Evan, this is an extremely well written piece. I love how you looked at this issue from many sides, and provided many arguments to support your idea. I also like how you not only talked about the issue but also: why it is important and what we should do about it. It was really cool to see you incorporate what other countries are doing about this issue as well, providing ideas and possible solutions. Awesome job and keep up the good work!

Evan, I totally agree with your issue on school lunches. I think this has been an issue for awhile now and hasn’t really improved so we should strive to change it so the new generation of children don’t have to suffer.

I agree with your ideas on school lunches. I hate to be a pessimist, but I do not think that reforms will work. Big business will lobby against this strongly. Schools are a prime market for the biggest food companies to trap consumers from the very beginning, and they are a huge source of income. Also, moving to a more localized approach will not work either, as the rich areas who can afford it aren’t the ones that need help, while the poorer areas who need support the most will keep doing what they are doing, and providing poor nutrition.

You thoroughly covered your issue and have left your audience informed. I now feel as though the American education system has been robbing me and my fellow peers the right to a better, nutritional life.

I completely agree with the fact that the school lunches don’t provide proper nutrition and that is a big issue especially when all anybody can say is that Americans are fat and need the right nutrition. I do think that the topic needs more attention and hopefully it can make a positive change.

Evan, this was a great infographic. It had a lot of information that I didn’t know and I love how it was layed out. Can not wait to see what you do next.

Evan, great job with your infographic; it was very well laid out and hit on multiple good points. School lunches may not even be on the radar for some people who are able to bring lunch from home and receive good education about nutrition, so thank you for bringing some of the real statistics to light.

Hi Evan,
I agree too that way Japan is doing school lunches could definitely help with the issue of school lunches in America. This is the way to go in american schools because most kids are unaware of the effects certain foods have on their bodies. I think that with nutritional education and healthier lunch it could definitely benefit the lives of many generations to come.

Hi Evan,

I like your picture of how healthy kids lunches are at Japan in comparison to how it is back home. It’s pretty bad to have our kids lunches be so bad, it can have serious health effects for our youth. Thank you for putting this together.

-Sid

Evan,
I highly agree that persistence is essential if one wants to succeed, and I have experienced it as well. However, I experienced it in a different sport, which was swimming. I went from barely being able to swim in 6th grade, to 19th in the state for D2, all because I was willing to put in the work. I have seen this true among many of my peers, and it is one of the few things I consider essential to my being, as it has driven me to where I am today. I’m glad to have found a kindred spirit, and great job with this!

Hey Evan! I really like your outlook on persistence. I would agree with you that persistence is extremely important in life. I also really like how you ended this piece because I think it sums up your writing very well. Keep up the good work!

Evan,
Your post is very motivating as persistence does truly conquer all. Persistence is a great attribute to have on or off the track and will take you great places in life as you will never fear let downs, and continue to chase what is most desired. Thanks for the post!