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Mariam wrote a new post, My Questions About “What lips my lips have kissed” by Edna St Vincent Millay 3 hours, 40 minutes ago
In the 4th line of the first stanza, Millay tries to remember the people she has been with in past relationships and she cannot remember. She writes, “but the rain/ is full of ghosts tonight, that tap and s
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Mariam commented on the post, Heyo! 1 week, 4 days ago
Dear Anaee:
I am amazed by your post, “Heyo!,” because of the fact that I can see myself in your writing.
One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “I do know I like music a lot and I’m very open to listen to all types of music” I think this is relatable because I as well listen to all types of music and I will will listen to just abou…[Read more] -
Mariam commented on the post, Prospect Park in the Rain 3 weeks, 4 days ago
Dear Jillian:
I am amazed by your post, “Prospect Park in the Rain,” because your pictures are really nicely taken and it looks like you really thought of which ones to use and how to take each one. I love how you made something so gloomy, like the rain, into something so pretty. One picture that stands out to me is the one with the close up tre…[Read more] -
Mariam commented on the post, A Never-Ending Search 2 months ago
Bryan, just like Guy taking his first bite of the burger, your poem brought me to tears. Out of all the poems I’ve read so far, this is most likely the one the intrigued me the most. I enjoyed your detailed descriptions and the emotions were well written. Good job on your poem and I hope to read more from you.
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Mariam wrote a new post, Where I’m From 2 months ago
If I told you I was from Hell’s Kitchen,Where mafias and gangueros paint the past-would you know where I’m from?Where I’m from, it’s the melting pot of the citywhere cultures clash, but mine always present
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Miriam,
I absolutely love this poem. I love the detail you go through about where you live and what you go through without directly stating the exact place you live. I love how open you are about where you live and the condition it’s in, even if it’s not always a happy one. Keep writing! -
Dear Mariam,
I am fascinated by how you managed to speak on where you’re from in your poem, “Where I’m from,” because You manage to describe what you have been through and the description of your neighborhood without actually letting people know where you’re from.
One line that stands out for me is, “ Where mafias and gangueros paint the past-would you know where I’m from?”,I think this line is interesting because you asked a question to the reader which I didn’t see in any other poems. I also like the way you gave a good description without revealing too much. Another line that stands out for me is, “steaming cups of cafe bustelo straight from la cafeteragreets you with its intense and welcoming aroma” I think this line is fascinating because it shows what created the aroma. Instead of just describing the aroma you said what created the scent that brings you home.
Your poem reminds me of a poem that I once read. The poem described a certain thing that would remind the lady of her home. Everytime she would smell the scent she would be reminded of her mother. Not only a scent but other things she would see on the street would bring her home.
Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next. I like the way you described certain things without going into too much detail. Which would leave the reader guessing
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Mariam wrote a new post, Frenzy 2 months ago
She remembers waiting three hours in the cold rain. dense and humid air made her clothes cling to her body. She remembers entering the building, the air conditioning refreshing her glistened face. She remembers
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Dear Mariam,
Your poem “frenzy” is very relatable. I remember a moment in time when something like this happened. Your poem made me feel different emotions depending on the line that I was on. Your poem does a great job at evoking memories and different emotions.
Your poem creates a an image that I can relate to. Line 10, “bodies packed closely together with little space to move” makes me feel claustrophobic. I can imagine bodies crammed together like sardines in can.
Another line that I really liked is, “She remembers how quickly the night progressed,” I can relate to that. It reminds me about all the times the night has gone quickly and I couldn’t believe it. This line is not only relatable but it also makes me feel content and happy.
Your poem reminds me of the different concerts and games that I have been too. A small place where I was in close proximity with people and I felt claustrophobic. It reminds me of the long nights spent having fun and enjoying life.
I can’t wait to read more of your work. Your work is relatable and creates an image and a memory at the same time.
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Mariam commented on the post, Apology 2 months ago
Hey Kelly, I like your poem it’s really nice. I feel like this poem is very personal to you, was it something you wrote for yourself? Your line “to my greatest enemy, myself and only me” it seems as if you have an internal battle with yourself, and knowing that you were confident enough to expose this to the world and I applaud you for it.
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