I believe you have a strong assertion because you back it up with strong evidence like the one from Voynovskaya. I think your paragraph is very strong because you also have a interesting topic. I think the question you ask in your conclusion is a great question. Keep up the good work! Sincerely,Martha
You did an unbelievable job at writing this. I love how you introduced the interviewee because you added good important information, this helps me add more information over my interviewees next time. I think you could’ve added more analysis about the quotes you chose. But I do believe your quotes were great and brought the reader’s a…[Read more]
I really like your blog and how you express your feelings about immigrants and how oakland protects them most of the time. I also think that your evidence is really good too and the examples you give are really clear.
I am proud by your blog called, “Oakland” because you are covering about the topic immigration in Oakland. This is really important because Oakland has a lot of colored people living here and have cultural background in Oakland. One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is, “Oakland is a sanctuary city which means it helps protect immigrants from deportation. This is good because it helps make people feel safe”. I think this is an amazing because you are explaining how Oakland its trying to protect immigrants. I do agree with you that Oakland is a cultural place for immigrants and the Latino community. Oakland does it’s best to keep immigrants safe.
I believe you did an excellent job on your poem because it made me feel like I was going through that experience and actually made me feel like I was experiencing the story of the poem. I know that made your poem really strong, also the last sentence left the reader wanting more of the story leaving us ATTACHED. I don’t believe y…[Read more]
Your poem is very creative, I really like how you related it to the eyes. Something that stood out to me from your poem was the lines “You took our loved ones and put them in cages like zoo animals” because you’re saying that white people are putting us into categories and its very creative how you used similes in your poem. Some questions I have about your poem are why did you specifically choose to talk about eyes in your poem? You had a great poem and it was very creative.
I love your shadow box, how you wanted to represent your culture by adding the mexican flag colors in your shadow box. The little details make your shadow box amazing. Thanks for your great piece of art and writing!
One sentence that stood out to me in your artist statement was when you stated you wanted society to see you as a good brother that’s really adorable. To add on, another sentence that stood out to me was when you wanted to have no F’s and I see you in PLT already working on that pathway Good luck I know you can achieve your goals. Tha…[Read more]
One sentence that stood out to me was how you added pictures of your childhood it shows your family. It also shows me how you are showing that your family is important to you.
Another part that I liked was the colors of your box made it so colorful and attracting to look at.
Great work on your artist statement too you rock!
Many people assume that since I am a person of color, I am dangerous or bad news. My Shadow Box contradicts this claim because on the inside it shows how I’m really just an empowering Latina (which is my ra
I love your shadow box. I think your shadow box is cool because it has pictures of you when you were little and it shows your childhood. I like how you put a flower to show the stereotypes that women are delicate. My favorite line that you wrote is “ I put flowers because they represent how society stereotypes females as delicate little flowers with model bodies”. This is my favorite line because I feel like this quote has a lot of power and meaning in it. Thank you for writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next time!:)
I love how you design your box and what images you include in your box. It also show how your family is important to you. I also like how in your statement you talk about the things people might assume about you just because your a female and your latina.
I am admirable by your shadow box, “My True Identity” because you show your true identity through your shadow box. I like how you put your identity out there and your not afraid of being judged because of it, you show this through your shadow box. Another part that I loved is where you added objects that showed your identity thr…[Read more]
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.