• Dear Christy,

    I am proud about your topic that you have chosen for your blog. I also liked how you named it Undercover Modern Day Sex Slavery because people who see this and reads it would think multiple things about it, and would want to click on it. I agree with you when you stated in your analysis that “A lot of people don’t know what sex tra…[Read more]

  • Dear Victor,

    One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is “It’s also saying that the parks are very important for everyone so that kids have where to have fun and for the community to have a place to go so that they can have fun as a community and it would also help the obesity rates go down.” I think that this quote’s meaning is strong…[Read more]

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    What should we do about gun violence? We can´t let it go. Oakland needs to do something about it. Gun violence is dangerous and unneeded for the Oakland community, so to prevent it in Oakland we can support p

    • Zooie-mama, what an epic blog post. Firstly, nice evidence use with having 3 interviews so you can get 1 more actual oakland person instead of the 2 minimum. Also, you cited your work well so you won’t be sued. Only I think typos hold it back maybe but maybe i’m illiterate who knows.

  • Hi my name is Kimberly, a 9th in Life Academy i’m writing a poem relating to Romeo and Juliet. My poem is about a present version of them showing huge meanings of growing up and a struggle for teenagers in

    • Dear Kimberly,

      Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was “I don’t get the feeling I’m clueless.” I really like the transition from not knowing anything about love and feeling, then not being able to leave once it was felt. I felt that it was beautiful and truthful.

      A second line that was powerful was “I give them lies…” because it reminded me of the cheesy quote, “Love makes you do crazy things.”

      A connection I made to your poem is “Urgent ,I’m growing up, each second time is wasting” ( added some comas.)

      because with every second that goes by, there will always be something you want to do so you wont’t regret it later on in you life.

      Your poem also reminded me of a life of a teenager . Usually not being or just being able to detect the feelings of people and your own.

      I really love your poem and how it also shows how helplessly in love Juliet was with Romeo.

      Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post.

      Kelly

    • Dear kimberly,
      I enjoyed reading your poem because it got me intrigued into reading more into your poem. I also liked how you used sound effects to make your poem more lively. Your poem was detailed and I could see the clear connection to romeo and juliet.

  • Dear bryan,

    One sentence you wrote that stands out for me is “ In my shadow box I put some motivational quotes because when I am feeling sad or down I look at motivational quotes because the quotes I find make me feel motivated and they cheer me up.” I think this is cool because I can see that you really love motivational quotes. I can also see…[Read more]

  • Dear Victor,

    One sentence that you wrote that stands for me is “ Soccer is very important to me because All my life I been playing soccer is like a second nature for me I love playing soccer.” I think this is is awesome because I can see that you really love soccer if you capitalize All and state “All my life.” I hope you follow your dreams…[Read more]

  • My Shadow Box

    Kimberly Jimenez-Mendoza

     

    Many people assume in a dominant narrative when I state “I love drawing”, the first thing that comes in their mind is traditional drawing. Me loving drawing does

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