they will know and understand that love is not just something to play with and you can seriously be hurt or damage by the pain you feel of wanting love and the people you have love for.One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Love is what brought everyone together
Love is what can make you so happy
Honesty is what keeps a person close
Trust is something that you can’t break
Loyalty can be hard to find…’’
” I think this is important because…many people need to know that there are many ways to being in love and wanting love.And it take a person along time to get love or to feel the feeling of wanting love because of what solution that they were in by being hurt and damage by a love one or someone that they really trust that was close to them.
Another sentence that I was moved by: “Many people think that love is the best thing, and many people want to be loved by others. But sometimes love can cause great pain.” This stood out for me because…it gave me a reflection of my past and how many people I loved or wanted to be loved by hurt me and betrayed me just by taking my kindness for weakness. Many people don’t know when love hits you it’s like the sun rising over the horizon which a glacier of gold lighten up stars but, when love hurts it’s
Your poem reminds me of something that happened to me. One time… when I was in my first relationship. Me and my first love been together for 2 years and we stayed doing everything together go shopping ,out to eat ,we went to the movies ,and ect. Until one day he wanted to get a better job with better pay .However,he find the job but it was in another state .That day i know once he left he wasn’t going to come back as the same person,we loved each other so much to the point we will hurt anybody that stand in our way of our relationship. I didn’t wanted him to leave but at that moment ,i didn’t know he didn’t wanted to leave either. But he got the job, So he left and we stayed in touch with each other until months and months went by we lost connection of each other about 2 years we got back in touch with each other but it wasn’t the same so we just ended as friends.Cause everytime we fight to be together we always get pushed away by someone or something.
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because…this poem really grabbed my idea’s and my pain that I’ve felt I have hidden within my mind. Secrets that I’ve felt I hidden for myself the also can relate to my future.
I am empathetic about your post because I like the fact that it explains how you have to act and be if you are a girl. One part that stood out to me was “when you are washing laundry fold your clothes or they’ll wrinkle, nobody wants a girl in wrinkle clothes”. this stood out to me because if you are a girl you have to act and be s…[Read more]
I am emphatic about your latter because it explains how if you are a girl you have to do most of the cleaning be the “perfect” girl. One sentence that stood out to me was “when you are washing laundry fold your clothes or they’ll wrinkle, nobody wants a girl in wrinkle clothes; “. this stood out to me because in society you have to d…[Read more]
I am very emphatic about your letter because human trafficking is a big issue that no many people are aware of. one sentence that stood out to me was “This topic is very important to me because there are kids younger and older than me being took families are looking for their children and some will never find their children.” This…[Read more]
Who am I? I am Naycet Bernal I am Latina, my ethnicity is Mexican because my family is from Mexico and I was born in the US. I am proud to be Mexican and to be from Oakland. And there is nothing you can do to
Hi my name is dayana and Im writing from fremont high school, i enjoyed what you said in your paragraphs because you gave us details of what you put on your shadow box and why. I also loved the sea shells you put in it because i like seashells .
I really liked your paragraph because it was really powerful and strong. Something that I really liked was when you said that you don’t have to look the same to be a powerful and strong woman. I agree with you when you said that people assume that you are a uneducated and immigrant girl because I am a Latina too and they assume that we are not educated and can’t find a good job beause we are immigrants.
Dear Naycet, Thank you for sharing this brilliant work .My name is Marquisha an I am a student at Fremont High School. Something I lIked about your work was how you showed how women are judged by society and how you described how you are proud to live in oakland and be Mexican American.Something I have a question about is what made you not forget to describe everything on your shadow box? Please feel free to comment on my work in the future. The address of my student blog is http://marquishawfhs2021.edublogs.org/
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