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I, too,sing the song of “another teenager”
I am the age no one wants to be
They send me to my mind that is sometimes to loud to think
But I try to block out all the noise
And push through the rest of
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This piece was inspired by Angie Thomas, The Hate U Give
This piece exemplifies the butterfly effect, such as changing the past will affect the future greatly. Natasha is the speaker of the poem she was killed
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Dear McKayla, this is a great poem.
I especially like the stanza, “Flashbacks in my head renewed
A sleepover in the middle of June
Laughing and playing.
Little did we know the next morning in the street you’d be laying
Lifeless, as blood trickled through your beautiful curly hair that always smelled like coconut oil
And we didn’t know when we were laughing and playing that you’d be buried 6 ft beneath the soil.”
I loved how it rhymed and it left chills on my neck. Great job with this poem, you should make more!
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McKayla,
This poem was so powerful! I love how you started with the vivid dream and then it partially came true. How you ended, “Because Starr you are ‘Something to live for and something to die for,'” brought a strong emotion out of me. You exemplified extremely love for someone in just a line. I can’t wait to hear more from you. -
This poem is great! I really liked the concept of the butterfly effect that you focused on, I think it is a super cool concept! https://www.americanscientist.org/article/understanding-the-butterfly-effect is a great article that I looked into after reading your poem so that I could have a better understanding. Great work!
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Dear, Mckayla
I am amazed by your poem because you are right, everything in this poem is true. Its true when your a teen everything is different for you. You get doubted. One thing that stands out for me is, “Oh because your 16 you don’t know what love is”. This stands out to me because this is true they think love can’t be possible at this age but it absolutely is, you are capable of anything at 16.
Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you write next time in relation to this.