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  • Mary commented on the post, Backwards Benefit

    I think you did a really great job at incorporating a more unknown piece of history in your blood. Most people are not aware of Grant’s corruption, but you exoplanet it very well and used pieces of evidence that further the explanation. I think that since you added a small section about the Bible you could either elaborate on it further or remove it.

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    Was it worth it?

    When talking to anyone over the age of 30, any question about 9/11 can be precisely answered with overwhelming detail. People vividly remember the attacks on American soil; however, they tend to forget this tragedy was followed by more...

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    • I completely agree especially with your specified wording with your thesis “ prolonged involvement in the Middle East caused senseless death and pain that no longer promoted the success of the mission”. It is also respectfully stated. Not all the blame lies on one group or another but rather everyone no matter the country as a whole.

    • This is incredibly well-written. I really enjoyed the description of 9/11. I’ve heard the story a million times but I like how you focused on the aftermath and speaking about what President Bush intended to do after the attack. I would have loved to read more about what we were doing in Afghanistan in detail and maybe a few positive effects of us being there, even though I do agree with you that we were doing more harm than help.

    • A very well written argument. I agree with your sentiments as well; I have seen many deployed in Afghanistan and I’ve seen military families torn apart because of it. There was conflict without no real goal. After 9/11, president Bush had a vendetta, and we were stuck completing it for two decades.

    • Mary,
      I totally agree. The US was justified in their actions to take out Al Qaeda. It was when we decided to start “nation building” and rebuild Afghanistan is when the US got too involved. Trillions of dollars and countless lives were lost in a mission that very few American’s supported, and it took less than a month for country the US spent years trying to fix to collapse once we no longer wanted to stay involved.

    • I completely agree with your argument. While the original plan was for “justice” and to “mold Afghanistan into a more modern society” as you said, we remained in Afghanistan for too long and there was unnecessary conflict because of it. I would’ve loved to hear more detail about what the US did in Afghanistan because you did such a good job at describing everything.

    • Your writing brought out a lot of different emotions. It was extremely well written, so I was definitely drawn in. The title was awesome because it was the article that stood out to me as I wanted to know the answer, was it worth it? I definitely think that a lot of harm was being done, definitely more than good. This was a great piece to read!

    • I think this post was very well worded. It didn’t take away from the tragedy of 9/11 but still examined the consequences of what happened after it. I do think that killing Bin laden and taking out Al-Qaeda was a good thing, but after that, our stay in Afghanistan didn’t have a set reason. Hundreds of innocent people died in a war that had no reason to continue besides the selfish desires of the United States. I thought this was a super well-written post, and you did a great job of actually telling the audience what happened.

    • I agree with you, many people especially the younger generation aren’t well informed about the events that happened after 9/11. Many people have died who didn’t deserve it and it makes you wonder if our government made the best decisions and choices regarding the events after 9/11.

    • I agree that American troops overstayed there welcome by a long time. Most younger Americans are taught about how 9/11 effected the U.S., but never how we then affected the middle east much more.

    • I think you did very well with wording and specific ideas that tied together your whole idea very nicely. I loved your focus on a more under the radar example among today’s younger citizens as you led with “anyone over the age of 30” highlighting the need for attention and focus from adolescent American citizens. I think how you mentioned the phases and the overall outcome from them, you could dive a little deeper into specific details/happenings (ex recent evacuation from Afghanistan) that came from attempting to leave and the struggle to get out, just flushing out how terrible everything ended.

    • dear mary,

      I completely agree with your argument. While the original plan was for “justice” and to “mold Afghanistan into a more modern society” as you said, we remained in Afghanistan for too long and there was an unnecessary conflict because of it. I would’ve loved to hear more detail about what the US did in Afghanistan because you did such a good job at describing everything.

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