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Bryan commented on the post, It Could Be Worse
I liked the premise of your poem. Many people complain about their lot in life, yet do not realize how much worse it could be. Perspective can really change a person, one man’s trash, is another man’s treasure. A garbageman in the US could complain about their job and how doing anything else would be better, yet a brick worker in India working…Read More
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Bryan wrote a new post
A man zips down the road in his red 68’ camaro. Sunglasses glinting in the sun. Frosted tips waving in the breeze.
He looks into the camera, “Hi, I’m Guy Fieri, and we’re rolling out, looking for America’s
Read MoreA man zips down the road in his red 68’ camaro. Sunglasses glinting in the sun. Frosted tips waving in the breeze. He looks into the camera, “Hi, I’m Guy Fieri, and we’re rolling out, looking for America’s...
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Hey Bryan,
I love how you used certain words like “ooze” to describe the “All-American Cheeseburger.” I was able to imagine the cheeseburger very clearly! The cheese burger must be really good if Guy was crying! -
Hi Bryan,
I absolutely love this post! The way you described Guy and the chef and the burger was amazing. The use of detail throughout the poem is excellent! Great job! -
Hi Bryan, I enjoyed reading your story! As I was reading your story I could imagine everything you were saying so vividly in my head. You effectively used dialogue ans strong diction to make your story interesting. 10/10 would read again. Also 10/10 would recommend.
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Sup Brian. I absolutely loved reading this piece. Your descriptive words and fluent storyline make the story come to life. I could thoroughly imagine exactly what you were saying, and felt as if I was watching the actual TV show! I will never forget this!!!!
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Bryan, just like Guy taking his first bite of the burger, your poem brought me to tears. Out of all the poems I’ve read so far, this is most likely the one the intrigued me the most. I enjoyed your detailed descriptions and the emotions were well written. Good job on your poem and I hope to read more from you.
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good, fun, and fresh!
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Bryan. This is the most beautiful piece of poetry I have ever read. I have plenty of experience watching Diners, Drive-ins, and Dives and this is a phenomenal representation of the show. I loved the way you described Guy Fieri’s emotions. Thank you for making my whole week with this great post!