Dr. Williamson knows about climate change. There is no need to explain what it is and it’s repercussions to him. If I were him, I would be wondering who exactly is part of your team and how you guys are actively working to reduce the severity of climate change. Sure, you may be making posters and presenting to middle schoolers, but what are you going to present and how. He also knows what his own writing is so there is no need to summarize it. Cut to the chase and explain why you are writing to him. Is it for funding to buy supplies or is it to have support from a scientist? If nothing else, I would suggest proof reading because there are a lot of errors that can be easily fixed.

Hey Kanika, I really like the topic you chose to talk about. I agree with a lot of the points you made, especially the one that mentions that a lot of single parent households can’t really afford to take care of their kids and pay off rent at the same time. One question that I have is what do you mean by “New community members are increasing the stereotypes on the original Oakland residents? Anyhow, good job on your blog! 🙂

Hey Calvin, Thank you so much for reading my blog. The part of your comment that stood out to me was when you said that u agree with my point about the single parents because I truly believe that this is a big deal for the Oakland community. To answer your question about the New community members are increasing the stereotypes on the original Oakland residents it means that the white population is increasing in Oakland and the black Population is decreasing and there making more stereotype on the black community. I look forward to hearing back from you!

Dear Mr. Ogaz

I love that you think my argument for keeping gentrification out of Oakland is very compelling because i’m only in the 9th grade and to get such a delicate eye to read and even notice my blog/work is very beholden. So I thank you for taking your time out and reading and commenting on my blog and to answer your question of what other affect does gentrification have on community is that the community may feel that their not worth nothing like feel like they have no value.

Hi Kanika,

I found your blog to be compelling! I think you made some strong arguments as to why gentrification is a “slap in the face” to Oakland residents. I also live in the Bay Area and agree that rent is extremely high making it hard to live here as it is. Gentrification only increases rent prices and as you said, puts more people on the street. I also think stereotypes are overlooked and it needs to stop in order to find the real root of the problem.

Dear Kanika, I really like the topic of your poem. It’s really prominent in this area. It’s clear from your poem that violence can cause a lot of destruction and sadness. You did a good job connecting Romeo and Juliet to things that are happening right now! Where else do you think you can apply that to? When you talked about losing someone to a gun it was really sad. I appreciate you for writing about that problem.

Hey Kanika. I’m impressed by your shadowbox. One part that stood out to me was when you were talking about the stereotypes about yourself. I agree with you a lot because those stereotypes are not true and they put down a lot of people. One piece of feedback I have for you is to spellcheck and re – read your work, but other than that your writing is amazing. Thank you for showing everyone your shadow box !

Hi Kanika, I really like your shadow box. One part of your art piece that stands out to me is the doll you decided to include. I think society is focused more on women and the stereotypes and dominant narratives they have set on us. The fact that you chose to include a doll in your shadowbox is a smart way to show your assigned sex and being a sister. I look forward to seeing your next post in the process of showing who you are.