My name is Paola and I am a student at Fremont High School here in Oakland. I just read your project blog post and I have some feedback.
One thing I liked about what you wrote was that you guys made a plan to write letters and also that you guys used a real life example.
Something I have a question about is when you said, “the people who have lived in this community for so long are thrown away and are sent somewhere where they might not feel comfortable with and might not know as many people as they knew in their old neighborhood” where do they get sent to ?
Thank you for sharing your project!
Thank you for reading our post and taking your time to add a comment. Now to answer your question they technically aren’t sent anywhere they just choose to move away to find other places that is less expensive, and where they can afford paying their rents. Basically it is there choice if they want to move away or not. I hope we answered your question. You can follow us on Instagram @gentrificationinoakland. Thank You for asking questions.
I really admire you guys touching on such a real topic of our community that isn’t always payed attention. Many of our community members are not aware of gentrification until they experience it themselves. Your quote “The neighborhood instead gets people who are just there because of the money they have and know nothing about Oakland” should make everyone question the situation. If we want to better Oakland, why don’t we start with the people who are actually familiar with it instead of just bringing in people from the outside? Thank you for sharing your thoughts on gentrification here in Oakland.
I appreciate you bringing this problem to the eye of people. I recently was spoken about gentrification and was appalled by how much it affected the people living in these communities. Your article has made me much more educated on this topic. Thank you for sharing your ideas and solution for gentrification in Oakland.
My name is Kimani and i attend Nelson Mandela School for Social Justice & I enjoyed reading your blog a lot only because I can agree and relate to it so well. You brought up the effects of gentrification on your community and I can relate to the effects in my community as well. I live in the projects where predominantly black and hispanics live at, and it used to be like that for years ! But as time when on especially recently, the rents raised dramatically and a lot of white people had moved and built new apartment building right up the block starting at 1,000,000 with rents up to 5,000 a month.
My name is Evelyn Diaz Garcia and I am a student at Fremont High School here in Oakland. I just read your project blog post and I have some feedback.
One thing I liked about what you wrote was that you guys really took the time to add many information that informs people about this issue.The information you guys provided us is great because you guys didn’t only give us sources and quotes from articles but you guys also gave us numbers and percentages that showed us more about how bad this issue is.You guys really did a great job keep it up.Something I have a question about is What inspired you guys to write about this issue?
Something I liked about your writing was that you pointed out this topic and trying to help the people that are going through this domestic violence.” … Still, others may have learned this behavior from growing up in a household where domestic violence was accepted as a normal part of being raised in their family” (Goldsmith).I agree with this quote as well because I think if yo grow up in a home where there is domestic violence children are going to grow up thinking it is okay and normal.
Hi, My name is Ariana. I really liked your article and I like how you said that domestic violence has a lot of affect on families because many parents may take anger and stress into their own hands and it can affect the kids/children’s lifestyle and childhood. I think in the USA there is a lot of teenagers and kids that grow up belong scared or very independent due to things that happened between their parents or at home. Maybe some kids even don’t have a relationship or bond with their second parent because of the use of violence that they took out on the other parent.
The thing that caught my attention was that you pointed out how domestic violence could affect in different way how it affects families in different ways.Something you did pretty well was to provide lots of evidence to back up your topic. 🙂
I am delighted by your post Is “Testing on Animals Ethical?” because you had a evidence that back up’s your opinion and makes it stronger. One sentence that stood out to me is “This is ethical because animals have helped find treatment and cures for diseases, virus, and infections such as, cancer, polio, and other deadly illness”. This stood out to me because the question that you had in your title you expressed and talked about ti more throughought your writing. I agree with what you are saying about how animals have helped us his because I also believe that animals has helped us and is still helping animal researcher with finding new vaccines for people. Thank you for writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because your introduction makes readers read further on.
I am really shocked about your post “animal research” because you talk about how the scientist should do testing on animals. I agree with you because without the animals there would be a lot of people who are dying because of the disease. One sentence that you wrote that standed out to me is “Without animal research, medicine as we know it today wouldn’t exist”. This quote standed out to me because it is really true that without animal animal testing there wouldn’t be a lot treatments of any of the medicines that we take no they wouldn’t be exciting and there would be alot of people dying because there is no cure. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you post next because you had some really thoughtful response and you had a really strong claim.
