I love how open your are about your story. When you say “I compare my life with the life of the immigrants in my community because we are here to work for a better future to give our kids what we did not have” it brings up an important conversation of how necessary immigrants are to America. Immigrants deserve equal opportunities as everyone else…[Read more]
Great job applying what you read to your life and people around you. It is interesting that you don’t play soccer yourself, but notice how it positively impacts others. Is there something like this in your life (art, another sport, music, etc.) that gives you joy and challenges you in a positive way? It would interesting to hear about that!…[Read more]
This argument is extremely well-worded. I love the many different approaches to what it means to be American that you cover in this post. Your quote “we have so much freedom in America but we don’t give everyone the same opportunities just because we don’t all look the same” is very true. People are treated unfairly based on religion, race, and…[Read more]
I love the symbolism in this project. The addition of the butterflies to represent your true self opening up is beautiful. It is also refreshing to read about how much you love your culture. Finally, the stereotypes on the outside of the box are very correct and applicable to women everywhere. It makes you story relatable. Thank you for sharing…[Read more]
I love how you address the “leaders of America” in order to imply that change must be made. You have some interesting facts, but listing statistics could make you argument more convincing. Another way to make your writing more compelling would be by including how the opioid crisis has affected you personally. If it hasn’t had a direct impact on…[Read more]
Deja, your perspective and experience on this subject is very intriguing. I am also someone with trust issues and know how you feel when you say, “when I have opened up, people showed me why I shouldn’t have.” Communication is difficult but also very rewarding at times. Here is a link to a source that has some tips for opening up and touches m…[Read more]
Bladimiro, this article gave me so much joy. Not only was I able to relate to your problems, but I was forced to sit and think about how I handle my own stress. I don’t personally release stress through anger, but instead intense emotional breakdowns. I too am a bit of a procrastinator, which only causes further stress, but maybe trying something…[Read more]
When it comes to performance enhancing drugs in sports, what is deemed acceptable and what is deemed unethical is divided by a thin line. Many people would say that an athlete who uses an inhaler to control their
I found your article very interesting. I particularly enjoyed your example about asthma. I had never thought of that as an enhancement, but you are right that people who need inhalers are enhancing their performance. I also thought that your inclusion of the history behind doping added to my understanding of the current issue. Your question that “If that player has a natural disadvantage, why do they get to absolve that?” really made me think about all the things that could be considered enhancement if enhancements were defined as anything that improved any players’ performance. Things like migraine medication or painkillers could be considered enhancements because they would help the player to play better. My sister needed a lot of medication when she was playing basketball because of her Crohns disease. This experience makes me inclined to think that enhancements should only be illegal if they do not serve to level the playing field and instead serve only to give some player a competitive advantage. One thing I think you could add would be a specific example of an athlete that lost his/her awards due to doping. This article talks about Lance Armstrong’s doping (https://www.cnn.com/2013/01/15/health/armstrong-ped-explainer/index.html) and I think it could add a commonplace to your essay.
I really look forward to reading your future posts. I hope that you will continue to use sports topics and possibly incorporate your unique perspective as a former competitive gymnast. I would love to know what your opinion is on what should be considered illegal enhancements.
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