Your topic is something that many people don’t talk about and I’m so glad you brought this up because many people are poorly informed in why prostitution should be brought up more frequently. Some advice I would give you is to add context when providing evidence. This would be helpful because you will give us a heads up about what we…[Read more]
One sentence that stood out to me was “Many girls are forced to do things they don’t want to do in order to save themselves from violence or death”. I think this is something many people don’t understand and/or are poorly informed of. It was very empathetic of you to mention the fact that many females don’t have an option to stop…[Read more]
Why do you believe people are violent? An Oakland resident Ethan Cole, brought up so many interesting ways in which he believes that violence is caused. He states, “It is simply because nothing has changed in t
First off all good job on completing your blog you’ve done a great job. What I like about your blog is that you talk about how violence in Oakland can be reduced and improved. I like how you quoted, ¨we all as a community need to find a way to come together and help our people¨ this is showing that you believe the whole community should be brought together to help improve and give better opportunities to others as well. You did good on showing why you think they should also have opportunities and be helped by the community when theyŕe struggling. If really interested go to website that talk about how you can help improve the community and talk to people about how it can be changed.
I would like yo start by saying that you Blog was so good and agree so much on hat you talked about. A part that i really liked is when you said, Finally, Oakland should focus a lot on training police officers. We have been seeing lots of police brutality lately. Aracely Perez speaks on how police should be trained, this is what she says, “Another thing Oakland could do is focus on the police force to first train officers and combat the current violence on the streets in a humane manner.” I agree on what your mom said because a lot of police are being so violent to most African-American people. I think it is very unfair because most of them never do nothing ut police find an excuse to hurt or even kill them. So keep up the good I can tell that this topic matter to u.
My poem is about female empowerment and how we should all view females. Growing up i can tell you that everyone was insecure, including myself. It took me the longest time to gain just a bit of confidence myself.
Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was “Not every girl is the same” because many people act like they can treat females the same, sometimes good,sometimes bad.
A second line that was powerful was “You will soon find your power” because so many girls around the world aren’t in control of there own lives or won’t take control of their lives.
A connection I made to your poem is the need to be someone else instead of yourself.
Your poem also reminded me of Juliet from “Romeo and Juliet.” Juliet wasn’t able to make her own choices like when she was sent to marry Paris. Maybe things would have gone differently if Juliet had a choice.
Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post.
Thank you for sharing your powerful poem. One sentence you wrote that stands out to me is ¨ We do not count one forced marriage¨. I think this is very powerful because people think we have to get married when we don´t. Another sentence that I liked was ¨ You will soon find your power¨. This stood out because you´re showing the power that women have. Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because you´re a good writer. Hope seeing powerful poems!
Your poem is sooo good. I really like how you talk about female empowerment and how females should not depend on a guy to succeed. Something that stood out from your poem was “Our happiness does not depend on on boys” because many females feel like they can only be happy when there with a guy but that not true. I really like how you talk about how females are strong and you should not be ashamed about who you are. Some I really like about your poem was that is rhymes. I really like how you wrote this to inspire other girls and how it also relates to you and that this is a very personal poem to you.
“We are not toys”
I am really impressed with these words because I agree so much with you boys thing we are toys to play with like no boo we have feeling. But I really like your poem it’s strong and powerful. “Our happiness does not depend on on boys”
I also really like the part were you said we don’t need to depend on boys like we really don’t we can do stuff on our own. Other then that I am very proud of you ma love
I am impressed by your piece of writing “Quien Soy Yo” because you really expressed your culture which was a beautiful thing. One sentence that stood out to me was “ That they don’t understand that someone with the same sex could be together.” I think this is a really common thing that MANY people think of. The fact that you addressed…[Read more]
I am impressed by your piece of writing “Jocelyn’s Shadow Box” because your words were powerful and you talked about a topic that is very important and sensitive sometimes. One sentence you wrote that stood out to me was “you have to be a woman of the house when in reality us women are able to many things as man.” I think this is a…[Read more]
This shadow box represents myself and how others view me, not only that but it also shows how I view myself. When people look at me, they see a young Latina girl who is not supposed to play rough sports and is
Hey Leslie, I really like how your shadow box embraces multiple identities. One part of your art piece that stands out to me is the WNBA logo, which shows your love and passion towards basketball, and I’m sure that you will meet this aspiration. It does defy all stereotypes set on females, but the fact that you like basket ball shows how strong you truly are. So I look forward to seeing the next thing you post related to breaking down stereotypes and proving society wrong.
I really like your shadow box I like the fact how you haz the two flags showing where you from. I got to know that you are a independent person and a person who speaks up for yourself. Also how you like the WARRIORS/ basketball.
Thank you for sharing your work. My name is David Lara and I am a student at Fremont High School.
Something I liked about your work was that you showed your roots that you never forgot where you came from . You showed some identities, like loving basketball and you showed how much you love your country/countries. Some advice is to maybe use a bit more pictures. But overall I loved the pictures you used and how you created the shadow box. (p.s yours came out better than mine) If you want to view my shadow box here is the link. http://davidlfhs2022.edublogs.org/2018/11/09/assignment-3-the-identity-shadow-box/
I am impressed by your piece of writing “What My Shadow Box Says About Me” because your words are very powerful which is helping cancel out the stereotypes people have about you. One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is “When people look at me, they see a Latina girl, with brown eyes, black hair”. I think this is a stereot…[Read more]
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