Dear Naycet :
I am astounded by your post and argument on, “Is testing on Animals Ethical?,” because I’ve only read articles that thought animal testing harmed animals and therefore did not support it. Hearing your perspective on this issue really opened my eyes, even if I don’t necessarily agree with what you were saying.
One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “This is important because if we never have used animals in the past there is no way that the treatment could have been made and there would be many people getting affected and dying.” I think this is interesting because I haven’t thought about animal testing this way. I agree that we would have be so medically advanced if it weren’t for animals but I feel like scientists could have taken a different approach to this situation. They could have used humans that were willing to “sacrifice” themselves to scientific research. I would think that there are some people willing to volunteer knowing that they may save tens of thousands of people.
Another sentence that I found enticing was: “Instead, the drug or technique is tested in animals to make sure that it is safe and effective… Some animals have biological similarities to humans that make them particularly good models for specific diseases, such as rabbits for atherosclerosis or monkeys for polio.” This stood out for me because I realize that these tests are tested for how safe they are before they are administered but if they are so safe and dogs have similar DNA to humans, why can’t the tests be performed on humans?
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because this piece was intriguing and it helped me understand that there are people who believe that animal testing is considered to be ethical, even if I am not one of them.
I am very delighted by your post, “ Henrietta lack’s family should be owed money” because you explained how Henrietta’s family deserve the money that the scientist/ doctors get. One sentence that stood out to me is “Henrietta should be honored because she did a lot to this would that save people who had the disease and there was not treatment, thanks to her the scientist found cures for those disease. ”. This stood out to me because I think that without Henrietta many scientist wouldn’t have found cures for many diseases. I agree with what you are saying about how Henrietta should be honored because of her cells because it is unfair that she or her family got nothing in returned after they used her cells for research. Thank you for writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because you have interesting topics to talk about.
I am very interested by your post “ Henrietta lack’s family should be owed money” because you had a lot of information explaining your thought’s about this topic. One sentence that stood out to me is “Another thing that wasn’t helpful for Henrietta’s family was that the scientists after they found out the HeLa cells were useful they didn’t pay the family money or even give them a thank you that without these discoveries they wouldn’t even find new things and cures.” This stood out to me the most because scientists should have reworded Henrietta lack’s family instead of just ignoring them like and making it seem that withought scientist there would be no HeLa cells. I agree with you on everything that you describes about the HeLa cells and that her family should have been more involve into this. But I don’t understand the part where you mentioned animal testing into this question maybe explain more to it or how does it connect to the HeLa cells. Thank you for writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because you definitely added a lot of thought into your work.
Well to make it clear for you to understand, henrietta lacks cells connects back to animal testing because the scientist uses animals for testing to find cures but since they found out about the HeLa cells the scientist didn’t had to use animals for the testing they used the HeLa cells. So without the Hela cells the scientist would use animals for all the testing to find the cure of diseases. so thanks to Henrietta cells the scientist didn’t have to use animals testing.
Gentrification hurts people without privilege. It means when newcomers erase and displace the histories and homes of locals. Most often occurs with wealthy newcomers displacing mid to low-income locals. I
Thank you for taking your time and reading my post. I hope you enjoyed reading my post, but what do you think about gentrification. I want to hear what you think if it is right for people with lower income to get treated bad. Hopefully you keep reading my post, and once again thank you for reading my post.
I am impressed by your writing because it is true that there are people getting killed everyday. This is really sad that the police who is supposed to protect us, they are killing our people. A sentence that stood out to me was the first quote that you use because this is a really sad quote but it is the reality. Your entire post stood out to me because it sounds like people are not recognizing the police brutality that is happening here in Oakland. I acknowledge that you did your blog on this topic. Your post reminds me of one’s that I saw this happening here in Oakland. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next.
