Dear Kheriya,

I am intrigued by your post because… It talks about how we can solve issues with guns.It also talks about what stopping gun laws can do.

One thing you said that stands out for me is: “To the people who have seen someone they love get killed right in front of them due to gun violence ” I think this is intelligent because it is talking mainly about the people that have had an issue of gun violence

Your post reminds me of something that happened to me. One time with a school shooting that went on and my grandparents got rally upset because they want gun control to be held more carefully.They want guns to be protected by the owners and hid from anyone that is not registered with the gun.

Thanks for your project. I look forward to seeing what you write next because this post really motivated me to look more into gun violence.

Kheriya,

Your post was really interesting as drug use is an issue prevalent in our society and especially the youth community. I agree with your viewpoint that drug use is a serious problem in our society that should be taken into more serious consideration during the legislation process. I especially like the part where you say: “nough work is not being done to help make a change. I hope this letter gets people to connect and build an organization or do community work to help solve these problems, not just that but anything else. ” Here is an article that you might enjoy: https://www.webmd.com/mental-health/addiction/drug-abuse-addiction#1. I hope to read more from you soon.

Kheriya,
I really liked your post as the issues you addressed are sadly very prominent in our world today and specifically in the U.S. I like the persuasion your post has, the passion behind your words is very clear. You appeal to a variety of groups, including teenagers, teachers, parents, and handful of other societal groupings. This not only makes your argument stronger, but also adds to its relevancy, showing that these issues can come to affect many people whether it be directly or indirectly. One thing i would like to see in future posts regarding these issues is a clear connection to outside sources. There is extensive research done on these topics, and presenting both sides will add to your own argument. Using ideas from an opposing viewpoint and refuting them will add so much to your already strong argument. Here is a source about drug abuse in the United states:
https://www.drugabuse.gov/related-topics/trends-statistics

Hey Kheriya,

I relayed liked what you had to say. Drug addiction and gun violence is very prevalent in our society and people need to become aware of how much it has affected the community around us. I think you should add quotes from articles to help support your evidence saying in this article here are the facts that other people have found. Adding number and statistics help. Saying x amount of kids die from gun violence a year might help to really show the audience that it is crazy how many people die. https://www.bradyunited.org/key-statistics This article might help with the shocking statistics.

Hi,
I really liked how you started your article. It really sparked my interest and made me want to read it.
I completely agree with everything you’re saying. People need to understand the effect of the drugs they do to their children. I think you should add real-world examples. It’ll help with getting your point across and making an even bigger impact on people.

Born to Do Drugs: Overcoming a Family History of Addiction

This article explains more about the effects of drug abuse and how it impacts families. Towards the end, Kevin Hart shares the story of how his dad’s drug addiction impacted his childhood.

Dear Kheriya
I’m impressed with your post Dear People Who Think Doing Drugs and Gun Violence Are Okay because it is able to completely sum up the obvious that exposing children to drugs and guns is not okay. I also like that you give examples of how they are effected so that people that are uninformed on what guns and drugs can do have a good idea of the dangers. A sentence that you wrote that sticks out to me is “Drug abuse is when you are addicted to drugs or take it illegally” this helps inform readers as to what drug abuse is just in case they didn’t know. Thank you for writing. I look forward to seeing your next write because I really enjoyed being taken through the basics of why drugs and guns are bad in a way that is so simple to understand.
Jaydon Garcia

Kheriya your post about gun violence and drug abuse was very moving because you explained very well about the effects this can have on families. One sentence that really stood out to me was “When it comes to your kids you let the drugs have more meaning to you, the one that grew inside your tummy, the precious one.” You’re making any person that has done drugs feel bad because the little tummy person will be sad. I look forward to see what you’re writing next because you’re structuring was done very well and kept me reading.

Dear Kheriya,
I completely understand where you’re coming from. I believe people do drugs because they’re influenced by it and feel pressured to try it because their friends are doing it too. However, little do they know the impact that those drugs will have on their body in the future. Drugs aren’t meant to be something to play with, it’s meant to treat people who are sick. My generation especially has taken part in this and it saddens me and so I believe our administration needs to put more work into making drugs more difficult for people to access, especially teenagers.

Dear Kheriya,

I am moved by your post regarding drug abuse and gun violence because unfortunately due to these issues we are losing thousands of people including innocent victims. When it comes to drug or substance abuse many people fall into a deep whole which seems impossible to come out of this sometimes leads to them losing their families. Gun violence is extremely sad because many innocent lives are taken by harmful people. One sentence that you wrote that stands out to me is “When it comes to your kids you let the drugs have more meaning to you, the one that grew inside your tummy, the precious one. How can you choose something worth so less over someone who means the world?” This stood out to me because it’s true, many pick drugs over their children because they don’t know how to leave their vice. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because this post was extremely meaningful and informative.

Wonderful poem Khierya! I liked how you demonstrated your connection to the street you grew up on. The small details such as the title of your poem, your word choice (first), and poem length and structure played a crucial role in conveying your point. Pointing out that 41st was the street where you first rode your bike, where you had your first scar, and where you first fought shows how the street impacted your life and shaped you as a person. I think adding your perspective of what it means to you now that you have matured will help readers perceive your current view on it.

I really like your slideshow, I wish you would’ve added more slides and more detail on each slide, but great job on the pictures.

I loved the slide show. It was very emotional as well as inspirational and of course it says something important!!