Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem. I love how you compare love to delicate yet beautiful things but then you also slightly connect this to a bit of the violence that is happening around us. One of my favorite lines from your poem is “Love is so pure that’s you Have to learn how to take care of As a baby when is born Lea…[Read more]
This is a poem about the violence that goes on in Oakland. This poem connects to the story of Romeo and Juliet by Shakespeare and how they felt like they were stuck in the middle of a fight that they didn’t
I love your poem, I think it really explains the claim your trying to explain, which is violence. Your poem is really good because you rhyme, and that’s a good thing to do when writing poems. A line that stood out to me was,” This is Oakland, and I should be able to just be me, without the fear of a gun, I should be able to have simple fun, and not be on alert and ready to run, not having to fear anyone, I cannot wait until this war is finally done, but I fear it has only begun”. I think those lines are really strong because at the end it’s like wow, such a great ending. Overall you did amazing with your poem, I hope you post more on here, because you are a really great writer.
Your poem is so good. I think it’s clear that you are trying to show how Oakland has a lot of violence. I really like your poem because your expressing the violence and I really like how u relate it to the Montagues and Capulets and how society is the capulets and whe are the montagues. I liked how at the end you said “but I fear it only begun” i really like how you ended your poem because it shows that you feel like violence will keep on getting worse going on in the future.
Thank you for sharing your amazing poem! I enjoyed reading every word in it. I love when you said
“This is Oakland
And I should be able to just be me
Without the fear of a gun
I should just be able to have simple fun
And not be on alert and be ready to run
Not having to fear anyone”
That was very strong, and the rhyming and the wording of everything is great! I also feel the same way, that when we’re home, or anywhere, there’s no sure way to say that we’re safe. Keep up the amazing work of your poetry!
I LOVED your poem. I can visualize the way Oakland is with your poem and how our youth is exposed to hate. I also like the way you used the feuds with oakland to compare with Romeo and Juliet. Something i connected to is when you said, “And I should be able to just be me, Without the fear of a gun”. This connected to me because i feel like whenever i going somewhere i’m not same because guns have become a big problem today and almost everyone has one and knowing that doesn’t make me feel safe. Overall your poem was really moving and I really enjoyed it. I hope you keep writing. – Christina
Thank you for looking at my shadow box and helping me see what I should do again if a project like this were to rise again. I hope that you truly took something away from my writing. I took a look at your great shabox box and it is beautiful and empowering. You are a very powerful and moving person. Once again, thank you for leaving…[Read more]
I am astonished by your shadow box. I love how in your artist statement you explain how many people may see you as one ethnicity but the truth is you’re not. You are a proud Guatemalan and that is truly shown in your shadow box.One part of your artist statement/shadow box that I loved was that you showed how people may believe that…[Read more]
I am mesmerized by your eye catching shadow box. I love how you connected the outside quote “Eat Pretty” to your inside quote “EAT LIKE A GROWN UP”. This shows how you can find a counter narrative for every dominant narrative out in the world and prove those dominant narratives as simply a stereotype that doesn’t need to be true.…[Read more]
This shadow box represents how my life is a counter narrative toward all of the horrible dominant narratives out in the world. My shadow box is divided into two parts, the outside is the dominant narratives of my
Lupita, thank you for giving me insight into your life. I found it so inspiring how you were able to recognize the difference between who you truly are and who other expect you to be (narratives and counter narratives as you called them). I really related to some of the stereotypical ideals you pointed out that people have against women. For example when you said, “… all females love the color pink, women can be persuaded by diamonds, and that all women must wear dresses to look beautiful for all the men in the world,” it made me realize how important it is to define yourself. I also related to how you show pride in your heritage. I am Greek and Lebanese and I also have equal pride in both. Thanks for sharing! -Anna
I really like your shadow box I like the fact how you divide your shadow box into a salvadorian, mexican and american. I also really like your pictures that you share in your shadow box. I really related to some of the stereotypical ideals you pointed out that people have against women. I have feel that what you talk is really strong but is really important to people too know about it.
Thank you for looking at my shadow box and helping me see what I should do again if a project like this were to rise again. I hope that you truly took something away from my writing. I took a look at your great shabox box and it is beautiful and empowering. You are a very powerful and moving person. Once again, thank you for leaving me a comment and taking a look at my work.
I am flabbergasted by your shadow box because by having a black background in your box in made all of your images pop out and my eye was drawn to all of them. Also, I like how you put baby pictures and that truly showed how you were always a great kid. One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is “. They have affected my l…[Read more]
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We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
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