Yojana, I really enjoyed your poem, it’s short and gets the suddenness across. I like the tie in with Romeo and Juliet and your experiences. It makes the thing more well rounded and answers the ‘why’ the poem was created nicely. As I’ve read through your poem through a couple of times now, with the word “FIGHT” is it dramatic, like saying it loudly, or are you pointing out that your word choice is ‘fight’, simple, fickle, and nothing more, or that fight and gunshots are almost the same at this point? I enjoy trying to understand poems (trying being the operative word here). If I’m wrong, hopefully I got an eye roll, but thanks for posting, I’m excited to see what you do next.
I am amazed by your poem because even if it is short it is powerful. There are a few lines but they are laconic. You were able to get your point across very effectively.
One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Two households are FIGHTING.” I think this is powerful because it relates back to your point of the violence in Oakland. I can understand your poem relating to Oakland because I see people fighting for no reason. Also most people are scared of doing anything so they “ignore” it because they don’t want to get hurt as well. Thank you for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next.
I am overwhelmed by your poem ‘’The Pain It Takes To Love’’because…when many people read your poem they will know and understand that love is not just something to play with and you can seriously be hurt or damage by the pain you feel of wanting love and the people you have love for.One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is: “Love is what brought everyone together
Love is what can make you so happy
Honesty is what keeps a person close
Trust is something that you can’t break
Loyalty can be hard to find…’’
” I think this is important because…many people need to know that there are many ways to being in love and wanting love.And it take a person along time to get love or to feel the feeling of wanting love because of what solution that they were in by being hurt and damage by a love one or someone that they really trust that was close to them.
Another sentence that I was moved by: “Many people think that love is the best thing, and many people want to be loved by others. But sometimes love can cause great pain.” This stood out for me because…it gave me a reflection of my past and how many people I loved or wanted to be loved by hurt me and betrayed me just by taking my kindness for weakness. Many people don’t know when love hits you it’s like the sun rising over the horizon which a glacier of gold lighten up stars but, when love hurts it’s
Your poem reminds me of something that happened to me. One time… when I was in my first relationship. Me and my first love been together for 2 years and we stayed doing everything together go shopping ,out to eat ,we went to the movies ,and ect. Until one day he wanted to get a better job with better pay .However,he find the job but it was in another state .That day i know once he left he wasn’t going to come back as the same person,we loved each other so much to the point we will hurt anybody that stand in our way of our relationship. I didn’t wanted him to leave but at that moment ,i didn’t know he didn’t wanted to leave either. But he got the job, So he left and we stayed in touch with each other until months and months went by we lost connection of each other about 2 years we got back in touch with each other but it wasn’t the same so we just ended as friends.Cause everytime we fight to be together we always get pushed away by someone or something.
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because…this poem really grabbed my idea’s and my pain that I’ve felt I have hidden within my mind. Secrets that I’ve felt I hidden for myself the also can relate to my future.
This shadow box represents who I am. When people look at me they see that my race is Guatemalan and that I’m a nice girl that does all her work and turns her work on time. My dominant narrative is that many pe
I really appreciate this post Yojana,
I like how you are able to express yourself and showcase your emotions with your friends. It is a great thing to be able to enjoy the time you have with friends/family and it is great that you love it so much. People should see you for what you believe in, and what you enjoy to do and you showed this really well by stating the things that you like and dislike. People should not be stereotyped by where they come from or how they may appear. This is a great topic and I hope you continue writing because this was an outstanding post.
I can really see that family is a very big part of your identity. That’s really nice to see how you feel so connected. In your shadow box I can see a little house not 100% sure if its a house but does it have a valuable significance to why it was added? You say people can see your Guatemalan do you think it’s because you are a proud of it and show your Guatemalan Culture or because of stereotypes? I’m really happy to hear you are a happy girl and like to have fun. Keep up the good work.
Thank you for commenting on my shadow box. I wanted to answer your questions, well the house means nothing but the things that ar in the house does mean something. All the things that are in the house are what my country uses to to cook or what is help full for them. I added the house because it came with the stuff that is inside. For the next question people assume I am guatemalan because of the stereotypes that they see guatemalan people. Like for example they have told me that all guatemalan people are short and I tell that is not true because some people are not that short so I disagree with there opinion. Have people assumed something about you based on your looks?
