In this assignment, we were supposed to make a version of the poem “Dear Matafele Peinem”. In my poem I decided to write about how the earth is being affected as a whole. But I also tried to keep forests, and more specifically rain forests in the back of my mind so I made sure to at least touch on them. I want this poem to convey the idea that even because we’re part of the problem, we have to be a big part of the solution.

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Meghan, I think this poem is very interesting. The way you set up the poem was truly inspirational and moving. The way I see it is that the Earth is here to be our gift, it cannot do wrong, however the people who are supposed to cherish it put it through irreversible damage. We have ruined so many things that the Earth has offered us. We need some change and it needs to start now. I try to do my part as an individual, but we need a complete movement across the world to create a change. These changes affect people, animals, and everything in between, so why shouldn’t we fix the issues. I have researched ways to fix these global environmental changes, and here is a good link to see for yourself: https://www.nrdc.org/stories/how-you-can-stop-global-warming. Your poem perfectly displays this current event, and you make it very personal which adds emotion to your claim. I would love to see more poems or other work in the future.

Meghan, I absolutely love this poem. I really resonate with the emotions you expressed. It is extremely frustrating to watch as our climate becomes increasingly mild and temperatures begin to rise. It is frightening and I think you portrayed that very well with your words. I too hope that we will be able to turn things around and that humanity will be able to survive this, but we must do something soon. Have you thought about some policy solutions for climate change? If not, I think you would really enjoy Alexandria Ocasio Cortez’s Green New Deal ( https://www.nytimes.com/2019/02/21/climate/green-new-deal-questions-answers.html ). Your poem is extremely well done! I loved how to you tied in real life events such as the burning of Amazon in comparison to the burning of Notre Dame. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!

Hi Meghan!
I loved your poem! A couple months ago I read another poem, I think from your same school, that talked about saving polar bears. I loved it. I feel like you even took that one step further, talking about saving everything. If more people in our planet had this mindset, our planet would be so much better. All of your points are valid and it is so scary to think about all those risks happening to our planet. When you talked about the ice caps melting, the ocean drowning us, etc. it hit me. More people should find this and read this because people need to know about the risks and solutions there are to global warming. I think climate change is the biggest fear happening today, and more people need to try and help out our dying world. This website shows even more solutions:https://www.nrdc.org/stories/how-you-can-stop-global-warming I can’t wait to see what you write next!

Great poem! I liked your use of repetition. It brought consistency and focus to the poem. You allowed the reader to relate to your ideas and appeals especially with the use of “sorry” and ” I refuse”. It demonstrates your care for our plane and your current stance. You also included specific problems in your poem, which the reader could specifically relate to and better comprehend the issues at hand. You could also add a link to an non-profit organization looking into potential solutions that others can also partake in by donating.

Hi, Meghan
I love this poem! while I was reading it, I was nodding my head because it’s so true. We really need to help the Earth so we can keep living on Earth.

Wonderful job!

Asnica

Hi Meghan,
This is an awesome poem and I really like it. You describe plenty of things from interesting views that I have never thought about before. The earth is the gift for all human beings, but we have still ruined and destroyed too many from the earth. Your poem reminds us to cherish what resources and materials we have in the current and not to do any damages to the earth.

Dear, Meghan your poem is heart touching. As reading this it made me more and more interested. This was very inspirational. I love the vocabulary you used. The emotions in this poem really get to the reader what you were feeling while writing this.

Dear Meghan, I am touched to read the heartfelt letter you’ve written because it acknowledges the imperfections on earth currently and the changes that need to occur. I’ve been motivated to learn more about how to help the earth to get to where it should be. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me was “But that doesn’t mean all hope is lost,
At least not yet
Because we’re not giving up
At Least not without a fight
Humanity’s been in tough spots before
But we’ve found a way through it”. This stood out to me because the idea that change is possible seems much more simple than it actually is. The motivation is put into the readers after reading that change has been possible before. Thank you for writing, I look forward to what you write next because your writing is very authentic. The ideas you project seem very genuine.
Kayla Castillo