I really like your poem, you got my attention instantly with the first couple of words “the sky is going to kill me”. I really like how detailed and poetic you were and I love the use of personification. Amazing poem!

I really like how you effortlessly set the setting. I really like your poem I think adding a metaphor or other figurative language would add to your poem nicely. I liked the part when you said you thought you were dreaming when you woke up and saw the doctors standing beside you.

I really like how you used evidence to support both sides of the argument if sending people to mars is a good idea. I agree that it would be dangerous still to send them there especially to live there for long periods of time. I think that there should be more technological advances before doing it.

I like how you used your own personal example to support your argument. I think that this phobia affects people in different ways and I agree with you that the face paint and exaggerating of facial features are the main reason why people don’t like them. I think it would be good to research more about this topic and find some scientific evidence…Read More