I really enjoyed your post Yojana, I really liked when you said, “many people assume that later in the future I will be successful because of how they see me working hard’, but Forbes.com says “If you were seeking a new role and were selling yourself, hard work is not a unique qualifier. So what makes you think it is a differentiator when seeking a competitive position? Sometimes, just like the aforementioned client, a manager or organization may take advantage. Selling your soul by working around the clock can have its down side.” Meaning, you have to do things in life in moderation. https://www.forbes.com/sites/85broads/2014/01/14/why-working-hard-may-not-pay-off/#186d9ed72af9
Hi dear Yojana
What does the little house in the back means to you personally?
From 1 to 10 how much like to hang out with your friend?
Well I can relate with those Dominant Narrative because I’m also Guatemalan. Well something I can say is that Life is either a daring adventure or nothing.
I am happy about your work, with what you have done with your shadow box and added on your post “Yojana’s Dominant and Counter narrative shadow box” because you weren’t afraid to share out your story of the dominant and counter narratives. I think that the explanation of your shadow box is really good because it’s clear to understand what people think about you and how you explain to us that those dominant narratives are not true. What stood out to me was how you have added objects that represent your race, for example the little house (not really sure how is it called) you have on the left corner, I really like that. I really enjoy seeing all the objects from your shadow box and also heard more about your life. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because it seems really interesting to read more about you or your believes. Also I would like to see how far you can go. Keep it up! – Leslie
I am glad about your shadow box because you explained the stereotypes people have been giving you and the fact that you address your identity expression. One sentence you wrote that stand out for me is “I speak three different languages”. I think this is delightful because it is wonderful to hear someone speak another language without being afraid to address to other people. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because you talked about stereotyping and I want to hear more about that. Also because this will help other people want to share out more about their personal life just like how you did.
Thank you for sharing your work. My name is Evelyn Diaz and I am a student at Fremont High School.
Something I liked about your work was that you included what you like to do with your siblings and that you described the shells as a really special object for you.Something I have a question about is Why did you decided to add flowers? What do flowers mean to you?. Please feel free to comment on my work in the future. The address of my student blog is http://evelyndfhs2021.edublogs.org/2017/11/07/assignment-5/ .
My name is Ingrid Ramirez, I really like your shadow box because you have specifically the things that represent you and your family who seem very important for you. I have so many connections with you because people think that of me to. Am very glad to hear you speak 3 languages and am guessing one of them is mam. I feel so proud of you for knowing our native language because I speak it to. Anyways, thank you for sharing your story and it gave me some ideas of my shadow box!
Who am I? I am Naycet Bernal I am Latina, my ethnicity is Mexican because my family is from Mexico and I was born in the US. I am proud to be Mexican and to be from Oakland. And there is nothing you can do to
Hi my name is dayana and Im writing from fremont high school, i enjoyed what you said in your paragraphs because you gave us details of what you put on your shadow box and why. I also loved the sea shells you put in it because i like seashells .
I really liked your paragraph because it was really powerful and strong. Something that I really liked was when you said that you don’t have to look the same to be a powerful and strong woman. I agree with you when you said that people assume that you are a uneducated and immigrant girl because I am a Latina too and they assume that we are not educated and can’t find a good job beause we are immigrants.
Dear Naycet, Thank you for sharing this brilliant work .My name is Marquisha an I am a student at Fremont High School. Something I lIked about your work was how you showed how women are judged by society and how you described how you are proud to live in oakland and be Mexican American.Something I have a question about is what made you not forget to describe everything on your shadow box? Please feel free to comment on my work in the future. The address of my student blog is http://marquishawfhs2021.edublogs.org/
Hello Yojana, my name is Long and I attend Fremont High School where I did the same project. A question I have about your work is what does the house suppose to represent in your shadowbox? A question I have about what you wrote is that you say your race is guatemalan but were you born in America or Guatemala? I really liked that you added family…[Read more]
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