On December 13th, I was in my car and somebody hit us when they were running away from the police after robbing the apple store. This made me feel that Oakland is messing up more and more every day. I feel this
I was happy to read your blog about violence because I also wrote my blog about violence Oakland and why it happens. Something that I enjoyed from your blog was that you had some evidence that gave good explanations about your topic of violence. A question I have is why did you not include another interview in your blog for evidence? A piece of feedback I have for you is to do your citations so that people know where you got your evidence from and to be more precise in your analysis. Thank you for your writing and I look forward to seeing what you write next.
To start begin I like how you started off with a story about yourself and then bring in your claim. I like how you added your question and then there answer to show what they are answering. The only you need is a conclusion to make it all come together.
Your poem was great. I like how you explained love in different ways and forms. You said love can be visiting your dad in the hospital, helping your mom do dishes, or showing compassion like hugging your sister. I believe your trying to say that love doesn’t just have to be someone having a boyfriend or girlfriend and they have love for eachother , but can be someone like your mom, sister , or dad. I also like how you showed in you poem different ways you express your love for the people you care about. You talking about how you hug your sister is a way you show your love for her. When you explained it you did very well you said ¨Love is hugging my sister like she’s a bear that is chunky, but funny that giggles when you hug¨ that was said very well and a great simile. Overall you did very good.
The 2 main identity in my shadow box is being male and Yemenis. When people look at me they see, a terrorist, bomber, and stupid. Which is the dominant narrative. Many people assume that I’m going to kill them b
I like how you showed that stereotypes won't hold you back and how you showed a picture of the bible because I think that very empowering that your not afraid or ashamed to show that you believe in GOD.
I like how you represented who you really are and showed why you aren’t what society claims you are. The Bible in the picture is also great because it shows your religion and beliefs. I also like how you represented your culture. I hope to see more work in the future.
Oh my lord this is so great! I really like how you talk about your counter and dominant narratives and how you talked about how you feel when people make assumptions about you and how racist people can be. I really thought this was a really good summary. GOOD JOB BBY!!!!
This is a youth-powered social network that was started in 2003 by a group of teachers from local sites of the National Writing Project.
We merged several earlier blogging projects. We have found that there are many advantages to bringing students together in one site that lives beyond any particular class. It's easier for individual students to read and write about their own passions, to connect with other students, comment on each other's work, and create multimedia posts for each other. Further, it's been exciting for us to pool our knowledge about curriculum, connected learning, and digital literacies.
If being part of such a community makes sense to you, we invite you to join us. We welcome all youth and any teacher interested in having students publish online and participate in the give and take of a social network like Youth Voices.