• Thank you for taking your time to read my poem and giving me feedback. The feedback was really helpful. It makes me very happy that some of the lines I wrote stood out to you and helped you imagine what happened. I look forward to reading one of your post.

  • Wednesday, October 10.One of the most powerful hurricanesever recordedslammed into FloridaIt was the third-most-powerfulhurricane on recordto hit the continental U.S.The storm soaked areasstill recovering from

    • Dear Katelyn,
      I am moved by your poem, “Hurricane Michael” because it talks about what happened in florida and made me reflect on it.
      To me the main message of your poem is Hurricane Michael. I know this because of you talk about the aftermath of what happened in florida after the hurricane.
      One line that stands out for me is, “Daylight revealed a horrible scene” I think this line is deep because what would usually be a good sight of a sunset it would should how terrible everything is.
      Your poem sends an important message about Hurricane Michael because you care about what happened and you talk about the hurricane.
      Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next.

    • Dear Katelyn Nguyen,
      I am enlightened by your poem, “Hurricane Michael” because I didn’t know much about this hurricane and its impact before. It was sad learning about how the community was destroyed by this event but also helpful because I now know about it and can inform others. To me, the main message of your poem is that hurricane Michael was very damaging. I know this because you wrote “No property was left undamaged. Michael was the third-most-powerful hurricane” which emphasized just how much people were hurt by talking about it on a larger scale. One set of lines that stands out for me is, “Daylight revealed a horrible scene. Florida families emerged cautiously from darkened shelters and hotels to an unfamiliar and perilous landscape.” I think these lines are striking because your wording made the scene easy to imagine which is really sad to see. Although you had some great imagery, something that can make your poem stronger and more moving is to add metaphors and similes because it’ll be a way to emphasize the message to your reader. Your poem sends an important message about Hurricane Michael because it makes the reader aware that anything can happen all of a sudden so it’s good to be prepared. Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next. I enjoy learning through poetry and your poem was one I learned a lot about.

      • Thank you for taking your time to read my poem and giving me feedback. The feedback was really helpful. It makes me very happy that some of the lines I wrote stood out to you and helped you imagine what happened. I look forward to reading one of your post.

    • Dear Katelyn,
      I am thrilled by your poem, “Hurricane Michael, because it’s a real event that happened to people and I liked how you got to turn it into a poem that someone could read and learn from. By reading your poem someone can learn what happened to the people in the hurricane and how bad they were affected. To me the main message of your poem is how natural disasters affect people a lot. I know this because of the lines you used in your poem that explained what happened to most of these people’s houses in Florida. One line that stands out for me is, “to an unfamiliar and perilous landscape” I think this line is interesting because it makes us imagine what the place would have looked like after the hurricane since everything had been destroyed being unrecognizable. I really liked how you used the literary device of dialogue when you said “That’s the blade from her ceiling fan.That’s her floor tile.” I think these lines are great because it shows to us what the people said after the hurricane destroyed their things. Your poem reminds me of a poem that I once read. The poem was about natural disasters and explains in detail about earthquakes striking. In the poem the author used imagery in their writing to makes us be able to put a picture in our heads of how the scenery looked like. Your poem sends an important message about direct service because many people who got affected by this hurricane got help from shelters to be protected. Thanks for your poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next. Thank you for sharing your work and I hope I get to read any other poems you have.
      Sincerely,
      Beatriz

    • Katelyn, Your poem “Hurricane Michael” really spoke out to me. I love how you decided to write about an important event that we can all learn from. This poem is something we can all take notes on and learn from. Thanks for educating us on this big situation. There is some people who might’ve not even known about this issue. I love the line “Wednesday, October 10.
      One of the most powerful hurricanes
      ever recorded
      slammed into Florida” The way you started off the poem made me as a reader interested in reading!

  • Katelyn commented on the post, It Was Fun 8 months, 1 week ago

    Dear Kassandra,

    Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was ” The fun was everywhere and anywhere you can see” because it was a very uplifting line .

    A connection I made to your poem is being with my family and having fun.

    Your poem also reminded me of going to visit my family that live in a different place .…[Read more]

  • Katelyn commented on the post, Paranoia 8 months, 1 week ago

    Dear Valerie,

    Thank you so much for sharing your poetry. A line that stood out to me was “The brightness of the yellow tape as it shouts CAUTION” because it was very descriptive and in my head could see that very clearly .

    Your poem also reminded me of how I felt after hearing about all of the recent shootings .

    Thank you so much for writing…[Read more]

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