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    Luisa commented on the post, Central Park

    Dear Ocean:

    Your poem talks about Central Park and how beautiful and how it one of New york beautiful features. Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next because I like how you describe Central Park.

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    Luisa commented on the post, New York City

    Dear Hai-cheng :

    Your Poem talks about how you see New york city as a place that unique and filled with music and entrainment. Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next because I like how you talk about new york city and talking about the Music and entrainment in New York City and the culture there.

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    The Street We Walk

    I heard them and I still hear themHearing mother calling for their kids To come home before it gets darkHearing Aunts, uncles, playing dominos In front of the building making betsWalking to the park and seeing vendorsSelling ice cream, corn for...

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    • i like how you made the poem sound like your telling a dream/story

    • Dear Luisa:
      I am happy with your poem, “The Street We Walk,” because when I read it for the first time I felt like I was reading a book. It was detailed and I could picture the scenes in my head. I could also relate to what was going on in the poem.
      One line that stands out for me is, “I heard them and I still hear them”. I think this line is important because This line is what leads you to the rest of the poem..
      Another line that stands out for me is, “This is the place I know”. I think this line is also good because after reading the poem and reading that line, I feel like I understand you better.
      I look forward to seeing what you make next. I want to read about more of the places that you know.

    • Dear Luisa,
      I liked reading your poem, “The street we walk,” because it was very easy to picture what you were saying, and everything you wrote was relatable to me.
      One line that stands out for me is, “Hearing police sirens and seeing the A and 1 track passing.” I think this line is very relatable to me because I often heard and see these things in my neighborhood.
      Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next.

    • Dear Luisa,
      I really enjoyed this poem because its raw and relatable. Many people can relate to this and imagine it. Its very nostalgic hearing it especially in times like now.

    • Dear Luisa
      I really enjoyed reading this poem. The way that you described everything made it so easy to picture. And you reminded me of some memories I forgot that I had.

    • Dear Luisa
      Your poem in my opinion captures what being a child felt like as if we are at the ages of 10 again. Your poem “The Street We Walk” captures how personally I was as child , since I know that I used to enjoy going to the park and come back rather late. I don’t need to pick a line since I believe the whole poem is what brings the nostalgia not just a single line. Thank you for this poem as it has brought back some nice memories.

    • Dear Luisa :
      I am Pleased by your poem, “The Streets We Walk,” because Of the common idea and surroundings of the place where you (and I may) walk past everyday.
      One line that stands out for me is, “Walking to the deli and
      Talking to the workers”. I think this line is striking because I do the same thing when I walk to/in the store.
      Your poem reminds me of my life and experiences while living in New York. Because all these ideas are so common around this area.
      Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next. Because This poem was great and you have a great way with words

    • Dear Luisa i love this poem and is important because kids these days are super young be on the street late and parents are worrying about their kids and also stranger telling kids come over here and they get take away but for me the street aren’t safe for us at all.

    • Dear Luisa,
      I think you summed up what it is like for us every day in the “Street We Walk.”

    • Dear Luisa, i really enjoyed reading your poem and I think you did I an amazing job describing New York City in your own perspective. I can actually say i agree with most of what you wrote. GREAT JOB !!!

      One stanza that stood out to me was “ Walking to the deli and
      Talking to the workers and petting the cat”. I really like this stanza because i can restore to it and most delis have cats there. So if you aren’t afraid of cats or allergies the owners don’t mind you touching the cat , and that is one thing i like
      doing.

      Another thing i really enjoyed reading was your title “ the street we walk”
      Because i felt like i can picture what you wrote just by reading it. Especially when you wrote, “ I heard them and I still hear them”. When i was younger i used to hear my mother and my friends parents call them as well, and i feel like that was really important that you added that on your poem.

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    The poet uses everyday language but sometimes uses simple higher vocabulary that easily understood.

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I think the mother are calling for their kids because most of the time kids hang out around the building and the mother are calling them back home it is getting dark.

even if your in your apartment you can hear the train because it so noisy and if you live near a train station even worse.

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I think it refers to kids missing because kids like to hang around the block playing with kids and your parent telling you to be careful.

I think that why Ernestine always mock or get angry at Tish some time.

I get that they're celebrating but why give Tish alcohol?

This got more interesting.

I agree and I also think maybe she went to the police and said she was raped and the police and her lied and put the blame on Fonny.

This is so sad. He's angry but still, worries about tish show you how kind he is a love tish.

I agree with you I think he sacred and kinda traumatized because he doesn't want to get arrested by the police again.

Yeah, he's basically saying how the police are corrupt and how they can control the system.

I agree, It good that her family supports her and help her and is the for fonny.

They wanna change his testimony because if they change it they can say ” change your testimony and you will get out of jail or get a shorter sentence.” They just wanna put black people in prison because they're racist.

Maybe because her parent didn't want her to be her anymore after she testified about what she said “Fonny did”

I don't think so I just think he going to talk about Tish and how is he going to take care of his daughter.

I agree with you because parents want their kids to marry somebody with a stable job because they don't their kids to have to suffer.

Because he probably worried that something happens because she came home really late.

Fonny wants to marry tish because he wants Tish to be his and doesn't want her to get another lover.

I think frank get mad when she talks about god because he probably thinking if God exists why is he doing this to his son.

I think when she means ” holy ghost” is how she very religious and like how she gaining weight and scared even with like the spirit of god she can't fight it?

It kinda cute how he asking so many questions about what she want's.

I think this is where she starts to like him more than a friend.

agree

I agree I don't think Fonny parents would agree and help tish with her pregnancy. I think it will cause stress and problems for tish during her pregnancy.

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