Thank you for reading my blog. The part of your comment that stood out to me was when you said that my blog could motivated women to speak out about their stories because this is the main reason I wrote my blog about this. A question I have for you is do you think my blog would help people speak out.Look forward to hearing back!
To start begin I like how you started off with a story about yourself and then bring in your claim. I like how you added your question and then there answer to show what they are answering. The only you need is a conclusion to make it all come together.
How I feel about your topic is it is very powerful and something that isn’t recognized as much as it should be. Some advice I would like to give you is when you but evidence don’t forget to give some context about it and where it came from. Also, don’t forget to give powerful reasoning on why that piece of evidence conne…[Read more]
Thank you so much for writing this but reading through your paragraph it started to get confusing. A place I started to get confuse was when you started to introduce a quote but your quote ended up being about asking a question to your mom. Some advice for you would be to either write about an interview in one paragraph and t…[Read more]
I am surprise and sad about your blog “Why”, because this blog can be touching for women that got raped and they maintain their silents. One sentence that stood out for me was, “Secondly, women need to remember to speak out about their stories because so many are not addressed. When they speak out about their stories it would help others speak out about theirs and feel empowered”. This sentence stood out to me because women that got raped don’t need to hide their stories. They need to share out with other people so they can feel empowered and motivated. I do agree with you because there is rape in Oakland happening and you addressing this problem is really helpful for other people. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because it’s really helpful and interesting topic to write about.
Dear Kayla, I am really empowered by your poem because you have really clear statements about how men should start realizing their actions and how females should love themselves although they were scarred and how they should open up about it because they are not alone, if anything people would support them. I think overall you chose a good topic one that is important to you, and you are completely right people don’t talk about rape nowadays like it isn’t an important topic. I’m glad you brought this specific topic up because you want to bring awareness to this issue and writing about it will get people to hear your voice and your story. Keep up the good work, you have a powerful mind.
I would like to start off by saying I love how you cite lines from Romeo and Juliet. One of my favorite lines in your poem would have to be “She wears wings that shine with golden light”, this would have to be my favorite line because one you pulled it from the book to show how it connects to Romeo and Juliet. But it also sho…[Read more]
I wrote a story that connects to Romeo and Juliet. My story connects because it talks about the fighting between the both of my parents and how Im in the middle. My story is very similar to the Montague and
You did such a great job in your poem. You showed and expressed so much emotion into your poem which is really good. I think your claim about war between your parents is very clear and very deep. I think it’s very brave of you to say such things as the ones you have explained. I really like the part when you say,”Y’all cause me to leave the people I love, This is why it’s hard for me to find trust”. I think it’s a really good quote and I wish I could hear your poem since it shows lots of emotions. Thank you for expressing your words, keep on writing your really good at it. -Tania
Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was “At times I felt y’all weren’t even there for me And you caused me to separate from my other siblings” because I think this line is very emotional and deep. A connection I made to your poem is that I can understand how hard it is to be part of two worlds. Thank you so much for writing and I look forward to reading your next post.
I really like how your shadow box is showing how you are a big fan of the Oakland Raiders. How it also shows that you are from the USA but also Mexico, I really love how you showed that you don’t support Trump. But something you could have done was put him on the outside to show he is the person creating more stereotypes about mexicans.
I really love how you put quotes on the outside of your box because it was very detailed and showed a lot about who you are. Somethings I saw in your shadow box and I didnt even know about you. Another thing I really loved was the baby pictures of you because you were so tiny and adorable.
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