I do agree with you that littering is a problem Oakland has. It is a problem that my street / block has, because people just dump trash anywhere, and think its ok. It was pretty interesting when you added the quote from Richard James, where he said,”The rain rinses the smog, plastic, cigarette butts, urine, oil, feces and all m…[Read more]
I really enjoyed reading your blog because it was really interesting. I agree with you when you said,¨while a person plays fortnite players can play with multiple people such as, friends, family or a stranger they have never met before¨. I agree with you on this because my brother was talking to a stranger and my dad got worried, s…[Read more]
I really like your blog about why people are moving out of their home. I like how this blog is divided in 3 parts so that we have more info on this topic. I like your concluding paragraph and it makes me think more about this topic and it makes me think that there is more to be done. Great blog, keep it up.
You did a great job explaining One sentence you wrote that stood out to me is,”This proves that people are moving out of Oakland because she’s considered moving out since she can’t afford to live there.” This sentence stood out to me because it shows the perspective on what Maria Santillan thinks and it shows a mother’s struggle especially with 3 kids. “There are families that need money for personal needs, besides rent, but most landlords don’t see that, and just make the rent higher.” I also really like this quote because it shows how families struggles with not only rent but by providing what they need for their family.
Sincerely, Christy V
I loved reading your poem! I liked the rhymes you put in, and about how you said that you“can’t put out fire with fire”; It’s great! I mainly loved when you said,
Because two communities can’t learn how to pacify?
Peace and love is a gate
To stop this hate.
Hate VS Hate
A lot of communities can relate.
We all have th…[Read more]
Thank you for sharing your amazing poem! I enjoyed reading every word in it. I love when you said
“This is Oakland
And I should be able to just be me
Without the fear of a gun
I should just be able to have simple fun
And not be on alert and be ready to run
Not having to fear anyone”
That was very strong, and the rhyming and the wor…[Read more]
I am very touched by your poem because it made me realize to not take the little things for granted. I felt very sad about how you explain violence takes away from you visiting your mother’s hometown because violence is a very powerful feeling that has severe consequences. One part of your poem that stands out for rme is where wrote “one day I will be with my family again”. I think that this is very vital because it shows hope in your writing. Even though many people are suffering, people shouldn’t give up. Thanks for writing this wonderful poem. I look forward to seeing what you write next, because the poem made me understand a lot of about world problems.
I am glad about your shadow box because it looks very nice. You did a great job on this. A sentence that stood out to me is ¨When people look at they would usually think I’m a Mexican but I’m a Guatemalan mixed with Salvadoran.Many people assume that I’m an immigrant,even though I’m American¨, because your saying the dominant…[Read more]
I am happy about how your shadow box turned out. I know you didn’t have a lot of time to work on it, but you still worked hard and made your shadow box looked fantastic. I appreciate the work you put into that. One sentence you wrote that stood out to me is ¨I see myself as a young independent person who is HONORED to be a Latina fe…[Read more]
I really love this project! You did very well on this. Stereotypes are pushed on us in the worst ways. As a woman, I understand the ones with the “perfect body” and a “slim waist”. I’ve always struggled with my self image due to the way society portrays us. You were very brave to share that information with us. I love seeing that you are completely different than how people see you. Love this!
Kassandra, thank you for sharing so much about yourself. The way you examined stereotypes and who you are at your core was admirable. The modern world holds us to high standards, and it’s often difficult to push past them and realize our individual worth. If you continue to focus on the good in yourself rather than the unreachable standards of society, you’ll find ultimate happiness. Thank you again!
I relate to your stereotypes presented about being a woman. I too feel like there is unnecessary pressure to conform when I can just do what I want. It is admirable how much you shared about yourself and I applaud you for being so vulnerable! By sharing your stereotypes that you feel, I feel more comfortable with myself. It is awesome how we feel the same things sometimes yet we are different in a lot of ways too!
I am mesmerized by your eye catching shadow box. I love how you connected the outside quote “Eat Pretty” to your inside quote “EAT LIKE A GROWN UP”. This shows how you can find a counter narrative for every dominant narrative out in the world and prove those dominant narratives as simply a stereotype that doesn’t need to be true. Your cut out pieces of magazines are my favorite part of your shadow box because you took parts of things that look at daily at made it represent you and your beliefs. Your shadow truly represents what all women should see themselves as on a daily basis and it really warmed my heart to see those things on your shadow box. Thank you for writing about your powerful perspective on your life. Keep writing because it will bring a powerful life changing perspective to our world.
I am impressed with your shadow box because I love how you put in pictures from magazines showing the Dominant Narrative that women need to be skinny when that’s not true. I think that you made a really good point when you explained it in detail in showing the counter narrative. One sentence you wrote that stood out to me is when you wrote“ EAT LIKE A GROWN UP” is also a counter narrative to “Eat pretty”, because I can eat however I want,” I like this quote because you broke the Dominant narrative of how women are supposed to eat and said your counter narrative of that stereotype. Thanks for your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next! =)
I am proud of your work because it look like you put a lot of effort into your box. One sentence that stood out for me is “There’s also an image of a lady with a slim waist, with text saying “Firm Flat Abs Tight curvy butt No more jiggle!” kind of saying girls MUST be skinny to have a “perfect body”. There are texts like “Eat pretty” and “Make dinner” and an image of a lady taking care of a baby, like the expectations of a girl / woman” this is so true many girls they have to follow these expectations of what society thinks but no everyone is perfect the way they are. Something else I really liked about your shadow box is how it had a lot of details that represent you.
My name is Ana and I am a student at Fremont High School. Something I liked about your work was its very creative and there a lot of images in your shadow box. Your shadow box really stands out and you did a very good work. Please feel free to comment on my work in the future. You’re welcome.
I am happy about your paragraph, My True Identity: Adrian Kelly / shadow box, because It looks very pretty. I like the drawings you have there; You’re a good artist. It’s also pretty cool how you made your flags. You’re paragraph, also holds a lot of information about yourself, but it’s not too much. It’s simple so it’ll mak…[Read more]
I love how you put so many little magazine bits that mean a lot to you, this is a really eye catching shadow box and beautifully displayed art of yourself. I really likes when you explained your box and said “On the outside, it has images like people holding guns because since I’m from Oakland, “I must be violent; I must be…[Read more]
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