this letter is great. it reminds me as if im having a conversation in person
I like the story it reminds me of something that would happen in real life. The dialogue is easy to read and it uses language that I use. some advice is uses your quotes better.
I enjoyed the story. its easy to read and didn't have too many errors. Something to improve on is using periods to shorten paragraphs. Also using quotation marks to tell who is talking.